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|I love to learn new and explore new things; Cornell sup
6 - I see a huge improvement with the addition of the story of Krishna. There are still quite a few...
UndergraduateAna123 - Dec 25, 2012 / alicela - Dec 27, 2012
|Research opportunities and the campus nature; UW- Madison/ Why UW-Madison?
UndergraduateShoko0229 - Dec 27, 2012 / Shoko0229 - Dec 27, 2012
|Becoming a Chemical Engineer,my lifetime goal; University of Toronto/Why engineering?
1 - What has inspired you to pursue an engineering degree and why would you like to study at the University...
UndergraduateJasmine Yan - Dec 27, 2012 / — -
|Ecology and Evolutionary Biology; Cornell CALS App / Your interests
4 - ylimewc Hi I am an entomologist and promote you to study a biology science instead of the fossils. ...
Undergraduateylimewc - Dec 27, 2012 / aqeel - Dec 27, 2012
|What part of us speaks to one genre, one beat, one sound? ; NYU supp- What intrigues?
4 - I really like your essay, but I'm a bit confused as to what intrigues you...at first it's music, but...
Undergraduatemalaikaiyer - Dec 27, 2012 / valeriadavila01 - Dec 27, 2012
|"Birthday"/ Joy it brought to my childhood; What is your favorite word and why?
5 - Thank you so much everyone! I really appreciate it! Haha, yes I am a pretty festive and cheerfule person..and...
Undergraduatevaleriadavila01 - Dec 27, 2012 / valeriadavila01 - Dec 27, 2012
|Serving others ; Stanford / What matters to you?
2 - "He was disappointed" takes away from the imagery of the second statement with its passive voice. ...
Undergraduatejessc8 - Dec 27, 2012 / sogoldman - Dec 27, 2012
|Neuroscience/ Helpful & Empathetic; Johns Hopkins Supp ; Pursue what?/ You
4 - (1) You should rephrase this sentence. "Once my teacher spoke to me and said, '...'" "My teacher once said...
Undergraduatemgabir - Dec 26, 2012 / diebysenioritis - Dec 27, 2012
|I am a teacher; University of Michigan-Ann Arbor
2 - Overall a solid essay! You just need to fix the little details. The word "teach" is a bit overused....
Undergraduatetannerscooter - Dec 27, 2012 / joah5454 - Dec 27, 2012
|Football team/ Chemical Engineering; University of Michigan/ Unique qualities
4 - to me, it seems so generic. they ask what specifically about the school of engineering interests you. maybe talk...
Undergraduatetannerscooter - Dec 27, 2012 / rubybuddha - Dec 27, 2012
|"I am an Albanian" ; Stanford: Writing a note to future roommate!
8 - thank you very much. i really appreciate this :) i will try to add smth more about my country...
Undergraduaterroni12345 - Dec 27, 2012 / rroni12345 - Dec 27, 2012
|Prepare me for success/NYU SUP; Why NYU? What intrigues you?
1 - Tell us why you have chosen the above campus (using a maximum of 700 characters-spaces and punctuation included). ...
Undergraduatefinleyg - Dec 27, 2012 / — -
|I had grown onstage; Common app/Significant Event/Experience
2 - This is pretty good! This is obviously not something that every student would write about, as not everyone has...
Undergraduatejlford - Dec 27, 2012 / Chris1395 - Dec 27, 2012
|Potential Differences; LMU Supp/ Reality and recreating
3 - Ugh, I was worried about the semi-colons. I apologize for their misuse, it's just become a bad habit for...
UndergraduateDelention - Dec 26, 2012 / Delention - Dec 27, 2012
|Not a singular word - So where is Waldo, really? University of Chicago Extended Paper.
6 - Wow. this was really good! I like how you approached it from such a unique angle! And sometimes people...
UndergraduateChris1395 - Dec 26, 2012 / jlford - Dec 27, 2012
|Make a difference/ Kids/ Hospital; Stanford Supp: What matters/why?/ Volunteering
Undergraduatemoozikgurl95 - Dec 27, 2012 / Chris1395 - Dec 27, 2012
|My love for HG; "What excites you about architecture?" Supp
Undergraduatemylesd - Dec 27, 2012 / katev - Dec 27, 2012
|Biggest student volunteer groups; Emory Supplement_Why Emory?
2 - you make these sound connected, but they are not necessarily directly related spirit of giving and...
Undergraduatehaneom94 - Dec 27, 2012 / katev - Dec 27, 2012
|Computer Handbook ; Duke University Supp/ Why engineering?
2 - At the time, I didn't... Maybe don't mention monetary reasons. You certainly can, it just seems...
UndergraduateKdmBurrell95 - Dec 27, 2012 / katev - Dec 27, 2012
|Living 11 years as a competitive swimmer; Common app/ Extracurricular
3 - If your dad means listing ALL the extracurriculars you do, I disagree. Generally, people just focus in on one...
UndergraduateJessieph - Dec 27, 2012 / xamanda - Dec 27, 2012
|Singing and Dancing; Stanford Roommate Supplement
5 - Thank you so much! This was really, really helpful:) Sent off my Stanford application today, all I can do...
Undergraduategreenshoes02 - Dec 24, 2012 / greenshoes02 - Dec 27, 2012
|Prestige/ History/ Location/ Financial aid; UNIVERCITY OF CHICAGO/ Why?
4 - short and precise , good But like joah5454 said, what do you have that can benefit the college? a...
UndergraduateRosekareen - Dec 27, 2012 / kabal - Dec 27, 2012
|I had officially commissioned a merchandise graphic ; Common App
Undergraduatemhanna - Dec 26, 2012 / katev - Dec 27, 2012
|"Thailander" ; NYU sup/ What intrigues you?
3 - Thank you so much, I think I'm just going to discard this supplement. It was awkward and off topic....
Undergraduatemalaikaiyer - Dec 27, 2012 / malaikaiyer - Dec 27, 2012
|My personal statement for common app: Evaluating a significant experience /risk taken
2 - This is a really inspiring personal statement. It is well written and straight forward. Very Nice !!...
UndergraduateJhoanna22 - Dec 27, 2012 / lars - Dec 27, 2012
|I instantly fell in love with Columbia University: College Community" 1500 words
8 - This is a great answer to Columbia's question! I recently applied as well. I also wrote about some...
UndergraduateaLuckyStudent - Dec 16, 2012 / Chris1395 - Dec 27, 2012
|Neurosurgeon; Johns Hopkins Supp / What I intend to pursue
Undergraduatemorocco513 - Dec 27, 2012 / Hahahala - Dec 27, 2012
|Differences between American and Japanese culture; Yale Supp; More about me
2 - Your essay is great! Im not much of a grammar fanatic but it seems okay. To answer your worry...
UndergraduateTidal Wave - Dec 27, 2012 / qwerty_123 - Dec 27, 2012
|Wake Forest; God is not a loving God - argument for position you do not personally support
2 - The earthquake that hit Haiti is still affecting the people, who remain unable to function. Okay. You need...
Undergraduatehaneom94 - Dec 27, 2012 / sogoldman - Dec 27, 2012
|Humans at fault? / Cornell University Common App/Intrests &experiences on Major
Undergraduateqwerty_123 - Dec 27, 2012 / linting2012 - Dec 27, 2012
|Grandparents' house shaped my wild side; Stanford Supp_ What matters to me and why?
Undergraduateanaiscooler - Dec 26, 2012 / anaiscooler - Dec 27, 2012
|A Heartbeat Away/Liar Game /The Mentalist / Columbia Supp; short answers
4 - Anything you read in your class, like an story or like any passage from you text books would be...
UndergraduateHeavyMetal55 - Dec 23, 2012 / silly278 - Dec 27, 2012
|"We do not stay in one place": UPenn/All mankind is divided into three classes
Undergraduatenairbear68 - Dec 22, 2012 / meljendy - Dec 27, 2012
|She roared facts, defending her side; Stanford Supplement Intellectual Vitality!
Undergraduateanaiscooler - Dec 27, 2012 / anaiscooler - Dec 27, 2012
|Her name was Christel; Common APP-Person_significant influence
2 - One of my frequent days at Brookdale assistant living ended unexpectedly. Awkward, took me several readings to understand this...
UndergraduateKarla281995 - Dec 27, 2012 / alexzxz - Dec 27, 2012
|I like anime related things ; Leisure activity
3 - Do not write about or even include anything about yaoi,shoujo, bishies. It's really inappropriate for a college essay or...
Undergraduatesailorjupiter - Dec 26, 2012 / vallh6018 - Dec 27, 2012
|Diverse community/Financial benefits; BARNARD Supp; Influence by community/ HEOP Scol
2 - I reside in the diverse community of Brighton Beach where people know each other and greet each other daily...
Undergraduatekomalshaheen19 - Dec 27, 2012 / malaikaiyer - Dec 27, 2012
|I'm compassionate; UC Personal Statement for Common App
3 - I actually did the same thing, reusing my UC Personal Statement, but I just made a couple of tweaks...
Undergraduatelars - Dec 27, 2012 / cesaror123 - Dec 27, 2012
|Welcome a disable player as the captain; Columbia App; "ROYAL ROAD" & life experiences
3 - I think it's a good topic. It's easy to understand and I think it could reflect your growth as...
Undergraduatemirc_4 - Dec 27, 2012 / malaikaiyer - Dec 27, 2012
|Which is better:Studying in a Regular school or in an International School?
5 - Thank you very much "natangesh" ^^ Don't worry about your criticism. Your comment will make me a better on...
UndergraduateSalikron - Dec 26, 2012 / Salikron - Dec 27, 2012
|New York never sleeps; NYU Supp/ Why NYU
7 - i really like your description about new york :)..but i would prefer writing more about NYU itselft rather than...
Undergraduatecarolynxpark - Dec 24, 2012 / komalshaheen19 - Dec 27, 2012
|Writing/ Ambition,leadership&consideration/ Math; Short answers
3 - For the second one you mentioned the root of your ambition but you didn't really give definite examples of...
UndergraduateHahahala - Dec 26, 2012 / morocco513 - Dec 27, 2012
|Art for Little Hearts/ Common App on ECA
UndergraduateAssAche - Dec 27, 2012 / alexh983 - Dec 27, 2012
|I was a shy boy with no English knowledge; MIT short essay- Finding myself
Undergraduateluky0ne - Dec 27, 2012 / gdiazdeleon - Dec 27, 2012
|My childhood was filled with palying with dirt; Yale Supp; Say More about you
UndergraduateAna123 - Dec 26, 2012 / Ana123 - Dec 27, 2012
|Personal Statement- "the founding of a new university in Africa"
2 - Overall I thought it was a pretty good statement. Narrative is clear and easy to follow, and overall it...
Undergraduateatowns95 - Dec 26, 2012 / rocko - Dec 27, 2012
|One of my most favourite face; COMMON APP;the world I come from
4 - ......
Undergraduatemaazasher - Dec 27, 2012 / maazasher - Dec 27, 2012
|I'm an average suburban Caucasian girl; COMMON APP; DIVERSITY ESSAY.
2 - really good written, nice essay. It shows your passion and personality. But some parts are a little bit...
Undergraduatesam0503 - Dec 27, 2012 / serdarovez - Dec 27, 2012
|Admin Officer/ Neuroscience/ courses/ Sudan/Something you are Proud about/Brown Supp
Undergraduatemgabir - Dec 26, 2012 / mzontario - Dec 27, 2012
|"Determination"; Stanford Supp_ what matters to you and why ?
2 - I think forehead is supposed to be forward lol. Doing so is of such relevance is awkward maybe you...
UndergraduateMiaB - Dec 26, 2012 / nogbutor17 - Dec 27, 2012
|UC offers me the best of both worlds; UChicago Supp/ How UC satisfies you?
2 - The first essay seems like you're trying too hard to say what UChicago does and has, but you don't...
UndergraduateChris1395 - Dec 27, 2012 / haneom94 - Dec 27, 2012
|Competitive World; MIT essay _ Describe the world you come from
UndergraduateMiaB - Dec 26, 2012 / painglintun - Dec 27, 2012
|Majoring in Unafraid- Barnard Sup 2012
7 - Your revised version ig pretty good. I think ...' thretened to crumble my motivation and determination' is what you...
Undergraduatesunnybunny - Dec 25, 2012 / black and white - Dec 27, 2012
|Long boarding makes me happy : Tufts Supp/ "What makes you happy?"
5 - chillyp "What makes you happy?" There is something about the combination of a longboard and music that makes me...
Undergraduatechillyp - Dec 26, 2012 / bsabrine - Dec 27, 2012
|"Well, look at us"; Harvard Supplement_Letter to Roommate
2 - OK, here's what I would change. one of the most renowned schools in the world Don't get me wrong,...
Undergraduatehaneom94 - Dec 27, 2012 / fwan17 - Dec 27, 2012
|highest quality of education; U Chicago/ How UChicago satisfy you?
Undergraduateleed6893 - Dec 26, 2012 / haneom94 - Dec 27, 2012
|BU has diverse students body ; BU suppl_ why BU is a good fit ?
Undergraduateearth - Dec 26, 2012 / earth - Dec 27, 2012
|'The Secret' by Rhonda Byrne; Princeton - Quote
3 - Dear salikron , The secret works. You must watch the movie or read the book which one you prefer....
UndergraduateMillin Gabani - Dec 27, 2012 / Millin Gabani - Dec 27, 2012
|About Movie "Forrest Gump"; NYU Supplement What intrigues you?
7 - ĺ"ĺ"! è-è-ĺ› It's great to see other Taiwanese in here , Good luck with your application!...
Undergraduatekevinll - Dec 10, 2012 / hanksze - Dec 27, 2012
|I saw it as well.; PS;Princeton/Yale/Harvard Supp;Mountain climbing experience
3 - Thank you! I always feel there's something wrong here but I couldn't tell clearly, Thanx for pointing out! ...
UndergraduateJinyi - Dec 26, 2012 / Jinyi - Dec 27, 2012
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