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|Guitar player - Essay about an interest you have pursued outside academic classes
3 - Uyen, you should revise the essay to first explain what drew you to guitar classes and why you decided...
Undergraduateuyenphuong - Oct 29, 2017 / Holt - Oct 29, 2017
|Your Betterment Is a Choice - Texas A&M Admission Essay Topic B
2 - Michael, this is a very good personal statement that shows the development of your interest in Osteopathy which, I...
UndergraduateMichaelTAMU - Oct 26, 2017 / Holt - Oct 27, 2017
|Help with my Statement of Purpose - ApplyTexas Topic A/UT Austin/International Undergrad Transfer
7 - Someone please help me, I'm in desperate need since I need to submit my essay as soon as possible!...
Undergraduatemarcellosln - Oct 10, 2017 / marcellosln - Oct 26, 2017
|Helping me to pursue my dream in Canada
4 - your assay is okay, general, I mean it's quite not outstanding from other candidates. Here's my suggestion find a...
Undergraduateannie_truong - Oct 25, 2017 / Patistrying - Oct 26, 2017
|My Essay for College Admission: Atlas. (Tell me how it sounds, and of course where to improve)
3 - Marcus this is an interesting story. Do you mean to use this essay for the open topic prompt? You...
Undergraduatemaureleus - Oct 26, 2017 / Holt - Oct 26, 2017
|A Common App essay about my life, my challenges and what makes me unique...
4 - Katelin, you need to provide me with a copy of the complete prompt that you are responding to because...
Undergraduatekatelinhand - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 26, 2017
|Personal statement about the reason why I chose marketing -UK PS
UndergraduateYunqian Gan - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 26, 2017
|UW College Essay: Family History/Cultural History --> Education Goals
3 - Isaiah, your family's experience is indeed rich and engrossing to learn about. Yet, somehow, the essay feels like it...
Undergraduateizay1018 - Oct 23, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|Mother - the person whose persistence and selflessness shape my every move.
Undergraduatebibliophile - Oct 24, 2017 / bibliophile - Oct 24, 2017
|Congressional Nomination Essay: Why I want to attend a Service Academy
2 - Celina, I strongly suggest that you remove the reference to your experience as a 7 year old stepping onto...
UndergraduateUSAFAH - Oct 24, 2017 / Holt - Oct 24, 2017
|U Chicago Debate Essay - Rise of Anti Intellectualism
3 - Cole, if the issue at hand is the rise of anti-intellectualism, then do not open the essay with discussions...
Undergraduatecole20133 - Oct 24, 2017 / Holt - Oct 24, 2017
|College essay on moving from one place to another back to back and my experience with it
5 - Rishan, there is something highly familiar about this essay. I seem to recall having edited this exact essay about...
UndergraduateGoofshanQ - Aug 29, 2017 / Holt - Oct 24, 2017
|My Love For Technology: Common App Essay #1
4 - Daniel, in response to your question, no, the new prompt that you decided to use is not applicable because...
UndergraduateDood76 - Oct 22, 2017 / Holt - Oct 23, 2017
|A few extra revelations about myself - USC additional essay
3 - Hi Holt, Thank you for the constructive criticism. I was confused because I wanted to use this topic, but...
Undergraduatedubtsai - Oct 21, 2017 / dubtsai - Oct 23, 2017
|Im applying for AUC in Egypt, and I would appreciate it if you take the time and look at my essay.
UndergraduateLujainne - Oct 22, 2017 / Holt - Oct 23, 2017
|Cornell School of Hotel Administration Essay, How Does It Look So Far? Does It Answer The Question?
5 - Hello, " The ability to spend over 800 hours actually working in real-world situations ensures that I'll be...
Undergraduatemaureleus - Oct 21, 2017 / admission2012 - Oct 22, 2017
|State educational and career goals and the reason for choosing your major
UndergraduateAg301187 - Oct 15, 2017 / Dood76 - Oct 22, 2017
|"Struggle in my hopeful soccer"-briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities
2 - Marcus, this is not really an effective extra curricular activity to share. An effective extra curricular activity shows how...
Undergraduateduynguyen1808 - Oct 21, 2017 / Holt - Oct 21, 2017
|What you might add to the Mac community, academically and personally?
3 - Hi Maddy, thank you for being an active participant in this forum. If you don't mind, I would like...
Undergraduatemadiefarts123 - Oct 20, 2017 / Holt - Oct 21, 2017
|A chance to describe yourself, your readiness for college, your pursuits and achievements
5 - @Holt Hi, thank you for the response! I knew I wasn't answering the prompt in the right way, but...
Undergraduateceely372 - Oct 19, 2017 / ceely372 - Oct 20, 2017
|The developed countries should share their wealth with the poor nations
3 - Hi Lubr, I suggest you focus on " should the nations share their wealth by providing such things as...
UndergraduateLUBR2310 - Oct 17, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 17, 2017
|Transfer essay about discovering the pharmaceutical field as a career path - Common App Prompt
3 - Wynante, the essay doesn't require you to make a list of all your unfulfilled career plans. You just need...
Undergraduatebloomdalerx - Oct 16, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|I learned to stand up for myself and for others. A meaningful story essay
3 - Jay, you had a strong story, however, I feel you did not express it in the most effective manner....
Undergraduatejay01 - Oct 16, 2017 / Rahma155 - Oct 16, 2017
|University of Washington Coalition essay: "Tell a story from your life..."
3 - Zhu, a true character building event in your life needs to replace the story that you are telling here....
Undergraduateziyuzhu12 - Oct 15, 2017 / Holt - Oct 16, 2017
|Common App Essay About My Friend That Moved - event that sparked a new understanding of myself
Undergraduatevh404930 - Oct 15, 2017 / Holt - Oct 16, 2017
|Macalester is a community that includes people from many different backgrounds
3 - Maddy, your essay is creating a racial divide on paper. You are only looking at the small picture here...
Undergraduatemadiefarts123 - Oct 15, 2017 / Holt - Oct 16, 2017
|Talking about improving lives in rural India with technology. Want to know if it's any good.
4 - salam rachit, i have read your essay. actually i'm still learning on how to make good paragraph and also...
Undergraduaterachit - Oct 13, 2017 / Ummu - Oct 16, 2017
|This is University of Illinois at Urbana Champaign application essay.
3 - Abhishek, what is the word limitation on this essay? It is rushed, does not fully respond to the prompt,...
UndergraduateAbhishek123 - Oct 15, 2017 / Holt - Oct 15, 2017
|Mount Holyoke Prompt: Why Holyoke?
3 - Muskan, when you say that the college has excelled in sciences, you must indicate some of the achievements in...
Undergraduatemuskanshrestha - Oct 14, 2017 / Holt - Oct 15, 2017
|Creating something on my own - My College Essay (common app #6)
3 - Hi Jay, Truth be told, your opening statement isn't strong enough to capture the attention of the reader. Neither...
Undergraduatejrd519 - Oct 14, 2017 / Holt - Oct 15, 2017
|Common App Essay #1--- How history influences me
UndergraduatePatzzzzzzz - Oct 10, 2017 / Patzzzzzzz - Oct 13, 2017
|The only true option is to push forward, to persevere - common app essay
3 - Hi Justin, this is a very well developed essay. It has a timeline that allows the reviewer to get...
Undergraduatejfawls28 - Oct 12, 2017 / Holt - Oct 13, 2017
|My diverse upbringing; culture is the most valueable asset - Apply Texas
4 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback, I am seriously considering switching the essay to Topic B for Apply Texas...
Undergraduatecollegegoer - Oct 12, 2017 / collegegoer - Oct 12, 2017
|Essay that Discusses My Personal Story
6 - @theunnamedyoutub While I do somewhat agree with the other post in that it should be more about yourself...
Undergraduatetheunnamedyoutub - Oct 11, 2017 / benh44 - Oct 12, 2017
|USING LAW TO CHANGE THE WORLD - UCAS SOP
2 - Rishbha , a statement of purpose is not complete when it does not provide an overview of your foundation...
Undergraduatexigogondakiii - Oct 11, 2017 / Holt - Oct 11, 2017
|'I had to stand strong, Independent and be my own self' - UGRAD statement essay
Undergraduatehadilakk - Oct 10, 2017 / hadilakk - Oct 11, 2017
|Equality in sport, topic of importance essay.
3 - Chinenye, here is the thing, your title indicates that you are compassionate about having equal rights for all people....
UndergraduateChichi9 - Oct 10, 2017 / Holt - Oct 11, 2017
|Give a brief description of your professional background and current work
3 - Taliat, you need to present your information in a chronological manner that will better help the reader to understand...
UndergraduateTaskat - Oct 10, 2017 / Holt - Oct 10, 2017
|Common App Essay Prompt #2 - My first Judo tournament and overcoming failure
2 - Josh, the essay had a very strong start. It was engaging and imaginative. It gave me an idea of...
UndergraduateJMiranda00 - Oct 10, 2017 / Holt - Oct 10, 2017
|Something that sparked a period of personal growth and a new understanding of yourself or others.
4 - Maida, your essay is good but confusing because it focuses on 2 different topics within one essay. Rather than...
Undergraduatemadiefarts123 - Oct 9, 2017 / Holt - Oct 10, 2017
|My path. I am applying for UGRAD, someone review my statement.
Undergraduatehadilakk - Sep 24, 2017 / hadilakk - Oct 9, 2017
|How Teamwork Changed My Life (Common App Prompt 1)
5 - @md1234 I think it is a great essay. i really like the topic selection and your way of writing....
Undergraduatemd1234 - Oct 8, 2017 / madiefarts123 - Oct 9, 2017
|How would you engage the mission of Trinity College during your years on campus? Essay Prompt.
Undergraduatemuskanshrestha - Oct 7, 2017 / muskanshrestha - Oct 9, 2017
|UGA admissions essay: Tell an extraordinnare story which you didn't mentioned in your application
3 - Madison, don't use a third grade reference to respond to this essay. That is such a childish undertaking that,...
UndergraduateMaddyDuv - Oct 8, 2017 / Holt - Oct 9, 2017
|Writing about significant challenge in life or something important that didn't go according to plan.
3 - Sardor, this prompt is one that seeks to learn your ability to deal with stressful situations. The story you...
Undergraduatemadeinheaven - Oct 8, 2017 / Holt - Oct 9, 2017
|The quiet time. What is important to you and why essay
5 - @Chichi9 Religion is a really sensitive topic. The reviewer could even be of a different religion. I suggest...
UndergraduateChichi9 - Oct 5, 2017 / Lauretta - Oct 8, 2017
|'If you feel it so you can do it' - background/story essay
6 - Hi Johana, you can definitely stick with math for the topic. But you would need to develop characters and...
UndergraduateJohana - Oct 7, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 8, 2017
|To Complete a Masterpiece (CommonApp Essay)
5 - Hello! Your essay was a great read, but I think it would better suit on these prompts: Some students...
Undergraduatefairaque - Sep 27, 2017 / muskanshrestha - Oct 7, 2017
|Obstacles turned around - should I write about this topic or is it TMI
3 - @Holt I appreciate the feedback. I am trying to use this essay for both common app and coalition app,...
Undergraduateteufs - Oct 7, 2017 / teufs - Oct 7, 2017
|MasterCard foundation. Topic of importance essay.
3 - Chinenye, this is truly a subject of importance to you. However, the message that is delivered does not tell...
UndergraduateChichi9 - Oct 5, 2017 / Holt - Oct 5, 2017
|Essay on Significant experience or situation that changed my belief or thinking and why.
2 - Chinenye, this is a good draft that has room for improvement and additional information. Before I launch into that...
UndergraduateChichi9 - Oct 4, 2017 / Holt - Oct 5, 2017
|Ideal candidate for FIT? Fashion Institute of Technology Admissions Essay - Fashion Design
4 - @Holt Thank you very much, I will redraft my essay based on your notes, I mentioned guiding and Latin...
Undergraduateemmarose11 - Oct 4, 2017 / emmarose11 - Oct 4, 2017
|NYU TISCH- Describe an event in your life and how it changed you or someone close to you
4 - Lia, this is nothing more than a creative writing exercise on your part. It does not appropriately address any...
Undergraduatesun24 - Oct 3, 2017 / Holt - Oct 4, 2017
|Write on a topic that is of importance to you and reflects who you are. Maximum 500 words
3 - Please make this thread Urgent for a subsequent reply, thank you! Please I don't really understand your response. How...
UndergraduateBetsyy - Oct 1, 2017 / Betsyy - Oct 3, 2017
|How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you?
2 - Elizabeth, you missed out on the description of how your community might describe you in the essay. You can...
UndergraduateBetsyy - Oct 3, 2017 / Holt - Oct 3, 2017
|I am attracted by the faculty and Co-op program, fascinated by the school spirit in Georgia Tech
2 - Zhenghang, I am not sure what you mean by "high cost performance". Do you mean you want to attend...
UndergraduateHu Zhenghang - Oct 3, 2017 / Holt - Oct 3, 2017
|"Counting My Steps" - OCD Personal Narrative for a Formal Essay assignment
3 - Nicholas, when you type words written in a foreign language you must always include the English translation in a...
Undergraduatendushaj01 - Oct 2, 2017 / Holt - Oct 3, 2017
|My goal is to continue to volunteer with JAAC. US - Jamaican connection
2 - Logan, how I wish that you had given me some inkling as to what this personal statement is all...
UndergraduateAndrew3000 - Oct 1, 2017 / Holt - Oct 2, 2017
|Having access to the modern methods and advanced technology of producing agriculture in Australia
Undergraduatekhanhnguyen - Sep 30, 2017 / khanhnguyen - Sep 30, 2017
|Academic English - cannot enjoy writing anymore
4 - Adriana, remember that all sentences need to meet the subject-verb agreement requirement, your sentence that says, we can our...
Undergraduateadriana victoria - Sep 29, 2017 / Holt - Sep 30, 2017
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