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|NYU Transfer: Tisch Clive Davis Institute of Recorded Music: Song Review: Jay-z
3 - I really like the tone of this essay - laid back, but knowledgeable. It doesn't read like a meaningless...
UndergraduateCherryPac18 - Mar 12, 2013 / heartitude - Mar 14, 2013
|"To Know" / Common Application / Transfer / Personal Essay
4 - Hey I thought your essay was good but the conclusion was a little choppy and difficult so I worked...
Undergraduateformenthos - Mar 13, 2013 / cpdphilippe - Mar 14, 2013
|Common App Transfer Essay -- Why do I want to change?
2 - I'm nto a grammer man, so I'm not concentrating on that. I'm not sayign there are problems, I'm saying,...
UndergraduateaGale37 - Mar 13, 2013 / formenthos - Mar 13, 2013
|Album Review- There's no formula;NYUTransfer- Tisch Clive Davis Ins of Recorded Music
UndergraduateCherryPac18 - Mar 13, 2013 / CherryPac18 - Mar 13, 2013
|You can expect me to be studying hard in the room; Stanford roommate essay prompt
Undergraduatebman47 - Mar 13, 2013 / Didgeridoo - Mar 13, 2013
|Knowledge, responsibility, respect, passion & a desire makes good Physician Assistant
4 - I can definitely feel the passion you have in your essay because I also want to go into medicine....
UndergraduatePArachel - Mar 11, 2013 / ShieldandSword - Mar 13, 2013
|"To Seek Out: ; Transfer Reasons; Emerson/Common App
Undergraduateformenthos - Mar 12, 2013 / temptprovidence - Mar 13, 2013
|"you can be dumb as rocks, but if you have ambition..." Trasnfer Essay
4 - I loved this essay! mostly because its a bit similar to my story, i think the right corrections have...
Undergraduatebigboost - Mar 12, 2013 / dianallc - Mar 13, 2013
|Thesis statement for the topic - Should students work part time during college days?
4 - In my view, working part time affects negatively on students' academic performance in several ways; Although it is true...
Undergraduateningo - Mar 5, 2013 / dumi - Mar 13, 2013
|Common App - Short Essay (Yoga)
9 - Yoga Workshop; BE PATIENT, EVALUATE YOUR RESULTS As you get better at a particular aspect while running your...
Undergraduateshelby_l - Sep 15, 2009 / HassieAhumada - Mar 13, 2013
|The moving image ; Emerson C- What influenced you to select your major?
Undergraduateformenthos - Mar 11, 2013 / formenthos - Mar 12, 2013
|My strong abilities; Kelley School of business Admission Essay
6 - 1. Drop the opening sentence with your name. 2. Drop the sentence with your current school. App materials show...
Undergraduateluky78633 - Mar 2, 2013 / formenthos - Mar 12, 2013
|My primary goal here is an academic one; TRANSFER OBJECTIVES
2 - Generally, this is solid. However, and me being in the same boat as you with the common app's transfer...
Undergraduateneareast - Mar 9, 2013 / formenthos - Mar 12, 2013
|Living with my parents is a life of forced obligations; Transfer Essay; Ben Franklin
3 - Crit review. Don't take it personally, but I want to quickly hit points hard so you can change them....
Undergraduatekimjisa1 - Mar 11, 2013 / formenthos - Mar 12, 2013
|We had a hard life; Cal Summer Experience
UndergraduateKYOAAA - Mar 10, 2013 / KYOAAA - Mar 11, 2013
|Diversity, proper tools, great learning environment;TRANSFER- How IIT will prepare me
6 - now thats perfect i think... not concentrating on mistakes but the material... that was nice revival..!!! :)...
UndergraduateEpsilon - Mar 8, 2013 / temptprovidence - Mar 11, 2013
|I live by the Performance equation rules ; Upenn Suppliment. Life realization.
2 - Ben Franklin rightly said: `human beings are divided into three classes-those that are immovable,those that are movable and those...
Undergraduatebell2132 - Mar 10, 2013 / mussy - Mar 11, 2013
|Tennis powerhouse ; Ivy League material/ Place or Environment
9 - Describe a place or environment where you are perfectly content. What do you do or experience there, and why...
Undergraduatelemonboy377 - Mar 9, 2013 / Didgeridoo - Mar 10, 2013
|why do you choose accounting major? (PT Thiess Scolarship)
Undergraduatejulitajulita - Mar 9, 2013 / julitajulita - Mar 10, 2013
|Learning beyond the classroom; U Minnesota-Why live in Dorm?/ Experience
2 - [i]Moreover, being someone who loves to explore other cultures I find it is a privilege to live...
Undergraduatenguyensybach - Mar 9, 2013 / dumi - Mar 9, 2013
|I sought out ways to excel in an Economic academic setting; Why you want to transfer?
Undergraduateadspeeding - Mar 6, 2013 / adspeeding - Mar 8, 2013
|Aye Aye Captain! No GPS or Google Maps! .......Stranded far north of HAWAII!!
Undergraduateislandgrl23 - Mar 8, 2013 / temptprovidence - Mar 8, 2013
|Journey full of obstacles and surprises; TRANSFER-Cornell,U Miami,NYU&American U.
5 - Hi good job. It was very sincere. Perhaps you can make your hook statement more dynamic that acts solely...
Undergraduatearivero1992 - Feb 28, 2013 / islandgrl23 - Mar 8, 2013
|My parents invest all their time, effort for me; GENETICS AND SCIENTIFIC RESEARCH
4 - Good job. Your hook (first sentence) can be improved. Make it more inviting, exciting, alluring, or simply more interesting....
Undergraduatesunset05 - Feb 28, 2013 / islandgrl23 - Mar 8, 2013
|MY ACADEMIC JOURNEY; SOP for UT
5 - I like the dynamics and vivid imagery of your writing but I think it can be improved by making...
UndergraduateMCBacardi - Feb 28, 2013 / islandgrl23 - Mar 8, 2013
|Crazy amounts of Chaos in my homeland -SMDEP ESSAY
3 - Coming from Sudan, what is now called North Sudan, I belong to one of the affluent Sudanese families...
UndergraduateAmjeezy1 - Feb 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|I was represening both my beliefs and people; TRANSFER- Letter of Motivation
3 - Well.... I think you need to talk more about your professional goals,both short and long term, the course you...
Undergraduatesomedaysoon - Feb 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|Everyone needs a moment of clarification; UT- SOP
4 - It's good if you posted the prompt such as "topic of choice" or "significant achievement" etc.... Then we would...
Undergraduatekillerdestiny - Feb 27, 2013 / dumi - Mar 7, 2013
|I have been interested in computers and other electrical devices;TOPIC OF MY CHOICE
4 - Well... I feel you should be able to fit into this story. Your answer to this prompt needs to...
UndergraduateHockeykid16 - Feb 27, 2013 / dumi - Mar 7, 2013
|Small businesses are the engine of the economy; TRANSFER/CORNEL&UCHICAGO
3 - As a twelve year old Jamaican xxxx resident, I've understood that small businesses make up the engine of...
Undergraduatekabal - Feb 27, 2013 / dumi - Mar 7, 2013
|Issue of importance essay: Dishonesty in Sports!
Undergraduateafflictedfury - Feb 27, 2013 / dumi - Mar 7, 2013
|I have always been besan, a plain Indian flour!; PERSUASIVE ESSAY
Undergraduatehkk24 - Mar 6, 2013 / dumi - Mar 7, 2013
|"Education is a social process; Education is growth" - UT / Personal Essay
4 - This is a well-written essay, but content-wise, I have some issues with it. A. The prompt says "Choose...
UndergraduateMCBacardi - Feb 28, 2013 / Didgeridoo - Mar 5, 2013
|'A Chance to Change' essay- This is worth a trip to Africa!
Undergraduatehalhante - Mar 4, 2013 / mhss - Mar 4, 2013
|CURIOSITY has been the cornerstone of man's evolution; SOP - Automobile Engineering
2 - Much improved! Because your SOP is so long as it is, I would suggest not adding anything else. Besides,...
Undergraduateaneesh31891 - Feb 24, 2013 / Didgeridoo - Mar 4, 2013
|Academic success is very important in the world today.; PERSONAL STATEMENT
Undergraduatelilkiddykid - Jan 30, 2013 / tomcruisin444 - Mar 4, 2013
|Getting into this type of college is my aspiration!-Webster University of St Louis
2 - I love your personal statement but you must do your best to avoid redundancy or the repetition of words....
Undergraduateslsaosaiasa - Mar 4, 2013 / tomcruisin444 - Mar 4, 2013
|"I bet I can beat you in this shenanigans" ;Natural competitive nature
5 - I have a special interest in the field of neuropsychology. As an undergraduate student, I had the opportunity to...
Undergraduatewasdsadawas - Mar 4, 2013 / tomcruisin444 - Mar 4, 2013
|Challenge of providing financial means for the family!
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|Ice Sculpture Hero----National University of Singapore Undergraduate Essay
2 - Ice sculpture is what Harbin is well known for its expertise and what was instrumental in changing my...
UndergraduateNightHeart - Feb 27, 2013 / dumi - Mar 4, 2013
|'Varna za mladite' & volunteering initiatives; AUBG /Global perspective
Undergraduatefiredesi0906 - Feb 26, 2013 / dumi - Mar 4, 2013
|"It's never too late to change" ; TRANSFER -UTexas at Austin- SOP
9 - .... you better express what profession you are really eyeing on, be specific because it would sound that...
Undergraduatejoed94 - Feb 18, 2013 / dumi - Mar 4, 2013
|UCF's Famous "bump in the road" Essay
3 - Thank you for these modifications and suggestions! I will definitely use all of these! For "As months passed,...
Undergraduategrena37 - Mar 3, 2013 / grena37 - Mar 3, 2013
|I hate classical music/Grand Theory of Unification/Roommate/ Socks matters; Stanford
2 - I really like the sock one, but the ending just falls apart. It's just my opinion, so you should...
UndergraduateBaldrick1115 - Mar 2, 2013 / chessman567 - Mar 3, 2013
|My goal was simple;reach the summit of Mountain Fansipan; SMU / Important Achievement
4 - .... Well... I too agree... this reads like an account of what you experienced. You need to have...
Undergraduateprivate93 - Feb 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 3, 2013
|"Why haven't we gone to Japan?"; ADMISSIONS PAPER FOR STUDY ABROAD IN JAPAN.
3 - THANK YOU SO MUCH. and no I have not submitted this yet. Thank you for the editing and basically...
Undergraduatelcape97914 - Mar 1, 2013 / lcape97914 - Mar 2, 2013
|The search of Higgs Particles and my life; Purdue University/ Envision yourself
5 - android21 Thanks!!!. Actually, this is the only essay that is required by the institution. XDXDXD...
Undergraduatephysicsguy - Mar 1, 2013 / physicsguy - Mar 2, 2013
|I'm from Iraq, which is one of the largest oil producer!
Undergraduateomar686 - Feb 28, 2013 / omar686 - Mar 2, 2013
|child trafficking as a form of marriage, Whitman essay
6 - Not true whatsoever. If you read the prompt, you would understand that this is supposed to be personal!...
Undergraduateanniesis27 - Mar 1, 2013 / danimeep - Mar 1, 2013
|Research on Foxconn's suicides incident; TRANSFER/ Extracurricular activity
2 - Is this a question that chan is asking you? if so, maybe you should express it diffrently because...
Undergraduatelauman112233 - Mar 1, 2013 / android21 - Mar 1, 2013
|My interests do not match up with those of my peers; Transfer Reasons/Objectives
4 - Thanks very much, but I'm unclear about that comment. It is kind of a criticism. It's a good thing,...
Undergraduatetemberger93 - Feb 18, 2013 / temberger93 - Mar 1, 2013
|My life is defined by three sections of time; UTexas - SOP
3 - Yea just fix what dig wrote and you will have a powerful essay!!...and I am from FLORIDA, PLEASE TELL...
Undergraduatemascot92 - Mar 1, 2013 / android21 - Mar 1, 2013
|Curiosity led me on a remarkable voyage; My aspirations(goals)for Queen's U & beyond
UndergraduateThe Life of I - Feb 27, 2013 / The Life of I - Mar 1, 2013
|Followers of Christ; Biola/ process of spiritual growth
2 - Even though you were unsure as how to approach this essay, I personally believe that you did a great...
UndergraduateJcubed - Feb 28, 2013 / ebagwell - Mar 1, 2013
|Sea turtles, the environment-- Whitman / Current local,national, or global issue
Undergraduatedanimeep - Feb 28, 2013 / anniesis27 - Mar 1, 2013
|"Knowing oneself is the beginning of all wisdom"; Significant experiences
5 - Thanks guys for all the great feedback!! I took into consideration your views. I changed the intro around a...
Undergraduatescisslehannd - Feb 27, 2013 / scisslehannd - Feb 28, 2013
|FENCING, a sport that requires utmost committment; UT Austin Transfer SOP
4 - As stated above this essay has the potential to become a phenomenal essay. My advice would be to include...
Undergraduatesv00111 - Feb 24, 2013 / MCBacardi - Feb 28, 2013
|My family had sacrificed so much; Why I want to transfer
3 - Well... I read your full answer... It's ok, but I feel that you should have given more emphasis to...
Undergraduatejennnyyyy - Feb 26, 2013 / dumi - Feb 28, 2013
|Piercing my nose and my fighting against my family's opinions; UNPOPULAR Opinion
8 - Is this a better opening sentence? A sharp pain shot back into my brain, while a chill traveled...
Undergraduatedanimeep - Feb 26, 2013 / danimeep - Feb 28, 2013
|LEAP FORWARD IN MY LIFE; Common App - Why Transfer?
3 - There was no feedback in the rod, nothing I could fight with . ("with" which is a preposition shouldn't...
Undergraduatekoiboi76 - Feb 27, 2013 / tomcruisin444 - Feb 28, 2013
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