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|MIT short answers; I'm Asian/ my interest in coding/ my mentality
Undergraduatexamanda - Oct 29, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|UT Austin Essay "B" 'Oh, Love for Literature, Where Have Thou Gone?'
4 - I meant the novels. The transitions are quite important. They make your essay smooth and easy to understand....
UndergraduateTranLePhu - Nov 23, 2012 / weeyizhi - Nov 23, 2012
|UC Personal Statement#1: My Ailing Childhood
Undergraduateelton_lou44 - Nov 10, 2012 / moon05 - Nov 23, 2012
|this is my Jazz paper; Jazz started to flourish at the end of First World War
2 - The word jazz getting repeated too frequently; this I see through out your essay... Use a substitute and control...
Undergraduatesummeradams - Nov 17, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|UC Personal Statement: Single Mother
2 - Well... SOP is the one that introduces you to the admission committee. So it is going to make the...
UndergraduateShalaneG - Nov 8, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|'design and the Japanese culture' - Carnegie Mellon U Supplement
2 - In my view, you should start the essay with this point.... then it will flow more interestingly and...
Undergraduatetchsrams11910 - Nov 23, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|Columbia Supplement Question 1. "Popularity and acceptance"
Undergraduatepguz - Nov 23, 2012 / blquandt - Nov 23, 2012
|DNA/RNA; Why are you drawn to the area(s) of study you indicated?
2 - "It was maddening yet compelling about how many biomolecular factors contributed to regulating pluripotency. " Change to: "The amount...
Undergraduatenolifer - Nov 20, 2012 / blquandt - Nov 23, 2012
|'Divorce. A conversation with my parents' - UC essay #2
3 - I broke down in into a deep sob. Besides that I'm totally okay with your essay. You showed how...
Undergraduategrateful1 - Nov 22, 2012 / weeyizhi - Nov 23, 2012
|'my artistic and engineering skills' - USC Supplement
2 - Remember, its 1000 characters, not 1000 words maximum. To cut your essay down in length you can cut out...
Undergraduatetchsrams11910 - Nov 23, 2012 / blquandt - Nov 23, 2012
|'An animator for Pixar Studios or Disney Animation Studios' - Carnegie Mellon
Undergraduateasuther - Nov 19, 2012 / tchsrams11910 - Nov 23, 2012
|Sante D'or - 'Volunteering at an animal shelter' - UC Prompt 1 essay
2 - Please include your prompt when you make posts to the forum... That is very helpful for us to give...
Undergraduatekimchiduck - Nov 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|'my grandfather's bicycle' - COMMON APP ESSAY
6 - To make it more personable maybe talk about how your grandpa's influence caused you to (whatever you intend to...
Undergraduatefuturecolumbian - Nov 22, 2012 / Soccer13 - Nov 22, 2012
|"MEETING THE CHALLENGE" UC PROMPT #2
Undergraduateiamnicholas1 - Nov 19, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|UC Prompt 1: how to tie it up? 'my resemblance to my father'
3 - I really like the overall topic of your essay as it relates very well to your intended major...however, maybe...
Undergraduaterockingthesea - Nov 18, 2012 / Soccer13 - Nov 22, 2012
|My brother's sickness dictated our lives; TUFTS-"Let your life speak"
Undergraduatemikeyra - Nov 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|HIV research. AIDS victims suffered legal and social discrimination
UndergraduateAbadi2k - Nov 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|Essay about spending a summer at bootcamp - my dad chose to keep his mouth shut
Undergraduatebmepremedgirl - Nov 8, 2012 / AzizZ - Nov 22, 2012
|Papa Murphy's ticket to college
Undergraduatealvaradocx - Nov 22, 2012 / alvaradocx - Nov 22, 2012
|'Life of an artist' - UT Austin Topic D Essay
3 - Thank you!! I think changing that little part made the essay a little bit better! Thank you so much...
Undergraduatepup123109 - Nov 21, 2012 / pup123109 - Nov 22, 2012
|'Sheltered / Children shop for school' - University of British Columbia prompts
NEW - *Required Explain how you responded to a significant challenge that you have encountered and what you learned in the...
Undergraduateesther3095 - Nov 22, 2012 / — -
|Some issues of personal concern and its importance to you
UndergraduateLSC33 - Nov 22, 2012 / alilsushi - Nov 22, 2012
|'My opportunities in Hong Kong' - UC personal statement #1
2 - In the beginning, you TELL alot. I suggest that you show how you've become a well rounded person or...
Undergraduatesophiamak - Nov 22, 2012 / nounoub21 - Nov 22, 2012
|'innocent Chinese people' - Edit my UMich essay
Undergraduatefangyanyuyan - Nov 21, 2012 / mcig - Nov 22, 2012
|'The idea of the American Dream' - COMMON APP
Undergraduateuscuscusc - Nov 18, 2012 / uscuscusc - Nov 22, 2012
|Bowdoin Supplemental Essay: Ears Open
UndergraduateMoe_cubed - Nov 17, 2012 / futurecolumbian - Nov 22, 2012
|college essay topic - when corned, one gives his full effort
2 - few things related to grammer When all confidence is lost there is no hope would contradict the previous statement...
Undergraduatebdl6255 - Nov 21, 2012 / asn123 - Nov 22, 2012
|UC Prompt #1: My interest in Legos spurring me to become an engineer
4 - "As with any plastic toy, fragile and sturdy pieces alike were subject to breaking. These occurrences were devastating at...
Undergraduateor3nzo - Nov 22, 2012 / or3nzo - Nov 22, 2012
|'Drawing and painting since childhood' - Common Application Essay of Your Choice!
2 - Love your topic and intro's first line. I think its great, good use of vocab, great sentences of different...
Undergraduaterobotboydks - Nov 4, 2012 / k123 - Nov 22, 2012
|'gender discrimination still exists in China' - Apply Texas Topic A
2 - I like your into but mention who you are talking about in your intro because if confused me about...
Undergraduatealilsushi - Nov 22, 2012 / k123 - Nov 22, 2012
|'House Rules / Childhood fantasies' - COLUMBIA SHORT ANSWER
8 - I'm likely echoing off the other posters, but I'm sure that re-focusing your second essay could only be to...
Undergraduatefuturecolumbian - Nov 22, 2012 / Moe_cubed - Nov 22, 2012
|'Waiting for a complete recovery' - UC statement # 2 response
UndergraduateYoh - Nov 21, 2012 / Yoh - Nov 22, 2012
|'Bangladesh and the beauty of our solar system' - Common app essay
3 - I think the your introduction is very nice. It is succinct and shows diversity. However I agree Leah_writer, you...
Undergraduaterezwan3 - Nov 6, 2012 / futurecolumbian - Nov 22, 2012
|'Machines, tubes, wheelchairs'. Georgetown short answer.
3 - I actually think you should keep the sentence about how you react to seeing the sick kids-it makes the...
UndergraduateSoccer13 - Nov 22, 2012 / bellem1 - Nov 22, 2012
|Common Application Essay! Leave commnets and edits! Topic of your choice.
4 - Its really good and a great metaphor, but it gets kind of confusing because of all that detail you...
UndergraduateShoko0229 - Nov 4, 2012 / StephR - Nov 22, 2012
|Football player. His personality is one that I like to mirror in my own life.
2 - circumstance arises / circumstances arise ---- change punctuation from full stop to comma --------------...
Undergraduatepawan457 - Nov 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|'father become an electrician' Rutgers Essay 2013 Fall Admission
3 - You missed the topic of this essay: It's diversity. How will you contribute to a location of many cultures,...
Undergraduatepgambino5851 - Nov 4, 2012 / mcig - Nov 22, 2012
|Georgetown University Creative Application Essay
4 - The introduction needs a little bit of work, but I really like the whole idea. I think you need...
Undergraduatekatev - Nov 1, 2012 / Soccer13 - Nov 22, 2012
|'boundless opportunities' Why study at Georgetown University? essay
Undergraduatekatev - Nov 1, 2012 / Soccer13 - Nov 22, 2012
|'To be an electrical engineer' - What are your current career objectives
Undergraduateluying9682 - Nov 21, 2012 / luying9682 - Nov 22, 2012
|UC-prompt 1 Learning to be an independent thinker
10 - Thanks i will consider revising the last paragraph. :) I posted one comment on yours, but I cannot...
UndergraduateLilian95 - Nov 19, 2012 / Lilian95 - Nov 22, 2012
|Business and Social Sciences ~ University of Washington Honors Program Essay
Undergraduateblquandt - Nov 19, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|'I wanted to learn Latin dance' - UC Prompt #2 A fall or a slippery?
9 - Uncomplicated and strong. Didn't notice any grammatical mistakes at all. Good one =D My view is that you should...
UndergraduateLilian95 - Nov 19, 2012 / weeyizhi - Nov 22, 2012
|RUTGERS APP ESSAY -EXPERIENCES; stereotypical suburban white teenage girl
Undergraduatemlhaas - Nov 7, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|Law School Personal Statement "Average"
UndergraduateMelEL022 - Nov 1, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|'Jewish athletes' - Apply Texas: A person who has influenced you .... Aly Raisman
Undergraduateablumfield - Nov 21, 2012 / esther3095 - Nov 22, 2012
|Topic B: Issue of Importance, Technological advances
UndergraduateBChief - Nov 21, 2012 / dumi - Nov 21, 2012
|'Enthusiasm, commitment, conscience, problem solving..' qualities to our institution
NEW - I'm applying to The Cooper Union and there are 13 questions... So if you see my posts all the...
Undergraduateluying9682 - Nov 21, 2012 / — -
|'contempt for my parents' - UC Essay Prompt #1
2 - I think the topic is good, but you seem to focus on describing your parents' relationship more than its...
Undergraduatemsaisagee - Nov 21, 2012 / ammr993 - Nov 21, 2012
|(an aspiring communications major) Boston University Supplement
Undergraduateemilyc28 - Nov 21, 2012 / Premed0 - Nov 21, 2012
|'a secret television addict' - Stanford: Note to your Future Roommate
Undergraduateannastar95 - Nov 21, 2012 / annastar95 - Nov 21, 2012
|'toothless smile and smelly diapers' - UC Essay Prompt #2
UndergraduateM_Squared - Nov 21, 2012 / M_Squared - Nov 21, 2012
|'I returned to Korea and moved to Libya' - UC Personal Statement Prompt #1
Undergraduateadebayor123 - Nov 19, 2012 / sushiwrap - Nov 21, 2012
|'attain a common objective' Leadership Essay for University
3 - Just five comments. 1. Don't repeat the prompt in your first sentence--seriously?--instead, weave it into your writing. In fact,...
Undergraduatekrejci - Nov 21, 2012 / sushiwrap - Nov 21, 2012
|'Engineers can craft and create' - UC essay "your world" prompt
6 - To make it easier on you, actually, you should probably use this essay for prompt #2: "Tell us about...
Undergraduategrateful1 - Nov 20, 2012 / sushiwrap - Nov 21, 2012
|Stanford: I am extremely excited to meet you - roommate letter
2 - I see the world and people I encounter areas a fertile ground for gathering information to satisfy my...
Undergraduateria95 - Nov 21, 2012 / suzeroonie - Nov 21, 2012
|USC Short Answer Essay: Describe your Academic Interests
Undergraduatesuzeroonie - Nov 21, 2012 / suzeroonie - Nov 21, 2012
|I am currently living in America, but I haven't lived here all my life
NEW - Even though I am currently living in America, I haven't lived here all my life. About half of my...
Undergraduateflashman260 - Nov 21, 2012 / — -
|Did my own coach had just invited me to cheat? ; Caltech / Ethical Dilemma
14 - I absolutely love how you said can anybody help me out here, it will be very appreciated after people...
UndergraduateHoney Johri - Nov 19, 2012 / memm - Nov 21, 2012
|UC essay; 'My beginnings were humble' - Describe the world you come from
4 - This is a fantastically-written essay--it is evident that you are a good writer. However, if it is one thing...
Undergraduatevidxyz - Nov 19, 2012 / sushiwrap - Nov 21, 2012
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