Hello everybody!
I've this speech yesterday and I think it has many mistakes :(
Please help me to correct it. Thanks all
I guess I could begin by saying something about which the movie was, and I think I would have to choose: Transformers - the blockbuster of DreamWorks picture, with a tremendous fighting performance.
Going on to my next point by answering who the main stars were, and what I have to mention here is that Shia LaBeouf is staring as an untried action hero alongside Megan Fox as his love interest. Fox pulls off the whole active mechanic, while LaBeouf exudes a sweet innocence at the same time give a tremendous physical performance.
And now with reference to what the movie was about, I would like to explain that Transformers is terrifically exciting film about an ancient struggle re-erupts on Earth between two extraterrestrial clans, the heroic Autobots and the evil Decepticons, are also searching for the AllSpark, and they would do anything to get it, even if it means destroying the city.
In answer to the question of why this movie made such an impact on me, really I should mention that it was original a cartoon movie before it reached cinemas. The effects are a joy in this film: the desert landscapes, the latest technology, the way vehicles transform - are suddenly properly rendered. That master of epic battles between Autobots and U.S army against Decepeticons in the city, with the improbable jumps and flights were perfectly conjured.
you should never say: this is the question that I am going to answer. You do that several times throughout this speech. instead, you should give enough information for the audience to know what question you are answering without actually stating the question.
I have never actually seen this movie (gasp!), so I can't help you too much with the "meat" of your speech, but I will try to help you with your transitions.
here is how I would start it out:
The movie I chose to talk to you about today is Transformers. The blockbuster picture by Dreamworks features tremendous fighting performances and stars Shia LaBeouf alongside Megan Fox.
Lebeouf plays... while Fox plays...
The movie depicts an ancient struggle...
This film, which was an adaptation of an early cartoon movie, had great special effects... which really had the most impact on me.
hope this helps :)
I want to shorten this sentence:
I guess I could begin by saying something about which the movie was, and I think I would have to choose: Transformers - the blockbuster from DreamWorks -- is a tremendous fighting action performance.
Hey, Brandy did a great job...thanks Brandy! You are great!!
The epic battles between Autobots and the U.S. army against Decepeticons in the city included improbable jumps and flights were perfectly conjured.
I think you should add a few sentences to conclude and clarify your main idea.
Think about what your main idea is, and express it clearly in that first paragraph.
:-)
@brand
This is the form I were given in my IELTS class. My teacher think that it should help us focus on the point. Maybe I shouldn't use it when I take my exam. Thank for your help :D
