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|My experience of selling samosa taught me to be optimistic... UBC Pharmacy
3 - Alsa, the first thing that you have to change in this essay is the reference to "we". The essay...
Undergraduatetaroto - Jan 14, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|Mini-essay for my UBC application's personal profile. Problem and/or an unfamiliar situation.
6 - The new 2nd paragraph is better focused, even though it is not as lengthy as we hoped it could...
Undergraduatedavkang - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|FASHION INSTITUTE OF TECHNOLOGY - Creative Photography Essay
5 - Olivia, your narrative focuses too much on the photography journey that you are taking. Now, depending upon whether or...
Undergraduatelgates12 - Jan 14, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|Application Essay - Describing Experience which taught me about myself and/or those around me
6 - Christopher, it is alright for you to use the same response for different essays in different university and college...
UndergraduateCDuke93 - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|UBC Business Tech Management Personal Profile, Unfamiliar Situation
5 - Karin, The situation and solution to the problem that you discussed both times is too elementary and does not...
Undergraduateanxjso - Jan 14, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|Providence College Supplemental essay: Finding the ultimate truth
Undergraduatengokhoa99 - Jan 14, 2017 / Holt - Jan 14, 2017
|USC supplement: when I'm exposed to a new perspective
2 - Jiang, what you wrote is a personal introspection essay. While I applaud your ability for self-analysis and your desire...
UndergraduateBennyoooo - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 13, 2017
|Aspects of Colorado College which attracted my attention. Why this College?
2 - Batjin, the essay that you developed is well thought out and really displays admirable reasons for wishing to attend...
Undergraduatel3atjin - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 13, 2017
|My university essay which delivers more info about me, my life, struggles and achievements
5 - Try to find something really special and unique about your background, that way it won't sound like ordinary essays....
UndergraduateAbdulZ1997 - Jan 12, 2017 / l3atjin - Jan 13, 2017
|What really impressed me is that TEDxZYZ is really influential. Extra activities essay.
4 - Jiang, the problem with the essay is that is focuses on the organization and how it works rather on...
UndergraduateBennyoooo - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Jan 13, 2017
|USC Supplemental: A time my beliefs were challenged
Undergraduatemasonn8 - Jan 13, 2017 / Bennyoooo - Jan 13, 2017
|Uni Admission Essay - I am more than just my grades
3 - Wow, you seem very well rounded and all of these awards are really impressive. I don't think your essay...
UndergraduateHSY - Jan 12, 2017 / masonn8 - Jan 13, 2017
|Robotics and software engineering really take my interest. USC supplement essay
5 - I'm also working on the USC essays and I had a few suggestions. Admissions knows what classes you need...
UndergraduateBennyoooo - Jan 12, 2017 / masonn8 - Jan 13, 2017
|Describe an experience from my life that demonstrates my character or helped shaped it
2 - Charlene, congratulations on overcoming such a huge educational obstacle. Your story is truly inspirational and I can understand how...
Undergraduatecharade - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Jan 12, 2017
|Your essay should answer the following questions: What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT?
2 - Leana, it would be best if you complete the prompt requirement that was given to you for the development...
UndergraduateLeavaler - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Jan 12, 2017
|Briefly discuss a current global issue indicating why you consider it important and what you suggest
3 - Nima, please provide us with the complete prompt for your essay. It got cut off because you tried to...
UndergraduateCrew - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Jan 12, 2017
|Tell us more why you intent to finish the Computer Engineering Program?
2 - Nate, when you develop your reason for pursuing this academic program, make sure to relate it to a particular...
Undergraduatenhenderson98 - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Jan 12, 2017
|The brain chemistry. USC Supplemental Essay: How will you pursue your academic interests
Undergraduatemasonn8 - Jan 11, 2017 / masonn8 - Jan 12, 2017
|The features of nursing profession. NURSING PROGRAM ADMISSION ESSAY
7 - Excellent work Chloe, I strongly suggest that you use this version of the essay for your application. It is...
Undergraduateclr - Jan 9, 2017 / Holt - Jan 12, 2017
|Another late night at the hospital. Constructive Advice Needed on Nursing Program Entrance Essay
7 - Hi Chloe. I must say that you effectively applied the suggestions that I made for the improvement of your...
Undergraduateclr - Dec 5, 2016 / Holt - Jan 11, 2017
|Art, music, poetry, knowledge, love of life and humorous spirit vs kalashnikovs. Pitzer- Core Values
2 - Narmine, your statement about student responsibility should be placed at the start of the essay and be changed to...
Undergraduatestudent58 - Jan 10, 2017 / Holt - Jan 11, 2017
|Ivey AEO Activity Essay #1 - my candidacy to be enrolled in the HBA program
8 - Actually, you should only present one activity that clearly represent the 3 character traits indicated in the prompt. Being...
UndergraduateMT1 - Jan 8, 2017 / Holt - Jan 11, 2017
|Personal Profile for University Admission - an episode that taught you something about yourself
Undergraduatenhjoy - Jan 10, 2017 / Holt - Jan 10, 2017
|Passion for Neuroscience transfer intent essay
5 - Joseph, the portion about your excitement about research should be directly related to the university that you will be...
Undergraduatemasonn8 - Jan 4, 2017 / Holt - Jan 10, 2017
|Why Lafayette? Comparing myself to a French general
3 - No. Do not mention the names of any professors from Lafayette unless that professor is willing to write a...
Undergraduatengokhoa99 - Jan 9, 2017 / Holt - Jan 10, 2017
|University of Delaware Essays; me as a student, being treated unfairly, great accomplishment
3 - Nick, are you familiar with the University of Delaware? I am sure that you have some sort of backgrounder...
UndergraduateNickNack - Jan 9, 2017 / Holt - Jan 9, 2017
|I discovered the art of filmmaking. MSU Personal Statement
4 - Anaija, consider film making as the focal point of your talent that you wish to share with the student...
Undergraduatetumblr - Jan 9, 2017 / Holt - Jan 9, 2017
|Reinstatement essay explaining recent academic dismissal
Undergraduateneedhelpwessay - Jan 6, 2017 / needhelpwessay - Jan 9, 2017
|Overcoming Is Growing/ Global UGRAD Program: Why would you be a valuable attendant?
3 - @Holt I have already submitted it. Thank you for your help. I am honor student, member of a research...
UndergraduateLorelly - Jan 6, 2017 / Lorelly - Jan 7, 2017
|A timid boy living in own comfort zone. Changes made opportunities to achieve a lot more.
17 - That decision is something that you should make for yourself. My opinion is that it can accurately respond to...
Undergraduatemarcusimwj - Jan 2, 2017 / Holt - Jan 7, 2017
|He who does not know where he is coming from will never get to his destination.
Undergraduateyeboah hanson - Jan 6, 2017 / yeboah hanson - Jan 7, 2017
|"The White Crayon" - Art School Admission Personal Statement REVIEW
3 - Diandra, is there a specific instruction for this personal statement as dictated by the university? If there are no...
Undergraduatediandraelmira - Jan 7, 2017 / Holt - Jan 7, 2017
|The idealist perspective. Why do you think Earlham is a good fit for you?
4 - Khusel, you should definitely use the second version of the last paragraph for your closing statement in the essay....
UndergraduateNuverte0452 - Jan 6, 2017 / Holt - Jan 7, 2017
|I believe on Penn's education. Supplemental Essay for John Hopkins.
3 - Harriet, your essay tells us why you have chosen John Hopkins as your primary university application choice. You have...
UndergraduateHarriet - Jan 7, 2017 / Holt - Jan 7, 2017
|'What you have learned about yourself as a result of the volunteering activities.' (250)
4 - Nanda, careful with the use of special characters. That might not translate or be seen properly on the computer...
Undergraduatenandasharma - Jan 6, 2017 / Holt - Jan 7, 2017
|"How you would use the education you obtain at our institution ?" (250)
Undergraduatenandasharma - Jan 6, 2017 / Holt - Jan 7, 2017
|Innovation and Seeking the Truth
Undergraduatejiale1029 - Jan 3, 2017 / Holt - Jan 6, 2017
|"How have you overcome an obstacle or challenge you have faced in your life ?" (250)
2 - Nanda, just as you had to translate the meaning of "bandha" for the reviewer to understand what it means...
Undergraduatenandasharma - Jan 6, 2017 / Holt - Jan 6, 2017
|Your 'ability to do' will appear in other parts of this application. The 'things needed to be done.'
3 - Marcus, I would not focus on community service or the community at this point. Most of the applicants to...
Undergraduatemarcusimwj - Jan 6, 2017 / Holt - Jan 6, 2017
|'I was never truly exposed to poverty' UBC Undergraduate Entrance Essay
3 - @philliplombard I want to first all commend your effort in putting up a 199 word story about your...
Undergraduatephilliplombard - Jan 6, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Jan 6, 2017
|5th December: The day that I will never forget.
5 - Hi, i think you should elaborate more on your story that how your family inspired you to help people...
Undergraduateshippuden - Jan 5, 2017 / marcusimwj - Jan 6, 2017
|BU Transfer Essay- "the objectives" - The Shot
3 - Gabriella, your being rejected from NYU is not an issue in this case. In fact, bringing it up is...
Undergraduategabbyademi - Jan 5, 2017 / Holt - Jan 6, 2017
|The book all of Colgate's Class of 2021 should read
Undergraduatealexgzm - Jan 4, 2017 / alexgzm - Jan 5, 2017
|Can you proofread my Personal Statement and tell me how to improve it?
3 - Thank you for your feedback. @Holt There isn't any specific formula I should adhere to. But yes, I will...
Undergraduatezedix123 - Jan 5, 2017 / zedix123 - Jan 5, 2017
|For aliens, my life may seem like a dead plant.
12 - Khusel, I can't really respond to that in this thread. You see, this thread is dedicated to your other...
UndergraduateNuverte0452 - Jan 4, 2017 / Holt - Jan 5, 2017
|I need to go further in my efforts. Common application essay for Transfer 2017 Fall
Undergraduatezy19076 - Dec 31, 2016 / zy19076 - Jan 5, 2017
|Auto-presentation for the internet Platform "work away"
4 - Anna, this should be written in essay format. You are not writing a poem but rather an introduction to...
UndergraduateAskingAnna - Jan 4, 2017 / Holt - Jan 5, 2017
|"Describe a situation when you transformed your thoughts about a topic" (100 words or less)
2 - Nanda, in order to properly represent your response, you first have to present the issue concerned. In this case,...
Undergraduatenandasharma - Jan 4, 2017 / Holt - Jan 4, 2017
|"What Would It Mean To You To Call Yourself A part of our university?" (100 words or less)
2 - Nanda, rather than wasting your valuable word count with word fillers in your first sentence, use that to enhance...
Undergraduatenandasharma - Jan 4, 2017 / Holt - Jan 4, 2017
|The words "software", "program" always more important than a "game"
UndergraduateVijaychen - Jan 1, 2017 / Vijaychen - Jan 4, 2017
|Baseball and my grandfather matters to me.
3 - Antonio, this essay is confusing in content. Which is it that matters most to you? Your grandfather, the time...
Undergraduaternsnz18 - Jan 4, 2017 / Holt - Jan 4, 2017
|Aspiring to Help Others as the way to achieve success - Essay A
4 - Marissa, I am really not sure which prompt this essay is responding to. What do you mean by Essay...
Undergraduatemarissamuehl - Jan 3, 2017 / Holt - Jan 4, 2017
|TEDtalk conference contributed to my development on mathematics and other sciences
Undergraduaternsnz18 - Jan 3, 2017 / alexgzm - Jan 4, 2017
|New environment, educational system and fresh attitude. Why The New School? - International student
5 - Inmaculada, the way I read your essay, you come across as an aimless and disinterested person when it comes...
Undergraduateinmagab - Jan 3, 2017 / Holt - Jan 4, 2017
|-YALE- FOOTPRINT ON MY CHINESE HARDSHIPS
UndergraduateAlwaysL8 - Jan 2, 2017 / AlwaysL8 - Jan 3, 2017
|Questions about UBC Personal Profile - admission essay
Undergraduatenansuncy - Jan 3, 2017 / Holt - Jan 3, 2017
|A step to be greater and more meaningful than the previous one - my transition to maturity
4 - Yes, I believe that this essay is reflective enough to catch the interest of the reviewer. That is because...
Undergraduatemaryb - Jan 1, 2017 / Holt - Jan 3, 2017
|I believe that diligence and hard-working is vital.
5 - Hi desin, IMO there isn't a connection between the points listed in your essay. In addition, it is better...
Undergraduatedesinlim - Dec 24, 2016 / jiale1029 - Jan 3, 2017
|Why Marketing and Why CALS -- Cornell essay
2 - It would probably be better if you wrote about a bigger goal that might benefit the community, etc....
Undergraduateivyhopeful - Jan 2, 2017 / AlwaysL8 - Jan 2, 2017
|NERD, GEEK & DORK -TUFTS-
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