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|'Unique academics and community service' - UC-Prompt 1 (Story to tell)
2 - Topic-wise, your essay has been done by many others. If I changed the name printed on your app, I...
Undergraduateafkbrb3 - Oct 21, 2012 / isabelbalitaUC - Oct 22, 2012
|THE LAST POINT OF "COMPUTER"--- DESCRIPTIVE ESSAY
2 - Computer is the most important invention which is used to get information easily an in a short time. The...
UndergraduateAghfoor - Oct 21, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 22, 2012
|One important sign of being psychological maturity is to be a responsible
NEW - Can anyone help me?? Thanks a lot!! The full title is :Do you agree or disagree with the following...
Undergraduatemisslittle6 - Oct 22, 2012 / — -
|Accounting and Finance, "The Language of Business" - personal statement
NEW - (Accounting and Finance) Accounting and Finance, "The Language of Business". This is what I was taught from an...
UndergraduateChanchii - Oct 22, 2012 / — -
|'Westport, a small colonial town' - this University of South Carolina Supplement
2 - One typo...From the rich and preppy to the goth and independent. Also charismatic is the correct spelling I believe....
UndergraduateGolfnut2013 - Sep 30, 2012 / musicmalay - Oct 22, 2012
|'Book knowledge / Robot car' - Common applications
UndergraduateLTC Lawrence - Oct 21, 2012 / LTC Lawrence - Oct 22, 2012
|Help editing my essay for Duke Supplement Engineering
4 - Okay two points: 1) Im a bit worried about how you introduce yourself in your first two sentences....
Undergraduateajdue - Oct 20, 2012 / Doom - Oct 22, 2012
|'Living live fighting one cause - animal protection' - college worthy?
4 - By being able to dedicate my life to one cause, it would be animal rights and protection. Not...
Undergraduatetaylornicholson - Oct 21, 2012 / krissytintin - Oct 22, 2012
|College essay (hardships of coming to U.S and how I overcame then)
Undergraduategraby95 - Oct 21, 2012 / hninaung - Oct 22, 2012
|'The prestige of the name' - Duke Supplementary Engineering Essay
NEW - If you are applying to the Pratt School of Engineering, please discuss why you want to study engineering and...
UndergraduateBella1123 - Oct 21, 2012 / — -
|'8 hrs of hiking / Chicago City Hall' - transfer essay
Undergraduateborto12 - Oct 21, 2012 / Abby5 - Oct 21, 2012
|Help reviewing my main Common App essay
3 - Here is my updated version: Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you...
Undergraduateajdue - Oct 21, 2012 / ajdue - Oct 21, 2012
|Harvard Supplement - Letter to Your Roommate
2 - Wow this essay is very well written! I like your chances for getting into Harvard. Couple things I have...
Undergraduatethepegmeister - Oct 21, 2012 / ajdue - Oct 21, 2012
|What should we do to manage our relationships? The importance of Communication.
Undergraduatenlpcgnt - Sep 29, 2012 / lilgreen98 - Oct 21, 2012
|'The Underground Home' - Michigan Essay Critique
3 - I agree that your essay is interesting but it does not answer the prompt. It seems closer to answering...
UndergraduateDoctorAn12 - Oct 19, 2012 / jsnelson - Oct 21, 2012
|'the death of my grandmother when i was twelve' - Common App significant event
3 - You should try and elaborate a bit on the "How did your grandmothers death made you stronger" part. ...
UndergraduateTFleet13 - Oct 10, 2012 / Lemonsnout - Oct 21, 2012
|'Sobering Comedy': What matters to you and why
2 - This essay is really good. The anecdote at the beginning with the joke at the end it a perfect...
UndergraduateDoom - Oct 21, 2012 / ajdue - Oct 21, 2012
|UVA Supplement- Secretly Like Ghost Adventures.
Undergraduatemcgreeky - Oct 16, 2012 / mcgreeky - Oct 21, 2012
|'My grades and class rank > ACT scores' - Yale essay
UndergraduateMemona - Oct 20, 2012 / Memona - Oct 21, 2012
|'not gone to Stern' - NYU Admission
Undergraduatenair - Oct 21, 2012 / NikhillRao - Oct 21, 2012
|'Do not let your guard down' - meaningful event and how it will make you a better UF
3 - Hi iliketoshop, Firstly i am very sorry about your father. I know it is very hard to go through...
Undergraduateiliketoshop - Oct 21, 2012 / Memona - Oct 21, 2012
|'the good times of my life' - Purdue admission
2 - I was going through my early childhood photos yesterday that was placed on the floor before me. My childhood...
Undergraduatenair - Oct 21, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 21, 2012
|'Playing flute and guitar' - CommonApp short answer essay
7 - One little hint to decrease the characters is to delete the space before each sentence,that would cause red line...
Undergraduatezaclizitong - Oct 14, 2012 / LTC Lawrence - Oct 21, 2012
|"Let's get going now" - UF experience, risk, event
3 - "Let's get going now", said my mom, as I stood outside my house,staring at the bright moon. I...
Undergraduateloreal - Oct 21, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 21, 2012
|'Gaining and exchanging knowledge' - U penn supplement essay
Undergraduatesas94 - Oct 21, 2012 / memercedes - Oct 21, 2012
|'volunteering in Africa and engineering' - most appealing about Columbia and why?
5 - Good job! As ramenbowl95 says, it really shows "your hunger for the school". Even better, you as a person...
Undergraduatekanyeki - Oct 20, 2012 / memercedes - Oct 21, 2012
|'My new life after immigrating to the USA' - University of Chicago Supplement
Undergraduatehudashahid1 - Oct 20, 2012 / memercedes - Oct 21, 2012
|'being a foreigner is a constant burden' - Feedback on Harvard
3 - " I couldn't decide whether or not this life-changing experience was something that I should look forward to, or...
Undergraduatedobiboome - Oct 10, 2012 / memercedes - Oct 21, 2012
|Common App Transfer Essay for Hampshire College
2 - I really loved your essay and I feel that you've written perfectly fine! But instead of the transition, I...
Undergraduateeastcoast315 - Sep 29, 2012 / nair - Oct 21, 2012
|'Easy adaptation and intellectuality' - Why Reed Essay
NEW - This is my fisrt draft, I think it's very bad :( Please make any comments and corrections. I very...
Undergraduatendp1995 - Oct 21, 2012 / — -
|Describe a meaningful experience: University of Florida Essay
Undergraduateksolem - Oct 20, 2012 / ajdue - Oct 20, 2012
|"Black Powers" -- Main Essay for Dartmouth
5 - HI memercedes, To be honest with you when i read your essay i just thought myself i really really...
Undergraduatememercedes - Sep 30, 2012 / Memona - Oct 20, 2012
|'inclined towards psychology and helping others' - UMICHIGAN
2 - Hi Ramenbowl95, My suggestion will be to make this personal. I think you may focus more on how...
Undergraduateramenbowl95 - Oct 19, 2012 / memercedes - Oct 20, 2012
|college essay for duquesne university; 'unique quality is something very strong'
2 - A unique quality in regards to a person, is something very strong. A unique quality is an aspect to...
Undergraduategxnoside - Oct 20, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 20, 2012
|The Bough that bears most bend most
2 - Life must be ordained on there principle of moderation. As there is a famous saying "Excess of everything is...
Undergraduatesalmanhabib - Oct 19, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 20, 2012
|"Hey, don't Play Play!" - What matters to me and why (stanford)
3 - I thought this essay was good, very humorous. Many parts were vague and left me confused though. What sort...
UndergraduateDoom - Oct 18, 2012 / nikapika - Oct 20, 2012
|SPORTS/ PROGRAMS; UMD/ Parts that up to the sum of me
UndergraduateTyphaze - Oct 20, 2012 / kanyeki - Oct 20, 2012
|'community in the South East of London' - describe the world you come from
2 - Coming from a community in the South East of London, there's never a day that would pass by without...
Undergraduateastarh32 - Oct 19, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 20, 2012
|briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experience.helpp!
NEW - I have always been interested in assisting others and working in a medical environment so at the end of...
UndergraduateSandra301 - Oct 20, 2012 / — -
|'Not stressing my grades, but coordinating my steps' - UIUC essay #2
3 - The essay seems good to me. The transitions from the paragraphs and the way you started the essay was...
Undergraduatesteveandimrad - Oct 9, 2012 / AMB994 - Oct 20, 2012
|Michigan supplement essay; "People often tell me that I act calm"
2 - From then on, it was a painfully slow process of returning to a comfortable and stable lifestyle . multiple...
Undergraduateyiwei95 - Oct 19, 2012 / neera94 - Oct 19, 2012
|my family community- U Mich Supplement
Undergraduateraquelgindi - Oct 6, 2012 / allms - Oct 19, 2012
|'Imperfect, but inspiring' - Common App Essay
3 - A big part of this essay is showing yourself. I don't see that until the last paragraph. The essay...
UndergraduateGuest - Oct 7, 2012 / timobxsci - Oct 19, 2012
|'Samson's journey' - Transfer Essay
Undergraduatecpdphilippe - Oct 2, 2012 / fleurebelle95 - Oct 19, 2012
|'Deep passion for helping other people out' - Essay for The University Michigan
2 - You could go a little more indepth about why you chose that major, where you believe it will take...
Undergraduatesoccer11 - Oct 19, 2012 / timobxsci - Oct 19, 2012
|'Taking charge of whatever I do to realize my potential' - UCF admission
2 - 1. I felt that the first few sentences of you first response was too typical.. I want some surprises...
Undergraduatemaggers777 - Sep 26, 2012 / timobxsci - Oct 19, 2012
|'Academics not difficult to me' - FSU Admission Freshman Essay Topic
2 - This is a great essay! You thoroughly covered all the aspects of why learning was your top priority in...
UndergraduateJazzy13 - Oct 19, 2012 / DoctorAn12 - Oct 19, 2012
|'The lifter and yell' - I need Common App Critique
3 - Thank you so much for your feedback! I really appreciate that you were honest in your critique. I see...
UndergraduateDoctorAn12 - Oct 18, 2012 / DoctorAn12 - Oct 19, 2012
|'Responsible citizen in our society' - Duke University Supplement - Why Duke?
Undergraduategmichski - Oct 19, 2012 / — -
|Essay about something I think goes unnoticed and why it is important to me-Feedback
3 - Thanks for the input! The reason I put "number one disease killer of children" is because it is not...
Undergraduatevolz519 - Oct 18, 2012 / volz519 - Oct 19, 2012
|'Born on purpose into Earth' - UCF essay (bump / uniqueness)
Undergraduategoldburg18 - Oct 19, 2012 / goldburg18 - Oct 19, 2012
|'not so much fear of hackers' - My interest in computers
2 - After reading your essay, I thought the Topic is kind of Influence of computers but not your interest. Remember...
Undergraduatechrisbkewl88 - Oct 19, 2012 / thaonguyen1901 - Oct 19, 2012
|'becoming successful in life' - College Application Short Essay (Georgia Tech)
2 - Hello, Cameron) You say you "had a natural affinity to computers" and yet you haven't explained why you chose...
UndergraduateSlvrfn - Oct 11, 2012 / KhanhZ - Oct 19, 2012
|'Kimberly, Margaret, and I' - Common App reflection - topic of your choice
2 - First sentence: take out the first two commas. Change "befriend" one of the two times you use it in...
Undergraduatefleurebelle95 - Oct 19, 2012 / tpezz2013 - Oct 19, 2012
|'From Korea to Cambodia - how it changed my life' - CommonApp Essay
Undergraduatekoreanincambo - Oct 18, 2012 / fleurebelle95 - Oct 19, 2012
|'Lead / follow people' - FSU Application Essay - Leadership. Thoughts?
2 - "There is a multitude of accredited perspectives..." ---> There are a multitude of accredited perspectives.. (plural) Other than...
UndergraduateDLu16 - Sep 27, 2012 / tommyboy614 - Oct 19, 2012
|'My coach and team mates' - University of Illinois at Urbana-Champaign
UndergraduateAMB994 - Oct 18, 2012 / AMB994 - Oct 19, 2012
|'Now I am an open-minded individual' - Diversity Common App Essay
2 - Hello, This prompt shouldn't be as hard as I feel you are making it. Given your background, you...
Undergraduatedcf0831 - Oct 18, 2012 / admission2012 - Oct 19, 2012
|'My passion is computer science' - Cornell Supplmentary Essay
2 - As I was deciding which IB courses to take in my junior year, I spent time pondering about what...
Undergraduatekoreanincambo - Oct 15, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 18, 2012
|"When you do nothing,..." - Temple Personal Statement
2 - this is amazing. not only your accomplishments but your work ethics to go along. this is so well written....
Undergraduatesmithy123456 - Oct 13, 2012 / xrachel24 - Oct 18, 2012
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