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|'My new idea of security' - UC Personal Statement #1 Critique
UndergraduateRawrJjong - Nov 23, 2012 / sonyab0627 - Nov 23, 2012
|How will your presence enrich our community? Readmission essay
Undergraduatebimongol - Nov 21, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|Office of Immigration Services - UC Essay- The inner Korean stuck with me
UndergraduateCubiksRuber - Nov 18, 2012 / CubiksRuber - Nov 23, 2012
|UC Prompt #1 - World travel teaching lessons?
3 - Your essay starts out great i just feel that it ends really weak in the last paragraph. To me...
Undergraduatedeechan634 - Nov 23, 2012 / hamida1106 - Nov 23, 2012
|'Cross country pushing forward' - UC Essay #2 - Colorguard
Undergraduatemsaisagee - Nov 22, 2012 / msaisagee - Nov 23, 2012
|Adobe Essay, something I did that mad me stand out
Undergraduatethydo241 - Nov 10, 2012 / AzizZ - Nov 23, 2012
|Am I perfect enough? 'Conviction and bravery are important to keep our heads up'
Undergraduateeromero - Nov 23, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|"Why my intended major is math"- UC Promt #1 - feedback
Undergraduatejenn89 - Nov 21, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|All you need is some "guts", and you can overcome anything.
Undergraduatejmazz - Oct 18, 2012 / madluck - Nov 23, 2012
|luck and hard work - we should work hard instead of waiting for luck
2 - ----------- when you say all of them, it sounds there are many things; Here its hard work against...
Undergraduatevangtrangnho_nt - Nov 21, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|"Korean Eye of the Storm" UC Personal Statement Prompt #1
UndergraduateCubiksRuber - Nov 23, 2012 / — -
|'traditional Mexican-American family' - UC Personal Statement "Your World"
5 - Thank you, ammr993, weeyizhi, and luying9682. I will definitely take your feedback into account as I write the final...
Undergraduatesushiwrap - Nov 21, 2012 / sushiwrap - Nov 23, 2012
|'the first two months of my new business' - Essay Prompt B
2 - This is a very touching essay but it doesn't answer the prompt about how it relates to the person...
UndergraduateZachadude7 - Nov 23, 2012 / kimchiduck - Nov 23, 2012
|Reaching out to the Disadvantaged Families - College admission essay OUTLINE
2 - there was alot of very good information in this outline, some suggestions i would give you is to mayb...
Undergraduaterbaunach - Nov 11, 2012 / StephR - Nov 23, 2012
|'my Lebanese heritage and culture' - UC essay
3 - I really like your essay but I would try and focus a little less on describing your world and...
Undergraduatenounoub21 - Nov 22, 2012 / 4m4jordan4m4 - Nov 23, 2012
|'between a celebrity and a journalist' - USC academic interests short answer
NEW - Describe your academic interests and how you plan to pursue them at USC. Growing up, I don't remember...
Undergraduatemeliilynn - Nov 23, 2012 / — -
|'In co-ed schools all my life' - Why Barnard?
Undergraduatebellem1 - Nov 23, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 23, 2012
|'graduating high school being pregnant' - The world I come from
Undergraduatejcedillo - Nov 23, 2012 / bellem1 - Nov 23, 2012
|'Fillmore and Prince' - Stanford Intellectual Vitality Essay
2 - This sounds great! I like how you started with the dialogue because I did not expect it to be...
Undergraduate4m4jordan4m4 - Nov 23, 2012 / nounoub21 - Nov 23, 2012
|'playing video games to cheer myself up' - CommonApp Personal Statement
3 - When i BEGAN my freshman year... I usually cheer myself up BY playing videogames They WOULD use the information...
Undergraduatemadluck - Nov 23, 2012 / nounoub21 - Nov 23, 2012
|'Speech contest full of challenge' - UC STATMENT#2
NEW - The grammar is really bad and need some correction. Please feel free to help me edit or make comments!!...
Undergraduatehellosunshine - Nov 23, 2012 / — -
|'I learned about camping through my friends' -Common App Essay - Topic of your choice
UndergraduateUshio - Nov 12, 2012 / 4m4jordan4m4 - Nov 23, 2012
|A Microcosm of the Global Community (Rutgers admissions essay)
UndergraduateMereia238 - Nov 8, 2012 / AzizZ - Nov 23, 2012
|'I was elected captain of my cross country team' Extracurricular short answer
3 - Emily, this essay is very neatly written and it is obvious that cross country has had an impact on...
Undergraduatebellem1 - Nov 22, 2012 / Premed0 - Nov 23, 2012
|Johns Hopkins Supplement - "From Inspiration to Biochemistry"
6 - Thanks everyone for the serious editing! I didn't even realize I had misspelled Johns Hopkins. I wrote this in...
UndergraduatePremed0 - Nov 23, 2012 / Premed0 - Nov 23, 2012
|"JELLO it is!" - Common App Essay; significant experience, achievement, risk...
Undergraduatetheuberjc - Nov 23, 2012 / theuberjc - Nov 23, 2012
|"What I've done the last 10 years"-Temple University admission
2 - If its ten year later and you haven't enter graduate school than there is some miss calculation. I felt...
Undergraduatepurpribb1 - Nov 12, 2012 / MariettaA - Nov 23, 2012
|As I crawled into bed that night I found myself unable to sleep - college essay
2 - Okay, i believe that the essay it self is beyond expectation of a college entry essay. I copied it...
Undergraduatestaols - Nov 4, 2012 / MariettaA - Nov 23, 2012
|'Life in a honest world' - my essay for University of California
2 - I choose <<<chose>>not to help my friend during exams because I understand .... How can people lent<<<lend>>> money to...
Undergraduatehshsteven - Nov 23, 2012 / MariettaA - Nov 23, 2012
|'My summer art homework / Lesson plans' - UC APPLICATION PROMPT #1&2
2 - I think your essays are good. For the first one, i was looking forward to hearing how your family...
Undergraduateimprincess9090 - Nov 8, 2012 / MariettaA - Nov 23, 2012
|MIT short answers; I'm Asian/ my interest in coding/ my mentality
Undergraduatexamanda - Oct 29, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|UT Austin Essay "B" 'Oh, Love for Literature, Where Have Thou Gone?'
4 - I meant the novels. The transitions are quite important. They make your essay smooth and easy to understand....
UndergraduateTranLePhu - Nov 23, 2012 / weeyizhi - Nov 23, 2012
|UC Personal Statement#1: My Ailing Childhood
Undergraduateelton_lou44 - Nov 10, 2012 / moon05 - Nov 23, 2012
|this is my Jazz paper; Jazz started to flourish at the end of First World War
2 - The word jazz getting repeated too frequently; this I see through out your essay... Use a substitute and control...
Undergraduatesummeradams - Nov 17, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|UC Personal Statement: Single Mother
2 - Well... SOP is the one that introduces you to the admission committee. So it is going to make the...
UndergraduateShalaneG - Nov 8, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|'design and the Japanese culture' - Carnegie Mellon U Supplement
2 - In my view, you should start the essay with this point.... then it will flow more interestingly and...
Undergraduatetchsrams11910 - Nov 23, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|Columbia Supplement Question 1. "Popularity and acceptance"
Undergraduatepguz - Nov 23, 2012 / blquandt - Nov 23, 2012
|DNA/RNA; Why are you drawn to the area(s) of study you indicated?
2 - "It was maddening yet compelling about how many biomolecular factors contributed to regulating pluripotency. " Change to: "The amount...
Undergraduatenolifer - Nov 20, 2012 / blquandt - Nov 23, 2012
|'Divorce. A conversation with my parents' - UC essay #2
3 - I broke down in into a deep sob. Besides that I'm totally okay with your essay. You showed how...
Undergraduategrateful1 - Nov 22, 2012 / weeyizhi - Nov 23, 2012
|'my artistic and engineering skills' - USC Supplement
2 - Remember, its 1000 characters, not 1000 words maximum. To cut your essay down in length you can cut out...
Undergraduatetchsrams11910 - Nov 23, 2012 / blquandt - Nov 23, 2012
|'An animator for Pixar Studios or Disney Animation Studios' - Carnegie Mellon
Undergraduateasuther - Nov 19, 2012 / tchsrams11910 - Nov 23, 2012
|Sante D'or - 'Volunteering at an animal shelter' - UC Prompt 1 essay
2 - Please include your prompt when you make posts to the forum... That is very helpful for us to give...
Undergraduatekimchiduck - Nov 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|'my grandfather's bicycle' - COMMON APP ESSAY
6 - To make it more personable maybe talk about how your grandpa's influence caused you to (whatever you intend to...
Undergraduatefuturecolumbian - Nov 22, 2012 / Soccer13 - Nov 22, 2012
|"MEETING THE CHALLENGE" UC PROMPT #2
Undergraduateiamnicholas1 - Nov 19, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|UC Prompt 1: how to tie it up? 'my resemblance to my father'
3 - I really like the overall topic of your essay as it relates very well to your intended major...however, maybe...
Undergraduaterockingthesea - Nov 18, 2012 / Soccer13 - Nov 22, 2012
|My brother's sickness dictated our lives; TUFTS-"Let your life speak"
Undergraduatemikeyra - Nov 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|HIV research. AIDS victims suffered legal and social discrimination
UndergraduateAbadi2k - Nov 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|Essay about spending a summer at bootcamp - my dad chose to keep his mouth shut
Undergraduatebmepremedgirl - Nov 8, 2012 / AzizZ - Nov 22, 2012
|Papa Murphy's ticket to college
Undergraduatealvaradocx - Nov 22, 2012 / alvaradocx - Nov 22, 2012
|'Life of an artist' - UT Austin Topic D Essay
3 - Thank you!! I think changing that little part made the essay a little bit better! Thank you so much...
Undergraduatepup123109 - Nov 21, 2012 / pup123109 - Nov 22, 2012
|'Sheltered / Children shop for school' - University of British Columbia prompts
NEW - *Required Explain how you responded to a significant challenge that you have encountered and what you learned in the...
Undergraduateesther3095 - Nov 22, 2012 / — -
|Some issues of personal concern and its importance to you
UndergraduateLSC33 - Nov 22, 2012 / alilsushi - Nov 22, 2012
|'My opportunities in Hong Kong' - UC personal statement #1
2 - In the beginning, you TELL alot. I suggest that you show how you've become a well rounded person or...
Undergraduatesophiamak - Nov 22, 2012 / nounoub21 - Nov 22, 2012
|'The idea of the American Dream' - COMMON APP
Undergraduateuscuscusc - Nov 18, 2012 / uscuscusc - Nov 22, 2012
|Bowdoin Supplemental Essay: Ears Open
UndergraduateMoe_cubed - Nov 17, 2012 / futurecolumbian - Nov 22, 2012
|college essay topic - when corned, one gives his full effort
2 - few things related to grammer When all confidence is lost there is no hope would contradict the previous statement...
Undergraduatebdl6255 - Nov 21, 2012 / asn123 - Nov 22, 2012
|UC Prompt #1: My interest in Legos spurring me to become an engineer
4 - "As with any plastic toy, fragile and sturdy pieces alike were subject to breaking. These occurrences were devastating at...
Undergraduateor3nzo - Nov 22, 2012 / or3nzo - Nov 22, 2012
|'Drawing and painting since childhood' - Common Application Essay of Your Choice!
2 - Love your topic and intro's first line. I think its great, good use of vocab, great sentences of different...
Undergraduaterobotboydks - Nov 4, 2012 / k123 - Nov 22, 2012
|'gender discrimination still exists in China' - Apply Texas Topic A
2 - I like your into but mention who you are talking about in your intro because if confused me about...
Undergraduatealilsushi - Nov 22, 2012 / k123 - Nov 22, 2012
|'House Rules / Childhood fantasies' - COLUMBIA SHORT ANSWER
8 - I'm likely echoing off the other posters, but I'm sure that re-focusing your second essay could only be to...
Undergraduatefuturecolumbian - Nov 22, 2012 / Moe_cubed - Nov 22, 2012
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