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Teachers: Influencers in Schools and Communities - Chevening Scholarship essay


shehab16 1 / 1  
Jun 21, 2019   #1
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Essay on Leadership and influencing skills



Chevening is looking for individuals that will be future leaders or influencers in their home countries. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your own leadership and influencing skills to support your answer (minimum word count: 50 words, maximum word count: 500 words).

The main task of a good teacher, as I believe, is to push the young generation forward to be the cornerstone of the future society and they must, therefore, have faith that they carry a noble message aiming at serving humanity, believe in their students, and never quit trying to increase their level up. They urge students not only to gain the knowledge but also raise questions about it. Being a teacher of English working with Save the Children over two years and still, I gained much experience which enabled me to distinguish priorities and tackle difficulties effectively. Moreover I grew my faculty to think out of the box to find proper solutions to surmount the current and future challenges. I have always backed my students up and never lose hope in their ability to do the best and present them sentimental and psychological support. I succeeded to create a culture of collective work in the class within their aptitude on the performance of these tasks since I respect individual differences among students. Also being a good listener granted the mates and students the opportunity of expressing their problems freely which made it possible find appropriate solutions.

I worked in supporting courses aimed at helping weak students during summer holiday. Then we developed the work to be reading clubs in schools targeting the same kind of students. The following year, the job advanced to establish Early Childhood and Care Development program (ECCD) which is aimed at preparing children for the school. Owing to poor academic level, it was necessary to open ECCD to grow up a new generation feel the sense of responsibility and adapting a civilized behavior to promote the current state and raise the consciousness level within society. Most children come from the same social background which suffers from poverty, familial violence and psychological effects after ISIS attacks on the town.

For months, we are working on scaling the children up socially, psychologically and scientifically. We succeeded in recovering them along with their families through regular sessions. Children are easily responded to the program since the teachers were good listeners, help them achieve their tasks, and being a good resort whenever facing a difficulty even at home. At the end of the program, we took the final test and the results were amazing. After two months, we visited our students at different schools and they again were an example to follow. Their scores, commitment and superiority were remarkably noticeable. One of the teachers said ''we haven`t met such privileged students for years''. While the other one said ''our efforts toward them are less compared to other pupil yet they score high marks''.
zagger_dat 1 / 2 1  
Jun 22, 2019   #2
Hi,

I think you've succeeded in answering the prompt by explaining in detail how you meet the requirement. A few things I'd like you to correct is your grammar usage and vocabulary.

- the first sentence is somewhat extraneous. It can be improved by simply stating, "In my opinion, the main task of a good teacher is to push the young generation forward to be the cornerstone of the the future society. This can only be accomplished through faith and the belief that their students carry a noble message aimed at serving humanity"...saying "

-"increase their level up" is tautology ...increase already refers to something going higher, up does the same thing too
-change "Being a teacher of English working with Save the Children over two years and still" to "from my experience as an English teacher and through my acquaintance with save the children (which i believe is an organization) over the last two years"...you could then say you've gained sufficient knowledge in the field and you are able to distinguish between priorities....

-there should be a comma after moreover, you could also say being a teacher has enhanced/sharpened your thinking faculty
- i would say to also be more in-depth and describe the results of your influence on theses students...give short, precise and detailed examples of how your culture of collective work has influenced students, how it has impacted them.

-give examples of the sentimental/psychological support

^^i hope that is helpful, best of luck !


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