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(University track) KGSP 2019 PERSONAL STATEMENT

hangvo2806 1 / 4 2  
Feb 8, 2019   #1
Hello everyone. I'm applying for the KGSP 2019 through the university track to study PhD in Korea. Below is my personal statement for the scholarship. I hope to hear your opinions regarding the essay. I really appreciate all your constructive feedback. Thank you all. I follow the guideline to construct my essay as follow.

1. Motivation with which you apply for this program
2. Your education and work experience related to the KGSP
3. Reasons for studying in Korea.
4. Any other aspects of your background and interests which may help us evaluate your aptitude and passion for graduate study or research.


In 2015, I was one of the contestants of the Korean writing contest organized by the Korea Foundation (KF) and Kookmin Bank (KB) while I was an undergraduate student majored in Korean studies. Much to my surprise, the judges were impressed by my idea of that Korea was 'a country of miracles' regarding the essay question: "Korea seen from outside". The response was based on my knowledge originated from Korean textbooks and 1 year experience as an exchange student at Seoul National University (SNU) in 2013. At that time, I perceived Korea as a living example of a country which made the incredible transformations. After the Korean War, Korea had evolved from one of the world's poorest countries to a leading developed economy in the Asia-Pacific region, as well as one of the world' best education systems in the 20th century. With an essay expressed my thoughts and a hope that Vietnam could achieve such amazing developments like Korea, I was chosen as one of the four Vietnamese representatives participated in the 2015 KF-KB Overseas Korean Language programs taken place in Seoul, together with a number of Korean and international colleagues from other Asian countries. Attending this program had completely changed my life. Initially, I planned to pursue a master of tourism degree in Korea as I was always passionate about travelling and promoting Vietnam's natural beauty and cultural heritage to the world since I was young. With my previous experience at SNU, it was undoubtedly that I could adapt well to the postgraduate study in Korea even though I decided to study a different academic field. I was confident with my educational background since I had been a top student with a GPA of 87/100 and a number of academic achievements in relation to Korean studies. However, I learned a valuable lesson about the constant self-improvement toward personal success after the trip to Korea.

During the program, the encounter with both Korean and international students who were very fluent in both Korean and English, as well as knowledge about their own country helped me realize the importance of improving my English proficiency and professional knowledge if I decided to develop a career in tourism industry. I satisfied with all the accomplishments without acknowledging my own limitations. I reckoned that I was not fully qualified to be a tourism profession by merely being proficient in Korean. Hence, I decided to put aside my GKS application and applied for the Master of Tourism program at Monash University (MU), Australia even though I was tempted to a postgraduate study in Korea. However, I have never forgotten the main motivation brought me to Australia, that is one day I will be recognized as a Vietnamese scholar specialized in Asia Pacific tourism and travel. I did not let a lack of tourism knowledge and research skills limit my future opportunities. I was actively engaging in several quantitative and qualitative research projects with professors from Monash University, including research initiatives regarding the international tourists' perceptions and satisfaction to regional Australia and the online destination image of Ho Chi Minh City perceived the by Korean tourists. The more I delved myself in academic research, the more I realized my eagerness of conducting doctoral research, specifically in relation to international tourist behaviour. In preparing for my doctoral study, I also undertook a range of intense research-based units, which trained me on writing research proposals and conducting independent research. I put all my effort to achieve an overall GPA of 3.5/4.0 and a conference paper presented at Griffith University before graduated.

To gain an insightful understanding of how to promote tourism in an international context, I worked for the Korean Tourism Organization (KTO) as a tourism ambassador at the two biggest tourism expos in Melbourne. I applied my field interview and quantitative research skills to assist KTO conduct a survey questionnaire at the expos. With the previous experience working in research projects engaged international researchers from Asia-Pacific countries, I was also able to promote Korean tourism to Australians and international tourists visited Melbourne using my multicultural communication skills. Thanks to the experience, I reckoned my strong desire to build my research career through achieving a doctoral degree in Korea. It is not only because of my personal attachment to the country which shaped my present academic pathway, but also my intention to gain an in-depth understanding about one of the most visited countries in the Asia Pacific region and as Vietnam's second largest source market in terms of tourist arrivals. I am motivated to apply for GKS program as I strongly believe that the professional skills I have gained over the past 2 years in Australia could help me successfully achieve a doctoral degree within the 3 years requirement. Moreover, my trilingual skills would also be beneficial in strengthening the strategic cooperation in tourism development between Vietnam and Korea, as well as promoting Korean tourism to Asia Pacific countries which is my main geographic research focus in my future post-doctoral study.

Many asked me why do I choose Korea instead of Australia. In fact, I always appreciate the skills that I have learnt from my postgraduate study in Australia and volunteer activities with the City of Melbourne and Consulate General of the Republic of Korea. I had seen myself to be more independent and responsible in every aspect since I had to work part-time to pay my own living expenses while in Australia. I have also received much support from my lecturers at MU. However, compared to MU, I took into account the greater number of publications on well-known tourism journals by Kyung Hee University (KHU)'s academic staff in the field of tourists' behavior which was the main focus of my postgraduate research. Being able to work under the supervision of academic experts from the field I chose will facilitate my doctoral research within my planned time frame, since I also hope to continue my post-doctoral study in Asia Pacific tourism. With all the above-mentioned factors, I believe I am a fully qualified candidate who can successfully achieve a doctoral degree of Global Tourism and Hospitality aT KHU, demonstrated by my ability to conduct independent research, my multinational communication skills and time management.

Holt [Contributor] - / 7,618 1957  
Feb 9, 2019   #2
Huynh, this essay is very well written I would not ask you to change anything about this essay presentation. It is extremely strong and effective. It is one of the essays that I believe will catch the attention of the reviewer so that it can be progressed beyond the screening level up to the application consideration level. The reference to your studies in Australia and how it helped you become a better researcher is a very nice touch. It helps to indicate that you are not going to be wasting your time as a student in Korea and you will be researching a profession relevant topic for your master thesis there.

Aside from some grammar and sentence structure problems, the overall presentation is more than acceptable. If you have MS Word 365 on your computer, I suggest that you run this essay through the spell and grammar checker of that program to finalize the presentation or hire professional proofreading and editing services. Do not use an online checker because it will store your essay in its database and your essay could be seen as plagiarized if the essay is checked for plagiarism.
OP hangvo2806 1 / 4 2  
Feb 10, 2019   #3
Thank you so much. I really appreciate your review. I will revise the statement again to check grammatical mistakes. It is great to hear that the essay is up to the standard. If you're persuaded, I think it is easier to pass through the screening round ^^. Thank you. Have a great day.
TJLuschen - / 252 200  
Feb 10, 2019   #4
Hi, here are my suggestions regarding grammar and usage:

... the contestants in the Korean ...

... I was ... student majoring in ...

... my idea of that Korea

... on my knowledge originating from ... and my one year's experience

... a country which had made the incredible transformations.

... as well as having one of the world's best education ... With an essay expressing my thoughts

... representatives to participate in the 2015 KF-KB ... programs taking place in Seoul,

... Attending this program has completely ... Initially, I had planned to ...

... , it was indubitable that I could

... I decided to pursue a different ...

... GPA of 87/100 and earned a number of ...

... success after my trip to Korea.

... During the program, encounters with both Korean

... , as well as knowledgeable about their own country

... professional knowledge if I would decide to develop a career in the tourism industry. I satisfied with all the accomplishments ... {this sentence is unclear to me} I reckoned that ... a tourism professional by merely being

... I was tempted to pursue postgraduate ...

... main motivation that brought me to Australia, that one day I would be recognized

... perceptions and satisfaction with regional Australia {this is unclear to me - did you study tourists going to a specific region in Australia?} ... image of Ho Chi Minh City as perceived ... The more I delved into academic ... my eagerness to conduct doctoral research,

... which trained me in writing research ... I put forth all my effort

... University before I graduated.

... to assist KTO in conducting a survey ... With my previous experience ... projects engaging international

... international tourists visiting Melbourne

... Thanks to this experience, I utilized my strong ... career by achieving a ... It is not only because of my personal ...

... Asia Pacific region and as Vietnam's ...

... to apply for the GKS program ...

... within the 3 years' requirement.

... Korean tourism to Asian Pacific ...

Many have asked me why I have chosen Korea ... In fact, I have always appreciated the skills that

... I have seen myself become more independent ...

... ... of publications in well-known ...

... post-doctoral study in Asian Pacific tourism.

... a doctoral degree in Global ... at KHU,
OP hangvo2806 1 / 4 2  
Feb 10, 2019   #5
OMG this is wonderful. Thank you so much for the suggestions.

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