Studying Biology at NYU will open doors to opportunities - NYU supplement essay

NYU supplement essay

Ever since the class of 2017 was announced and we threw our caps into the air, I was lost. I had no idea as to what I wanted to do with my future. All I knew was it had something to do with science, but science is a vast field with various subcategories so which one was the one for me? I have always been particularly amazed by the human body; How cells unseen to the naked eye monitor everything perfectly and how the slightest of alterations can result in disastrous changes. The way our bodies detect, recognize and respond to unusual conditions, how the cells have a memory of encountering a virus previously when its faced with it again is astonishing. Primarily, studying about immunity and infectious diseases in high school is what sparked the interest, and I know I have only scraped the surface with what I have learnt. So, I decided I wanted to major in biology and what better place to explore and understand the human body than the city with rapidly growing medical breakthroughs and high-tech facilities at NYU Abu Dhabi.

Competition and challenge are what keep me motivated to excel at my studies; thus I always had an eye out for highly competitive universities. NYU was undoubtedly at the top of the list and with a campus just down the street, it was a perfect match! Being an expatriate myself, the cultural diversity among the students is something I am very fond of and see myself being an ideal fit in the community at NYUAD. Studying Biology at NYU will open doors to opportunities such as volunteering in a medical environment and research labs. The study abroad program is also something I look forward to in my life at NYU. It would be a great way to get a taste of the different cultural environments like those of London and Madrid, as well as a fast pace life like those of New York City and Shanghai. From the diverse community to the vast campus and the academic excellence, I cannot imagine a better college where my outgoing personality would thrive.

@sumayya_99
I think your essay is really good. If you have some time, you could possibly make it a little more descriptive, as in "show not tell".

Summaya, your reasons for choosing NYUAD is so flimsy, the reviewer will not even consider your application reason. The school being down the street does not mean anything to the reviewer. Your succeeding responses are no different from the responses the other applicants will be giving. There is no reason for the reviewer to consider your application extra special or notable in terms of content. You need to revise this essay to give yourself more of a direction. Rather than a first paragraph full of uncertainty and a seemingly default answer to the question, try to think of your scientific interests and how NYUAD can respond to your learning requirements. Think of reasons that make the reviewer certain that you took the time to consider all your academic institution options before you settled on NYUAD. The fact that you are also an expatriate will be helpful in your essay but you have to present a reason as to why you don't just return to your home country and study there, or at the NYU main campus in New York.