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|'Not a golf prodigy' -Common App Essay-- Free choice topic about Golf
Undergraduatedayglow111 - Oct 17, 2012 / dayglow111 - Oct 27, 2012
|Without a Father - Meaningful Event
NEW - The UF application deadline is coming up and i really need some help critiquing my essay before submitting. I...
Undergraduatedesaraeh - Oct 27, 2012 / — -
|Journalism is my Ambrosia -- Extracurricular Activities Essay for Common App
2 - I like the overall sincerity of the piece. The first sentences, "I always thought that I would become...
Undergraduatetaytaynyc - Oct 27, 2012 / IamEmma - Oct 27, 2012
|'Dancing with people from Kenya' - UMICHIGAN SUPPLEMENT
3 - Hi! I think you have a good essay there. A few suggestions: Your description of the dance community...
Undergraduateramenbowl95 - Oct 26, 2012 / rohitsp - Oct 27, 2012
|UF essay - "My Italian Blood"
3 - All right. Your essay is nice, but needs some revising. What to do: Change the sentences with the (BLUE)...
UndergraduateSocceract22 - Oct 26, 2012 / FutureScholar - Oct 27, 2012
|PERSONAL STATEMENT FOR IVIES ABOUT BELONGING-- FROM SWEDEN
UndergraduateIamEmma - Oct 27, 2012 / taytaynyc - Oct 27, 2012
|What is your favorite word and why? Limit to half a page or 250 words. (UVa)
Undergraduatemasonseaman - Oct 27, 2012 / dealaus - Oct 27, 2012
|"zigzag" - UVA Essay :What's your favorite word and why
UndergraduateYiran Hu - Oct 25, 2012 / Yiran Hu - Oct 27, 2012
|My experience on March of the Living and the yellow butterfly
Undergraduategotmilk121 - Oct 26, 2012 / lucy123 - Oct 27, 2012
|'African-American girl into science and technology' - Rutgers "Diversity"
2 - It sounds amazing, just try to watch out for run-ons and saying "in which" too much within a sentence....
Undergraduatefrancine5487 - Oct 27, 2012 / spoiledgemini16 - Oct 27, 2012
|'Reading - bright and dark sides' - Common App Short Answer
5 - Thank you for your advice Lestat! What a nice coincidence! Plus I love vampires. The only thing is that...
UndergraduateCIEL - Oct 23, 2012 / CIEL - Oct 27, 2012
|Career pathway report into becoming a medical practitioner
2 - Career opportunities within the field of science are very demanding and increasingly opening many optionsthere are increasingly more options...
Undergraduateyasmine_01 - Sep 30, 2012 / francine5487 - Oct 27, 2012
|'life's conundrums and complications' - So where is Waldo, really? UChicago
UndergraduateJayashree95 - Oct 24, 2012 / xzzx - Oct 27, 2012
|'life philosophy of my mother' - Chicago supp, WHERE'S WALDO?
4 - thanks guys, i also think that there't too little about Waldo, but i also feel that add waldo in...
Undergraduatexzzx - Oct 23, 2012 / xzzx - Oct 27, 2012
|'The Compass' - Common App - University of Michigan SUPPLEMENT
2 - I like it. It tells a story while showing things about you! However, i think you should further explain...
Undergraduatetenorzero - Oct 24, 2012 / dealaus - Oct 26, 2012
|Academic school choice. Need help for final critiques
4 - This was great! You structured it well aligning it with your life (from child to present) and the clarity...
Undergraduatealladin06 - Oct 25, 2012 / ramenbowl95 - Oct 26, 2012
|'Playing Running Back' - Common App Short Answer "Football"
4 - Our football team can't win, but given the situation that there are no coaches, it would be quite difficult...
Undergraduatetak_jpn - Oct 16, 2012 / ramenbowl95 - Oct 26, 2012
|"How can love change a person?" -SUNY application essay-
UndergraduateMcjokey - Oct 26, 2012 / Mcjokey - Oct 26, 2012
|How have Computers affected the way we work now compared to 100 years ago Clep Essay
2 - Hello. Luckily this essay has a very relative topic that many people are effected by now-a-days. Your examples for...
UndergraduateArttillygirl - Oct 1, 2012 / Socceract22 - Oct 26, 2012
|'Digital media, creation, and my soul' - College App
8 - Very Good essay with a very interesting topic. It is great how you encompass personal anecdotes into your essay,...
UndergraduateLemonsnout - Oct 21, 2012 / Socceract22 - Oct 26, 2012
|Books/Singapore/Mind - Stanford (intellectual vitality, roommate, matters)
2 - Very nice! As a fellow stanford hopeful, I would say your essays are solid. I know you were trying...
Undergraduatenanoflame - Oct 18, 2012 / dealaus - Oct 26, 2012
|'Carmen Sandiego' - UChicago supplement, Waldo- topic query
5 - No problem, I understand completely that you weren't trying to be rude! I think I might write another and...
UndergraduateEnabledowner - Oct 24, 2012 / Enabledowner - Oct 26, 2012
|'58 men who look just like Waldo' - UChicago Essay #2
Undergraduatelsimpson - Oct 24, 2012 / dealaus - Oct 26, 2012
|'Law and perspectives on learning' - UPenn Essay No. 1
Undergraduatetonehouse185 - Oct 26, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 26, 2012
|'Experience in speech, soccer, tennis, hockey, FCA..' - Common App
2 - How is a middle class white kid living in a city that is 96% white, diverse? I know everybody...
Undergraduategbeck - Oct 25, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 26, 2012
|(Apollo 11, Scientific Achievements) - NYY
2 - The opportunities that are available is such a city as (is should be in) setting where i would...
Undergraduatealecblumenfeld - Oct 26, 2012 / wootsie143 - Oct 26, 2012
|'A new generation makeing great scientific discoveries' - Carnegie Mellon
4 - bumppleaseee...
Undergraduatetimobxsci - Sep 26, 2012 / timobxsci - Oct 26, 2012
|'Receiving help from others' - University of Michigan essay, the qualities attract me
UndergraduateZombAA - Oct 22, 2012 / Namel - Oct 26, 2012
|'Salvador Dali' - MICA Art School Essay-
UndergraduateAustinArtist - Oct 7, 2012 / EitanGold - Oct 26, 2012
|'MRI training at Holmes Regional Hospital' - extracurricular activities
2 - perhaps for the last sentence you should explain more why you fell in love with the machines and the...
Undergraduatenumel - Oct 26, 2012 / MITHopeful - Oct 26, 2012
|'Waldo cannot hide forever' - UChicago Supplement: Where's Waldo
Undergraduatevmw95 - Oct 26, 2012 / chiragjain - Oct 26, 2012
|Narration for a theme : Look before you leap (Revision)
NEW - Shopping with my mother in traditional market has become a nightmare for me recently. For a long time, traditional...
UndergraduateAlyssa - Oct 26, 2012 / — -
|Mental Endurance - Short Essay for Common App
6 - To me, I think something is repeated of the two first paragraph. How about sum them in 1 paragraph?...
Undergraduatejakejellings201 - Oct 24, 2012 / Heina - Oct 25, 2012
|'Describe a moment when your perspective changed' - Brown University Supplement
5 - You do not need to use quotations around a lot of the words..such as "special", "Filipino Pride", "fellow Asian",...
UndergraduateXmsamurai - Oct 4, 2012 / shmegg - Oct 25, 2012
|Google, myself, photo company, abroad - Syracuse University Supplement
2 - 1.Maybe instead of saying Google..you can say that you researched tirelessly online, through books, and asked councelors(or whomever) and...
Undergraduategiaaahhh28 - Oct 4, 2012 / shmegg - Oct 25, 2012
|'Prayer is all that you need' - college essay or my supplement
4 - I'm not a huge fan of the intro.. the quotes confused me at the beginning but that could just...
UndergraduateStevenSabu - Oct 25, 2012 / shmegg - Oct 25, 2012
|UNC Business School. Provide example of leadership challenge you faced...
2 - Although you need to show leadership, don't talk yourself up. "Being apart from both my customers and workers required...
Undergraduatedannyocean - Sep 29, 2012 / alladin06 - Oct 25, 2012
|'Founding Fathers'; G.Washington, J.Adams, T.Jefferson - Essay With Limitations.
2 - My english teacher is making us do one on what would i tell america's founding fathers and we have...
UndergraduateMusicObsessed - Oct 2, 2012 / Prissybubbles99 - Oct 25, 2012
|Temple University Undergradute Admission Application Essay - Undecided Major
Undergraduatewootsie143 - Oct 25, 2012 / EitanGold - Oct 25, 2012
|'Biology and chemistry random facts' - Commonapp, influence of a scientific work
7 - Enabledowner Today, biology is by far my favorite academic subject. Expanding upon what I learned as a child has...
UndergraduateEnabledowner - Oct 23, 2012 / Enabledowner - Oct 25, 2012
|'I'm proud of my city, Jinan, in China' - national concern, Common app essay
4 - "How dare they build the subways! How dare they hate springs! How dare they blame springs for all that!"...
UndergraduateTAT12 - Oct 23, 2012 / Enabledowner - Oct 25, 2012
|"A Balanced University" - Northwestern Statement
3 - Start with: The aesthetic qualities of Northwestern's campus caught my eye as I researched about the university....
UndergraduateGalluch - Oct 24, 2012 / himanshusahay - Oct 25, 2012
|'Encouraging and supporting parents' - Princeton Supplement
2 - Don't use 'father' and 'dad' , use either one. And review mine for early action to Yale please?...
UndergraduateMemona - Oct 21, 2012 / himanshusahay - Oct 25, 2012
|The Good, The Bad, and The Ugly: Story of the Step Sister
2 - Hey, Thanks a lot for looking at my essay. It really helped! I couldn't find the essay prompt...
UndergraduateMermaidInAqua - Oct 24, 2012 / jakejellings201 - Oct 24, 2012
|'The Seeker' - Common App - University of Michigan #2
3 - I like your essay and all, but when you are describing the campus are you talking about the UMich...
Undergraduatetenorzero - Oct 24, 2012 / sf18 - Oct 24, 2012
|'Nice to everyone' - Communities I belong to and my position in it. Michigan
4 - Thanks for finding out all my grammar problem. Also can you tell me if I answer this prompt completely...
UndergraduateNamel - Oct 23, 2012 / Namel - Oct 24, 2012
|Money is what matters to me- Stanford app
4 - I really enjoyed the opening! It is very crafty and unique but I'm not sure about it flowing as...
Undergraduatekgwatsup - Oct 23, 2012 / tenorzero - Oct 24, 2012
|'I got subscribers and sponsors' - Community Service Essay
3 - I kind of like the abrupt beginning, it really brings the attention, at least it did for me. ...
Undergraduatejam2theizzo - Oct 5, 2012 / jakejellings201 - Oct 24, 2012
|'Economic field / High rankings' the qualities of University of Michigan
UndergraduateZombAA - Oct 23, 2012 / jakejellings201 - Oct 24, 2012
|'High shool cheerleading' - About myself College Admissionss
Undergraduatekiera618 - Oct 24, 2012 / lsimpson - Oct 24, 2012
|'I immigrated from China to America' - Experience that changed me
UndergraduateNmail - Oct 23, 2012 / Nmail - Oct 24, 2012
|'Parent's divorce defined me' -COMMON APP~ event in your life and its impact on you.
6 - Thanks for the tips everyone! In my original essay, I had a better description of how I came to...
Undergraduateldirkx - Oct 16, 2012 / ldirkx - Oct 24, 2012
|Unexpected Lesson - Common App Essay
4 - Thanks EF_Susan! I'll be sure to make the changes! and Thank you ramenbowl95!, I'll read your essay...
UndergraduateAshland2013 - Oct 24, 2012 / Ashland2013 - Oct 24, 2012
|'I'll never be bored in this community' - UCHICAGO SUPPLEMENT
2 - I think that this overall a great essay, personally I would leave in the calling UChicago "this home" but...
Undergraduateramenbowl95 - Oct 24, 2012 / 4m4jordan4m4 - Oct 24, 2012
|Stanford Supplement-Letter to my Roomate (2000 char)
4 - You certainly show your personality which is great, but I would tone down the use of capital letters, and...
Undergraduatesparkyn123 - Oct 8, 2012 / 4m4jordan4m4 - Oct 24, 2012
|'uneducated and uninformed Americans' - topic of choice, college. Expiration Dates?
Undergraduatenvgator - Oct 14, 2012 / nvgator - Oct 24, 2012
|'Favorite place to get lost' - Discuss your favorite place to get lost (UVA)
Undergraduatejoiedelire - Oct 21, 2012 / ngonzalez1776 - Oct 24, 2012
|Need to cut words for UVA supplemental essay
NEW - Hi guys, I'm having a really difficult time cutting fat from my paper, do you have any suggestions? It...
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|'Life experience rather than pedagogy' - Common App Essay - Influence of Person Yale
Undergraduatehimanshusahay - Oct 24, 2012 / himanshusahay - Oct 24, 2012
|"How I overcame my obstacle in high school" NC State prompt
Undergraduatecsweeney - Oct 7, 2012 / sgupta654 - Oct 24, 2012
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