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|My industrious nature; UColorado @ Boulder - DIVERSE COMMUNITY
4 - I like the way you write. Your essay shows everybody how much you love maths and how good you...
Undergraduatefsolano94 - Jan 15, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 15, 2013
|"A Sense of Challenge"; UT - SOP
6 - Excellent essay. It flows, answers the prompt and reflects who you are. Job well done! Please help with...
UndergraduateKEJohnson94 - Dec 31, 2012 / fsolano94 - Jan 15, 2013
|Best education/ Internships with Ice Hockey & Football; Why TRANSFER to BU?
Undergraduatebrie270 - Jan 15, 2013 / fsolano94 - Jan 15, 2013
|Common App Essay: It's the journey, not the destination
5 - I also liked the flow of the essay as well. It was really persuasive and illustrated your goals. I...
Undergraduatebasketball - Jan 15, 2013 / fsolano94 - Jan 15, 2013
|"New Soul" Smith "theme song" Supp
6 - Thanks! really helpful! I did not realize that my sentences are confusing... And I like your ID. :p...
Undergraduatemaerd2012 - Jan 15, 2013 / maerd2012 - Jan 15, 2013
|Gardens/ Molecular Biology/ Fresh& Tranquility/ Ancient Architecture; Why Rhodes?
3 - Hello, I would say that in the beginning you are just listing out your "requirements" but colleges don't...
Undergraduatezdv - Jan 15, 2013 / iprocrastinate - Jan 15, 2013
|Childhood Obesity - Sophie Davis essay #2 Major Domestic Problem
Undergraduatetutu51595 - Jan 14, 2013 / tutu51595 - Jan 15, 2013
|Peace lover / changing perceptions- About myself, perspective & what I hope to learn
4 - Well....I dont entirely understand your point sometime. And I thought this prompt means" how your environment shapes you"or something...
Undergraduatezdv - Jan 15, 2013 / maerd2012 - Jan 15, 2013
|Smith College - A theme song that describes you best; "What's This!"
Undergraduatebiubiubiubiu - Jan 15, 2013 / maerd2012 - Jan 15, 2013
|"Literature is the best way to overcome death"--- Amherst College supplemental essay
6 - the fact that you talk about how you percieve literature and its effect on you is great. The writing...
Undergraduatekaratekid666 - Dec 31, 2012 / zdv - Jan 15, 2013
|Academic atmosphere/ Professors/ Students; What excites you about Union? (150 words)
7 - i think your essay is too straight forward. you are only stating what you like about union and its...
Undergraduatethaonguyen1901 - Jan 15, 2013 / zdv - Jan 15, 2013
|Ominous, inanimate and eerie - Why Emory?
NEW - Hello, this is my first time posting my essay and first time showing it to someone else. I would...
Undergraduateiprocrastinate - Jan 15, 2013 / — -
|Otto-Von- Bismarck & Adolf Hitler; College App - Political leaders
2 - It seems like you just wrote about what they did rather than why you view them as leaders and...
UndergraduateUzair Farooq - Jan 14, 2013 / lettuceface - Jan 15, 2013
|REWARD than a TASK; Why you want be a nurse and why attend this university?
3 - Thank you for your response. I will make corrections and watch out for those "i have's". Thanks again!...
Undergraduatecinthiar03 - Jan 15, 2013 / cinthiar03 - Jan 15, 2013
|Cultural diversity / Volunteering Opportunities; Unique qualities of Emory?
6 - I guess this gives a good starting point.I wish if you interchanged the first and second paras. You talk...
UndergraduateOrcadianDander - Jan 13, 2013 / dumi - Jan 15, 2013
|"I won't give up on us even if the skies get rough" ; SMITH College - Theme song
5 - The 99% is from Edison's "Genius: one percent inspiration and 99 percent perspiration." I always challenge myself, like...
Undergraduatejustchamp - Jan 15, 2013 / justchamp - Jan 15, 2013
|Great education,beautiful campus; What Columbia & why?
Undergraduatemahmoudjendy - Dec 28, 2012 / katev - Jan 15, 2013
|Proud to be a Titan; Common App -Community
Undergraduatecsfantran - Jan 14, 2013 / dumi - Jan 15, 2013
|My friend, I am truly blessed by having her in my life.
3 - Thank u karmalove.. Appreciate it so much! :) hahaha.. Sorry for making your life miserable. I'm still in high...
Undergraduateedikaraffie - Jan 13, 2013 / edikaraffie - Jan 15, 2013
|SCARED OF PRESENTATIONS; EXPERIENCE - left comfort zone
Undergraduatezdv - Jan 15, 2013 / dumi - Jan 15, 2013
|"Ignorance" - What do you miss most from your childhood? - MHC supp
2 - Although I have travelled to tens of countries and have met thousands of people,and I can detect lies with...
UndergraduateVVCepheiA - Jan 14, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 15, 2013
|Major in Computer Science, local community - Why Lafayette?
3 - I am also applying for lafayette in CS major :D I think it is a generally good essay. However,...
Undergraduatebobesman94 - Jan 12, 2013 / VVCepheiA - Jan 15, 2013
|Gazing @ Stars; Bryn Mawr - Educational Experience
4 - The prompt asks you to tell "What you think you would gain from the educational experience at Bryn Mawr...
Undergraduate0livegreen - Jan 14, 2013 / VVCepheiA - Jan 15, 2013
|I love to develop & design systems ; CUNY - Why degree in Engineering?
Undergraduatemdni007 - Jan 14, 2013 / mdni007 - Jan 15, 2013
|Trimester system/ Environmental Society; What excites you about Union?
Undergraduatethaonguyen1901 - Jan 14, 2013 / thaonguyen1901 - Jan 15, 2013
|The Poet's Inspiration; St. Olaf / Interim Course Design
6 - This is the second edit: (I stand by my opening sentence) What better way to appreciate the words...
Undergraduatewellesleygirl - Jan 15, 2013 / wellesleygirl - Jan 15, 2013
|EDUCATION & PERSONAL GROWTH; OBERLIN SUPP
2 - Ever since my parents brought home our Yamaha grand piano, music began to play an important role in...
Undergraduatetffnycheng - Jan 15, 2013 / dumi - Jan 15, 2013
|Holistic care & Sincere compassion ; Nursing Statement of Purpose - UCLA
Undergraduatesdelicana - Jan 13, 2013 / sdelicana - Jan 15, 2013
|Environment/Architecture/Diversity/Festivals/Film; Why attend LMU?/Why select MA
2 - Several reasons have shaped my rationale as why I deem LMU the perfect match for me. From what I...
UndergraduateM1rellla - Jan 14, 2013 / jpsmyth - Jan 15, 2013
|Growing Up in Hawaii; Common App - Experience/ diversity
3 - Okay, so basically what I was going for was that living in Hawaii has given me a unique perspective,...
Undergraduatehawaii808 - Jan 14, 2013 / hawaii808 - Jan 14, 2013
|"Guns don't kill people, people kill people"; Suny Common App
6 - I like the way you write. It catches the reader's eye. I wish you had posted the prompt however....
UndergraduateBape95 - Jan 14, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 14, 2013
|Networking / Pacific National Exhibition; Why U Toronto?/Extracurricular activities?
Undergraduatelinadu95 - Jan 13, 2013 / linadu95 - Jan 14, 2013
|College of Arts and Science/accessibility; Unique qualities of EMORY U
4 - I wish to attend Emory's _(good adj)____ College of Arts and Sciences. are the primary reason...
Undergraduatearitasand18 - Jan 14, 2013 / katev - Jan 14, 2013
|"I found my calling in the silence"- an admission essay I'm using for a few colleges
Undergraduatevalerieroseee - Jan 14, 2013 / katev - Jan 14, 2013
|Biculturalism - Common app for Brandeis - Topic of choice
UndergraduateTami Conrad - Jan 12, 2013 / Tami Conrad - Jan 14, 2013
|Shyness and the Germans; Common App- Activity Expansion
4 - I might consider going a couple of different routes in your format and then choose the clearest. You could...
UndergraduateFlargus - Jan 14, 2013 / katev - Jan 14, 2013
|"THE SEARCH FOR MYSELF" COMMUNICATIONS MAJOR TRANSFER ESSAY
2 - It's really good. Perhaps you might want to elaborate on communications and its relevance to you a bit more,...
Undergraduatesherrygirl - Jan 14, 2013 / musicallover223 - Jan 14, 2013
|Road to prosperity; UT transfer -(Personal issue essay) for Radio/Television/Film
3 - Thanks. I really wrote this essay as a addition to my statement of purpose (which I'd also like opinions...
UndergraduateRandomJPG - Jan 14, 2013 / RandomJPG - Jan 14, 2013
|Not giving up; JMU Personal Statement
3 - I'd recommend getting rid of all the be verbs you can but aside from that it's pretty solid so...
Undergraduatevaleriadavila01 - Jan 13, 2013 / RandomJPG - Jan 14, 2013
|'clinical research facilities' - Personal Statement
4 - I know this is usually not recommended but I like to think of a very general thesis statement first,...
Undergraduatetwizzlestraw - Jan 5, 2012 / RandomJPG - Jan 14, 2013
|Beautiful/ Gym classes/ History/ Alumni/ Liberal Arts curriculum; Why Lewis & Clark ?
4 - Can you make a suggestion? I want to leave in the last sentence because that is the school's motto....
UndergraduateATesch - Jan 14, 2013 / ATesch - Jan 14, 2013
|Eric Thomas, "The Hip-Hop Preacher"; COMMON APPPerson made an impact
UndergraduateBren1995 - Jan 14, 2013 / bgerner78 - Jan 14, 2013
|VOLUNTEERING EXPERIENCE; Gates Millennium- Involvement/ Contributions to Community
UndergraduateNicoleO - Jan 14, 2013 / NicoleO - Jan 14, 2013
|Contribution to Petroleum-based economy/I'm a geek;U Southern California(Engineering)
UndergraduateDabbagh - Jan 10, 2013 / VVCepheiA - Jan 14, 2013
|Girls go to College to get more Knowledge, Boys go to Jupiter; Why Wellesley College?
2 - Hi I'm just a beginner, but I'd like to share my limited knowledge with others. aritasand18 I...
Undergraduatearitasand18 - Jan 14, 2013 / monaph - Jan 14, 2013
|"Love at First Sight" : Why Colorado College?
5 - Would anybody be willing to check the second draft? (Sorry for Triple-posting, if there's a rule against that.)...
UndergraduateFlargus - Jan 14, 2013 / Flargus - Jan 14, 2013
|Trust; Stanford Supplement - What Matters to You, and Why?
5 - This is my 2nd draft. Let me know if you have any more suggestions. I really would appreciate it....
Undergraduatemaranicoled - Jan 8, 2013 / maranicoled - Jan 14, 2013
|Program range/ exchange student experience; Why Reed ?
3 - I really liked the essay. It is intimate and it shows how ambitious you are about studying and how...
UndergraduateParahat95 - Jan 7, 2013 / gencounselor - Jan 14, 2013
|CHANGING SCHOOLS; U of Richmond/Stepping out of Comfort Zone
2 - Well... your prompt wants you to talk about an experience that you had to leave your comfort zone....
UndergraduateCrowcrow - Jan 14, 2013 / dumi - Jan 14, 2013
|City/ People/ Diversity/ Homeliness/ Unity/ Resources; Seattle U - GOOD MATCH?
Undergraduatehtn2013 - Jan 13, 2013 / dumi - Jan 14, 2013
|My younger sister; Villanova Community; Lesson & Experience
Undergraduatethaonguyen1901 - Jan 14, 2013 / dumi - Jan 14, 2013
|"IMAGINE" ; Smith College - A theme song that describes you best
5 - Thanks for your advice!! Ahhh.. About "topic of my choice", I think I expressed it in a wrong way...
UndergraduateVVCepheiA - Jan 13, 2013 / VVCepheiA - Jan 14, 2013
|I want a school where I can be myself; Why Reed?
Undergraduatejjjjulia - Jan 13, 2013 / dumi - Jan 14, 2013
|BREAKING POINT; Loyola Marymount Sup: Situation in which you used critical thinking
Undergraduatejenarevalo15 - Jan 11, 2013 / NicoleO - Jan 14, 2013
|I was born Mohammad Zaid; Essay on MYSELF
5 - Is there a prompt or anything to this? Because if there is, It's not Many of the thoughts don't...
UndergraduateXaid - Jan 13, 2013 / Flargus - Jan 14, 2013
|Let's save earth from pollution; UK universities personal statement
Undergraduateomeirx - Jan 14, 2013 / dumi - Jan 14, 2013
|LAWYER/ Committment to the HUMANITIES/ LOCATION; Seattle U- Good match?
Undergraduatejwfathal - Jan 14, 2013 / jwfathal - Jan 14, 2013
|History of Science Fiction; Colorado C- Intellectual Adventure
UndergraduateFlargus - Jan 14, 2013 / Flargus - Jan 14, 2013
|Gender equality/ community/ academic opportunities; Why Wellesley?
6 - The essay should be attached. My essay for Gates Millennium Scholarship is also due in 2 days. Please...
Undergraduateblanchedehors - Jan 14, 2013 / NicoleO - Jan 14, 2013
|Hall of fame by "The Script"; SMITH - Theme song that describes me
Undergraduatemmgay - Jan 14, 2013 / mmgay - Jan 14, 2013
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