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Another critique essay about my speech


samuraihuynh 3 / -  
Feb 11, 2008   #1
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The following is a partner speech critique on me, X. The topic of the speech was to convey the central impression of my partner. After watching my performance on tape, my impression was that the speech was a mediocre one which failed to the requirement of a detailed body. The organization and delivery were poor while closing was decent.

The organization of my speech was poor and failed to provide sufficient information to support my partner's central impression. The details that I supplied was vague but was relevant to the central impression which was that my partner was talented and dedicated. The audience did not receive adequate information because of my sloppy organization. As I watched the video, I noticed that I was extremely nervous and managed to skip over some of the information that I had written down on paper. I did not give exact details on my partner's poster competition entry.

The delivery was also poor. The video clearly showed that I was nervous and stuttering over some of my words. My hands were noisily hanging on the podium which distracted some of the audience members. I was staring at a specific point in the room and did not adequately devote my eye contact evenly within the room. My voice volume was low and

as a result some of the audience could not hear what I was saying. A positive note is that my feet remained firmly on the ground. My appearance was appropriate for the speech requirement. As a result of my poor delivery, I do not think the audience was interested and it was made worse by my nervousness.

The closing went much better than the other parts of the speech. I meet the closing requirements by restating the central impression, partner's name, and invitation to the audience. The closing helped to tie up everything but was overshadowed by the scarce details provided within the speech. I did initiate the "touch" but my partner did not follow through probably because of my meek appearance. The audience definitely knew when to clap because I offered a clear signal. The closing met the minimal requirement thus did not leave any lasting impression to the audience. I did not remember what I talked about so the audience will not remember my speech. Overall, the closing was one of the better things of the speech.

The organization was underdeveloped but would easily been fixed with more details about my partner. The delivery was also poor and could be remedied by several hours of practicing and memorizing my speech. The closing was the only decent thing about the speech. The "touch" needed work and I could have been much more noticeable when trying to initiate the "touch." I would have given my performance a C.

EF_Team2 1 / 1,771  
Feb 11, 2008   #2
Greetings!

It sounds like you are learning a lot about giving speeches! Your essay is very good; I have just a few suggestions:

The details that I supplied were vague

I met the closing requirements by restating the central impression,

I did initiate the "touch" but my partner did not follow through, probably because of my meek appearance.

The closing met the minimal requirement, thus did not leave any lasting impression on the audience.

The organization was underdeveloped but could easily have been fixed with more details about my partner.

Good work!

Thanks

Sarah, EssayForum.com


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