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|My brother is influencing me - 'I felt so appreciative about life'
NEW - I am writing this essay for the CommonApp. Here is the prompt: Please write an essay (250-500 words) on...
Undergraduatesoccerchic30 - Nov 11, 2012 / — -
|"Refusing Dante's Ash" - IU Bloomington
2 - the essay is nicely written, great syntax especially, but i feel that it becomes a but too descriptive, without...
UndergraduateHILLYERWILL - Oct 25, 2012 / jchoe82 - Nov 11, 2012
|Ringling transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.
2 - Quite a few grammatical errors. "Ever since I was little I wanted to be a veterinarian. I grew...
Undergraduatemdubois - Nov 11, 2012 / Lanbekaka - Nov 11, 2012
|Commonapp activity writing - 'wrestling is by far the most meaningful to me'
3 - Your diet, activities and entire lifestyle is shaped by the sport. makes it flow better i think...
UndergraduateEnabledowner - Oct 29, 2012 / mdubois - Nov 11, 2012
|'A Nomad, a Navy Brat' - Flagler College Essay
3 - maybe start by stating what Island because I felt sort of lost not knowing where you were talking about....
UndergraduateKristenbreast - Oct 21, 2012 / mhk1294 - Nov 11, 2012
|'determination and perseverance' - critique my Michigan State essay
5 - There are some minor grammar mistakes, like previous readers have pointed out, but overall you have a very unique...
UndergraduateTFleet13 - Oct 18, 2012 / ljy9152 - Nov 11, 2012
|The Truth of Ourselves-Apply Texas Essay Prompt B
3 - Same problem here: I find two different topics going on at the same time. In the third paragraph, I...
Undergraduateartsyfartsy - Nov 5, 2012 / ljy9152 - Nov 11, 2012
|Basketball Common App Essay - leave comments or grammar edits
Undergraduatebella2489 - Nov 11, 2012 / ah_zafari - Nov 11, 2012
|'Roommate look forward to the friendships' - Babson Essay: Needs Revision
2 - the fist sentence is brilliant. I like it, it made me smile. In your second paragraph, adding your experiences...
Undergraduatelbornstein13 - Oct 29, 2012 / tutu51595 - Nov 11, 2012
|'Hercules' NYU supplement: what intrigues you?
2 - Omg I love this topic because Hercules was my favorite movie! and I have that song on my ipod!...
Undergraduateljy9152 - Nov 11, 2012 / bella2489 - Nov 11, 2012
|'the Entrepreneur Club' - USC Supplement ~ Academic Interest
Undergraduateblquandt - Nov 5, 2012 / blquandt - Nov 11, 2012
|'My sister and graduation' - Topic A
2 - How can people make it through life without a sister? Because I sure can't, not even a day. You...
UndergraduateMariana_MHdz - Nov 5, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 11, 2012
|The next Nancy Grace - UC Transfer Prompt #1
2 - Hi :) I really like the way you wrote your essay, it definitely shows personality and you have your...
Undergraduateshedontcare - Nov 6, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 11, 2012
|"Be yourself; everyone else is already taken" - Chicago Essay
6 - You haven't written anything about UChic at all! It's all just about you and how your not shy anymore......
Undergraduatehello00 - Nov 9, 2012 / zahras93 - Nov 11, 2012
|'learned from my research' - LMU My Supplement essay.
2 - I think that you should give more examples that are unique to you, in order to best answer the...
UndergraduateDollsi - Nov 5, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 11, 2012
|'SKYY DIVINGG' - NYU What intrigues me; What is it like to fly?
3 - I thought there was a word limit: 1500 characters MAX. this is about 500 words, around 2000 characters including...
Undergraduateindia7 - Oct 23, 2012 / ljy9152 - Nov 11, 2012
|'Heaven knows where I should stand' - important person common app main essay
Undergraduateljy9152 - Nov 4, 2012 / ljy9152 - Nov 11, 2012
|'Academic career teacher' - UCF essays
Undergraduaterock049 - Nov 6, 2012 / rock049 - Nov 11, 2012
|'Both a doctor and an engineer' - UM Supplement. Why your field of study?
12 - "When I face a dilemma, my mind will not stop until there is a solution" You can rephrase that,...
Undergraduatedealaus - Oct 25, 2012 / zahras93 - Nov 11, 2012
|'the end of the world' - Stanford - Intellectual Vitality
Undergraduatemagictimelord - Nov 1, 2012 / ysysysys - Nov 10, 2012
|'Learning in America' - Describe the world you come from (my immigration)
2 - Well.... your writing is clear and direct. However, it's better if you make it more interesting by arousing the...
Undergraduateysysysys - Nov 10, 2012 / dumi - Nov 10, 2012
|'The Outsiders' - a book you have read and explain its impact - OCCIDENTAL
4 - Definitely cut the fat. You can talk a little about how the book was the first one you loved,...
Undergraduatejosephuong - Nov 9, 2012 / blquandt - Nov 10, 2012
|'The Vow and Gator Nation' - meaningful accomplishment UF ADMISSION ESSAY
2 - I really liked the showing part of the essay, There may have been times of telling, which may detract...
Undergraduatehartensteinb - Oct 19, 2012 / elton_lou44 - Nov 10, 2012
|Impact of Mufasa in Morocco for Texas app - someone impacting my life
UndergraduateNancyGreen - Oct 26, 2012 / alikidwai - Nov 10, 2012
|'The negative stereotype' - Best advice I have ever recieved: Be Harsh!
Undergraduatehtiwari - Oct 15, 2012 / ht2112 - Nov 10, 2012
|'Imagination' - UVA: What is your favorite word and why?
UndergraduateSLEE30 - Nov 10, 2012 / jincera1 - Nov 10, 2012
|'An evening with friends' - Williams Looking through the car window
4 - I hate to be a grammar Nazi, but I'm almost positive that song titles usually include quotation marks. :-)...
Undergraduateczoeee - Nov 10, 2012 / leahdaoud - Nov 10, 2012
|Common App essay about Snowflake metaphor
3 - Waagh, I posted to yours without reading your response and now I feel like a noob who just told...
Undergraduatecezyou - Nov 10, 2012 / cezyou - Nov 10, 2012
|"Invention" and "Outcome" Question: PolyTechnic
UndergraduateKachan - Nov 10, 2012 / — -
|'France, Boston, and New York' - Michigan (community and your place within it)
NEW - I am currently a freshman in college wanting to transfer to U of M. One of the two supplemental...
Undergraduategpoudrie - Nov 9, 2012 / — -
|'pianist's fingers' - Commonapp about personal activity -- School Choir
Undergraduateaqedwsf - Oct 29, 2012 / ggkuma - Nov 9, 2012
|'Her death awoken me' - Johns Hopkins major choice essay
Undergraduatekaratekid666 - Oct 18, 2012 / karatekid666 - Nov 9, 2012
|"Never stop exploring" Villanova Supplement 2013
2 - "I think we're lost." Those are never comforting words to hear.---Great opening! At camp, the leaders ease you...
Undergraduatelaurenmit - Oct 20, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 9, 2012
|'Columbia Area Career Center' - Nursing Essay
2 - It is a beautiful thing to use your knowledge and capability to perform such a powerful role in a...
UndergraduateJennybelle - Oct 28, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 9, 2012
|SCAD - Statement of Purpose - Illustration Major (does it fit requirements?)
2 - Ability has the potential to be wasted by those without inspiration, and that is something I desire to change.---This...
Undergraduateabbychristine - Oct 28, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 9, 2012
|'Senior student's pressure' - medicine, radiotherapy Essay applying to universities
2 - Myself, I have nothing more than my hard works and enthusiasm towards health care, and a wish of your...
Undergraduatewide - Oct 19, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 9, 2012
|'God on my side' - COMMON APP ESSAY FOR CALVIN COLLEGE
2 - Firstly, the essay seems rather short. Is there a word limit? Nevertheless, i think you should change "number one...
Undergraduatesamkumah - Oct 28, 2012 / ranimeks - Nov 9, 2012
|'Santoor music' - Stanford roommate short essay
Undergraduateysysysys - Nov 7, 2012 / dumi - Nov 9, 2012
|'My Chinglish sentences' - Common Application Main Essay
2 - Hi Totoro Great essay! Yet I think you may add more details in the third paragraph (e.g. what...
UndergraduateTotoro - Nov 8, 2012 / luying9682 - Nov 9, 2012
|'losing my first election' - 2nd UC PROMPT
UndergraduateHiImAsian - Nov 8, 2012 / dumi - Nov 9, 2012
|'Family in need of help in Tijuana, Mexico' - where you come from UC Essay
NEW - Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how...
UndergraduateHelpsMyPaper - Nov 9, 2012 / — -
|UC personal statement: the Appetite behind my Aspirations
Undergraduateaadnub - Oct 20, 2012 / Totoro - Nov 8, 2012
|UC: Four years ago, I left my country to go to the U.S for a better education
3 - Dear phuc7530, I experienced the exact same thing as you did, just that I came to San Diego around...
Undergraduatephuc7530 - Nov 8, 2012 / Totoro - Nov 8, 2012
|'Mu Alpha Theta' Short Response Common Application
2 - Last year after elected as President, I took the initiative to make substantial changes to the society. You...
UndergraduateBrightwolf - Oct 28, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 8, 2012
|My painting performance - applying to college
2 - My desire to gain knowledge was, ---No comma here---of course, ---or here.-- the priority, but extracurricular classes fascinated me...
Undergraduateloreal - Oct 28, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 8, 2012
|UVA Essay: Discuss something you secretly like but pretend not to, or vice versa.
2 - ... the baby-skin-smooth texture and warmth, the whispering of the steam, and last but not least, the explosion of...
Undergraduateredskinsman95 - Oct 28, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 8, 2012
|'Fantastic education and new stunning element' - UCF APPLICATION
Undergraduatecnembach - Oct 28, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 8, 2012
|UIUC essay "THE DREAM LIVES ON" - tell us something about yourself
UndergraduateAMB994 - Oct 20, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 8, 2012
|'Younger brother in Czech Rep / Academic and social life' - UCF Admission Essay
2 - Throughout my academic career, there have been many bumps in the road for me, both within my personal life...
Undergraduatekmccoy17 - Oct 28, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 8, 2012
|'College hit me like a ton of bricks' - UT Austin Transfer (Personal Statement)
3 - Damn man... i experienced nearly the same as yours. College really hit me like a ton of bricks!...
UndergraduateJoshuaPerez - Sep 29, 2012 / fhrn - Nov 8, 2012
|"yes, ma'am" / "physics magazine" - MIT answers- pleasure and challenge
Undergraduatefireflies_dance - Nov 8, 2012 / fireflies_dance - Nov 8, 2012
|My Community- "Secrety Society of Love and Joy" Umich supplement
2 - Your secret society is the most amazing thing I have ever heard!! I wish my school had that. Your...
Undergraduateallms - Oct 19, 2012 / ZKhan1227 - Nov 8, 2012
|UMD Create Your Own Topic-How has your environment affected the way you have grown?
Undergraduatedma_245z - Oct 21, 2012 / manjit809 - Nov 8, 2012
|'More Than Just Restoring a Car' - Common App Own Topic Admission
Undergraduatemattn1 - Oct 20, 2012 / manjit809 - Nov 8, 2012
|'Photography is a part of my life' - Art Institue essay
NEW - Will i just finished this essay. It is full of grammer errors i just can not tell where due...
UndergraduateDerryca - Nov 7, 2012 / — -
|'Influential soccer and teammates' - extracurricular activities or work experience
NEW - On the growing road of my life, soccer have a very important influence to me. Not only bring me...
Undergraduatezhixiangdai - Nov 7, 2012 / — -
|'Parents born and raised in Argentina' - Rutgers University Diversity Essay
3 - Hey great information! I am not to great with the grammar problems, but I didn't see any spelling mistakes...
Undergraduatesolawnjay - Oct 22, 2012 / ruprecht10 - Nov 7, 2012
|(Trojan, Poetry, Identity, Ambicious, God-mother, Energy) - 2012 NCSSM
Undergraduatespoiledgemini16 - Oct 26, 2012 / ruprecht10 - Nov 7, 2012
|'Community college - ups and downs' - temple educational personal statment
2 - The main issues here are grammar and punctuation. However, there is much rambling that can be significantly reduced in...
Undergraduatexrachel24 - Oct 18, 2012 / Sheri_Editor - Nov 7, 2012
|'boarding school hostel / creative designer' - personal Statement
2 - The message in your essay is clear; however, the wording is too jumbled in many areas. There are a...
UndergraduateWonhee - Oct 18, 2012 / Sheri_Editor - Nov 7, 2012
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