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|Describe a difficult or challenging situation you have faced.
3 - Patson, the difficult situation is clear. However, you focused so much on your mother's illness that the essay became...
Undergraduatepdaka1 - Sep 19, 2017 / Holt - Sep 20, 2017
|Unable to fail, raised under the principle of hard work. Texas application
Undergraduatemariahdz16 - Sep 18, 2017 / mariahdz16 - Sep 19, 2017
|Korean language learning - a good personal statement?
2 - Richard, for starters, please remove all of the references that you wrote in all caps and change those to...
Undergraduaterisadego - Sep 19, 2017 / Holt - Sep 19, 2017
|Courageous Individual With Passion
2 - Teng, this is a very generic personal statement. It does not capture the reviewers attention nor does it relay...
Undergraduatepg13Taiwan - Sep 18, 2017 / Holt - Sep 19, 2017
|UVA Supplement: The word "push" is my favorite and reminds me that I shouldn't give up.
3 - Holt, thanks for the comment. Your comment was very helpful. By the way, I made a new version. Sorry,...
Undergraduaterowliejohnflores - Sep 17, 2017 / rowliejohnflores - Sep 19, 2017
|Quest Bridge Biographical Essay for College Admission
5 - @Holt I can't thank you enough for your response. Everyone I asked to remark on my essay told me...
UndergraduateDenyingerrors - Sep 18, 2017 / Denyingerrors - Sep 18, 2017
|Common app prompt 5 college application essay : opening new doors.
2 - Ben, do not focus on the pre-travel events. Focus on the travel events instead. Remember, the essay is asking...
Undergraduatebenh44 - Sep 17, 2017 / Holt - Sep 18, 2017
|Area of Emphasis Essay - Film
3 - Sabrina, what prompt are you trying to respond to? It is really difficult to review your statement since I...
Undergraduatesourcandy888 - Sep 17, 2017 / Holt - Sep 18, 2017
|Common App Essay: I'm Human (topic of your choice)
3 - Aman, these traits do not make you human, these traits make you a good person. Here is the thing,...
Undergraduateamanichopra - Sep 16, 2017 / Holt - Sep 17, 2017
|Commonapp Essay: Gaining control of my life
UndergraduateWulf - Sep 16, 2017 / Wulf - Sep 16, 2017
|Storyteller. MIT Admission Essay - Something you do for the pleasure of it.
5 - Jenna, you are not so much a storyteller in this narrative as you are a keeper of memories. I...
Undergraduatejenna8765 - Sep 14, 2017 / Holt - Sep 15, 2017
|Common app personal statement-- Overcoming failure at my dream school
2 - Anna, I would open with the rejection from Bak first. Then work my way back to the audition situation....
Undergraduateaevans872 - Sep 13, 2017 / Holt - Sep 14, 2017
|(Obtaining a college degree) Ubc personal profile: What is important to you and why? Max 250 words.
4 - I thought what you value most will be your relationship with your parents because you seemed to put a...
UndergraduateBetsyy - Sep 12, 2017 / tiffanytw - Sep 13, 2017
|Child Abuse: How "Wolf Children" Changed my Worldview (Commonapp)
4 - This essay should fit he prompt - Creative work/art/fictional character that has had an influence on you. In my...
UndergraduateWulf - Sep 12, 2017 / jason321 - Sep 13, 2017
|The Common App Essay - Topic 2 - Failure and experience for the future
6 - I think you can use the beginning of the second paragraph 'The class went silent' as a hook for...
Undergraduatevan94 - Aug 25, 2017 / jason321 - Sep 13, 2017
|Texas A&M. There are many reasons as to why I chose specifically to apply to this major
2 - Raul, just as with any statement of purpose, you need to explain why you feel like you need to...
UndergraduateFutureAggie5619 - Sep 12, 2017 / Holt - Sep 13, 2017
|That I May Serve... Undergraduate Class of 2018 Review
2 - Jess, the essay tells of your experience as a volunteer at various organizations, but it does not speak of...
Undergraduatejlee18 - Sep 12, 2017 / Holt - Sep 12, 2017
|Semester at Sea can provide a possibility to develop your awareness
2 - Emma, the reviewer isn't going to believe that you had a global perspective of the world at the age...
Undergraduateemmacj11 - Sep 12, 2017 / Holt - Sep 12, 2017
|Georgetown Supplement: What do you think, how any Summer/School Activity affect You? (1/2 page long)
3 - Hey @Holt, I've made revisions to my essay. I appreciate the suggestions you made and I made the changes....
Undergraduaterowliejohnflores - Sep 11, 2017 / rowliejohnflores - Sep 11, 2017
|I want to become a business expert - KGSP personal statement
4 - I'm applying for undergraduate degree and thanks for responding, it means a lot to me I will my mistake...
UndergraduateJane1234 - Sep 11, 2017 / Jane1234 - Sep 11, 2017
|Positive and negative impacts of children playing games. Know how to spend time appropriately.
2 - Nguyen, you forgot to mention if you are taking this practice test for the TOEFL or IELTS. Since this...
Undergraduatemrtameng98 - Sep 11, 2017 / Holt - Sep 11, 2017
|Stanford Supplement - Letter to Roommate from campus - self introduction
2 - Adwait, in the portion about your name being hard to pronounce, try to make your future roommate feel better...
UndergraduateAdwaitM - Sep 10, 2017 / Holt - Sep 11, 2017
|UChicago required question. My body and my mind reside in parallel universes.
3 - @Holt Thank you so much. I will start writing a new draft keeping all the things you mentioned in...
Undergraduatewhoooops17 - Sep 9, 2017 / whoooops17 - Sep 9, 2017
|How's about good Life. Everyone wants a good lifestyle, I do too, I want to good a job near my
Undergraduatephuongtran - Sep 4, 2017 / phuongtran - Sep 7, 2017
|UW Milwaukee Application Essay - experiences, talents, interests... (ANY advice/revisions?)
2 - Nicholas, it would be better for your essay if you offer up the information about the Panther Families Association...
Undergraduatesyverson - Sep 7, 2017 / Holt - Sep 7, 2017
|The importance of Ukulele to me - Common Application- Essay Prompt 1
2 - Kishore, this is a very interesting essay. However, it lacks a connection to the academic side that this talent...
Undergraduatesoileddiapers - Sep 6, 2017 / Holt - Sep 7, 2017
|A^2=B^2+C^2 - Math has been and will always be a hobby for me. COMMON APP ESSAY
4 - Dear Abdul I think you should write less about Math itself and focus more on you, how did you...
Undergraduateabdulmuhaimen1 - Sep 5, 2017 / van94 - Sep 6, 2017
|Support in utilizing knowledge. Georgia Tech Supplement Essay: Why Georgia Tech?
3 - Jacob, your response is good. It carries all of the required elements of a properly developed statement. However, the...
Undergraduatejohntforsyth - Sep 2, 2017 / Holt - Sep 3, 2017
|Georgia tech supplemental essay - Why GATEch? and "be comfortable being uncomfortable" questions
6 - Even though I decided that I want to major in Computer Science, I did not decide about which path...
Undergraduatehuna629 - Sep 1, 2017 / huna629 - Sep 2, 2017
|Long-term goal, process and obstacles - University of Cincinnati Application
Undergraduatevan94 - Sep 2, 2017 / van94 - Sep 2, 2017
|Potatoes on Drugs ---An essay for Common Application (write your own prompt).
2 - Hey Allison, I understand that you are writing an open topic essay here and I have to tell you,...
UndergraduateGahYan - Sep 2, 2017 / Holt - Sep 2, 2017
|Common App Essay - Macaroni and Cheese
3 - I don't completely agree with the commenter before me. I think this is a very cute quirk and can...
Undergraduatepararoma - Sep 1, 2017 / lexilexi3 - Sep 2, 2017
|Common Application Essay: Specific Background/Interest
3 - @Holt - Thanks so much for the help! It's greatly appreciated. I was actually thinking the same thing and...
Undergraduaterowlieflores - Sep 2, 2017 / rowlieflores - Sep 2, 2017
|COLLEGE UNDERGRADUATE ESSAY FOR UIC (UNIVERSITY OF ILLINOIS AT CHICAGO)
UndergraduateKENEEL - Sep 1, 2017 / KENEEL - Sep 1, 2017
|My unique feature. Being resistant to adversity. University of Virginia supplement Essay
Undergraduatezackyyy - Aug 31, 2017 / zackyyy - Sep 1, 2017
|Rubik's Cube. CommonApp essay on loving to solve problems
2 - NIhaal, there are two different concepts running in your essay. You are discussing (1) the concept of Java and...
UndergraduateTigerThePredator - Aug 31, 2017 / Holt - Sep 1, 2017
|Why Tulane? This University is the one for me. Essay Assistance
4 - Don't praise the university. Don't say they are esteemed; they know it.. Overall its fine. Why don't you start...
Undergraduatecollegegirl101 - Aug 30, 2017 / zackyyy - Aug 31, 2017
|Common app essay - Constructive Disaster? My transformation into a strong person.
3 - You've done a great job. It would be fantastic if you would remove the preliminary information and delve into...
Undergraduatedibs - Aug 31, 2017 / zackyyy - Aug 31, 2017
|Nigeria - the environment in which you were raised? Describe your family, home, neighborhood
2 - Braimoh, the reason that you are having a hard time developing the 500 word essay is because the essay...
UndergraduateLeila12 - Aug 27, 2017 / Holt - Aug 28, 2017
|Personal Statement on applying major transfer from Bsc (Hons) Property Management to Bsc in Nursing
3 - Thank you very much for your comment! I will try my best to shorten the paragraph, although there is...
Undergraduatealoha89i - Aug 27, 2017 / aloha89i - Aug 27, 2017
|My Academic Goals - Texas A&M Engineering Admission Essay
3 - Jazmine, when you choose a person who inspired your interest in Engineering, try to pick a more recent example...
Undergraduatejazvalencia - Aug 26, 2017 / Holt - Aug 27, 2017
|Back to my Roots - Common App: background, identity topic
3 - Bethany, for starters, you need to fix the title. It should read "Back to My Roots" because Ethopia is...
Undergraduatebethanysheshu - Aug 26, 2017 / Holt - Aug 27, 2017
|The Field of Computing - about your interest in NYU...
3 - Dibya, your essay needs to be specific about the interest that you developed for NYU. This interest needs to...
Undergraduatedibyaaaaax - Aug 26, 2017 / Holt - Aug 27, 2017
|'Teacher Crush' and guitar play - for The Common App, prompt 5.
4 - Petra, you have developed an interesting paper. It tells a very interesting story of self-discovery and overcoming obstacles at...
Undergraduatepds2027 - Aug 26, 2017 / Holt - Aug 26, 2017
|I am applying as a transfer student to A&M. SOP essay
2 - Michael, this is a very interesting personal statement. How I wish that you could use it as statement of...
Undergraduaterex123 - Aug 25, 2017 / Holt - Aug 25, 2017
|My goal: to become successful and to make a positive impact on the lives of others. Cornell Essay
2 - Charlene, the essay is interesting to read once you get over the fact that the establishing paragraph does not...
Undergraduatecharlenepeng1 - Aug 24, 2017 / Holt - Aug 24, 2017
|UNC Chapel Hill Prompt 1 - What is one thing that we don't know about you that you want for us to kn
5 - Sumedh, your introduction to your being an introvert is good. You have shown the good and the bad when...
Undergraduatesumthegoat - Aug 22, 2017 / Holt - Aug 23, 2017
|Common App Prompt 5 - Personal Growth through Spanish Dance
7 - @Hiddengrace does it have to be in essay format? can't it just be a story with added insight?...
Undergraduaterose2814 - Aug 14, 2017 / rose2814 - Aug 23, 2017
|"Loading... Loading... Loading..." Common App Personal Essay Prompt 4
UndergraduateWind0 - Aug 21, 2017 / Wind0 - Aug 22, 2017
|"Capture" - The Common App Essay (Topic of Choice)
4 - I like your casual tone, it's interesting and pleasing to read. I do see your personality reading your essay...
Undergraduateminhthuy - Aug 22, 2017 / jessiehihaho79 - Aug 22, 2017
|A Not Very Outstanding Story - The Common App - Topic 5
Undergraduateminhthuy - Aug 21, 2017 / minhthuy - Aug 21, 2017
|French House/Open-mindedness-- Wellesley Supplement Essay/ Wellesley 100 Essay
3 - Lin, this essay should be written in 2 paragraphs instead of one extremely long one. Also, you need to...
UndergraduateVictoriaSMITH - Aug 21, 2017 / Holt - Aug 21, 2017
|Reflect on a time when you questioned or challenged a belief or idea - The Common App Essay
3 - Min, your story is nowhere near responding properly to the prompt you were given. You are offering an insight...
Undergraduateminhthuy - Aug 21, 2017 / Holt - Aug 21, 2017
|Common App 2018: Accomplishment, event or realization that sparked a period of personal growth
3 - Thank you so much for the advice! I will definitely take it into consideration as I make revisions....
UndergraduateSazy1022 - Aug 12, 2017 / Sazy1022 - Aug 13, 2017
|NYU Tisch Dramatic Essay - "Hear My Notes"
7 - @Hiddengrace Thank you so much. This is reallly helping my story and also my story telling capabilities. I never...
UndergraduateKiera9473 - Jul 27, 2017 / Kiera9473 - Aug 11, 2017
|The Story of ANOTHER placement test (Essay for the Common Application)
2 - Peter, could you just summarize the story about the test? It became the focal point of the essay that...
Undergraduatepeterk - Aug 11, 2017 / Holt - Aug 11, 2017
|Education back ground and life experience
5 - @Holt This essay isn't complete, it should consist of 4 pages addressing the following: Educational background and life experiences...
Undergraduateboniface - Aug 9, 2017 / boniface - Aug 10, 2017
|"The Significant BANG" - Common Application Essay (Significant Experience)
4 - I have to agree with @Holt here. Also, I think you are skirting around the answer instead of answering...
Undergraduatedomsxcela - Aug 5, 2017 / Hiddengrace - Aug 8, 2017
|UFC Application Question on activities and Essay on my interest in UCF
Undergraduatejenalvarez - Aug 2, 2017 / jenalvarez - Aug 3, 2017
|UWC application - about an activity and its effect on own development
3 - Van, I know that this essay has a maximum character or word requirement, which is why you are worried....
UndergraduateScarlett1310 - Aug 1, 2017 / Holt - Aug 1, 2017
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