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|My favorite Korean bands; ''Kpop"/ What do you do in your freetime essay?
8 - it will better if you add or tell something like evidences or situations in yours daily life what the...
Undergraduatesuperjunior - Dec 24, 2012 / hongyen2192 - Dec 25, 2012
|Drawings and Photographs; Rochester App/ Why Rochester?
3 - I think at the beginning distinct is the wrong word, instead of something meang so defined choose a word...
Undergraduatemelonboy123 - Dec 24, 2012 / ann_marie - Dec 24, 2012
|Want to play college soccer in California, but living in Massachuse; Occidental Supp
Undergraduate94opm - Dec 24, 2012 / 94opm - Dec 24, 2012
|My grandpa's love for art & photograpy/ Princeton Supp - Person who influenced you?
5 - Thank you guys so much for your feedback! I will try to work in these revisions! =D Good luck...
Undergraduatecoollog - Dec 23, 2012 / coollog - Dec 24, 2012
|That night changed my perspective on myself; Common App/ Significant experience
3 - I agree with the previous poster! It's written nicely but the essay does nothing to spotlight your attributes to...
Undergraduatelcgmt - Dec 23, 2012 / sticknstones - Dec 24, 2012
|Trekking the Annapurna Circuit, Majestic mountains of Nepal; Common App
2 - Yet (,) I would not let that be a party-pooper to my sojourn in the Yeti-bewitched Himalayas. While I...
Undergraduatevipulupa - Dec 24, 2012 / sticknstones - Dec 24, 2012
|The girl who faced unexpected death; Common App/ Person of Significant Influence
2 - I think its good. The only criticism I have it that you develop your relationship with this woman a...
UndergraduateAmelieValerie - Dec 24, 2012 / sticknstones - Dec 24, 2012
|University of Rochester Supplement - Meliora Experience
Undergraduatecooleric - Dec 23, 2012 / mystictiger - Dec 24, 2012
|I am excited to expand my horizon ; George Washington University
2 - "Bleeding edge"- I was thinking maybe you can use a word more like cutting edge instead. "Whenever I spoke...
Undergraduatealecblumenfeld - Dec 23, 2012 / mystictiger - Dec 24, 2012
|New Rochelle Youth Council; Common app / Extracurricular Activity
2 - Here's some help with your word count' Helping others and giving back to my community always made...
Undergraduatemjaayp - Dec 24, 2012 / dumi - Dec 24, 2012
|Music is a big part of my life; Stanford supp- future roommate
Undergraduatednx2000 - Dec 24, 2012 / jonleenj - Dec 24, 2012
|My Dad had once been in prison; Texas AM / Impact Person
Undergraduatenguyensybach - Dec 23, 2012 / maomao315040 - Dec 24, 2012
|Chicken Farm & Family Business - Common App/ Significant Experience
5 - Thank you so much for all of your help! I really am truly grateful. Good luck with your college...
UndergraduateElizabeth_A2013 - Nov 28, 2012 / Elizabeth_A2013 - Dec 24, 2012
|Students can achieve their dreams; George Washington Supp
NEW - After visiting Washington D.C., and seeing the landmarks, learning about the history and the abundance of great culture, I...
Undergraduatemjaayp - Dec 24, 2012 / — -
|"He, who opens a school door, closes a prison";Stanford Sup/ What matters to you&
5 - First of all, thank you for helping with my stanford essay! Overall, it was a very powerful and...
UndergraduateKreator95 - Dec 23, 2012 / karizma101 - Dec 24, 2012
|"Never had technology much'' / Common App Activity Writing
Undergraduatefasaran - Dec 22, 2012 / fasaran - Dec 24, 2012
|Social Science Nerdiness ~ Why Northwestern? Essay
6 - Here's my revised version: What are the unique qualities of Northwestern - and of the specific undergraduate school...
Undergraduateblquandt - Dec 18, 2012 / blquandt - Dec 24, 2012
|Excellent academics/ Interests & aspirations/ collaboration; Carnegie App/ Why Carnegie?
2 - Ok, overall this is a great essay and answers the questions. Since you say you are above the limit...
Undergraduatejonleenj - Dec 24, 2012 / dnx2000 - Dec 24, 2012
|I portray the overly outgoing student; Western AEO/HBA Essay; Uniqueness
Undergraduatecefireo - Dec 24, 2012 / sukhomoon - Dec 24, 2012
|You will wake up with me; Letter to future Harvard rommate
Undergraduatekatev - Dec 24, 2012 / Hahahala - Dec 24, 2012
|Bio-inspiration - Stanford supplement/ what matters to you and why?
Undergraduatednx2000 - Dec 24, 2012 / fasaran - Dec 24, 2012
|Understanding why I do, what I do; Yale Supp
2 - I really like the message in this essay. In fact, i believe that most of us HAVE gone through...
UndergraduateRange Rover - Dec 24, 2012 / constance7728 - Dec 24, 2012
|Common App Extracurricular -- "Fantasy about Rock-band" 1000 Characters
3 - Thank you so much for your comment! Merry Christmas bro! :) ps. the red color is for CHRISTMAS?...
Undergraduatesukhomoon - Dec 24, 2012 / sukhomoon - Dec 24, 2012
|Composting/Weirdness/Running ~ Stanford Supplement Combo Pack
3 - Here's my revised version. Please give me feedback soon, I'm leaving for a family vacation tonight. Candidates respond...
Undergraduateblquandt - Dec 23, 2012 / blquandt - Dec 24, 2012
|Carnegie Mellon Supplement- Biology
2 - The answer is not too specific to prompt, a lot of stuff is repeated without any insight. try to...
UndergraduateAurora88 - Dec 24, 2012 / sarthakjain - Dec 24, 2012
|A glimpse into the future. Harvard supplement, letter to future roommate
2 - I personally like how informative you are in this essay. One thing I would change is maybe describe the...
Undergraduatekhld11 - Dec 24, 2012 / Tsprinkles - Dec 24, 2012
|Desire to pursue a career in medicine; Johns Hopkins/ Common App
6 - I really like the overall essay and idea, because not everyone has been able to experience the same experiences...
UndergraduateMHKHRY - Dec 19, 2012 / imbue - Dec 24, 2012
|"Love for biology and environment"; NYU Supplement, What is your academic interest?
6 - The overall structure is fine, but better be more specific about your real experience. Best of luck!...
Undergraduatehanksze - Dec 21, 2012 / kevinll - Dec 24, 2012
|My own happiness Vs Others' happiness; Stanford/What matters to you, and why?
3 - I find your essay interesting, as your idea is philosophical and deep. I also like how you want...
Undergraduategipytoiii - Dec 24, 2012 / sukhomoon - Dec 24, 2012
|Computer Specialist- TAMU/ how will this degree help you achieve those goals?
Undergraduatejangirashok - Dec 23, 2012 / PaulesZakhary - Dec 24, 2012
|Consciousness; U ND Supp/ Perspectives at Notre Dame
Undergraduatesukhomoon - Dec 11, 2012 / sukhomoon - Dec 24, 2012
|"thinking process" ; University of Virginia Supp; Favorite word and why?
2 - I thought this was rather uninteresting. It was rather predictable from the start in my opinion. Perhaps a more...
UndergraduateRickRoss - Dec 24, 2012 / Liebe - Dec 24, 2012
|My brother's influence on me; TEXAS App/ Person who impacted my life
Undergraduatevadalis - Dec 24, 2012 / jangirashok - Dec 24, 2012
|Foreign Cultures/Studying @ right college; Reasons and objectives for transferring
3 - Thank you...
Undergraduateazizalsu - Dec 24, 2012 / azizalsu - Dec 24, 2012
|Excitement of meeting my new brother;Significant influence/Pharmacy Schools/CommonApp
Undergraduateaveryk - Dec 15, 2012 / 0livegreen - Dec 24, 2012
|Since it looks like we'll be living together, we'll get to know a lot about each other! My roommate.
Undergraduateblondie51295 - Dec 23, 2012 / GirlNextDoor - Dec 23, 2012
|My Sandpaper Palms / COMMON APP - ELABORATE ON one activity
3 - Wow it is truly not a common activity or one that I've ever heard of, it's interesting. I think...
Undergraduatecavo8 - Dec 23, 2012 / Rosekareen - Dec 23, 2012
|The School of Rock & my passion for music ; COMMON APP
5 - katev thanks for the help. life is still pretty much the same as it was in middle school haha....
Undergraduatetahanw13 - Dec 23, 2012 / tahanw13 - Dec 23, 2012
|Neighborhood with migrant majority/ Bowdoin Supp/ Intellectual engagement/Common Good
Undergraduatemaomao315040 - Dec 23, 2012 / maomao315040 - Dec 23, 2012
|I wouldn't make my mom cry again / Johns Hopkins SUp/ something you couldn't tell us
4 - 1. Johns Hopkins offers 50 majors across the schools of Arts and Sciences and Engineering. On this application, we...
UndergraduateDDDDISSSSSCO - Dec 23, 2012 / DDDDISSSSSCO - Dec 23, 2012
|STEVE JOBS - Significant person form history; Common App Personal essay
4 - It's much better than your first draft! Great job! I'd be happy to review your essay again if you...
UndergraduateMillin Gabani - Dec 19, 2012 / katev - Dec 23, 2012
|"Lao village" ; Williams App / "looking out through the window"
8 - ylimewc thanks for your help! I am applying to cornell too. maybe I will see each other on campus...
Undergraduatemaomao315040 - Dec 21, 2012 / maomao315040 - Dec 23, 2012
|I wish people would take me seriously; Something went unnoticed
4 - Not bad. Definitely better than the first one. However, more still needs to be done. I have always...
UndergraduateL2u9 - Dec 16, 2012 / ead300 - Dec 23, 2012
|Dear future college buddy - Stanford essay
UndergraduateI like Cookies - Dec 23, 2012 / Silleth - Dec 23, 2012
|I have always loved the arts and sciences; How Duke attracts you?
9 - MHKHRY Its more like Are you a good fit for DUKE... Not what they asked you... You should describe...
UndergraduateMHKHRY - Dec 19, 2012 / jangirashok - Dec 23, 2012
|A stone, concrete pitch, spray-painted walls & Soccer; Common App/ topic of your choice
2 - the name doesn't really matter as much as you think it does, you really should not say that you...
Undergraduatekhld11 - Dec 23, 2012 / alecblumenfeld - Dec 23, 2012
|My life in the United States began with Rice University; Rice Supp-Why Rice?
2 - This is very nice. You use some vivid imagery, and the overall idea works well. However, there are definitely...
Undergraduatearguanoid - Dec 23, 2012 / sogoldman - Dec 23, 2012
|Certain words cannot clearly be defined; Common app essay on wisdom
Undergraduatediabatem - Dec 19, 2012 / sogoldman - Dec 23, 2012
|Hip Hop - Rice Supplemental Essay
Undergraduateadyalas - Dec 22, 2012 / ljy9152 - Dec 23, 2012
|I wanted to my own mark in the world; Common App
Undergraduatejanahill72 - Dec 22, 2012 / janahill72 - Dec 23, 2012
|Passion for building structures; University of Toronto Engineering App
2 - Hi :) You have written a very nice essay. Your final paragraph is very well done. I think that...
Undergraduatecjsmith - Dec 23, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Dec 23, 2012
|I chose to become a civil engineer / Carnegie Mellon University Supp
4 - This essay is separated into paragraphs, it's just because of the format of essayforum.com and that i was too...
Undergraduatedavidjaychoi - Dec 22, 2012 / davidjaychoi - Dec 23, 2012
|First day of school ; Topic of my choice-500 words
Undergraduatejadecal - Dec 21, 2012 / jadecal - Dec 23, 2012
|Dear future roommate- My day in a nutshell / Stanford
Undergraduateviraa - Dec 23, 2012 / nairbear68 - Dec 23, 2012
|"I hail from Iran"; Illinois Common App/ impact of upbringing and experiences
Undergraduateprogrammer - Dec 23, 2012 / dumi - Dec 23, 2012
|'The job I both hate and love' - COMMON APP SHORT ANSWER - EXTRACURRICULARS
2 - "Skills" in the second paragraph is used twice in a row. Switch one to, "lessons," or another synonym. ...
Undergraduateskier95 - Dec 23, 2012 / lulwut - Dec 23, 2012
|College of Arts and Sciences: What work of art music, science, mathematics prompt UVA
2 - Aside from the grammatical errors noted in the previous comments, there is also the subject matter. A lot of...
UndergraduateRickRoss - Dec 23, 2012 / fishes - Dec 23, 2012
|Passion for writing/ Conservative background/ ; UT Austin Part 1
3 - really good written, nice essay. It shows your passion and personality. But some parts are a little bit...
Undergraduatenair - Dec 20, 2012 / serdarovez - Dec 23, 2012
|BU Supplement/ BU's diversity and global programs
UndergraduateAriel421 - Dec 22, 2012 / serdarovez - Dec 23, 2012
|Living in a Different world/ RISD Common APP/ Visual art or design
Undergraduatelisbethmars - Dec 19, 2012 / viraa - Dec 23, 2012
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