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|Temple Transfer Essay; 'received a phone call from Temple University'
4 - You should never start a sentence with the word 'Well.' It's even not an actual word - is it;...
Undergraduatebeelove - Sep 11, 2012 / ace - Sep 18, 2012
|'Two year work experience prior.. law' - Choose an issue of importance to you
NEW - After graduating school I'd like to enter to university to continue my education. But it was impossible because of...
UndergraduateMurgap78 - Sep 18, 2012 / — -
|'when I was child, story' - Write about a person that you admire
Undergraduatetakieu16 - Sep 18, 2012 / April April - Sep 18, 2012
|'Gangs as neighbors' - Bridgequest Struggle Essay
Undergraduatechas412 - Sep 14, 2012 / chas412 - Sep 18, 2012
|My goal is to become a successful engineer; Georgia Tech - CONTRIBUTION to Community
2 - Very good and to the point. Perhaps you should use a couple of paragraphs rather than one big paragraph....
Undergraduatellwf - Sep 17, 2012 / ace - Sep 18, 2012
|Most Embarrassing Situation In My Life
Undergraduatemonajha - Sep 12, 2012 / Isi - Sep 18, 2012
|'My parents were quite young when I was born' - Biographical- Questbridge
2 - For your essay, I would recommend focusing more on "showing" not "telling". It was very unfortunate that you had...
Undergraduateemy13 - Sep 8, 2012 / MrMaro - Sep 18, 2012
|COMMON APP ESSAY - EXPERIENCE AND IMPACT ON YOU
Undergraduatekeviny159357 - Sep 17, 2012 / devowalk - Sep 18, 2012
|'a better life for myself' - University of Florida essay
3 - "In fact, this obstacle aspired me to work harder." Should be "inspired" here. "...being the soul source of...
Undergraduateandrea31 - Aug 30, 2012 / devowalk - Sep 17, 2012
|'My handwriting is mine' - My Common App Topic of Choice
2 - Intriguing essay. You used an unconventional topic to make yourself stand out. In my opinion, you've earned brownie points...
Undergraduatelcpapili - Sep 17, 2012 / BachChaconne2 - Sep 17, 2012
|CommonApp Essay Beginning mainly for SYRACUSE UNIVERSITY
4 - I totally get what you're saying. Syracuse doesn't allow prospective film majors to submit a reel because the admissions...
Undergraduatesgrabie - Sep 11, 2012 / sgrabie - Sep 17, 2012
|Growing up with stereotypes -- common app essay
NEW - Any suggestions would be appreciated. Thanks in advance Final tossup. Last round of the tournament. Up against the...
Undergraduatecollege123 - Sep 17, 2012 / — -
|"Pole Dancer" Common App essay!
3 - this is hands down the funniest essay i've ever read. props to you for keeping it interesting and not...
Undergraduatebird0827 - Sep 15, 2012 / cayleyc - Sep 17, 2012
|UCF; "bump in the road" / qualities or unique characteristics do you possess
Undergraduatecedz - Sep 17, 2012 / cayleyc - Sep 17, 2012
|Novels as Lyrics. College Essay (UF Undergraduate Admissions)
2 - I find solace in the way words turn into music. Not literally, yet almost. There is a flow. A...
Undergraduatelindseytonn - Sep 6, 2012 / andrea31 - Sep 17, 2012
|University of California Prompt - Am I answering the question ?
2 - This is very good, but you didn't explain how your world has shaped your dreams. Also, you are doing...
Undergraduatenicedan - Sep 17, 2012 / janajackson - Sep 17, 2012
|Why should I consider becoming a CPA?
2 - I would consider pursuing a career in accounting. I think the main reason why I would consider becoming an...
Undergraduateiloveyuh16 - Sep 10, 2012 / andrea31 - Sep 17, 2012
|Impartial - one word to best describe my community - UC personal statement Promp
Undergraduatejanajackson - Sep 10, 2012 / janajackson - Sep 17, 2012
|'I went to a French school' - UC, Where you come from and your world.
3 - Pirateking Thank you very much for your advice! Aside from what you mentioned in your earlier comment, was there...
Undergraduatenorthnaomi - Sep 16, 2012 / northnaomi - Sep 16, 2012
|Sketching, painting, and drawing have become the vessels; UMCP;self-expression & why?
2 - Sketching, painting, and drawing have become the vessels that carry my perceptions into a physical representation which allows me...
Undergraduatematrushka1200 - Sep 16, 2012 / Pirateking - Sep 16, 2012
|'my community service hours' - Questbridge National College Match: Essay#1
NEW - Questbridge National College Match: Essay#1 Question:Tell us about an experience you have had or a concept you have...
UndergraduatePirateking - Sep 16, 2012 / — -
|skateboarding - over thousands of hours throughout the years - has shaped me
2 - Around the end of middle school I discovered skateboarding, and would subsequently have to wait till Christmas to get...
Undergraduatelevon - Sep 16, 2012 / Pirateking - Sep 16, 2012
|'graphic design and illustration' - Empire state college admission essay
2 - Overall it's a good essay, but it is a little bit repetitive. Since the college wants to know about...
Undergraduatephoenix45 - Sep 16, 2012 / TooDamn_Funky - Sep 16, 2012
|I am a "DI'er" - Speech and Debate Extracurricular Essay
2 - Dear Sir, Please feedback my paragraph of advantage of Internet to me Nowadays,the people using the Internet are...
Undergraduateannhrue - Sep 15, 2012 / Souksakhone - Sep 16, 2012
|'the daily time table' - 100 words: We know you lead a busy life, full of activities
4 - Busy following the daily time table i make for myself, I often find pleasure sitting alone with puppies and...
Undergraduateesarcosmos - Sep 1, 2012 / oanhmiss2 - Sep 16, 2012
|Do comment on relevance of topic; SHORT ANSWER ESSAY; temple in the courtyard
2 - The placid environment created by the Holy Bhagvat Geeta chants from the temple in the courtyard starts my day....
Undergraduateesarcosmos - Sep 11, 2012 / azrahman - Sep 15, 2012
|Formal memo to introduce self, mainly on academic and career
2 - Comments: There are some grammatical errors in this. For example, ...and I'm forced to change it.... should be: and...
Undergraduateedwardamin13 - Sep 4, 2012 / dwadhwa - Sep 15, 2012
|Compare and Contrast Essay; TOPIC: Apocalypse
2 - Perhaps you could compare/contrast atheist vs. christian views concerning the apocalypse? (Also, shouldn't your thesis statement introduce the two...
Undergraduateejayshun - Sep 12, 2012 / nikhi - Sep 15, 2012
|Is greatness born or made? - COLLEGE ESSAY SIGNIFICANT EXPERIENCE
3 - The essay is very good, but you did not elaborate enough on the topic. Your experience on how you...
Undergraduateellelopez - Sep 12, 2012 / Shay87 - Sep 15, 2012
|The Grandma Effect, My potential essay for college applications
Undergraduateroot - Sep 12, 2012 / Isi - Sep 15, 2012
|"An Ignored Voice"; The power went out
Undergraduatebunnybunsss - Sep 7, 2012 / bunnybunsss - Sep 15, 2012
|Emory University Suplement; spent many hours researching various universities
NEW - What are the unique qualities of Emory University, and the specific school(s) to which you are applying (Emory College...
Undergraduateafrosamurai1995 - Sep 15, 2012 / — -
|Pop Euro music, books, movies, weekday, weekend - Questbridge short answers
NEW - PLEASE REVIEW MY ANSWERS AND MAKE ANY ADJUSTMENTS! THANK YOU!! Short Answer (Please answer each of the following questions...
Undergraduaterussiannuzzy95 - Sep 14, 2012 / — -
|My name is Ayie. I am from Selangor; check my basic English
UndergraduateBudak88kampung - Sep 14, 2012 / chess1921 - Sep 14, 2012
|First reactions to my Yale essay- "let us get to know you better"
7 - That was terrific! Only thing I saw AT ALL: This was becoming stressful. Doubt had used the word ontological....
Undergraduatemalv1009 - Sep 3, 2012 / Guest - Sep 13, 2012
|Common Application Essay Critique- Global Citizen
2 - This is a novel essay, you obviously have the skills and I'm going to be highly critical because I...
UndergraduateNazkoont - Sep 13, 2012 / Guest - Sep 13, 2012
|'Photography Club' - Common App- Short Answer
4 - It all began when I joined the Photography Club in High School. I bought my first camera with the...
Undergraduatekanielk - Sep 13, 2012 / root - Sep 13, 2012
|'When I saw Tavita for the last time' - someone who has made an impact
NEW - I met Tavita my freshman year, in Floral Design 101. I thought she was absolutely ravishing, just a year...
Undergraduatekitkat2012 - Sep 13, 2012 / — -
|'amazing atmosphere both in and off campus' - U of Chicago Supplement-WHY U of C
6 - Oh that's nice, I'm just afraid they think I can't follow the simplest instructions Thanks XD...
Undergraduatezazie - Sep 11, 2012 / zazie - Sep 13, 2012
|Common Application Short Answer - Penpal relationships
3 - In my opinion, that is a very well written essay. It is grammatically and structurally correct. However, I...
Undergraduatewhfb231 - Sep 12, 2012 / kanielk - Sep 13, 2012
|Accounting formulas and textbooks - academic goals / personal global perspective
NEW - Please advise on my grammar for my essay. Having only learnt English as a second language is especially hard...
Undergraduateyindra - Sep 12, 2012 / — -
|UT Austin SOP - experience of moving from a private school to a public school
3 - mmcnulty25, thank you so much for your feedback! I actually loved your Shaq comment so much that that is...
Undergraduateamcd - Sep 11, 2012 / amcd - Sep 12, 2012
|'Stick Man' - Topic B UT Undergrad
2 - "Hey Stick Man! What inventions did you make today? A UFO perhaps?" a kid from the other side of...
UndergraduateEdCao123 - Sep 6, 2012 / DRitrosky - Sep 12, 2012
|Observational essay about a teacher. Gravely in need of revision.
2 - The students walked back and forth across the polished concrete floor, covered with clay particles. The fluorescent lights were...
UndergraduateKaceykat - Sep 12, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 12, 2012
|Common Application Short Answer: Therepeutic Horseback Riding Volunteering
2 - I think the sentence "But this is no ordinary stable" is too informal. Maybe say something like, "It is...
Undergraduatepurplesloth - Sep 7, 2012 / hpanther13 - Sep 12, 2012
|Applicataion for private HS any tips ...thanks
2 - Hi, thanks for the critique...thanks also for reminding us of the unsung heroes ...but there are really some corrections...
Undergraduateabe - Sep 11, 2012 / Shayke_96 - Sep 12, 2012
|A sibling born - Questbridge- Significant experience, risk, or ethical dilemma
Undergraduateemy13 - Sep 4, 2012 / emy13 - Sep 11, 2012
|'Poor Papaw' - Common App essay. Important Person topic
4 - All in all, I found this to be a great essay. It demonstrates your own work experience, answers the...
Undergraduatebrkirk51 - Sep 8, 2012 / mmcnulty25 - Sep 11, 2012
|UCF Essay - Advice? - Obstacle, Family History, Choose to Apply, Qualities
4 - One more thing, try to look at someone else's essay, for college, this might help brainstorming for number 3....
UndergraduateVcP19 - Sep 10, 2012 / chess1921 - Sep 11, 2012
|family is what most important. Stanford essay.
3 - thank you so much, I'll try to re-organize the whole essay.but could you like show an example...
UndergraduateShayke_96 - Sep 11, 2012 / Shayke_96 - Sep 11, 2012
|I'm Ruger; Biographical Essay - Just a couple tips?
NEW - Hey there everybody. Just looking for a couple tips/advice on this biographical essay. It would be helpful if any...
UndergraduateARuger - Sep 11, 2012 / — -
|'Some groups come naturally'; university of michigan supplement essay
4 - Okay, so please how exactly would you phrase the third sentence you mentioned so that it would be smooth....
UndergraduateShayke_96 - Sep 11, 2012 / Shayke_96 - Sep 11, 2012
|'I wanted to go BIG' - UT admission essay
Undergraduatemariamalmasri - Sep 4, 2012 / Shayke_96 - Sep 11, 2012
|'Japan culture woke me up' - Bioenvironment APPLICATION FORM
Undergraduatehuongnguyen3107 - Sep 10, 2012 / huongnguyen3107 - Sep 11, 2012
|"Aviation"- the word in which I found male domination; Chasing High Altitudes
UndergraduateShayke_96 - Sep 10, 2012 / JaydeGrace - Sep 10, 2012
|'work interview with M&M' -Commonapp - Activity experience write-up
3 - After being shortlisted, I was called by M&M. Although the first interview of my life, it went smooth. I...
Undergraduatesashreeksth - Sep 10, 2012 / livehope - Sep 10, 2012
|"Strenght lies in differences, not in similarities" - International Student
26 - Thank you a lot !...
UndergraduateFreenchy - Jul 31, 2012 / Freenchy - Sep 10, 2012
|Although my main passion is engineering, I also have a strong affinity for history
Undergraduateazrahman - Sep 7, 2012 / esarcosmos - Sep 10, 2012
|What personal experiences have changed the way I think about myself?
2 - The personal experience that changed the way you think about yourself was not having your father 'in your life'....
UndergraduateFrankieCline - Sep 6, 2012 / Rajiv - Sep 10, 2012
|Application Essay for a College Entrepreneurship Program
UndergraduateZach10za - Sep 9, 2012 / Aengj - Sep 9, 2012
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