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|My mother is a woman of multifarious personalities; she has made an impact on me
2 - Hey,I hope I can help. Here's my opinion: 1. Your introduction! It is very typical and doesn't hook...
Undergraduatevali001 - Nov 3, 2012 / Phoebe Africa - Nov 3, 2012
|Teen Smoking - Extra-Curricular Common App Essay
UndergraduateLemonsnout - Oct 21, 2012 / Lemonsnout - Nov 3, 2012
|UC Application College Prompt #1
3 - I agree with Memona that you had some great experience listed. I am not clear what program you are...
Undergraduatelawldmswldms - Nov 3, 2012 / MPH2013 - Nov 3, 2012
|Personal Statement for MPH application
UndergraduateMPH2013 - Nov 3, 2012 / MPH2013 - Nov 3, 2012
|Is education is more important than experience to be success in the area work?
UndergraduateAHMED84 - Nov 2, 2012 / AHMED84 - Nov 3, 2012
|"Our motto is Ut Prosim" - Virginia Tech Application Essays
4 - The beginning of the sentence is slightly awkward. Also, you might want to think of your word choice...
Undergraduatelegonigel - Oct 12, 2012 / michellexphamm - Nov 3, 2012
|Common app essay on the topic of accent.
2 - The essay is well-written, despite a few small mistakes: "If I am conversing..." goes with "...my accent becomes..." not...
UndergraduateVvictor - Oct 14, 2012 / ijiboom - Nov 3, 2012
|'scholarly warriors' - Stanford - Intellectual vitality
3 - Lovely essay! 1. I think you should say just a little more about this intriguing community of intellects...
UndergraduateDelxysic - Oct 15, 2012 / Phoebe Africa - Nov 3, 2012
|Common App (Extracurriculars/ Activities) essay - comments & suggestions
2 - That's a really good and touching essay. But i guess you have exceeded the word limit. Try to sort...
Undergraduateksade16 - Nov 2, 2012 / jineshwar1995 - Nov 3, 2012
|'Hyde Park and My Dream' - Why UChicago
Undergraduatehistoryfreak13 - Nov 1, 2012 / collegebound123 - Nov 3, 2012
|A Story of Rejection (NYU Supplement - What are your academic interests?)
4 - Cute and different! But you might want to check on your grammar, especially if you're going to point...
Undergraduatebg94 - Oct 29, 2012 / michellexphamm - Nov 3, 2012
|Common App Extracurricular Short Answer - Rowing
6 - It took me a while to realize what your first stanza was even about. I thought someone was getting...
Undergraduateskier95 - Oct 31, 2012 / michellexphamm - Nov 3, 2012
|Harry Potter / Hunger Games - My University of Chicago Supplement essay
Undergraduatehistoryfreak13 - Oct 28, 2012 / Heina - Nov 3, 2012
|Need help on personal essay for slp graduate school
3 - Oh ok. How about: Imagine that you are going in for sinus surgery only to find out that you're...
Undergraduategraduatehopeful - Nov 2, 2012 / graduatehopeful - Nov 2, 2012
|'Sojourn to the Past'- Common App Essay-My Ideas
3 - :OOOOOO wow, a speaker actually came to my school and talked about sojourn to the past but he was...
Undergraduatejaniceli - Oct 27, 2012 / lklklk124 - Nov 2, 2012
|'creative and imaginative person' - Common app Supplement for film major
3 - hey karlacnavas721! thank you a lot for your help. I really appreciate you taking your time to gve me...
Undergraduatelilac1 - Nov 2, 2012 / lilac1 - Nov 2, 2012
|Babies Youth Children Empowerment - seeking help with my little essay!
2 - Here are some grammatical you could fix: The comma after tutor should be a semi colon. Also when you...
Undergraduatejuliatkachenko - Nov 2, 2012 / magoc_conch - Nov 2, 2012
|'Changing your road towards success' - Never Give Up essay
3 - Here are some grammatical errors that should be changed. Urgence in the 4th line of second paragraph needs to...
UndergraduateJue - Oct 9, 2012 / magoc_conch - Nov 2, 2012
|"Thoreau"---Describe an intellectual experience (Harvard Supplemental Essay)
2 - Great introduction! I love how you charmingly display your knowledge of the book without slapping me in the face...
Undergraduatemjd2195 - Oct 8, 2012 / Phoebe Africa - Nov 2, 2012
|Common App Essay- The Linguistic Divide, Inside and Out
Undergraduatetimobxsci - Oct 27, 2012 / timobxsci - Nov 2, 2012
|'Tennis -- determination and perseverance' - Common App Short
2 - While this essay definitely gets across your passion for tennis, it has a few fixable flaws. ~In the...
Undergraduaterezwan3 - Nov 1, 2012 / blquandt - Nov 2, 2012
|Undergrad essay needs help for evaluate
2 - Some people don't believe in luck for their success. I, ---No comma here--- personally think you need both,...
UndergraduateDcool - Oct 17, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 2, 2012
2 - I understand that your company wants to build a bio-mass plant in your company . ---Did you mean to...
Undergraduateedoggy413 - Oct 17, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 1, 2012
|'Years of being looked down upon have changed my life' (Personal Statement)
2 - I quickly then responded, "No Professor Lim! I'm actually 17 years old." I was always the shortest girl...
Undergraduatexmunchkiinz - Oct 17, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 1, 2012
|'Wrestling helped me' - Experience essay prompt - UF
UndergraduateSimonUF - Nov 1, 2012 / dumi - Nov 1, 2012
|Common App: Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern
5 - i like the topic but you should make it more personal. why exactly is becoming a doctor so important...
UndergraduateAustendude - Oct 31, 2012 / einahpetSssiM - Nov 1, 2012
|'That Was Then' - my Common App essay!
2 - I like how you're open about your problems and colleges love that but try and talk about your self...
Undergraduaterockstarelite - Oct 13, 2012 / OVODiana - Nov 1, 2012
|What unique characteristics fit for college? ( famu)..250 words!
Undergraduatestevencia - Oct 30, 2012 / rezwan3 - Nov 1, 2012
|Essay about becoming a vegetarian - feedback (500 words)?
3 - Thank you so much! I've been known to be a comma abuser, haha! But thank you for the positive...
Undergraduatemalaikaiyer - Nov 1, 2012 / malaikaiyer - Nov 1, 2012
|'astronomical concepts' - CUNY HONORS ESSAY
NEW - The bell rang as the harbinger of life. My heart starts beating faster and faster as I anxiously wait...
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|University of Florida Essay - Senior Patrol Leader - feedback
Undergraduatetreesonfire - Nov 1, 2012 / MirandaPanda - Nov 1, 2012
|Personal Statement University of California Prompt #1 EECS Computer Science
2 - I might have gotten to this essay too late--sorry if that's the case. It's hard not to check the...
Undergraduatejuancafe2 - Oct 8, 2012 / sleepyizme - Nov 1, 2012
|'Grandfather's struggle with his affliction' - Common app essay
Undergraduatekeroro - Oct 31, 2012 / keroro - Nov 1, 2012
|Dribble, pull up, and shoot. Deeper into the Game - UC Prompt 2
Undergraduatekathytheson - Oct 14, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 1, 2012
|Significant Experience Essay: Road Trip
Undergraduatemstevenson - Oct 31, 2012 / mstevenson - Nov 1, 2012
|Work for company or work in own business ?
UndergraduateAzeroglu - Oct 31, 2012 / Azeroglu - Nov 1, 2012
|Cornell Hotel School Supplement Essay; 'captivated by the glamorous hotel life'
2 - I think u did this wonderfully. THough I would add some aspects of show not tell in some parts,...
Undergraduatecollegebound123 - Oct 30, 2012 / historyfreak13 - Nov 1, 2012
|'Love affair with small dogs' - Common app extracurricular essay
Undergraduatekeroro - Oct 31, 2012 / keroro - Nov 1, 2012
|Reviving the Victory Garden - English 102 Research Paper
UndergraduateSarahi - Oct 2, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 1, 2012
|Common App Extracirricular Essay: Mock Trial
3 - The extracurricular essay has a 1000 character limit, not a 1000 word limit. Yours has 2,183 characters......
Undergraduatehr5556 - Oct 13, 2012 / awolfatthedoor - Nov 1, 2012
|"A straight-A Student"-Stanford Supplement Letter to your roommate
4 - To me the first sentence makes you seem like you are a bit narcissistic. However, your paragraph made me...
UndergraduateHamsilious - Oct 30, 2012 / collegebound123 - Nov 1, 2012
|Capitilizing on others mistakes, and turning them into advantages for me.
Undergraduatetannerazm - Oct 30, 2012 / Obaid Allah - Nov 1, 2012
|UF- UNDERGRAD ESSAY! Any advice would be great.
Undergraduatelinamlo - Oct 31, 2012 / tannerazm - Oct 31, 2012
|What are your thoughts on the idea that neither time nor opportunity can determine in
UndergraduateObaid Allah - Oct 31, 2012 / tannerazm - Oct 31, 2012
|Live Long and Prosper Through Good Nutrition - Essay Topic B
3 - Very good essay! I am thinking of writing one about obesity also! Which college are you sending it to?...
Undergraduatecgivens6 - Oct 28, 2012 / snowzone00 - Oct 31, 2012
|Undergrad reinstatement essay. I'm rusty. Any corrections or ideas welcome.
2 - Wow! You have definitely faced serious adversity, and I think it is lovely that you and your family have...
UndergraduateRDRobinson - Oct 5, 2012 / sogoldman - Oct 31, 2012
|Strange? Indeed; Stanford Roommate Letter
Undergraduateaqedwsf - Oct 30, 2012 / aqedwsf - Oct 31, 2012
|Extracurricular Short Answer on being a chinese school teaching assistant
2 - Maybe try starting the essay with a clear description of TA-ing a class.. "I had such fond memories there...
UndergraduateMaxterXL - Oct 31, 2012 / shl348 - Oct 31, 2012
|Here I sit,existent,casually typing a college admissions essay :NYU/what intrigues?
2 - To me, it was hard to follow. ALso, word of advice, NEVER include that you're writing your essay....
Undergraduatebellacose - Oct 31, 2012 / dealaus - Oct 31, 2012
|'I have two families' - Michigan Supplement #1 ~ Community
2 - It is good! Although, the only advice I have is to skip on the part about your friends' names....
Undergraduateblquandt - Oct 31, 2012 / dealaus - Oct 31, 2012
|'the midst of Track season' - Apply Texas Essay A - an impact on your life critique
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|"My Inspiration" - Common App Essay critique
4 - @admissions2012 Okay so my topic chosen was 'Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you,...
Undergraduatelilica12 - Aug 23, 2012 / lilica12 - Oct 31, 2012
|'research and internship opportunities' - Johns Hopkins - supplement #1
Undergraduatedraine095 - Oct 31, 2012 / ilyd3bby - Oct 31, 2012
|'the field of aeronautics and astronautics' - MIT: Describe the world you come from
Undergraduateaarkebauer - Oct 31, 2012 / ilyd3bby - Oct 31, 2012
|Essay-help my english
3 - Thank you. When we write essays in school, we have 45 minutes to write something. I have probelm with...
Undergraduatemike1973 - Oct 30, 2012 / mike1973 - Oct 31, 2012
|The game of GOLF; MIT/ Significant challenge you've faced
Undergraduateaarkebauer - Oct 30, 2012 / aarkebauer - Oct 31, 2012
|'We love you from Brazil to California' - USC essay
2 - "We are only doing this because we love you". Those were the last words my father said before I...
Undergraduateipanema901 - Oct 31, 2012 / candycanetina - Oct 31, 2012
|Better off Dead- Introduce Yourself Essay
3 - It has meaning no doubt, but do consider if you want the admission officer to know this story. I'm...
Undergraduatebhoppe - Oct 31, 2012 / Jayashree95 - Oct 31, 2012
|"The Kind of People in My Life" - What matters to me Stanford
3 - The tone seems a bit too serious. Maybe lighten it? Also don't you mean pursue your dreams? And I...
UndergraduateDropAvenue - Oct 30, 2012 / Jayashree95 - Oct 31, 2012
|'An environmental technology company' - Michigan ~ Ross School of Business
2 - Hello, This essay is pretty solid. You hit most of the "must haves" for an admissions essay. You...
Undergraduateblquandt - Oct 31, 2012 / admission2012 - Oct 31, 2012
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