Discuss your involvement in and contributions to a community near your home, school, or elsewhere..
What did you accomplish? How did this experience influence you goals?
My community is very important to me. And for this reason I volunteer at Tampa General Hospital and I'm a dedicated member of the National Honor Society and the Students Working Against Tobacco organization at my school.
Volunteering at the non-profit organization, Tampa General Hospital, is a pleasure. For two consecutive summers, and occasional weekends during school, I have been volunteering their. Their I have done many jobs including: assisting in the Emergency Room, delivering emergency equipment to patients, cleaning patients room, directing upset family members to see the patients, helping in the Accounts Payable department, serving food in the Health Dietary department, and assisting in Pediatrics.
While volunteering, I learned the hospital inside-out. I have to admit the hospital can be a depressing place at times, but it's rewarding to know that you helped that mother reunite with her children, you comforted the grandmother who lost her child her children to a fire, or you informed the co-worker of his partners status after being hit by a tractor. At the end of a long day, you know you were a part of something that made a difference.
Not only was I able to help patients directly, I assisted with the little things that have to be done, in order for the hospital to function: I picked up mail, filed, scanned, and paid invoices. The employees treated with me with the utmost kindness, they even treated me to lunch one day.
Not only do I spend my free time contributing to my community through volunteering at Tampa General hospital, I do it through my school as well. I am involved in two organizations: Students Working Against Tobacco (S.W.A.T.), and National Honor Society (N.H.S.). In the S.W.A.T. organization I am continuously informing my peers of the dangers of tobacco. For example, did you know that about 1200 tobacco users die each day. The club constructs posters, side-walk drawings, and murals throughout the school giving vital information on the dangers of using tobacco.
National Honor Society also helps me contribute to my community through fundraisers. I have been part of this club for about a year and so far I have donated over 300 books to the needy, including: novels, poems, short stories, and children books. In middle school, my family went through a period of poverty, in which we didn't have essentials all the time. In those days I wished someone would have donated to me a book to read or food. This is why I am in this club, to give back to my community. I have also participated in a ST. Judes fundraiser, Cans for the Needy/Homeless. I have also donated money to organizations such as: Unwed Mothers, Animal Care, and the Bathe the homeless in necessities. These gestures might be small to me and you, but to the recipient it's like Christmas for them. These feelings, knowing you helped someone or did something to change their lives, keeps me going.
Volunteering and being a factor in someone's life is a large portion of my life. Making an effort towards a better place gives me the feeling of self-integrity. It also shows me that little things in life aren't to be taken for advantage. Volunteering at a Hospital has furthered my interest in becoming a doctor.
Although this rule is often broken, it is better not to start a sentence with a conjunction:
And For this reason, I volunteer at... ---in this sentence, it is easy to fix, so we probably should...
oops, you spelled Tobacco wrong.
Now, I see that the intro paragraph is very short. It is better to add 2 more sentences to the first paragraph in order to establish a meaningful, memorable theme for the essay. That way, the reader will be prepared to appreciate what you will express in the body paragraphs.
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Then, you should reiterate this theme in the conclusion. That will make ALL parts of the essay more memorable and interesting.
