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|'different racial background' - Common App Choose an Issue of Importance
6 - I recommend you write about how that experience changed you, how it shaped your motivations and desires. you seem...
UndergraduateJeffries - Aug 25, 2012 / Doom - Aug 27, 2012
|'my choice in economics as my major' - UT Purpose Statement
3 - I respectfully disagree with the above poster. The fact you are so candid in your writing reflects your character....
Undergraduateguscepeda11 - Aug 22, 2012 / Doom - Aug 27, 2012
|What outrages you? what are you doing about it? college short answer
3 - Write about whatever it is you can write about, as long as the essay isnt boring, lame, cliched etc...
Undergraduateabby123 - Oct 2, 2011 / Liebe - Aug 27, 2012
|"Knowledge is power" - U Michigan/ extracurricular activities or work experiences
2 - Hello, This is a very impersonal and boring essay. Talk about a specific experience while volunteering at the...
Undergraduatedandaman17 - Aug 26, 2012 / admission2012 - Aug 27, 2012
|(TransferEssay- 1 Semester)- Reasons for Leaving & Academic Goals at UCONN :)
6 - Thanks Ann! Glad you liked it, reassurance is such an amazing thing! So I'm going to submit it and...
UndergraduateMrAndy1 - Aug 20, 2012 / MrAndy1 - Aug 26, 2012
|'understanding of the kind of person I am' - Georgia Tech Essay 2 Letter
2 - If i was reading your essay, as a potential roommate i wouldn't think twice about bunking with you! It...
UndergraduateAldo111 - Aug 25, 2012 / Optimus - Aug 26, 2012
|Your reasons for wanting to serve as a Peace Corps Volunteer
2 - It might have been helpful (for those reviewing your statement) to state what the challenges that you are addressing...
Undergraduateesibinski - Aug 25, 2012 / leanne2012 - Aug 25, 2012
|"The world I come from" -Uc Prompt (dark and twisted)
2 - I love the topic!! I also come from a background of substantial struggle which I finally overcame after several...
UndergraduateFaith4 - Aug 25, 2012 / MrAndy1 - Aug 25, 2012
|UT Austin Admittance Essay -" Address A Problem"
8 - As a member of the very generation that I am referring to, I believe I'vehave had a front-row seat...
Undergraduateaustenburnsred - Aug 22, 2012 / MrAndy1 - Aug 25, 2012
|'being perfectly different' - Common App Prompt (diversity)
2 - The essay reads well. You've told me all these great things. However, the essay is asking me to take...
Undergraduatesoundofjoy - Aug 25, 2012 / Paalexander - Aug 25, 2012
|' Majoring in biology, cosmetic surgery' - Michigan - Why Transfer Writing Portion
UndergraduatePaalexander - Aug 23, 2012 / Paalexander - Aug 25, 2012
|Common app 4: The Emerald Outcast of Oz
3 - Actually, it's funny you should ask that; "for good" is a song from the musical that I was referencing....
UndergraduateNikkiEmL - Aug 23, 2012 / NikkiEmL - Aug 25, 2012
|'I learned to love' - Person who impacted your life essay for college apps.
3 - Excellent! Now I know his name at the start, but I still get hooked by intrigue and my attention...
UndergraduateHiraSaleem - Aug 24, 2012 / dorothy3692 - Aug 25, 2012
|The Tale of Grant Wood - perspective writing about anything
Undergraduatesaurabh93 - Jan 29, 2012 / saurabh93 - Aug 25, 2012
|'enthusiastic about physics and life' - UVA supplement
Undergraduateellecc - Aug 23, 2012 / ellecc - Aug 25, 2012
|Lessons in Life; my academic/personal journey to academic succes. transfer essay
UndergraduateBianca - Aug 21, 2012 / Bianca - Aug 25, 2012
|'The Great Mistake' - Taekwondo Essay for Common Application
Undergraduateskysmash - Jul 16, 2012 / skysmash - Aug 24, 2012
|UMD Supp - Citizen Journalism Question Philip Defranco
Undergraduatecanigetinhere - Aug 24, 2012 / canigetinhere - Aug 24, 2012
|Cheerleading, strong, devoted - how I have potential for success as a college student
2 - Make it a story. You're asking me to take your word for everything.bim sure admissions have heard about cheer...
Undergraduatechs2013 - Aug 24, 2012 / Paalexander - Aug 24, 2012
|'the best engineering school in the country' - UIUC Engineering Transfer Essay
Undergraduaterybazeppelin - Aug 23, 2012 / rybazeppelin - Aug 23, 2012
|Admittance Essay from a Archaeology student hopeful, UT Austin
3 - Thank you! What do you think of it as an essay in general? Too much information, or not enough?...
Undergraduatemelmcc - Aug 22, 2012 / melmcc - Aug 23, 2012
|ESSAY: "The Ebony-haired stranger"; someone who has made an impact on your life
3 - goodness, thank you so much for your feedback. i will DEFINITELY check yours out too. thank you once again!...
Undergraduatebunnybunsss - Aug 23, 2012 / bunnybunsss - Aug 23, 2012
|'rural haven developed' - University of Michigan Supplement Essay Draft
3 - I really like your essay!! I think it's great to write your village as your community. It's great...
Undergraduatereilly1331 - Aug 16, 2012 / ellecc - Aug 23, 2012
|'Am I dreaming?' - China and I - help and advice on my essay
Undergraduatehongshi - Aug 23, 2012 / ah_zafari - Aug 23, 2012
|'She is a full-time CNA' - a person/woman I admire
UndergraduateCookie - Aug 22, 2012 / beibeibajin - Aug 23, 2012
|'my identity is not lost' - The best outcome for a Personal Statement
2 - Hello Tyresha, Best essay I have read so far this admissions Cycle. Congrats! Your essay masterfully combines a...
Undergraduatelivetink - Aug 22, 2012 / admission2012 - Aug 22, 2012
|Common App Long Essay about immigration and global community
UndergraduateDeNeil10 - Aug 22, 2012 / dixiej - Aug 22, 2012
|'learning, caring and global awareness' effectiveness of my Florida State Admissions
2 - Because of this attitude, leaders attract like minded people who support ideas and movements, and from these people, positive...
Undergraduatethenugey - Aug 21, 2012 / EF_Susan - Aug 22, 2012
|Common App - 'Ty demands and receives respect' - influential person
4 - Great start, but you don't show how Ty has influenced you. Briefly talk about Ty's career and talk more...
Undergraduatedixiej - Aug 21, 2012 / 13Oseik - Aug 22, 2012
|'Years of rowing' - UVA - My Favorite Word and Why? (250 words)
Undergraduateyungmoni - Aug 21, 2012 / dixiej - Aug 22, 2012
|'A long and painful journey' - Personal Statement- Med School Add. Esaay.
3 - Hi, Thank you so much for your time and your help. Appreciated. I will definitely try to incorporate...
Undergraduatecsok - Aug 22, 2012 / csok - Aug 22, 2012
|'short four-hour bus ride, Maryland' - FIT Undergrad
Undergraduatelaurjacks - Aug 20, 2012 / Liebe - Aug 22, 2012
|"Changing Attitudes"- UT admission
Undergraduatefrizzoe - Aug 21, 2012 / Liebe - Aug 22, 2012
|'Be happy with what you already have' - Essay A for UT austin
2 - Hello, Pan) Babies are cute and simple, but there is a thing I can't agree with you about babies,...
Undergraduatebp9594 - Aug 21, 2012 / KhanhZ - Aug 21, 2012
|"Acceptance and Trust" - personal quality, contribution, etc.
3 - HI~~ I personally think that it would be the best if you use other pronouns instead of "you," or...
Undergraduatecherry_09 - Aug 18, 2012 / ginaJ - Aug 21, 2012
|'I had to work harder' - Undergrad Entry Essay
3 - Yeah, I agree with the previous comment. To be honest, I did not know that your essay, was an...
Undergraduatebigboi403 - Jul 24, 2012 / Debbycorner - Aug 21, 2012
|'He is my step dad' - Somenone who has had a significant influence on you
UndergraduateJenix - Aug 21, 2012 / Jenix - Aug 21, 2012
|'still indecisive' - Duke University Supplement Essay
2 - Hello Erin, Great start to this essay! It hits the major aspects that Duke will look for. The...
Undergraduateairinnful - Aug 21, 2012 / admission2012 - Aug 21, 2012
|William and Mary Essay - Macaroni and Cheese (addiction essay)
Undergraduatelexi214 - Aug 19, 2012 / admission2012 - Aug 21, 2012
|'Punch. Kick. Kick. Repeat' - briefly elaborate on one of your activities
14 - Nancy, thanks a lot, but the limit includes spaces as well, so I can't add anything, only revise...
UndergraduateKhanhZ - Aug 5, 2012 / KhanhZ - Aug 21, 2012
|'Fusion energy ' - ISSUE OF IMPORTANCE FOR UT
Undergraduateadaveago - Aug 20, 2012 / admission2012 - Aug 21, 2012
|Outcast -Admission essay to UT, issue of importance
2 - Hello Amanda, As I have stated in several other posts, applicants need to be as unique as possible....
Undergraduatewelc2774 - Aug 20, 2012 / admission2012 - Aug 20, 2012
|"go where life leads you but never forget" - being a part of two cultures
2 - Hello, This essay is pretty good. It is original and get's your point across. The only feedback I...
Undergraduatenfs1994 - Aug 20, 2012 / admission2012 - Aug 20, 2012
|My Goals in Life - Flagler College Admission Essay
2 - As I'm myself new here and younger than you, according to your post, I'll just point out a few...
Undergraduatekbeeck - Aug 20, 2012 / stephenie - Aug 20, 2012
|'interested in current events' - UMD Supplement- Citizen Journalism 300 words
2 - It was with this story that made me realize that any individual could influence public opinion by the manner...
UndergraduateJonessayslayer - Aug 19, 2012 / EF_Susan - Aug 20, 2012
|Common App Short Answer- Guitar and Exposure to Jazz in Music Club
2 - I really like it! You explain everything in full details, well done! I wouldn't add or suppress anything....
UndergraduateBluesPresidente - Aug 20, 2012 / db2730 - Aug 20, 2012
|'human beings love to talk' - UMD Supplement Self-Expression Essay 300 words
2 - I think you definitely accomplished what you set out to do: express importance of free speech and tie it...
UndergraduateJonessayslayer - Aug 19, 2012 / BluesPresidente - Aug 20, 2012
|'what I've done in my high school time" - Something about yourself... Penn State
9 - Hi @dumi and everyone else, I've been super busy lately so I didnt have time to go to essayforum....
Undergraduatenhuvuong - Jun 17, 2012 / nhuvuong - Aug 19, 2012
|Hedy Lamarr, the Actress and Inventor (Write about a person who influences you)
UndergraduateHimekoY - Aug 13, 2012 / HimekoY - Aug 19, 2012
|'Fried Chicken' - Significant Events That Have Defined You
3 - Thanks Jennifer. :D I followed your suggestions before I submitted my paper. I hope they will be. My future...
Undergraduateena_anda - Aug 6, 2012 / ena_anda - Aug 19, 2012
|"FIRE!" - QB ESSAY
UndergraduateMarkiaSmith - Aug 17, 2012 / minam - Aug 18, 2012
|"Satisfy" -----describe the world you came from
1 - Prompt #1 (freshman applicants) Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school -...
UndergraduateginaJ - Aug 18, 2012 / — -
|'AP Chemistry Class' - Significant Person Influence - Common App Essay
2 - As I walked down the halls of Benjamin N. Cardozo High School during my junior year, I was anticipating...
Undergraduateazndemon0627 - Aug 17, 2012 / mohammad007 - Aug 18, 2012
|Columbia Common App- Naguib Mahfouz
Undergraduaterehabaw - Aug 17, 2012 / ah_zafari - Aug 17, 2012
|the "Barnardian" title - Barnard Transfer Essay
3 - Hello Jessica, There are several major issues with this draft. It is almost as though you have written...
UndergraduateChiaroscuro_jr - Aug 14, 2012 / admission2012 - Aug 16, 2012
|'the mascot of Olin was a phoenix' - Supplement- Is Olin a good fit for you? WHY?
3 - This is a great essay! A few comments: -You might want to spell out NIST -Replace hyphens with...
UndergraduateJonessayslayer - Aug 16, 2012 / tracked89 - Aug 16, 2012
|Common App extracurricular: Volunteering at a Hospice
4 - Thanks for the edits! I completely agree with Kevin and I tried to revamp my essay. Here is a...
Undergraduatetracked89 - Aug 16, 2012 / tracked89 - Aug 16, 2012
|'multiple events serving my community' - FSU admission essay 2012
UndergraduateJazmine21 - Aug 16, 2012 / Jazmine21 - Aug 16, 2012
|'Having a dream of becoming a doctor' - essay I want to become a...
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|My step-dads influence made me who i am- UF prompt feedback
UndergraduateAvera214 - Aug 16, 2012 / Jonessayslayer - Aug 16, 2012
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