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Describe one of the Seven Wonders of the ancient world and give your feeling (homework)

Minh Thi 3 / 6 1  
Apr 8, 2018   #1

Mausoleum at Halicarnassus

Mausoleum at Halicarnassus built between 353 and 350 BC in Halicarnassus was identified as one of the Seven Wonders of the Ancient World thanks to not only its esthetic struture, but also its meaning. Basically, this building was the tomb belonging to Mausolus, the Perisian satrap of Caria. When he passed away, his wife, Artemisia, commanded a big number of talented artisrts and sculptors to construct his mausoleum, which was considered as one of the ways to express her commemoration and love.

The building was located on a hill overlooking the city. Most of them was in the shape of a square block that used to be believed to protect Mausolus's soul from evils and crime. On each wall surrounding the mausoleum, there was a scence of daily life in Halicarnassus, including the battles and soldiers.The architecture was so monumental that nowadays, everyone uses the word ''mausoleum'' standing for the name of the satrap as they mention the grand tomb.

Which impressed me most was the process of the construction as Artemisia, the satrap'wife, did everything in her power to erect her husband's mausoleum. She spent a fortune to built it and even sent a great deal of letters to Greece to invite the most architects. However, she died before the building was complete, so it was continued by the others. It is really touching as I can see how deep her love is from everything she did to respect her husband. To my mind, this is the most admirable wonders as it does not only show the prosperity of Caria at that moment, but also become the symbol of the love that a wife gave her husband's dead body.
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Apr 13, 2018   #2
Minh, did you write this descriptive essay in a hurry? While you did use vivid descriptions in the essay and you made sure to point out the historical value of the place, you did not really take care of your writing style. Your presentation is riddled with spelling errors, sentence spacing problems, and quite frankly, a lack of writing care. You only wrote enough to get the job done. You did not care about presenting an appropriately edited piece of writing, which made your work come across as careless, inconsistent, and rushed. I am sure you already used a document program that comes with editing abilities to write this essay. Make use of the spellcheck and editing features that came with the program. Even if you are in a rush, all you have to do is take note of the suggested correction and click on it to apply it to the essay. Then do one final read through of the document before submitting it. Most of the errors are easily caught in the presentation using this simple method of editing. Don't submit a non-proofread essay for any reason to anybody. That shows that you don't care about the grade that you get, just that you accomplish the requirement. The grade is just as important as completing the requirement for the class. They carry equal value in the grading system.

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