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|"There is no higher religion than human service........"/Bowdoin Sup/ Common good
4 - hey, firstly i like the way your wrote it... just work on the grammar lil more other wise its...
Undergraduateserdarovez - Dec 23, 2012 / omeirx - Dec 26, 2012
|"Running towards the goal with Football at my feet; MIT supplement essay; Pleasure
3 - Thanks for the comment. I will drop the two exclamations. But they don't take up space as words right?...
UndergraduateTAMEN - Dec 25, 2012 / TAMEN - Dec 26, 2012
|'Christine's inner-strength, optimism, studies' - Who is someone you admire?
Undergraduateluying9682 - Nov 26, 2012 / luying9682 - Dec 26, 2012
|I was participating in the competition; STANFORD/ Significant Experience
Undergraduaterov8 - Dec 25, 2012 / teddyliu - Dec 26, 2012
|Exercising/MIT's EECS /Initiativeness/; MIT Short Responses
Undergraduate13579ben - Dec 25, 2012 / moon05 - Dec 26, 2012
|I am six foot tall; Height and U Chicago
Undergraduatediabatem - Dec 19, 2012 / hongyen2192 - Dec 26, 2012
|I like to sleep, but I love to stay up late; Babson Supplement: Letter to Roommate
3 - I was hoping for something a little more critical than that! Were there parts that didn't flow well to...
Undergraduatelulwut - Dec 23, 2012 / lulwut - Dec 26, 2012
|Essay writing/MIT App/most significant challenge
2 - it has lots of potential... tho the topics might be common, its catchy and interesting and filled with voice,...
Undergraduatearunesh - Dec 25, 2012 / college134nj - Dec 26, 2012
|I love to learn new and explore new things; Cornell sup
2 - Overall, the one thing that your essay would benefit most from would be showing instead of telling. The essay's...
UndergraduateAna123 - Dec 25, 2012 / alicela - Dec 25, 2012
|Personal Attention; Northwestern App/ Why Northwestern?
2 - taught my Professor Jeffrey Winters as my Asian heritage (should be by?) nice job! your reasons are specific...
Undergraduatechillyp - Dec 25, 2012 / bonbon11 - Dec 25, 2012
|Dream of becoming an Architect; Commonapp Architecture/ A RISK YOU HAVE TAKEN
Undergraduatehshsteven - Dec 25, 2012 / chillyp - Dec 25, 2012
|A Fear of the Deep End; Boston College Supp/ experience that affected perception
Undergraduategmichski - Dec 25, 2012 / lehrling12 - Dec 25, 2012
|Caters to various interests of students; Boston U/ Why BU is a good fit for you?
UndergraduateGreenEggsandSam - Dec 15, 2012 / sakin - Dec 25, 2012
|Web Development and machine Learning;Princeton supplement /Last two summers
Undergraduatesarthakjain - Dec 25, 2012 / sarthakjain - Dec 25, 2012
|'philosophy of science' - Stanford Intellectual vitality essay - mentoring
Undergraduatesarthakjain - Dec 24, 2012 / sarthakjain - Dec 25, 2012
|Research, innovation, and creativity; Harvard/Yale/Princeton;Generic why Engineering?
Undergraduatetissuetearer - Dec 15, 2012 / thespoonguy - Dec 25, 2012
|THE CAKE:Cornell Supplement: How have your interests influenced the major in CALS?
3 - hen Mother would declare how she found advertisements those days untrustworthy and that I was the exact kind of...
Undergraduatetonton2college - Dec 25, 2012 / dreamer8 - Dec 25, 2012
|Playing table tennis/ soccer: Activity for pleasure/ MIT question
4 - The essays is not showing enough of you and how an activity brings you pleasure. 100 words is not...
Undergraduatedauren_95 - Dec 14, 2012 / TAMEN - Dec 25, 2012
|My Personality; William and Mary Optional Essay
3 - I LOVE IT!! You were honest and true to self and it's perfect. It's an amazing response. Good luck!...
UndergraduateLaDiDa - Dec 25, 2012 / karizma101 - Dec 25, 2012
|I barely knew Alejandro; Common App, Significant event
4 - do you wanna mention when you guys met ? like which grade and stuff? i'm assuming its pretty young...
Undergraduatesjmzzz95 - Dec 22, 2012 / tonton2college - Dec 25, 2012
|Hipster; Yale supp/Additional essay
6 - In my opinion you did fine on writing on your changes, as most people by now know how individuals...
Undergraduateconstance7728 - Dec 24, 2012 / abulkhair37 - Dec 25, 2012
|Happiness matters to me; Stanford supplement
Undergraduatekarizma101 - Dec 25, 2012 / college134nj - Dec 25, 2012
|The name "Columbia" appeals to me the most; Columbia University- Sup/Most appealing?
3 - it's very interesting how the name is what you find most appealing, but I would want to know a...
Undergraduateksh940826 - Dec 25, 2012 / komalshaheen19 - Dec 25, 2012
|Alleviating the pain of others; Boston College/ Future endeavors?
4 - I really like this essay! I'm actually working on the same supplement myself. I just have a few suggestions:...
Undergraduateimbue - Dec 25, 2012 / xphyllisx - Dec 25, 2012
|Nothing comes easy ; Johns Hopkins/ Something about Me
Undergraduateimbue - Dec 25, 2012 / diabatem - Dec 25, 2012
|Leaving the Tribe; Common App/ Parting between two people
Undergraduateanonymous1 - Dec 23, 2012 / college134nj - Dec 25, 2012
|Love for animals; MIT short answer - most significant challenge
UndergraduateMiaB - Dec 25, 2012 / MiaB - Dec 25, 2012
|Why mount the Everest? Because it is there! Common Essay
2 - "are literally tiny confined in that tiny room" rephrase this part. "Lack of neither financially nor spiritually supports,...
UndergraduateChloemoon - Dec 24, 2012 / sakin - Dec 25, 2012
|Master's degree in Science; Common app/Academic interests
Undergraduatevidhi7 - Dec 25, 2012 / diabatem - Dec 25, 2012
|Excess supply of graduates in finance related fields; Texas A&M/ Significant issue
2 - It is a very touch essay. But I should encourage you to give more specific ideas about the life...
Undergraduatenguyensybach - Dec 24, 2012 / KYOAAA - Dec 25, 2012
|Speed/ Humane; Northwestern Supp;Unique qualities
Undergraduatesukhomoon - Dec 25, 2012 / sukhomoon - Dec 25, 2012
|Attend their engineering; Carnegie Mellon Supplement- Why I want to go to Carnegie
NEW - Please submit a one-page, single-spaced essay that explains why you have chosen Carnegie Mellon your particular major(s), department(s) or...
Undergraduatearguanoid - Dec 25, 2012 / — -
|Self Expression; Rice Main Essay- Influence and unique Perspective
3 - Thanks so much. I've been working on other essays in the meanwhile, but I was consdering rewriting the entire...
Undergraduatearguanoid - Dec 24, 2012 / arguanoid - Dec 25, 2012
|Huzzah! + Piano - Standford Supplements
5 - Thank you for your feedback. Can anyone please give me suggestions on how to improve the second essay?...
UndergraduateSilleth - Dec 25, 2012 / Silleth - Dec 25, 2012
|The ticking clock/ Personal Attribute
4 - It's a great essay! Your sentences go fluency. But you should tell more about your specific action, so the...
UndergraduateiGasph - Dec 25, 2012 / hongyen2192 - Dec 25, 2012
|EEC/ I crave for Computer & Math; MIT Short answer - which department/program & why?
UndergraduateMiaB - Dec 25, 2012 / 13579ben - Dec 25, 2012
|I made my first 125-miles trip to Munich. ; MIT App; Significant challenge
5 - The entire piece seems to be too choppy. Try varying your sentence structure and length so that it's fluid....
UndergraduateMyMichael - Dec 25, 2012 / 13579ben - Dec 25, 2012
|MY INTEREST ON STATISTICS-Cornell essay
13 - you got really nice advice and corrections above. I would def follow them. It was a good essay...
Undergraduateyisha - Dec 22, 2012 / karizma101 - Dec 25, 2012
|At a glance, I'm a quiet girl who smiles & giggles / Stanford supp; Roommate Letter
Undergraduatekarizma101 - Dec 23, 2012 / karizma101 - Dec 25, 2012
|Staying in the Light; Princeton Supp; favorite quotation from an essay
2 - Hey, I think it's a good essay. In his book Unwind, Neal Shusterman writes: "...One thing you learn...
UndergraduateAurora88 - Dec 24, 2012 / bi123 - Dec 25, 2012
|"First things first" ; Stanford Essay Supp-- The Fabled Letter to the Future Roomate
2 - you seem to use an excessive amount of parenthesis. Some of them are interesting with good information but I...
UndergraduateMicrono95 - Dec 25, 2012 / collegekid1567 - Dec 25, 2012
|Tennis has been my santuary and refuge of stres;Common App / Extracurricular activity
4 - i love playing tennis and relate with everything you say. well written! how about 'embodies' instead of 'engenders', or...
Undergraduaterteggroll - Dec 21, 2012 / thespoonguy - Dec 25, 2012
|S&P downgrading U.S. credit; Stanford - Intellectual Vitality
3 - Thank you so much for your comment, I'm not a native English speaker so I always have grammar problems....
Undergraduatehwjwill - Dec 24, 2012 / hwjwill - Dec 25, 2012
|What attribute of your personality are you most proud of...? MIT Essay
3 - for me it's more like 'department' essay rather than 'personality' essay, especially the closing sentence. i suggest you to...
Undergraduatecaiolp - Dec 22, 2012 / hotaru1007 - Dec 25, 2012
|Young lady named Kelly; Stanford Common App
4 - Really nice essay. The idea as well as the storyline is creative. Indeed a standing out essay :P...
Undergraduatedreamer8 - Dec 24, 2012 / Nicholas Win - Dec 25, 2012
|"Sit still; MIT optional and common app essay
Undergraduatearunesh12 - Dec 23, 2012 / MyMichael - Dec 25, 2012
|"My Escape"; Common App; The Experience of failing and how I changed!
5 - yeah agree... the ending really hit! but about the content, i think it's hard to be read. My first...
Undergraduatekevinll - Dec 24, 2012 / hotaru1007 - Dec 25, 2012
|*Tap Tap* that's what I hear when I'm clattering away at my computer; College Ess
Undergraduateayu0006 - Dec 24, 2012 / br2pi5 - Dec 25, 2012
|"Son, I am proud to be your mom"; Purdue Common App/ Autobiography
Undergraduateshailendra redd - Dec 23, 2012 / shailendra redd - Dec 25, 2012
|I lived in 10 different houses in 7 different cities in four countries;Tufts Supp
Undergraduatebellem1 - Dec 15, 2012 / fishes - Dec 25, 2012
|It was psychology that bailed me out ;the choice of psychology UIUC
2 - Dear Simon0228, Your essay is very good! It answers the prompt well. At some places it deviates from the...
UndergraduateSimon0228 - Dec 23, 2012 / black and white - Dec 25, 2012
|Students Stress! Causes; Changing jobs; Studying; Working; Health problems
Undergraduatewana94 - Dec 24, 2012 / wana94 - Dec 25, 2012
|I love weather in Boston, diverse environment; Boston U Supp/ Why apply?
2 - Great essay! It's persuasive, but somehow the wording seems awkward. I have dreamed in silence for so long,...
Undergraduatesakin - Dec 25, 2012 / Chloemoon - Dec 25, 2012
|Green Hope Cross Country team; NCSSM : Extracurricular/Community Service/Volunteer
2 - Wow, your experience is really rich. It would be better if you focus on one specific event to detail....
UndergraduateSAChedal - Dec 21, 2012 / Chloemoon - Dec 25, 2012
|My Passion & Desire; Princeton - Why Engineering
NEW - If you are interested in pursuing a B.S.E. (Bachelor of Science in Engineering) degree, please write a 300-500 word...
UndergraduateMillin Gabani - Dec 25, 2012 / — -
|"Is that a deal?"; Columbia U; Personal experience
2 - You had a couple of run on sentences. My immigrant parents, true businessman at heart, finds themselves with...
UndergraduateaLuckyStudent - Dec 24, 2012 / mzontario - Dec 25, 2012
|Disabilities - UNC @ Chapel Hill - What problem am I trying to solve?
3 - Thank you so much! In terms of YNOT, there is no abbreviation. It is supposed to represent 'Y...
Undergraduatemzontario - Dec 24, 2012 / mzontario - Dec 25, 2012
|Magic behind seemingly simple objects ; Cornell: Engineering Idea
NEW - Hi, all. I've just started working on my Cornell essay. The deadlines are closing in and I have...
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|"My American step dad"; UVA/ Decribe the world you come from
2 - Through reading your essay, I know you was talking about your step dad and how he affected your life...
UndergraduateAngela336 - Dec 25, 2012 / hongyen2192 - Dec 25, 2012
|I had suffered from being a heavy girl : Common App/ Personal/local concern
Undergraduatewkxsp - Dec 19, 2012 / black and white - Dec 25, 2012
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