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|Writing an essay for the Fashion Institute for Technology's FMM program.
2 - Love your tone! and see your passion on fabrics! My advice is to have a better bring-the-readers-in opening,why not...
Undergraduateamberlsk - Sep 24, 2012 / angela0407 - Oct 1, 2012
|Wrestling has taught me lessons ; Common App Extracurricular Short Answer
UndergraduateEricRodrigo13 - Sep 30, 2012 / angela0407 - Oct 1, 2012
|Responsibility is something I have had to face my whole life - UF admissions essay
6 - In the world we live in today, some people are not always accepting of other's life choiceslifestyles and in...
UndergraduateTnts1995 - Sep 9, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 1, 2012
|Name One Song That has influenced you Virginia Tech app essay
2 - The reason for which this band has influenced me so greatly is that each person who listens to their...
Undergraduatepheneger1 - Sep 27, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 1, 2012
|Introducing myself to a roommate -- Oreos and Nutella
UndergraduateDoom - Oct 1, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 1, 2012
|'Malaysian road' - Stanford -- Intellectual vitality
2 - Searing heat; a forsaken strip of Malaysian road; nonexistent satellite reception. This was the situation I faced last summer...
UndergraduateDoom - Oct 1, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 1, 2012
|'computer programmer's dream' - UC Prompt 1
UndergraduateTashiro Tetsuya - Sep 24, 2012 / Tashiro Tetsuya - Oct 1, 2012
|'Our bodies are fragile' - Personal Stat for Loyola U Chicago
2 - Our bodies are fragile things when you get down to the parts. You could say this: "When you examine...
Undergraduatefoxyh - Oct 1, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 1, 2012
|Fashion Institiute of Technology Entrance Essay
Undergraduatekelly345 - Sep 19, 2012 / kelly345 - Oct 1, 2012
|'In order to change the views of the world I must rise higher and do greater things'
Undergraduatesoccersick - Sep 24, 2012 / foxyh - Oct 1, 2012
|'Climax in my life' Texas Application Personal Essay Topic C
Undergraduateumalooma - Sep 20, 2012 / foxyh - Oct 1, 2012
|'inspiration in my world' - uc personal statement - prompt # 1
Undergraduatelittleselene - Sep 18, 2012 / foxyh - Oct 1, 2012
|'I found myself broke' - common app short answer-Work Exp. its 1600 characters long
2 - When I left Marymount College in 2010, I found myself broke and in desperate need of a paycheck. Extracurricular...
Undergraduateajacob - Oct 1, 2012 / foxyh - Oct 1, 2012
|Common Ap Essay- Pseudo Puerto Rican
3 - thanks!...
Undergraduatesakuragyaru - Sep 22, 2012 / sakuragyaru - Oct 1, 2012
|'I will be a World Bank president' draft...of my stanford essay
4 - you have the basis for a good essay here. But i recommend you change the "slightly whining" part to...
UndergraduateShayke_96 - Sep 12, 2012 / Doom - Oct 1, 2012
|Common App - Steve Jobs biggest Influence on me.
Undergraduateamansam5 - Sep 29, 2012 / LillyCullenT - Oct 1, 2012
|An article on the topic "I want to become a doctor"
3 - Thanks Sadaf! Appreciate your help alot! and LOL! Yes I did see the word anticipation from your P.S.(honest as...
UndergraduateSweetFaith - Sep 6, 2012 / SweetFaith - Oct 1, 2012
|'Mother' She has had a significant influence on me; 'I was born in small town'
Undergraduateangelparveez - Sep 18, 2012 / bellacose - Sep 30, 2012
|'I am African' If I could Lend My Heart Words
4 - This is beautiful. Quite unique, and so intellectual. But I'm not sure it's the best for an admissions essay....
Undergraduateriskatun - Sep 18, 2012 / essayhelper - Sep 30, 2012
|'Practical and abstract reasons' - finding direction on Common app transfer essay.
Undergraduatebellacose - Sep 26, 2012 / angelparveez - Sep 30, 2012
|'Intelligent conversations, fervor for discovery..' Short answer for Brown University
UndergraduateGraceDL - Sep 30, 2012 / essayhelper - Sep 30, 2012
|FSU Application Essay - Learning. Advice? Thoughts?
2 - This is a good start, but maybe when describing your orthodontist experience, you should maybe add more about how...
UndergraduateBballdude94 - Sep 28, 2012 / VcP19 - Sep 30, 2012
|'chronic medical condition' - Common App: A significant experience
2 - Tough topic to pull off. You did it well! The line: Cancer changed our relationship, and I was forced...
Undergraduatetaxman94 - Sep 30, 2012 / essayhelper - Sep 30, 2012
|'As a child growing up in the Bronx...' Questbridge Essay Review
2 - That's why if I had the power to open a center and educate these kids about how gang violence...
UndergraduateNinjaboy33 - Sep 28, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 30, 2012
|'Finance just seems to be my calling' Drexel University Application Essay
Undergraduateschmitta - Sep 26, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 30, 2012
|'Cancer affects a huge number of people' University of Florida Admissions Essay
Undergraduateashrobbinson - Sep 30, 2012 / agoldtho - Sep 30, 2012
|'Study in most undisciplined and original manner possible' FSU Essay
2 - This is good! i like how you added extra aspects and other areas of the prompt (the part about...
Undergraduateagoldtho - Sep 30, 2012 / ashrobbinson - Sep 30, 2012
|paragraph about personality; My cousin Tom
4 - Very interesting. But if this is an undergraduate admission, shouldn't it be longer? maybe you should write how his...
Undergraduatesimoneta - Sep 26, 2012 / andshewashappy8 - Sep 30, 2012
|'How i would use my experience for UF' University of Florida Essay
3 - "As I started approaching Christine and her caretaker to introduce myself, I was overcome with an eager hug from...
Undergraduatemooremck - Sep 29, 2012 / agoldtho - Sep 30, 2012
|'Choose an issue of importance to you' "Self-Control" essay for UT Topic B
2 - How many problems can you think of that could have been easily avoided if someone had applied self-control? It's...
Undergraduatechuckp459 - Sep 25, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 30, 2012
|'Run, study, cry, yell, and learn' - Favorite place to get lost (UVA) - Music
2 - I sit snugly into my cozy, familiar armchair and heave a sigh of relief. After a hard day's work,...
Undergraduatevishnuv1228 - Sep 30, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 30, 2012
|Craig influenced my life; I learned to appreciate life, even through its downs
5 - After watching Craig Dietz, I decided to get back on my feet and continue to strive towardscontinue my goals....
UndergraduateMelissaV - Sep 26, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 30, 2012
|Common app essay; Signifcant Experience - My Trip to Italy.
UndergraduateMikeMar - Sep 29, 2012 / LTC Lawrence - Sep 30, 2012
|'Funny but good' - Favorite word and why essay "ugly" for UVA.
3 - "As my friends were approaching towards me" Id write "As my friends approached me" I like the way you...
Undergraduateqaszxc - Sep 29, 2012 / amansam5 - Sep 30, 2012
|UNC Chapel Hill. When you changed your mind about something that mattered to you?
UndergraduateDRitrosky - Sep 22, 2012 / MikeMar - Sep 29, 2012
|'I can now pursuit a management degree' - what forced goals re-examination
2 - "through lecture series organised by" make sure to correct organised, into organized. I think you misspell it in other...
Undergraduatesid018 - Sep 29, 2012 / dannyocean - Sep 29, 2012
|'his cheerful and contented eyes'; My Father - he has made an impact on my life
Undergraduatetky195 - Sep 26, 2012 / Freenchy - Sep 29, 2012
|Stanford Supplement: Intellectual Vitality- Illuminati Conspiracy
Undergraduatesrp284cave - Sep 11, 2012 / KhanhZ - Sep 29, 2012
|"Fashion is not something that exists in dresses only" - Fashion Merchandising
2 - It's alright, I think you shouldn't start with the quote, that's such a cliche move, bet so many other...
Undergraduatesabrinanicole - Sep 27, 2012 / FITNEXT - Sep 28, 2012
|'Art is my rand hand' - experience Essay 250-500 Word
2 - The careful movements of my paintbrush fill the canvas with primary colors. Gradually, the contrasting colors blend together to...
Undergraduatewengsu78 - Sep 28, 2012 / krys10x - Sep 28, 2012
|'a team captain' - Extracurricular Essay Common App ADVICE
Undergraduatewengsu78 - Sep 23, 2012 / wengsu78 - Sep 28, 2012
|Experiences and concepts that make you intellectually excited - Earthship QB Essay
UndergraduateLeynorboard - Sep 28, 2012 / Leynorboard - Sep 28, 2012
|"the photograph" - MIT: Describe the world you come from (200-250 words)
2 - Your essay is really good! It caught my attention instantly and I know it will catch the attention of...
UndergraduateXeltar - Sep 28, 2012 / ruhama30 - Sep 28, 2012
|'My dream is to become a trauma surgeon' Describe yourself - college essay
3 - I tweaked it just a little. Any better? On October 28, 1994, in Seminole, Florida, a miracle happened; Matthew...
UndergraduateHannahAyleene - Sep 28, 2012 / HannahAyleene - Sep 28, 2012
|Statement of Purpose - University of Texas transfer essay *grammatical errors*
2 - Vietnam is one word, delete "so they did" in the first sentence it's redundant, explain what an "alteration shop"...
Undergraduatedianephm - Sep 28, 2012 / Xeltar - Sep 28, 2012
|'An incredible bond with an amazing group of people' Common App Essay -FIRST Robotics
3 - Ok, I've edited it a bit so here is the updated version. It's still a little long although not...
Undergraduatebellem1 - Sep 8, 2012 / bellem1 - Sep 28, 2012
|'standing at the podium' - UC: Prompt #2
4 - Your essay is really wonderful and nice to read. The introduction and concluding paragraphs are really nice and clearly...
Undergraduatelivelaughleslie - Sep 27, 2012 / cahillcahill - Sep 28, 2012
|FSU College Essay - The Importance of Leadership
3 - You have mentioned some really good points. And you should make a little elaboration of about your role at...
UndergraduateNFont - Sep 23, 2012 / cahillcahill - Sep 28, 2012
|Elaborate on a time when something you witnessed caused you to reflect on your hritag
2 - ...who almost made me lose my faith in my national identity. ....For some reason, I found the truth in...
UndergraduateNnorbu - Sep 27, 2012 / the optimists - Sep 28, 2012
|'I am a perfectionist' - QuestBridge - A significant experience
7 - I agree with Leynorboard! Your introduction paragraph is much better in your revised version. In reference to my style...
Undergraduatequando04 - Sep 23, 2012 / livelaughleslie - Sep 27, 2012
|'I see myself growing more mature as time goes by' QuestBridge Bio Essay
4 - well, there's one minor flaw in the conclusion :) 'Looking back at my childhood and the challenges I have...
Undergraduatequando04 - Sep 23, 2012 / Leynorboard - Sep 27, 2012
|Butterfly metamorphosis, Biographical Questbridge college Essay
5 - I saw the mistakes I made by comparing your two drafts with mine. Repeating words do sound horrible! Very...
UndergraduateLeynorboard - Sep 27, 2012 / quando04 - Sep 27, 2012
|Questbridge Biography - factors and challenges that have shaped your personal life.
UndergraduateAhndrahdee - Sep 27, 2012 / Ahndrahdee - Sep 27, 2012
|"One step closer to success" - why UCF?
2 - When I visited UCF I knew it was exactly where I wanted to be after I graduate high school.---I...
Undergraduatemariag1 - Sep 24, 2012 / EF_Susan - Sep 27, 2012
|'I have always stayed connected with my Indian culture' - UC Personal Essay
Undergraduatekrushi - Sep 24, 2012 / EF_Susan - Sep 27, 2012
|CommonApp Essay - Whiteboards and Teddy Bears - Teacher experiences
2 - I entertained myself for years with this childish pastime, but soon enough, people were asking me what I wanted...
UndergraduateNFont - Sep 24, 2012 / EF_Susan - Sep 27, 2012
|'I redesigned my algorithms' - Questbridge Essay
2 - I can tell you're excited about your interests, which is great. However, you could work a little on awkward...
UndergraduateStanfordhopeful - Sep 27, 2012 / pdelvalle7 - Sep 27, 2012
|'always helping people' - FSU learning essay admission 2012
Undergraduatearielheaton - Sep 18, 2012 / arielheaton - Sep 27, 2012
|How a bike's nature is similar to contemporary society and I
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|'part in the story' - FILM AND VIDEO TECHNOLOGY
2 - The way films unfolded always captured my imagination and has now led me to want a career in the...
Undergraduatetwitchtopsy - Sep 25, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 27, 2012
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