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|Canceling anger/ Personal essay/ Common App.
Undergraduategann - Dec 28, 2012 / gann - Dec 30, 2012
|I was amazed of Northeastern's qualities ; Something you created
3 - Help to help you hhahaha..your second essay is good but you did not mention Qatar ...do it and explain...
Undergraduateahiasat1 - Dec 30, 2012 / AryanK - Dec 30, 2012
|Self-sustainability; BC Sup
Undergraduatehellom - Dec 30, 2012 / moon05 - Dec 30, 2012
|Teaching and volunteering; Gettysburg Supp: "Make a difference"
5 - How about: Because even orphans have the right in access of education. It's kind of weird, but you get...
Undergraduatemoon05 - Dec 26, 2012 / Mein - Dec 30, 2012
|Rush, opportunities & experiences/ Communicator/ Brutus; NYU; Why?/ Interests?/ Intrigues?
4 - The first one: You write in a fluent and reasonable as well as passionate manner and I think it...
Undergraduatelkaradsheh - Dec 29, 2012 / VVCepheiA - Dec 30, 2012
|Warm and inviting community ; HMC Supp: Why Harvey-Mudd?
3 - Using the word "core" might confuse the readers into thinking you're referring to the Common Core, which consists...
Undergraduatecesaror123 - Dec 27, 2012 / turtlefence - Dec 30, 2012
|Electric vehicles / Concerned / 3 books / Homeless kids / Humor - Caltech
1 - 1. Summer Activities (volunteer work, research, summer programs, personal projects, if not already listed on the Common Application) -...
Undergraduateelnino09 - Dec 30, 2012 / — -
|Business, the burning fire deep inside me ; NYU Sup/ academic interests?
2 - The sentence grabbed my attention just like that but when reached to the end and read "business" I...
Undergraduatehellom - Dec 30, 2012 / moon05 - Dec 30, 2012
|New environment,culture, tradition, education & a lifestyle; Brown U/Cubism question)
4 - Adding above, you should add the detail about the "hopeless community" and also the example when you go higher...
Undergraduateahiasat1 - Dec 30, 2012 / Mein - Dec 30, 2012
|"The Giving Tree" by Shel Silverstein ; Common App/ Literature that surprised me
Undergraduateschoudhry - Dec 30, 2012 / schoudhry - Dec 30, 2012
|I come from Jombang; Stanford:Roommate
3 - Thank you....
UndergraduateMein - Dec 29, 2012 / Mein - Dec 30, 2012
|My mom is a mathematician; Common App/ Person & influence
UndergraduateAryanK - Dec 30, 2012 / AryanK - Dec 30, 2012
|'The Power of Speech' ; Common App Essay - (Topic of your choice)
Undergraduatechai607 - Dec 27, 2012 / chai607 - Dec 30, 2012
|"do it the Islamic way" ; What matters to you and why?
2 - I actually love it! What a good way of explaining your thoughts on religions! can you please read my...
Undergraduateahiasat1 - Dec 30, 2012 / lkaradsheh - Dec 30, 2012
|Stereotyping is a common thought process ; Amherst sup
Undergraduatesj1912 - Dec 30, 2012 / gundala1 - Dec 30, 2012
|No other place like New York City; NYU Supplemental: Why NYU New York
Undergraduateayu0006 - Dec 29, 2012 / ahiasat1 - Dec 30, 2012
|A movie with hero & villain are friends; U Chicago essay- Oscar wild
2 - elaborate on the person and he enmity!...will make it personal and intersting!! plz help wid mine too!...
Undergraduategundala1 - Dec 30, 2012 / sj1912 - Dec 30, 2012
|"Chiney"; Stanford Supplement - what matters to you
Undergraduatechewbaccablack - Dec 29, 2012 / amin13 - Dec 30, 2012
|Spaghetti cooking instigated the exploration of the new; Stanford App
Undergraduatexxxbluefrogxxx - Dec 29, 2012 / xxxbluefrogxxx - Dec 30, 2012
|Nature of Northwestern's Communications Studies program; NORTHWESTERN Supp
11 - I don't mean to come off as harsh but you have to rethink your essay. Northwestern really want to...
Undergraduateyuzec95 - Dec 27, 2012 / enigma33 - Dec 30, 2012
|The Haegeum/ Common App Essay prompt #1
4 - I think you should elaborate more on this. I understand what you're trying to convey, but not so...
Undergraduateyycho0426 - Dec 30, 2012 / yuzec95 - Dec 30, 2012
UndergraduateDragooon - Dec 29, 2012 / sarthakjain - Dec 30, 2012
|I MOVE/ U Penn/ Ben Franklin essay.
4 - I actually think that is good to show all the activities rather than being specific to only one or...
Undergraduatechillyp - Dec 29, 2012 / rosieish - Dec 30, 2012
|I felt the inexplicable sense of achievement;Extracurricular Essay (Tutoring )
Undergraduateyycho0426 - Dec 29, 2012 / enigma33 - Dec 30, 2012
|Puke sky? Carnegie Mellon Supplementary Essay
11 - You did really well on every part except for explaining why Carnegie Mellon. As somebody else mentioned in the...
Undergraduatealicederp - Dec 29, 2012 / enigma33 - Dec 30, 2012
|Smiles and laughter; Boston College/ How I Will Bring Service to Others in my Future
3 - abenelazar has corrected most of your grammar errors, but one more: It is remarkable what a difference one'sperson's actions...
Undergraduatesjmzzz95 - Dec 29, 2012 / rosieish - Dec 30, 2012
|Unorthodox spin on common practices ; Stanford/ What matters and why?
Undergraduategarmeth06 - Dec 30, 2012 / icanfly1 - Dec 30, 2012
|Background's Influence on Types of Problems You Want Solved - Harvey Mudd Supp.
2 - Hi there, "Slowly approaching my high school career, I began to notice the strains of my tuition on...
Undergraduatemintsnapple - Dec 30, 2012 / alicederp - Dec 30, 2012
|My eyes were soon tagged on the economy : NYU/ Area of interest
Undergraduaterosieish - Dec 29, 2012 / rosieish - Dec 30, 2012
|What Falling Off A Horse Taught Me; Common App Extracurricular
2 - Hmmm. I really liked the imagery and you definitely showed instead of telling. However, I would add more achievements...
Undergraduatepaigeevaa - Dec 30, 2012 / mannam - Dec 30, 2012
|22nd of February 2012/ Most memorial day of your life?
Undergraduateprajol - Dec 30, 2012 / schoudhry - Dec 30, 2012
|Outside learning opportunities/ McCormick School; Northwestern Sup/ Uniquness?
2 - Northwestern stands out as a school I would like to attend because of the outside learning opportunities it offers,...
Undergraduatebah95 - Dec 28, 2012 / texo - Dec 30, 2012
|Waldo is the honest determination; U CHICAGO - "SO, WHERE IS WALDO, REALLY?"
5 - ok thank you!...
Undergraduatefquez95 - Dec 29, 2012 / fquez95 - Dec 30, 2012
|Difference between raw and cooked egg/ Stanford Intellectual Vitality
Undergraduatesunny_joy - Dec 29, 2012 / sunny_joy - Dec 30, 2012
|College of Arts and Sciences; UPenn Sup/ Engage academically
2 - I have my general direction, but need the direct experience for self-clarification. The countless research opportunities are seekedsought...
Undergraduatekoliva223 - Dec 30, 2012 / ding377 - Dec 30, 2012
|"Integrated Learning Major" ;Syracuse U Supp/ Who or what influenced applying?
Undergraduatekoliva223 - Dec 28, 2012 / koliva223 - Dec 30, 2012
|Daydreaming ; NYU Supplemental: What intrigues you?
3 - Very nice and descriptive. I see no real deficiencies except that one grammar error pointed out before. Best of...
Undergraduateayu0006 - Dec 29, 2012 / saubau95 - Dec 30, 2012
|Hailing from the most southern tip of Texas ; Why Yale?
8 - Yes, it is a cultural epicenter of connecticut, but the important part is that it is diverse in a...
Undergraduatemercedes1923 - Dec 8, 2012 / shmegg - Dec 29, 2012
|My Escape; Common App; Experience of failing
2 - Overall good mesage, but I get lost in the middle. Not a good enough transition. Try to make your...
Undergraduatekevinll - Dec 29, 2012 / hannahdowdy - Dec 29, 2012
|My grandmother attended high school/ COMMON APP
2 - Loved it. Here sre just some personal changes I would make. My grandmother attended high school. She did...
Undergraduatedreamer9 - Dec 29, 2012 / alexhoffy - Dec 29, 2012
|The undeniable tradition of widespread academic excellence ; Why Duke?
3 - In addition to Duke's elite academics, it is impossible to ignore the school's tradition of superior athletics. Although I...
Undergraduatesaubau95 - Dec 29, 2012 / ayu0006 - Dec 29, 2012
|Math/CS & Tumblr/ NYU supp - Why NYU?
Undergraduatexamanda - Dec 29, 2012 / nayelojello - Dec 29, 2012
|I can be a useful asset to you on the weekends; Stanford Room mate Essay
6 - I love it omg. This was creative, weird (in a good way of course) and welcoming. You elaborate on...
Undergraduategarmeth06 - Dec 29, 2012 / ayu0006 - Dec 29, 2012
|Indigenous Ghanaian people; University of Michigan Sup/ Community?
3 - This one is great. Your essay fully elaborates your unique identity and the community you from. I think this...
Undergraduatewolverineboy - Dec 28, 2012 / Bighall - Dec 29, 2012
|From a shy freshman to an extroverted & curious person; Significant Experience
3 - Also, you can also use a specific event that occurred on the bus that had significance to you and...
Undergraduateajuuyeee - Dec 29, 2012 / jokofatalis - Dec 29, 2012
|My teammates gave me rapid glances; Common App
1 - Hello! I would like somebody to proof-read my essay. I think it may need context, but I'm not sure...
UndergraduateGanonvsLink5 - Dec 29, 2012 / — -
|Non-finction books; Common App- Topic of your choice
4 - Thank you for the insight! I definitely don't want to sound like I'm applying to something I think makes...
Undergraduatefoejeeney - Dec 29, 2012 / foejeeney - Dec 29, 2012
|A melting pot of personalities; Stanford Letter to Roommate Supplement
UndergraduateEmiEvi - Dec 29, 2012 / alexhoffy - Dec 29, 2012
|Granddad; Common App: Significant person and influence essay
UndergraduateBlackWaltzIV - Dec 29, 2012 / Mein - Dec 29, 2012
|Changing Schools; Stanford Supplement - Intellectual vitality
4 - @garmeth Dude you helped me out a lot. I'm under 2000 characters and incorporated most of what you said....
Undergraduate503dannyk - Dec 29, 2012 / 503dannyk - Dec 29, 2012
|i'M HOMESCHOOLED; Common App Supplement: World you come from ?
4 - This is me updated version. The two sentences in the middle of the last paragraph are definitely a bit...
Undergraduatemylesd - Dec 29, 2012 / mylesd - Dec 29, 2012
|High Self-esteem; UNC Chapel Hill "DESCRIBE YOURSELF"
2 - I think your beginning seems a little self-praising... try to avoid this I also don't understand how the spanish...
Undergraduate7qda - Dec 29, 2012 / xxxbluefrogxxx - Dec 29, 2012
|Chame-Lion; Common App Personal Statement
4 - Tweaked Version: Chame-Lion The thing about chameleons is that they aren't leaders. They just aren't. No...
Undergraduatecofls12 - Dec 28, 2012 / cofls12 - Dec 29, 2012
|Zeal for biology ; NYU Supplement; Academic interests?
Undergraduatesillybandz - Dec 29, 2012 / xxxbluefrogxxx - Dec 29, 2012
|Yay, we are officially Stanford Cardinals! - Stanford Supp/ Roommate
10 - I liked the tidbit about Nigeria, I think you should elaborate more on your Nigerian upbringing and how it...
UndergraduateSmiley1 - Dec 26, 2012 / garmeth06 - Dec 29, 2012
|I have been persecuted all my life./ CommonApp - Confessions of a Carnivore
Undergraduatemattislhao - Dec 29, 2012 / mattislhao - Dec 29, 2012
|Me Vs My sister; Stanford Supp/ Intellectual vitality
7 - How did you go from precalculus as a Junior to somehow fitting in Calc I- III, Chaos Theory ,...
Undergraduatebriannalawson3 - Dec 20, 2012 / garmeth06 - Dec 29, 2012
|Soccer! - Comm. App - Elaborate an Extracurricular
2 - saying that it is a relaxing activity contradicts "it demands the most physically and mentally" not sure if it's...
Undergraduatethkid - Dec 29, 2012 / sjmzzz95 - Dec 29, 2012
|BOOKS!; ESSAY: Favorite word and why?
2 - Overall, I love this essay, as a fellow book-lover, it really shows your passion, and it's well-worded. Good job!...
Undergraduateschoudhry - Dec 29, 2012 / shiverrrrs - Dec 29, 2012
|Creativity is one of my personal traits ; MIT - Attribute - Proud
2 - Maybe you should say a little about how creativity is necessary to be able to come up with new...
UndergraduateMillin Gabani - Dec 29, 2012 / bonse - Dec 29, 2012
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