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|'Describe a moment when your perspective changed' - Brown University Supplement
5 - You do not need to use quotations around a lot of the words..such as "special", "Filipino Pride", "fellow Asian",...
UndergraduateXmsamurai - Oct 4, 2012 / shmegg - Oct 25, 2012
|Google, myself, photo company, abroad - Syracuse University Supplement
2 - 1.Maybe instead of saying Google..you can say that you researched tirelessly online, through books, and asked councelors(or whomever) and...
Undergraduategiaaahhh28 - Oct 4, 2012 / shmegg - Oct 25, 2012
|'Prayer is all that you need' - college essay or my supplement
4 - I'm not a huge fan of the intro.. the quotes confused me at the beginning but that could just...
UndergraduateStevenSabu - Oct 25, 2012 / shmegg - Oct 25, 2012
|UNC Business School. Provide example of leadership challenge you faced...
2 - Although you need to show leadership, don't talk yourself up. "Being apart from both my customers and workers required...
Undergraduatedannyocean - Sep 29, 2012 / alladin06 - Oct 25, 2012
|'Founding Fathers'; G.Washington, J.Adams, T.Jefferson - Essay With Limitations.
2 - My english teacher is making us do one on what would i tell america's founding fathers and we have...
UndergraduateMusicObsessed - Oct 2, 2012 / Prissybubbles99 - Oct 25, 2012
|Temple University Undergradute Admission Application Essay - Undecided Major
Undergraduatewootsie143 - Oct 25, 2012 / EitanGold - Oct 25, 2012
|'Biology and chemistry random facts' - Commonapp, influence of a scientific work
7 - Enabledowner Today, biology is by far my favorite academic subject. Expanding upon what I learned as a child has...
UndergraduateEnabledowner - Oct 23, 2012 / Enabledowner - Oct 25, 2012
|'I'm proud of my city, Jinan, in China' - national concern, Common app essay
4 - "How dare they build the subways! How dare they hate springs! How dare they blame springs for all that!"...
UndergraduateTAT12 - Oct 23, 2012 / Enabledowner - Oct 25, 2012
|"A Balanced University" - Northwestern Statement
3 - Start with: The aesthetic qualities of Northwestern's campus caught my eye as I researched about the university....
UndergraduateGalluch - Oct 24, 2012 / himanshusahay - Oct 25, 2012
|'Encouraging and supporting parents' - Princeton Supplement
2 - Don't use 'father' and 'dad' , use either one. And review mine for early action to Yale please?...
UndergraduateMemona - Oct 21, 2012 / himanshusahay - Oct 25, 2012
|The Good, The Bad, and The Ugly: Story of the Step Sister
2 - Hey, Thanks a lot for looking at my essay. It really helped! I couldn't find the essay prompt...
UndergraduateMermaidInAqua - Oct 24, 2012 / jakejellings201 - Oct 24, 2012
|'The Seeker' - Common App - University of Michigan #2
3 - I like your essay and all, but when you are describing the campus are you talking about the UMich...
Undergraduatetenorzero - Oct 24, 2012 / sf18 - Oct 24, 2012
|'Nice to everyone' - Communities I belong to and my position in it. Michigan
4 - Thanks for finding out all my grammar problem. Also can you tell me if I answer this prompt completely...
UndergraduateNamel - Oct 23, 2012 / Namel - Oct 24, 2012
|Money is what matters to me- Stanford app
4 - I really enjoyed the opening! It is very crafty and unique but I'm not sure about it flowing as...
Undergraduatekgwatsup - Oct 23, 2012 / tenorzero - Oct 24, 2012
|'I got subscribers and sponsors' - Community Service Essay
3 - I kind of like the abrupt beginning, it really brings the attention, at least it did for me. ...
Undergraduatejam2theizzo - Oct 5, 2012 / jakejellings201 - Oct 24, 2012
|'Economic field / High rankings' the qualities of University of Michigan
UndergraduateZombAA - Oct 23, 2012 / jakejellings201 - Oct 24, 2012
|'High shool cheerleading' - About myself College Admissionss
Undergraduatekiera618 - Oct 24, 2012 / lsimpson - Oct 24, 2012
|'I immigrated from China to America' - Experience that changed me
UndergraduateNmail - Oct 23, 2012 / Nmail - Oct 24, 2012
|'Parent's divorce defined me' -COMMON APP~ event in your life and its impact on you.
6 - Thanks for the tips everyone! In my original essay, I had a better description of how I came to...
Undergraduateldirkx - Oct 16, 2012 / ldirkx - Oct 24, 2012
|Unexpected Lesson - Common App Essay
4 - Thanks EF_Susan! I'll be sure to make the changes! and Thank you ramenbowl95!, I'll read your essay...
UndergraduateAshland2013 - Oct 24, 2012 / Ashland2013 - Oct 24, 2012
|'I'll never be bored in this community' - UCHICAGO SUPPLEMENT
2 - I think that this overall a great essay, personally I would leave in the calling UChicago "this home" but...
Undergraduateramenbowl95 - Oct 24, 2012 / 4m4jordan4m4 - Oct 24, 2012
|Stanford Supplement-Letter to my Roomate (2000 char)
4 - You certainly show your personality which is great, but I would tone down the use of capital letters, and...
Undergraduatesparkyn123 - Oct 8, 2012 / 4m4jordan4m4 - Oct 24, 2012
|'uneducated and uninformed Americans' - topic of choice, college. Expiration Dates?
Undergraduatenvgator - Oct 14, 2012 / nvgator - Oct 24, 2012
|'Favorite place to get lost' - Discuss your favorite place to get lost (UVA)
Undergraduatejoiedelire - Oct 21, 2012 / ngonzalez1776 - Oct 24, 2012
|Need to cut words for UVA supplemental essay
NEW - Hi guys, I'm having a really difficult time cutting fat from my paper, do you have any suggestions? It...
Undergraduatengonzalez1776 - Oct 24, 2012 / — -
|'Life experience rather than pedagogy' - Common App Essay - Influence of Person Yale
Undergraduatehimanshusahay - Oct 24, 2012 / himanshusahay - Oct 24, 2012
|"How I overcame my obstacle in high school" NC State prompt
Undergraduatecsweeney - Oct 7, 2012 / sgupta654 - Oct 24, 2012
|In the nation's service and in the service of all nations...Princeton Essay
Undergraduateanelson8 - Oct 2, 2012 / kamranmangi41 - Oct 24, 2012
|'An image of American life' - COMMON APP main
UndergraduateLaura_twilight - Oct 23, 2012 / Laura_twilight - Oct 24, 2012
|'many aspects to me' - Morgan state univeristy essay
Undergraduatenky99913 - Oct 24, 2012 / nky99913 - Oct 24, 2012
|'I remained silent when the train doors slid open..' - UCHICAGO SUPPLEMENT
4 - 'It was a moment that was truly beautiful' should be rephrased as 'The moment was truly beautiful' or 'It...
Undergraduateramenbowl95 - Oct 20, 2012 / himanshusahay - Oct 24, 2012
|"We need more pies!" - University of Michigan Supplement #1
Undergraduatesgupta654 - Oct 24, 2012 / himanshusahay - Oct 24, 2012
|'significance of my walk' - Yale Supplement Essay
2 - Its a really good topic :-) I suggest you focus more on the meaning. The essay doesn't essentially reveal...
Undergraduatehimanshusahay - Oct 23, 2012 / Jayashree95 - Oct 24, 2012
|Northwestern Personal Statement- wrote about tour and interest in econ.
4 - Its a good essay, but I think you should include more than just your tour of the campus, maybe...
UndergraduateSpicyCurryMan - Oct 7, 2012 / himanshusahay - Oct 24, 2012
|"a diverse community" umich supplement #1
4 - Good essay. look for synonyms to some words in a thesaurus for a better style, but overall good flow....
Undergraduateayushb - Oct 24, 2012 / himanshusahay - Oct 24, 2012
|'Passion with a cause' - Common App Essay: personal experience
UndergraduateJayashree95 - Oct 24, 2012 / himanshusahay - Oct 24, 2012
|'the value/characteristics of your generation' - grammar in my essay?
4 - The amount of Money is essential for a good standard of living. When someone decreases income, it means...
UndergraduateKhuyenhoang - Oct 24, 2012 / nky99913 - Oct 24, 2012
|U of Illinois essay! "past experiences" - for civil engg. Lego.
Undergraduateayushb - Oct 16, 2012 / Jayashree95 - Oct 24, 2012
|'Anxious to start taking classes after moving to USA' - COLLEGE ESSAY
Undergraduateloreal - Oct 23, 2012 / kamranmangi41 - Oct 24, 2012
|'From unstable childhood to self-motivation and independence' Common App and UMD
Undergraduateaveetle18 - Oct 23, 2012 / aveetle18 - Oct 23, 2012
|'donation to an orphanage in Cambodia' - an extracirricular activity
4 - You say "But what was more important was the fulfillment I gained from donating". This could be something you...
Undergraduatekoreanincambo - Oct 23, 2012 / rahuljoban - Oct 23, 2012
|"Elaborate on extracurrilar actitivies" essay; I became aware of poverty at 7
Undergraduatetata888 - Oct 19, 2012 / kgwatsup - Oct 23, 2012
|'Tennis career' - 1000 Character Extracurricular Short Response
3 - Yeah, great essay! It really shows your commitment to the sport, which will show the officials that you are...
Undergraduatesgupta654 - Oct 20, 2012 / kgwatsup - Oct 23, 2012
|'Testament of my personal growth' - COMMON APP ESSAY
Undergraduatetugsalex - Oct 23, 2012 / tugsalex - Oct 23, 2012
|'harsh workout every morning' - Common App to Binghamton early action.
5 - Thank you guys! You make a good point...i read it over and realized i didn't have a true touch...
Undergraduateteddygrahams - Oct 21, 2012 / teddygrahams - Oct 23, 2012
|'performing a traditional Thai dance' - Extracurricular Essay
UndergraduateFreenchy - Sep 13, 2012 / ZombAA - Oct 23, 2012
|'Safe environment to express myself' - Evaluate a significant risk Common app essay
Undergraduatetina56 - Oct 22, 2012 / tina56 - Oct 23, 2012
|I am an Introverted Man (meaningful book/event)
3 - Thank you for your advice. I've edited this essay a lot and have added more connections to the story...
UndergraduatecaseySchooling - Oct 21, 2012 / caseySchooling - Oct 23, 2012
|"SIPA: Home Away from Home" UC Personal Statement #1 Response
UndergraduateisabelbalitaUC - Oct 15, 2012 / isabelbalitaUC - Oct 23, 2012
|Of Mice and Men Character Essay over Geroge Milton
Undergraduatejacystate - Oct 23, 2012 / — -
|750 characters about - WHY BU
UndergraduateAlex19 - Oct 22, 2012 / himanshusahay - Oct 23, 2012
|My essay is about my stream change and its benefits (hospitality management)
6 - Hi, Thanks, Actually I do have some broad areas, like Patient Satisfaction, or Implementation of Disaster Management Models for...
UndergraduatePreet 14 - Sep 11, 2009 / Siddi - Oct 23, 2012
|Columbia University Supplements
UndergraduateTadewool - Oct 20, 2012 / loreal - Oct 23, 2012
|'Threads curriculum for the College of Computing' Georgia Tech Essay Help
Undergraduatejt73 - Oct 10, 2012 / loreal - Oct 23, 2012
|Playing two roles at once, father and mother
Undergraduateljoss - Oct 4, 2012 / loreal - Oct 23, 2012
|'returning home from Calhuitz' - Rice Supplement Essay
3 - It's really an attractive story. And for Rice I think it hits the home. However, I do hold my...
UndergraduateBobbyJoe - Oct 21, 2012 / CIEL - Oct 22, 2012
|"Knowledge is the food of the soul." - my UF admissions
Undergraduatebruffin1010 - Oct 22, 2012 / ajdue - Oct 22, 2012
|'Only one life to live' - Help with my UC Essay
Undergraduatemixcookie - Oct 22, 2012 / mixcookie - Oct 22, 2012
|'a bowl of Mămăligă' - world I come from, UC Essay 1/ Common App
NEW - Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how...
UndergraduateAP Procrstnator - Oct 22, 2012 / — -
|'Spritful helping those in need' - How will your presence enrich our community?
3 - As a child, every kid looks up to their parents. They believe they are their superman, their rock; the...
Undergraduatekaaayrob - Oct 22, 2012 / kaaayrob - Oct 22, 2012
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