Mustafa
Overall it was a pretty good essay. I like how you started off with your fascination in the first paragraph and then expounded in the second paragraph how it developed. Not sure if the third paragraph contributes anything to answering the prompt, I see that you tied in Cornell with what you like about biology, but I'm not sure it fits. But then again I suppose it can work. Maybe you should rework the last paragraph something's just off about it to me, it could just be me though, or expound on how you intend to utilize the facilities.
because once the structure is known,
Suggestion: because once I know the structure,To clarify,
Suggestion: For example, thework temporairly before the next mutation occurs,.but if one can understand the mutation patterns of the HIV virus, then progress is made. If one can understand the mutation patterns of the HIV virus, then progress can be made.
With patterns, medication against the HIV can be more effective and longer termed as the next mutation can be predicted and countered against by drug control.
Suggestion: These patterns can be incorporated into medication design, making the medicine more effective and longer lasting as the next mutation can be predicted and countered with drugs.Every fascination has a foundation,which is where it began and mine was 2ndbegan in second period Biology AP of Sophomore year.
When I first entered the class, I entered the class with fear from rumors of the heavy work load that college level biology will burden me with, but when I listened to my teacher's lecture, my fascination for biology flourished.
When a medicationmedicine is crystallized
it will take longer for ita longer time to dissolve in the body which allows the patient to take the medication at a lower dosage rate. From this class, my main intention for biology developedthrived (suggestion) , which is to create new applications out of the structure of life.
Hope this helps!
& if you would not mind, maybe you could take a look at any of my essays. Thanks!