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|Waterloo AIF - Goals and interests in the Global Business and Digital Arts
3 - Joshua, in the first question, remove the reference to "attorney, though". Use a period after attorney and then begin...
Undergraduatemilk - Feb 3, 2018 / Holt - Feb 4, 2018
|Choose one of the communities to which you belong, describe that community and your place within it
3 - Like Holt said, your initial question of "why the hell am I here" wasn't actually answered by the rest...
Undergraduatefads - Jan 31, 2018 / milk - Feb 3, 2018
|Previous academic experiences and explanation for desire to transfer to Maryland
4 - Hello!! Like it's said above, there are many grammatical errors. So, I would suggest you go through it...
Undergraduateisaacabe - Jan 30, 2018 / DoctorWho - Jan 31, 2018
|A new flyover. Common App Essay - Undergrad Transfer
2 - Fahad, paragraph 4 which deals with your criteria for choosing a university is misplaced in this essay. After all,...
Undergraduatefadddy - Jan 30, 2018 / Holt - Jan 31, 2018
|Dental hygiene application essay brainstorming
Undergraduatefluffymissy - Jan 30, 2018 / fluffymissy - Jan 30, 2018
|Something you might not know about me: essay topic for college of Maryland
3 - thanks for the feedback. I appreciate it. You must start a new topic for a new essay (useless comments...
Undergraduateapply18 - Jan 24, 2018 / apply18 - Jan 26, 2018
|Undergraduate Application for Physiotherapy Personal Statement
2 - Vikhram, your essay contains too much unnecessary information. Your response should focus directly on the questions provided since this...
Undergraduatevik0905 - Jan 25, 2018 / Holt - Jan 25, 2018
|Briefly describe a time that your efforts have fallen short or a goal was not accomplished
3 - I see where you're coming from. I've been trying to think of another topic and been really struggling with...
UndergraduateTdkohlert - Jan 24, 2018 / Tdkohlert - Jan 24, 2018
|UIUC transfer essay - Computer Science - goals fulfilled in the intended program of study
2 - Fahad, start your essay from the current second paragraph. Since this is a word limited essay, you need to...
Undergraduatefshaikh - Jan 21, 2018 / Holt - Jan 21, 2018
|SUPPLEMENTAL APPLICATION ENTRANCE ESSAY ON POLARITY
UndergraduateSalena - Jan 19, 2018 / Holt - Jan 20, 2018
|business as a lucrative idea Umich essay- Unique qualities
4 - Kene, I was granted special permission to come back and give you advice for the correct prompt as you...
Undergraduatedaredevil - Jan 17, 2018 / Holt - Jan 18, 2018
|My Alcoholic Father - College admissions Essay
Undergraduatemthao007 - Jan 18, 2018 / Holt - Jan 18, 2018
|Information form (AIF) - University of Waterloo - Reasons/interest/goals
2 - Jelany, when the statement is this limited in character count, the reviewer expects you to deliver the direct responses...
UndergraduateMoomin - Jan 17, 2018 / Holt - Jan 18, 2018
|Where is Waldo question for UChicago's application process
3 - Sorry for the extremely belated response. Thank you for your corrections! I see your point. Unfortunately, however, I...
Undergraduatesmaa - Jan 7, 2018 / smaa - Jan 17, 2018
|My ability to quietly influence others. UBC Personal Profile Question
3 - hai sagedragon, overall when I read your writing, it is closely related to your hobby not personal description...
Undergraduatesagedragon - Jan 15, 2018 / agustina - Jan 17, 2018
|UBC Personal profile "Tell us about who you are" & "What is important you? and why?
3 - hai Premal, let's improve together.... here I find some gramatical errors let me show you 1. My goal...
UndergraduatePremal - Jan 14, 2018 / agustina - Jan 17, 2018
|State why you wish to leave your present college and attend Virginia Tech
2 - vincent, you are not presenting compelling reasons for your transfer to Virginia Tech. It sounds more like you are...
Undergraduatevvo22181 - Jan 15, 2018 / Holt - Jan 16, 2018
|In your personal statement include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why
Undergraduateadottde - Jan 15, 2018 / segun2700 - Jan 15, 2018
|UBC Personal Statement - What I have learnt about myself as a leader and a team member ............
2 - Jaanvi, before you can polish the grammar of this essay, you first need to make sure that your content...
Undergraduatechoco2503 - Jan 15, 2018 / Holt - Jan 15, 2018
|UBC personal profile - I surprise people - answer for the 'Tell us about who you are question'
Undergraduatearsingh - Jan 15, 2018 / arsingh - Jan 15, 2018
|I'm a persistent and hardworking individual. UBC Undergraduate Applications / Personal Profile
2 - Kaili, you can use a collective statement to respond to this essay because each member of the specific community...
Undergraduatekaili013 - Jan 14, 2018 / Holt - Jan 15, 2018
|Explains why you chose your program of study-What interests you the most about this major?-UIC essay
3 - Jaanvi, one of the major reasons that an applicant loses his slot as a potential student candidate is when...
Undergraduatechoco2503 - Jan 14, 2018 / Holt - Jan 14, 2018
|Sharing a religious, cutural or family tradition - Colgate Prompt Short 250 word Essay
Undergraduatezer0leet - Jan 14, 2018 / zer0leet - Jan 14, 2018
|UK Personal Statement - Business Management; a degree from Britain will assist me in future career
2 - Jaanvi, please review your essay for accuracy. If your father worked at the age of 16 in order to...
Undergraduatechoco2503 - Jan 14, 2018 / Holt - Jan 14, 2018
|Common App Essay - The lessons we take from obstacles we encounter
3 - @Holt In all honesty, I don't see the point of the first option you've offered, as you've made it...
UndergraduateDebsYehs - Jan 9, 2018 / DebsYehs - Jan 14, 2018
|These are the reasons why I am willing to go to Japan (Cover letter)
3 - Hieu, in an application letter, you never brag about your credentials as being something that will get you the...
Undergraduatelmhieu1108 - Jan 12, 2018 / Holt - Jan 13, 2018
|This has a value for me: memories, those good or bad
2 - Maude, your response is not accurate. If you had narrated the incident that happened which bonded you to your...
Undergraduatestudent555 - Jan 12, 2018 / Holt - Jan 12, 2018
|"You cannot achieve success without failure." UBC personal profile
2 - Jason, you only responded to the part of the prompt that asks about what you are proud of about...
Undergraduatenosajwu - Jan 12, 2018 / Holt - Jan 12, 2018
|Applying to nursing school, BSN
3 - Thank you for your feedback, I was able to remove a few redundancy and unnecessary facts you have suggested....
Undergraduatetnt80 - Oct 21, 2017 / tnt80 - Jan 12, 2018
|This is an essay for the Common App, and I have chosen the free topic. Any comments are welcomed.
UndergraduateBishal513 - Jan 11, 2018 / Bishal513 - Jan 11, 2018
|What my strengths and weaknesses are on writing and communication
3 - Jenny, when you respond to strengths and weaknesses prompts, always start off with your weakness so that you can...
Undergraduatecallstarzf - Jan 10, 2018 / Holt - Jan 11, 2018
|Common App Essay: Open-mindedness and Christianity
UndergraduateUltimaWeapon - Jan 1, 2018 / KhushbooVohra - Jan 10, 2018
|What I learned working as a waitress
Undergraduatecmzaz - Jan 1, 2018 / KhushbooVohra - Jan 10, 2018
|SCAD Fashion Marketing and Management Statement of Purpose
2 - Normaris, you only described your personal experience and interest in fashion and design in this essay. There is no...
Undergraduatenomodomo - Jan 10, 2018 / Holt - Jan 10, 2018
|I've got a ticket in my hand. So, I can go anywhere? My choice would be Madagascar.
2 - Markus, surely you can be more adventurous than this. If Madagascar is so special to you then you should...
Undergraduatemarkus12345 - Jan 9, 2018 / Holt - Jan 9, 2018
|The most important thing to me is being able to spend time with my family. UBC essay
3 - Aaron, using your family as a reference to what is important to you is incomplete. It is not your...
UndergraduateAaronTran - Jan 9, 2018 / Holt - Jan 9, 2018
|UBC Personal Profile. Explain the role you played and what you learned in the process.
3 - Warisha, you should try to avoid duplicating information that you have already stated in a previous response to a...
UndergraduateWarisha - Jan 8, 2018 / Holt - Jan 9, 2018
|Short essay on one page statment about something awsome.
3 - guan, the main problem with this short essay is that you are showing a lack of control over sentence...
Undergraduatemickeyguan - Jan 8, 2018 / Holt - Jan 9, 2018
|UBC Personal Profile: Explain How You Responded To A Problem
Undergraduateyounmass - Jan 7, 2018 / younmass - Jan 8, 2018
|"Stan... is something else" - UBC Personal Profile : Describing myself
2 - Stanslous, your second sentence is a run on. It is also too long. Divide that presentation into 2 sentences...
UndergraduateStan_a - Jan 6, 2018 / Holt - Jan 7, 2018
|Lafayette's rigorous economics program emphasizing on the global contemporary issues attracts me.
2 - Hien, do not close this essay with a question. Are you seriously expecting the reviewer to respond to you?...
UndergraduateMrsOng - Jan 6, 2018 / Holt - Jan 7, 2018
|Lafayette College Supplement: Why Lafayette?
4 - Here are some of my suggestions. You should not tell Lafayette wasn't the first school you researched. This will...
Undergraduateinesanleu - Jan 6, 2018 / MrsOng - Jan 6, 2018
|UBC Personal Profile: Tell us about who you are?
2 - Warisha, this is a very uninteresting essay because you practically approached it from a bullets presentation in a question...
UndergraduateWarisha - Jan 6, 2018 / Holt - Jan 6, 2018
|"A different language is a different vision of life". My vision of life changed in the USA
3 - Marta, what exactly is the prompt that you are responding to? I don't really understand what the point of...
Undergraduatezabka10 - Jan 6, 2018 / Holt - Jan 6, 2018
|Transfer Application: Community college to VA Tech
2 - Sahar, the most effective transfer application essay always contains a comparison of the education that you received in your...
UndergraduateApples19 - Jan 5, 2018 / Holt - Jan 6, 2018
|University of Pennsylvania supplement: What are you gonna do here?
2 - Wenbo, this is already a very long response statement. Don't you have a word limit on it? I feel...
UndergraduateUltimaWeapon - Jan 5, 2018 / Holt - Jan 6, 2018
|My Dickinson's supp essay; 'unique program through the liberal-arts lens'
UndergraduateMrsOng - Jan 4, 2018 / MrsOng - Jan 6, 2018
|Anyone feel free to Critique my Waterloo AIF for Management Engineering - application form
3 - Thanks so much for your advice. I have been trying to got proper advice from peers but most kept...
UndergraduateArcticWolf - Jan 5, 2018 / ArcticWolf - Jan 6, 2018
|Personal Statement/ Prompt 1 (Background)/ A time I helped my friend
2 - In my opinion that is a good essay that shares a good interest and story. However, I think you...
Undergraduatengonhat352 - Jan 4, 2018 / SWMaster - Jan 5, 2018
|The music has held a deep importance for me - the essay on what is the most important in my life
Undergraduatesethclogan - Jan 5, 2018 / sethclogan - Jan 5, 2018
|A differed point of view from a teacher or employer during an evaluation of your performance
2 - Naomi, aside from being confident in your work and skills, you should also discuss how you learned to use...
Undergraduatenaenaebunny - Jan 5, 2018 / Holt - Jan 5, 2018
|Art Institute of Charlotte Essay; career goals in connection with the education at AI
2 - Tristin, you need to have specifics indicated in your essay so that you can impress upon the reviewer that...
UndergraduateTristinRussell - Jan 5, 2018 / Holt - Jan 5, 2018
|UBC Personal Profile: Describe an unfamiliar situation & what you have learned dealing with it?
2 - @watashiwano this essay is alright in terms of the topic you chose for the discussion. However, the fact that...
Undergraduatewatashiwano - Jan 4, 2018 / Holt - Jan 5, 2018
|UBC Personal Profile: essay about racial discrimination, language barrier and disparity
2 - @watashiwano Here is the thing, you chose the most unbelievable age to use as your age of enlightenment. The...
Undergraduatewatashiwano - Jan 4, 2018 / Holt - Jan 5, 2018
|Essay for Princeton University, Engineering college
UndergraduateGabchacho - Jan 1, 2018 / watashiwano - Jan 4, 2018
|Reasons for Carnegie Mellon school pick
Undergraduateethanfine - Jan 3, 2018 / Holt - Jan 4, 2018
|NUS personal statement about my experience joining Physics Olympiad
4 - Hello! I think you wrote a very good essay, and your theme addresses the prompt. However, you didn't correlate...
Undergraduatejohanessuhardjo - Dec 24, 2017 / Isabellaalmeida - Jan 3, 2018
|Showing I'm capable for Johns Hopkins
2 - Sameen, the usual reason that the applicants overshoot the word requirement is because they always try to go for...
Undergraduatesmahm200 - Jan 3, 2018 / Holt - Jan 3, 2018
|Short essays for an application. (Personal Statement)
2 - Hi Kosuke, Since the question asks for what you learned about yourself as a leader and team member,...
UndergraduateTryharder - Jan 2, 2018 / SWMaster - Jan 2, 2018
|"Run!" "Get up!" Mandatory practices with my dad. Apply Texas Essay B
Undergraduateadamalonzo123 - Jan 2, 2018 / adamalonzo123 - Jan 2, 2018
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