course major choice
I'm studying at Hanoi University of Science and Technology and my major is Talented program: intelligent lectronics and Internet of things (IoT). Nowadays in the digital revolution, technology is play an indispensable role of our life. We can see technology devices everywhere; almost people have a phone; we work share information, talk to each other by Internet. With the advances in technology of the world, many technological breakthroughs have occurred. Information and technology jobs are in high demand, well-paid and are predicted growing faster and faster. So it's one of my main reasons I choose that major. In additional, it also because of my hobbies: I love numbers and technology.
I'm not a English native, so my speech may have so much problem about vocab, grammar.... so hope u guys help me to improve my skill
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Is this a word limited response statement? The way you wrote it is very choppy and in need of professional editing. However, you can use this version with some simple corrections. For starters, you need to better explain what the Talented Program is. Is that the same as a college major? If it is, then explain why it is the same. It really sounds strange to a non Vietnamese so you need to be sure the reviewer will clearly understand your response. Next, you are offering the publicly known information for your course major. It does not contain any academic reasons or personal reasons for the choice. If you are pursuing this major because it is the next step for your hobby development, then you need to focus your explanation regarding your choice of major on that. This being your hobby, you chose to major in it because? As of now, this response is unacceptable as it does not really create a clear response or explanation for the reviewer to consider your application on.