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|Housework; MIT App /Pleasure Activity
Undergraduatelinting2012 - Dec 26, 2012 / dnx2000 - Dec 26, 2012
|"The Boy didn't know......." Princeton/ Quote that define you
Undergraduatesarthakjain - Dec 16, 2012 / dnx2000 - Dec 26, 2012
|The Apple Incident; Common app
5 - thank you rocky for the feedback but unfortunately im not using this essay anymore. it would be great if...
Undergraduatezdv - Dec 1, 2012 / zdv - Dec 26, 2012
|Remarkable success; The Impact of NBK Academic program
NEW - Pls Critique my essay. It is due today. MAX words: 400 Briefly describe how you have been impacted...
UndergraduateChigozie - Dec 26, 2012 / — -
|My friend Tim; Common App Essay Influence of a Friend
Undergraduatedragonmaster16 - Dec 25, 2012 / dragonmaster16 - Dec 26, 2012
|Nepalese Folk Stories; Lehigh supp/Values & Priorities
NEW - This is my supplement essay for lehigh, The prompt is below. I am exceeding word limit so if anyone...
Undergraduaterocky432 - Dec 26, 2012 / — -
|Basketball and me; Common App/Extracurricular activity
3 - Your essay is nice. But I think you shouldn't tell too much. You need to show. There are places...
Undergraduateabulkhair37 - Dec 25, 2012 / trangsix - Dec 26, 2012
|Watching Videos; MIT app; Pleasure activity
Undergraduateomeirx - Dec 25, 2012 / Anthony Robin - Dec 26, 2012
|The accident ; MIT Essay/Significant challenge
5 - The internet connection was a bit bad, delaying me from posting this post. I have made some revisions, so...
Undergraduatell931110 - Dec 26, 2012 / ll931110 - Dec 26, 2012
|Why did i cry ? ; Significant reality/What Matters Most
5 - although i could spiritually connect to this essay, it was hard for me to understand all the muslim words...
UndergraduateShamri - Dec 25, 2012 / zdv - Dec 26, 2012
|Cormac McCarthy /The Sunset Limited; Columbia supp/Books
3 - I don't know if the essay particularly fits with the prompt. The way I read the prompt is Columbia...
Undergraduatebigchau - Dec 26, 2012 / bigpapi - Dec 26, 2012
|Her hands move without voice; NYU Supp/ What intrigues you?
Undergraduatekomalshaheen19 - Dec 24, 2012 / tonton2college - Dec 26, 2012
|"Pre-implantation Genetic Diagnosis"; Stanford supplement- Intellectual vitality
5 - interesting post. What i have to say is that it takes a refreshing approach but the end seems underwhelming...
Undergraduatekarizma101 - Dec 24, 2012 / bigchau - Dec 26, 2012
|Ideological Divergence/Equitable Devlopment; Stanford sup/;Most significant challenge
UndergraduateMiaB - Dec 26, 2012 / thespoonguy - Dec 26, 2012
|Forensic science & Chineese ; Cornell Sup/ Intellectual interests
Undergraduatekoliva223 - Dec 25, 2012 / tonton2college - Dec 26, 2012
|'An experienced election officer' - Stanford Intellectual Vitality--Election
5 - I agree with the above commenter, add a little more arguments you had with Linda to make the essay...
Undergraduatebonbon11 - Nov 22, 2012 / nair - Dec 26, 2012
|Successful Advertiser; MIT ; Which department/ program at MIT appeal to you and Why?
11 - the edited version is MUCH better. You kept it short, simple and never put too many facts in it....
Undergraduatemaomao315040 - Dec 14, 2012 / nair - Dec 26, 2012
|Boom Boom. Boom Boom. / What intrigues you? NYU
7 - Actually, the commenter above me is very wrong. The heart does not need directions from the brain. In fact,...
Undergraduateyvpartieduc - Dec 15, 2012 / MNJ - Dec 26, 2012
|Long boarding makes me happy : Tufts Supp/ "What makes you happy?"
3 - For me i think i through your descriptions i understood quickly that it made you happy. but just in...
Undergraduatechillyp - Dec 26, 2012 / cavo8 - Dec 26, 2012
|"There is no higher religion than human service........"/Bowdoin Sup/ Common good
4 - hey, firstly i like the way your wrote it... just work on the grammar lil more other wise its...
Undergraduateserdarovez - Dec 23, 2012 / omeirx - Dec 26, 2012
|"Running towards the goal with Football at my feet; MIT supplement essay; Pleasure
3 - Thanks for the comment. I will drop the two exclamations. But they don't take up space as words right?...
UndergraduateTAMEN - Dec 25, 2012 / TAMEN - Dec 26, 2012
|'Christine's inner-strength, optimism, studies' - Who is someone you admire?
Undergraduateluying9682 - Nov 26, 2012 / luying9682 - Dec 26, 2012
|I was participating in the competition; STANFORD/ Significant Experience
Undergraduaterov8 - Dec 25, 2012 / teddyliu - Dec 26, 2012
|Exercising/MIT's EECS /Initiativeness/; MIT Short Responses
Undergraduate13579ben - Dec 25, 2012 / moon05 - Dec 26, 2012
|I am six foot tall; Height and U Chicago
Undergraduatediabatem - Dec 19, 2012 / hongyen2192 - Dec 26, 2012
|I like to sleep, but I love to stay up late; Babson Supplement: Letter to Roommate
3 - I was hoping for something a little more critical than that! Were there parts that didn't flow well to...
Undergraduatelulwut - Dec 23, 2012 / lulwut - Dec 26, 2012
|Essay writing/MIT App/most significant challenge
2 - it has lots of potential... tho the topics might be common, its catchy and interesting and filled with voice,...
Undergraduatearunesh - Dec 25, 2012 / college134nj - Dec 26, 2012
|I love to learn new and explore new things; Cornell sup
2 - Overall, the one thing that your essay would benefit most from would be showing instead of telling. The essay's...
UndergraduateAna123 - Dec 25, 2012 / alicela - Dec 25, 2012
|Personal Attention; Northwestern App/ Why Northwestern?
2 - taught my Professor Jeffrey Winters as my Asian heritage (should be by?) nice job! your reasons are specific...
Undergraduatechillyp - Dec 25, 2012 / bonbon11 - Dec 25, 2012
|Dream of becoming an Architect; Commonapp Architecture/ A RISK YOU HAVE TAKEN
Undergraduatehshsteven - Dec 25, 2012 / chillyp - Dec 25, 2012
|A Fear of the Deep End; Boston College Supp/ experience that affected perception
Undergraduategmichski - Dec 25, 2012 / lehrling12 - Dec 25, 2012
|Caters to various interests of students; Boston U/ Why BU is a good fit for you?
UndergraduateGreenEggsandSam - Dec 15, 2012 / sakin - Dec 25, 2012
|Web Development and machine Learning;Princeton supplement /Last two summers
Undergraduatesarthakjain - Dec 25, 2012 / sarthakjain - Dec 25, 2012
|'philosophy of science' - Stanford Intellectual vitality essay - mentoring
Undergraduatesarthakjain - Dec 24, 2012 / sarthakjain - Dec 25, 2012
|Research, innovation, and creativity; Harvard/Yale/Princeton;Generic why Engineering?
Undergraduatetissuetearer - Dec 15, 2012 / thespoonguy - Dec 25, 2012
|THE CAKE:Cornell Supplement: How have your interests influenced the major in CALS?
3 - hen Mother would declare how she found advertisements those days untrustworthy and that I was the exact kind of...
Undergraduatetonton2college - Dec 25, 2012 / dreamer8 - Dec 25, 2012
|Playing table tennis/ soccer: Activity for pleasure/ MIT question
4 - The essays is not showing enough of you and how an activity brings you pleasure. 100 words is not...
Undergraduatedauren_95 - Dec 14, 2012 / TAMEN - Dec 25, 2012
|My Personality; William and Mary Optional Essay
3 - I LOVE IT!! You were honest and true to self and it's perfect. It's an amazing response. Good luck!...
UndergraduateLaDiDa - Dec 25, 2012 / karizma101 - Dec 25, 2012
|I barely knew Alejandro; Common App, Significant event
4 - do you wanna mention when you guys met ? like which grade and stuff? i'm assuming its pretty young...
Undergraduatesjmzzz95 - Dec 22, 2012 / tonton2college - Dec 25, 2012
|Hipster; Yale supp/Additional essay
6 - In my opinion you did fine on writing on your changes, as most people by now know how individuals...
Undergraduateconstance7728 - Dec 24, 2012 / abulkhair37 - Dec 25, 2012
|Happiness matters to me; Stanford supplement
Undergraduatekarizma101 - Dec 25, 2012 / college134nj - Dec 25, 2012
|The name "Columbia" appeals to me the most; Columbia University- Sup/Most appealing?
3 - it's very interesting how the name is what you find most appealing, but I would want to know a...
Undergraduateksh940826 - Dec 25, 2012 / komalshaheen19 - Dec 25, 2012
|Alleviating the pain of others; Boston College/ Future endeavors?
4 - I really like this essay! I'm actually working on the same supplement myself. I just have a few suggestions:...
Undergraduateimbue - Dec 25, 2012 / xphyllisx - Dec 25, 2012
|Nothing comes easy ; Johns Hopkins/ Something about Me
Undergraduateimbue - Dec 25, 2012 / diabatem - Dec 25, 2012
|Leaving the Tribe; Common App/ Parting between two people
Undergraduateanonymous1 - Dec 23, 2012 / college134nj - Dec 25, 2012
|Love for animals; MIT short answer - most significant challenge
UndergraduateMiaB - Dec 25, 2012 / MiaB - Dec 25, 2012
|Why mount the Everest? Because it is there! Common Essay
2 - "are literally tiny confined in that tiny room" rephrase this part. "Lack of neither financially nor spiritually supports,...
UndergraduateChloemoon - Dec 24, 2012 / sakin - Dec 25, 2012
|Master's degree in Science; Common app/Academic interests
Undergraduatevidhi7 - Dec 25, 2012 / diabatem - Dec 25, 2012
|Excess supply of graduates in finance related fields; Texas A&M/ Significant issue
2 - It is a very touch essay. But I should encourage you to give more specific ideas about the life...
Undergraduatenguyensybach - Dec 24, 2012 / KYOAAA - Dec 25, 2012
|Speed/ Humane; Northwestern Supp;Unique qualities
Undergraduatesukhomoon - Dec 25, 2012 / sukhomoon - Dec 25, 2012
|Attend their engineering; Carnegie Mellon Supplement- Why I want to go to Carnegie
NEW - Please submit a one-page, single-spaced essay that explains why you have chosen Carnegie Mellon your particular major(s), department(s) or...
Undergraduatearguanoid - Dec 25, 2012 / — -
|Self Expression; Rice Main Essay- Influence and unique Perspective
3 - Thanks so much. I've been working on other essays in the meanwhile, but I was consdering rewriting the entire...
Undergraduatearguanoid - Dec 24, 2012 / arguanoid - Dec 25, 2012
|Huzzah! + Piano - Standford Supplements
5 - Thank you for your feedback. Can anyone please give me suggestions on how to improve the second essay?...
UndergraduateSilleth - Dec 25, 2012 / Silleth - Dec 25, 2012
|The ticking clock/ Personal Attribute
4 - It's a great essay! Your sentences go fluency. But you should tell more about your specific action, so the...
UndergraduateiGasph - Dec 25, 2012 / hongyen2192 - Dec 25, 2012
|EEC/ I crave for Computer & Math; MIT Short answer - which department/program & why?
UndergraduateMiaB - Dec 25, 2012 / 13579ben - Dec 25, 2012
|I made my first 125-miles trip to Munich. ; MIT App; Significant challenge
5 - The entire piece seems to be too choppy. Try varying your sentence structure and length so that it's fluid....
UndergraduateMyMichael - Dec 25, 2012 / 13579ben - Dec 25, 2012
|MY INTEREST ON STATISTICS-Cornell essay
13 - you got really nice advice and corrections above. I would def follow them. It was a good essay...
Undergraduateyisha - Dec 22, 2012 / karizma101 - Dec 25, 2012
|At a glance, I'm a quiet girl who smiles & giggles / Stanford supp; Roommate Letter
Undergraduatekarizma101 - Dec 23, 2012 / karizma101 - Dec 25, 2012
|Staying in the Light; Princeton Supp; favorite quotation from an essay
2 - Hey, I think it's a good essay. In his book Unwind, Neal Shusterman writes: "...One thing you learn...
UndergraduateAurora88 - Dec 24, 2012 / bi123 - Dec 25, 2012
|"First things first" ; Stanford Essay Supp-- The Fabled Letter to the Future Roomate
2 - you seem to use an excessive amount of parenthesis. Some of them are interesting with good information but I...
UndergraduateMicrono95 - Dec 25, 2012 / collegekid1567 - Dec 25, 2012
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