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|I love chemistry; Cornell Supp - intended major
Undergraduatebatsarebats - Dec 30, 2012 / batsarebats - Dec 30, 2012
|"Summer Campus Days" ; Syracuse sup; Who or what influenced you?
Undergraduaterunnerb - Dec 28, 2012 / nayelojello - Dec 30, 2012
|Started reading quite early!/ Cornell App(Arts and Sciences) Evolution of Interests
2 - "such books was what I asked for"---> such books were what I asked for "may save villages ravaged...
UndergraduateDrachen - Dec 29, 2012 / LarryHoover - Dec 30, 2012
|Urban/Intimate/Diverse community/Excellent academic reputation ;BU- Good fit
UndergraduateKarla281995 - Dec 30, 2012 / icanfly1 - Dec 30, 2012
|Economics, international diplomacy & Language/ Engaging Academically @ Penn(Wharton)
Undergraduatemayfl0wer - Dec 30, 2012 / CMB19932015 - Dec 30, 2012
|Explore,Indulge, Learn; Boston U; "Why BU"
3 - I think you could make the hook a little stronger, make the reader really want to delve in. Other...
Undergraduatemalaikaiyer - Dec 26, 2012 / imbue - Dec 30, 2012
|I desire more diversity; Boston university sup: Why apply?
6 - I think you could make the first paragraph more concise and speak more about the things that you want...
Undergraduatetahanw13 - Dec 28, 2012 / imbue - Dec 30, 2012
|Educational and professional opportunities; NYU Essays~Why NYU and Academic Interests
5 - Hello Again! The second essay was too long, so I had to cut it down. (1493 characters--YAY!!!) Please let...
Undergraduatetess94 - Dec 30, 2012 / tess94 - Dec 30, 2012
|Ms Gearhart, my teacher; Person with significant influence
Undergraduatedieceased - Dec 30, 2012 / dieceased - Dec 30, 2012
|THEATER/ MOVIES; NYU /ACADEMIC INTEREST
4 - I feel as if these three sentences are somewhat awkward when read aloud. Maybe try and adjust the...
Undergraduatesalehrama10 - Dec 30, 2012 / yuzec95 - Dec 30, 2012
|Envl Club/Upgrade library/Not specific;UVirginia;Extracurricular/Project/Place
8 - When I saw this essay prompt, I was relieved but agitated at the same time. The answer came as...
UndergraduateAce1995 - Dec 29, 2012 / mayfl0wer - Dec 30, 2012
|Psychoanalysis/Pencil & Paper; NYU/ Academic interest?/ What intrigues you?
Undergraduatemargeparge - Dec 30, 2012 / yuzec95 - Dec 30, 2012
|Steve Prefontaine; Stanford Supp/ Future Roommate --
3 - i think you may have focused on running a bit too much here. admissions officers want to get to...
Undergraduateldkick - Dec 30, 2012 / mr_scottyt - Dec 30, 2012
|Life has taught me to be happy with few; Common App / Diversity
Undergraduatescrooge - Dec 30, 2012 / scrooge - Dec 30, 2012
|The multitude of resources ; NYU - WHY NYU & ACADEMIC AREAS?
6 - wow you've really done your research on the campus. THAT'S GREAT! One thing I would advise in the first...
Undergraduateten10zin - Dec 30, 2012 / salehrama10 - Dec 30, 2012
|Playing, listening, analyzing, and recording Drexel supplement - music industry major
Undergraduatetahanw13 - Dec 30, 2012 / tahanw13 - Dec 30, 2012
|I walked into an elderly community; Harvard
NEW - Can you edit this essay for grammar and substance. Be as brutal as possible! Thank you! "That woman...
Undergraduatemgabir - Dec 30, 2012 / — -
|"What they don't know won't hurt them"; Stanford Supp/ Intellectual Vitality
20 - I profoundly enjoyed this essay, and I think your admissions readers will too! I think all grammar points I...
Undergraduatefasaran - Dec 22, 2012 / kellyjanemartin - Dec 30, 2012
|I visited Tunis to meet my father ; Princeton/ Summer
3 - Glancing over the essence of your essay, from my honest opinion, you're answering the prompt correctly; personally, I believe...
Undergraduatechewbaccablack - Dec 30, 2012 / TranLePhu - Dec 30, 2012
|It is my dream/ Why Harvey Mudd ?
3 - may be describe , like "only where the unique perceptions of... can be accepted and appreciated. ...
Undergraduatejakk1994 - Dec 30, 2012 / silly278 - Dec 30, 2012
|I was rarely exposed to business. ; Common App / DECA
6 - texo All our hard work paid off were rewarded (I think "rewarded" is a better word)as we were...
Undergraduatetexo - Dec 30, 2012 / a608863a - Dec 30, 2012
|Life of Pi; Columbia Supplement/Meaningful Book:
Undergraduategayboose - Dec 29, 2012 / katev - Dec 30, 2012
|First profit/ City & residents/ Chiangmai people; Academic interests/ Why NYU?/ Intrigues?
3 - shadow_master as I already have India covere d - Explain why you have India "covered" or change the "covered"...
Undergraduateshadow_master - Dec 29, 2012 / hellom - Dec 30, 2012
|hard work and dedication/ UVA Sup - World you come from
9 - Thanks a lot for the feedback! Any other opinions/? Please be harsh and blunt in your feedback!...
Undergraduateeddiemaini - Dec 30, 2012 / eddiemaini - Dec 30, 2012
|I'm from a family that attends church every SundaUnitarianism Scripps/environment
2 - "In ninth grade I chose Janet, my most trusted adult figure in the church, to be my adviser "...
Undergraduatebzn456 - Dec 29, 2012 / jakk1994 - Dec 30, 2012
|A swift breeze greets me ; Stanford/What matters to you, and why?(
NEW - please be strict and point anything that seems put of place! english learner here. :) What matters to...
Undergraduatesilly278 - Dec 30, 2012 / — -
|Is literature the best way to overcome death? - Amherst Supplement (q.2)
Undergraduatefwan17 - Nov 27, 2012 / chewbaccablack - Dec 30, 2012
|The Band Room; Williams College' Reflect on the scene
UndergraduateBirdiee - Dec 26, 2012 / Birdiee - Dec 30, 2012
|arts-and-science focused, medium-sized, highly residential etc. /Why ROCHESTER?
3 - Thanks for the comment! I did have a feeling the bio sentence was abrupt and was meaning to fix...
Undergraduatexphyllisx - Dec 30, 2012 / xphyllisx - Dec 30, 2012
|Google/ "Hands Out, Eyes Open"; Barnard Supp/ First learn? "majored in unafraid"
6 - Hurston, an author who wrote some of my favorite books... Not sure how you want to phrase this,...
UndergraduateMinted95 - Dec 27, 2012 / katev - Dec 30, 2012
|Mohandas Karamchand Gandhi; Common App/ A historical figure
2 - The only glaring problem with this is the clichĂŠd nature of Mohandas Gandhi. If it's at all possible, you...
UndergraduateUdeeptc - Dec 30, 2012 / AmoebaMan - Dec 30, 2012
|Art is both a great enjoyment & a powerful catalyst of change; SAIC/ More about me
3 - I love your essay! One thing I would encourage you to change is perhaps to create a stronger 'hook'...
Undergraduatejokofatalis - Dec 29, 2012 / imbue - Dec 30, 2012
|Chicago essay: So where's Waldo really?!
UndergraduateRosekareen - Dec 29, 2012 / imbue - Dec 30, 2012
|Voluntary Teaching; Princeton University/Summer
4 - Thank you both for the feedback; your grammatical corrections really helped. :) I'm sorry for this useless post (I...
UndergraduateTranLePhu - Dec 30, 2012 / TranLePhu - Dec 30, 2012
|Columbia's vision of mobility and the Core Curriculum ; Columbia supp- Why?
5 - Thank you! :)...
Undergraduatekeroro - Dec 30, 2012 / keroro - Dec 30, 2012
|"We don't inherit the Earth from our Ancestors we borrow it from our children"; motivation
2 - "We don't inherit the Earth from our Ancestors; we borrow it from our children." Do you know what I...
UndergraduateRocio2395 - Dec 29, 2012 / texo - Dec 30, 2012
|My interest in computers ; Duke Sup-Engineering/ Why Duke?
UndergraduateDarkAlex12 - Dec 30, 2012 / sillybandz - Dec 30, 2012
|Thriving in a competitive marching band; Stanford - Intellectual Essay
6 - I have learned, through my marching band experience, that defeat is something to embrace. It is a wall that...
Undergraduategarmeth06 - Dec 29, 2012 / 503dannyk - Dec 30, 2012
|Visual art and in business/ The cicada ; NYU App/ Program? What intrigues you?
8 - I love how you started this essay. It's really well developed. You showed how ambitious you are but you...
Undergraduatesunny_joy - Dec 27, 2012 / salehrama10 - Dec 30, 2012
|I must attend the right university; Carnegie Mellon Supp
4 - Here's my final verson: In the first semester of my 10th grade year in high school, I had taken...
UndergraduateLUlb0rd - Dec 29, 2012 / LUlb0rd - Dec 30, 2012
|How France Made Me Change Schools/ Common App
7 - Does anyone have any suggestions of a word or phrase I could replace the "Honey I shrunk the kids"...
Undergraduatepaigeevaa - Dec 30, 2012 / paigeevaa - Dec 30, 2012
|I co-founded & run my Sixth Form's debating society/ Extracurricular Activity
3 - be challenged on the both the latest and oldest standing questions concerning international and domestic politics, law, culture and...
UndergraduateBlackWaltzIV - Dec 29, 2012 / mayfl0wer - Dec 30, 2012
|I find myself surrounded by "model students"; Common App
UndergraduateAmoebaMan - Dec 29, 2012 / mannam - Dec 30, 2012
|Program to turn pages of music book automatically; UVA/ Engineering Sup
Undergraduaterubybuddha - Dec 27, 2012 / tannerscooter - Dec 30, 2012
|"I'm an engineer" - CMU CommonApp supplement
NEW - I'm an engineer, I always have been, and I always will be. Science and math have always impressed and...
UndergraduateAmoebaMan - Dec 30, 2012 / — -
|Career in medicine; Duke Pratt School of Engineering Sup
3 - "I was instantly engrossed in the work, taken by the mixture of problem-solving and medical sciences." I think...
Undergraduatesillybandz - Dec 28, 2012 / alicederp - Dec 30, 2012
|A well rounded student ; Stanford Roommate Letter
5 - Get ready to defend your faith buddy. At a school like Stanford, odds are you won't be paired with...
Undergraduatemannam - Dec 28, 2012 / AmoebaMan - Dec 30, 2012
|It is a pleasure to put others before me; Stanford Essay / What Matters & why?
Undergraduatemannam - Dec 30, 2012 / mannam - Dec 30, 2012
|I wrote about an alien named Zork; Cornell supplement
Undergraduateshmegg - Dec 29, 2012 / omergoktug - Dec 30, 2012
|Self-revelation, Self-amendment: Meaningful-Cultural event
2 - The idea is nice, but the grammar is not quite right. The "something" in "something done out of tradition"...
UndergraduateBlackWaltzIV - Dec 29, 2012 / sogoldman - Dec 30, 2012
|Do not eat meat, dairy, or by-products ;University of Delaware - Truth or Dare Essay
Undergraduateacostandy - Dec 30, 2012 / sunny_joy - Dec 30, 2012
|Science of psychology; NYU- Academic Interests
2 - Psychology is a science. It literally means "the scientific study of the human mind and its functions." You...
UndergraduateFelicia1995 - Dec 29, 2012 / sogoldman - Dec 30, 2012
|Strong engineering program ; Carnegie Mellon Strong engineering program
Undergraduatesjmzzz95 - Dec 30, 2012 / painglintun - Dec 30, 2012
|"Challenge" ; UVA Sup/ favorite word and why?
Undergraduaterosieish - Dec 30, 2012 / rosieish - Dec 30, 2012
|"If you dont go after...."- Nora Robert's quote; Favorite Quote and Why ?
2 - Hi! Love your quote and can see the motivation behind every word. I would avoid stating "Everyone...
Undergraduatejhaly710 - Dec 30, 2012 / bng16210 - Dec 30, 2012
|"Silence," said the co-ordinator ; Common app- Challenge essay
Undergraduategundala1 - Dec 30, 2012 / alicela - Dec 30, 2012
|I love to laugh/ Curiosity; Stanford Supplment- Roommate/ What matter & why?
2 - no matter how different these people might be from me they can be pretty similar to me reword so...
Undergraduateaceq - Dec 30, 2012 / ding377 - Dec 30, 2012
|'What Tuned Me In' -Common App-Personal Essay
Undergraduategymnast9195 - Dec 30, 2012 / gymnast9195 - Dec 30, 2012
|Public speaking, INTEREST in Le High - Supplement Essay
NEW - 1. What unique aspect of Lehigh most interests you? (As a guideline, your response should be between 150-250 words.)...
Undergraduatepainglintun - Dec 30, 2012 / — -
|My favorite word "Excellence" - essay help
7 - Some ideas to help you write about it: -Use the definition of the word and tear it apart piece...
Undergraduatetonydengcnu - Dec 20, 2008 / gymnast9195 - Dec 30, 2012
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