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|Breaking political apathy (princeton supplement)
3 - This problems does not have simple a solution. ..., look at their qualifications,and their stances on topics. ...
Undergraduateastrum72 - Dec 27, 2016 / potatohead - Dec 29, 2016
|The value of teamwork and math and sciences. Unites States Naval Academy admissions essay
UndergraduatexMoon Hydro - Dec 28, 2016 / xMoon Hydro - Dec 29, 2016
|Deep Roots (College Essay)
3 - @mualla I really appreciate your feedback. This is a Common App prompt. I am just confused at why...
Undergraduateclair_L - Dec 28, 2016 / clair_L - Dec 29, 2016
|"My heart is in the work". Carnegie Mellon's mission and morals reflect my own.
UndergraduateShraf39 - Dec 28, 2016 / Shraf39 - Dec 29, 2016
|Yale supplementary essay: Sociology and Library
2 - @wendyli328 I'd like to suggest something to your first essay, it is really good and pleasant to read, you...
Undergraduatewendyli328 - Dec 29, 2016 / rnsnz18 - Dec 29, 2016
|Duke, Why Trinity? : Program II, availability of choices
5 - @sd6599 No don't restructure your essay, the strenght of your essays is about the deep interest you have on...
Undergraduatesd6599 - Dec 27, 2016 / rnsnz18 - Dec 29, 2016
|Sitting on the backseat of the car - Harvard Supplement.
3 - @khatanbuuveibold By the virtue of being a teacher's child, for the last 11 years, I have gone to...
Undergraduatekhatanbuuveibold - Dec 25, 2016 / scgoalie00 - Dec 29, 2016
|Alumnae interactions and exceptional faculty- Wellesley supplement
Undergraduatepotatohead - Dec 28, 2016 / astrum72 - Dec 28, 2016
|After the It Girls Overnight Retreat, I knew Syracuse was the place for me- WHY SYRACUSE?
4 - @Shraf39 So do you want me to put quotations around "It Girls Overnight Retreat"? I am a bit confused...
UndergraduateTajonae13 - Dec 27, 2016 / Tajonae13 - Dec 28, 2016
|Why specific Area and Yale? - Yale Short Answer
2 - First, I would like to congratulate you for being specific. However, I feel that you can focus the two...
Undergraduatekhizirsiddiqui - Dec 28, 2016 / TheIndoBoy25 - Dec 28, 2016
|My Motivation for applying to Lafayette College
UndergraduateOsiremiza99 - Dec 28, 2016 / Osiremiza99 - Dec 28, 2016
|We challenge our students to 'be comfortable being uncomfortable'. Georgia Tech Supplement Essay
4 - 'I want to quit!' I thought after a long day's work in the restaurant. 'I am so exhausted and...
UndergraduateCrystor - Dec 27, 2016 / Crystor - Dec 28, 2016
|As an American Muslim, I love immersing myself into conversations.
5 - Mualla, if there is nothing else that you want to add to the information in your statement then, I...
Undergraduatemualla - Dec 24, 2016 / Holt - Dec 28, 2016
|Cornell Engineering Essay - for the Artificially Intelligent
5 - Yes, this definitely speaks to your interests on a better scale than the first version. Consider that you have...
UndergraduateYomanAwe - Dec 26, 2016 / Holt - Dec 28, 2016
|The one particular friend. College Essay for Virginia Tech.
3 - Ryan, your essay deviated in focus from the prompt towards the end. The discussion is about you and a...
Undergraduatemeinhouston - Dec 28, 2016 / Holt - Dec 28, 2016
|CHESS. Tons and tons of losses helped me to understand the simple, yet elusive, essence of a game.
Undergraduatebmb_orgil - Dec 28, 2016 / l3atjin - Dec 28, 2016
|Cornell engineering essay - my contributions to the engineering field
4 - Yes, I really believe that only some slight adjustments and developments are necessary to make the essay more interesting...
Undergraduaternsnz18 - Dec 27, 2016 / Holt - Dec 28, 2016
|Tech's motto is Progress and Service. What is your role in your family? Max 150
4 - Zhao, if you want to still use the original essay, you can call yourself the "tie that binds the...
UndergraduateCrystor - Dec 27, 2016 / Holt - Dec 28, 2016
|Beyond rankings, location, athletics, why Georgia Tech? Why Gatech?
8 - Benny, please consider removing the reference to the Japanese club. From the way I read the essay now, the...
UndergraduateBennyoooo - Dec 23, 2016 / Holt - Dec 28, 2016
|"Buy nine more, get one free!" Common App - Identity Essay (Boba drinks Story)
2 - @MasterPhantom This is an excellent essay and I really like it. However, I feel your essay is too wordy,...
UndergraduateMasterPhantom - Dec 28, 2016 / Osiremiza99 - Dec 28, 2016
|Why Duke? To be part of the next generation of global leaders and technological innovators
UndergraduateOsiremiza99 - Dec 27, 2016 / Osiremiza99 - Dec 28, 2016
|My future still remains as foggy as it has been before - Common app
3 - @Buyanbatbunga First of all, I think you should consider adding more flow or transition between your sentences.Second of all,...
UndergraduateBuyanbatbunga - Dec 28, 2016 / bmb_orgil - Dec 28, 2016
|Learning Spanish through another lens - a cultural immersion (Dartmouth Supplement)
4 - I was thinking somewhere after the 2nd sentence in the first paragraph. Maybe say something about how you were...
Undergraduatekc1099 - Dec 27, 2016 / astrum72 - Dec 28, 2016
|Satisfaction in the old lady's face. Essay on a person who has influenced you in a significant way
3 - @angeli6778 Thank you so much for your review! I am applying to Princeton undecided. So, I did not include...
UndergraduateShriZohn - Dec 28, 2016 / ShriZohn - Dec 28, 2016
|Being a music software producer is my goal and I hope that GT will help me fulfill it
UndergraduateCrystor - Dec 26, 2016 / TJLuschen - Dec 28, 2016
|Barnard - majored in unafraid - The only girl in Computer Science
Undergraduatemualla - Dec 26, 2016 / mualla - Dec 28, 2016
|Many "how" or "why" monumental questions in my mind. University of Pennsylvania essay
3 - @scgoalie00 I really think you could paraphrase the first paragraph to be more read-able (Maybe omit the parantheses when...
Undergraduatescgoalie00 - Dec 28, 2016 / khatanbuuveibold - Dec 28, 2016
|From Calculus 12 to literature interpretation; my mind was always wide awake in English class.
4 - @speechhopeful I was also wondering about whether or not to mention the math part. I was trying to...
Undergraduatedigestadonut - Dec 27, 2016 / digestadonut - Dec 28, 2016
|"How did you do that?", 'I love mathematics' - MIT first two short essays
4 - @Crystor I really appreciate your grammar corrections, english it's not my native language so I can have mistakes sometimes,...
Undergraduaternsnz18 - Dec 27, 2016 / rnsnz18 - Dec 27, 2016
|Doing School by Denise Pope--Students are caught up in a "grade trap"
5 - @Holt Hi Holt, what do you think about this version: What is your favorite fiction or non-fiction...
Undergraduatemualla - Dec 27, 2016 / mualla - Dec 27, 2016
|Exposed to counting. How the quest for a shooting star shaped my life.
10 - Hi Karekezi. Don't worry about the late reply. I didn't forget about your essay because I had the thread...
UndergraduateaHappyGuy - Dec 22, 2016 / Holt - Dec 27, 2016
|WHY US? - the unimaginable bewilderment after an scary accident
Undergraduatevinhnguyen0718 - Dec 27, 2016 / linhledieue - Dec 27, 2016
|AIRPLANES AND I - Common Application Prompt 5
7 - @Holt I really appreciate your help. It just means so much to me. I've been worried whether to post...
Undergraduatevinhnguyen0718 - Dec 25, 2016 / vinhnguyen0718 - Dec 27, 2016
|"With great power, comes great responsibility" - essay for college
6 - @shuprova Your introduction is too long that it takes a considerable amount of space you can add to detail...
Undergraduateshuprova - Dec 23, 2016 / vinhnguyen0718 - Dec 27, 2016
|My country, Georgia, needs to escape beyond its borders
2 - Mariam, instead of telling the reviewer how you learned to speak English, which is really of no importance to...
Undergraduatenozika97 - Dec 27, 2016 / Holt - Dec 27, 2016
|To save money. Writing on the explanation of a gap year in commonapp's additional info section.
13 - @Holt Yes! thank you so much. I don't know what to say. But you really helped. Millions of thanks!...
UndergraduateNuverte0452 - Dec 27, 2016 / Nuverte0452 - Dec 27, 2016
|My playground was a jumble of old circuit board, electric wires and many electronic components
4 - Vedanth, I reviewed your essay once again and tried to do a little editing of my own in order...
Undergraduatekatety909 - Dec 27, 2016 / Holt - Dec 27, 2016
|What makes you happy? My parents' happiness! - Tufts Supplement
Undergraduateharryson - Dec 27, 2016 / harryson - Dec 27, 2016
|The vast array of research opportunities and many other things that makes Hamilton special for me
6 - Abdullah, the response that you wrote does not fit the prompt. What you have developed is more of a...
Undergraduateabdulahok - Dec 27, 2016 / Holt - Dec 27, 2016
|How have your extra-curricular activities contributed to your personal development?
5 - Sun, the CV is the overview of all your credentials for consideration as a student. The essay is the...
Undergraduatesunjiayun - Dec 27, 2016 / Holt - Dec 27, 2016
|The Emotion Revolution - "Why Yale?" Supplement Essay.
5 - Muhammad, you have chosen to discuss some pretty specific and unique reasons for opting to seek admission to Yale...
UndergraduateMIT_iA - Dec 26, 2016 / Holt - Dec 27, 2016
|Teaching, Research, Service -- Lehigh and me
8 - Mualla, if i may make a suggestion. You can actually cut the current word count if you will sacrifice...
Undergraduatemualla - Dec 25, 2016 / Holt - Dec 27, 2016
|Through soccer I comprehended the significance of 'team-work'
2 - @nandasharma The grammar seems pretty good; you put in semi colons and em dashes, my lit teacher would be...
Undergraduatenandasharma - Dec 26, 2016 / LoneLee - Dec 26, 2016
|'There is no point in going to college.' Why UChicago - Purpose of education
5 - Angela, the essay is too wordy, deviates from the prompt because you want to discuss points of quotation instead...
Undergraduateangeli6778 - Dec 26, 2016 / Holt - Dec 26, 2016
|I'd be able to take my knowledge into practice in the real industry; Georgia Tech application
UndergraduateShraf39 - Dec 26, 2016 / Shraf39 - Dec 26, 2016
|AI and robotics. Common App Transfer Essay- There isn't any research related to my areas of interest
4 - Hareesh, you don't need to over complicate the essay by telling that anecdote at the start. Just get to...
UndergraduateAnon0 - Dec 25, 2016 / Holt - Dec 26, 2016
|Never gonna give you up - Cal Tech supplement
2 - Hahaha! Andy, this is one heck of a way to spend your free time. Rickrolling is certainly going to...
UndergraduateLoneLee - Dec 26, 2016 / Holt - Dec 26, 2016
|Reciting a poem backwards. Lehigh. You've just reached your one million hit on your youtube video.
7 - Alex, when you discuss this talent of yours, it is important that the reader understand the kind of audience...
Undergraduatealexgzm - Dec 25, 2016 / Holt - Dec 26, 2016
|She knows what it feels like to be strong in STEM as a female. Barnard
5 - Mualla, at this point, you should make reference to how Katherine Johnson broke the glass ceiling by outperforming men...
Undergraduatemualla - Dec 26, 2016 / Holt - Dec 26, 2016
|Common Application for both The Georgia Institution of Technology & the University of San Francisco
2 - Shawn, is the interest that you are sharing in this essay still related to your choice of college major?...
UndergraduateThe_iKick - Dec 26, 2016 / Holt - Dec 26, 2016
|M-U-A-L-L-A If my name were an acronym...
3 - Mualla, this is great acronym. However, you should not be using one letter to specific 2 traits as you...
Undergraduatemualla - Dec 26, 2016 / Holt - Dec 26, 2016
|College Essay about a story of me getting lost at Salzburg
4 - Hi, I think this modification is an improvement as it sort of ties the essay together better. Here are...
Undergraduatesweetsenior - Dec 26, 2016 / TJLuschen - Dec 26, 2016
|UVA essay- 250 word limit- a small engineering project to help a friend or family member.
3 - Matt, this is a very interesting project to present as a potential final year project for your major. At...
Undergraduatembyram - Dec 26, 2016 / Holt - Dec 26, 2016
|Lafayette College Supplement: "Why Lafayette?" "Why do you do what you do?"
11 - Wow! You really managed a fantastic turn around in your response here. You really showed a great and keen...
Undergraduatenguyenlephuocloc - Dec 24, 2016 / Holt - Dec 26, 2016
|Lehigh Supplement Essay -- Igloo Architecture?
6 - @Holt Thank you, currently I am replacing my second and third paragraph. Unfortunately, "why Lehigh," is not a...
Undergraduategaribari - Dec 24, 2016 / garibari - Dec 26, 2016
|Global UGRAD, "everyone can be great because everyone can serve"
UndergraduatePaulie - Dec 26, 2016 / Paulie - Dec 26, 2016
|I am an elastic and completely down-to-earth guy. A note to my future roommate. (250)
12 - Hi Nandasharma, Which one is higher? - the likelihood of an admission officer understands the word "hackathon"...
Undergraduatenandasharma - Dec 25, 2016 / mualla - Dec 26, 2016
|Education a distant dream. Common app essay for University admission
UndergraduateShiva123 - Dec 25, 2016 / Shiva123 - Dec 26, 2016
|Why Washington and Lee_"Is Lee the General?"
2 - The first paragraph doesn't do its job well, I think. If you learned about the school by talking with...
Undergraduatemartinmengqian - Dec 26, 2016 / ngokhoa99 - Dec 26, 2016
|UChicago Uncommon Prompt: Find X; the dichotomy between my family's culture and the Western culture
1 - Prompt: Find x. "Suggested" word limit: 500. The envelope, with a custom-made stamp and bold printed words, was...
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