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|UCF Application essay - "You're supposed to get good grades"
NEW - 2. How has your family history, culture or environment influenced who you are? 3. Why did you choose to...
Undergraduateandrea0999 - Sep 24, 2012 / — -
|Figuring out who I am through failure- UT Austin Prompt
2 - I started my essay, mindlessly typing a generic essay, it was then that realized that this wasn't the...
Undergraduatebeccaoxanne - Sep 16, 2012 / andrea0999 - Sep 24, 2012
|Questbridge - Concept That Intellectually Excites Me; Doctor Gary Meier's class
4 - I think that this essay is good enough. You should now review your application and get ready to send!...
Undergraduatehannahlorelei - Sep 23, 2012 / quando04 - Sep 24, 2012
|UF Essay - Visiting El Salvador; meaningful experience
Undergraduateandrea0999 - Sep 24, 2012 / andrea0999 - Sep 24, 2012
|Discussion on positive and negative effect of advertising -feedback
6 - debate without any foreseeable conclusion in the near future --- its kind of redundant to say in the future...
Undergraduatevoldemort - Sep 11, 2012 / soccersick - Sep 24, 2012
|UC prompt#1; I loathed going to the doctors, fearing they would harm me
3 - Thanks for your comment. I have rewritten it different way. Please review let me know my spelling and grammatical...
Undergraduatekman - Sep 5, 2012 / kman - Sep 24, 2012
|Common App Essay: The Value of Travel (My travels to Colombia)
Undergraduateblags66 - Sep 24, 2012 / Sehall - Sep 24, 2012
|'Mid-Ohio Food Bank' - Common App- Evaluate a significant experience- Volunteering
2 - Hello Heather, I like your essay but there may some spots where things can be improved. In particular...
Undergraduatehpanther13 - Sep 12, 2012 / EF_Susan - Sep 24, 2012
|Grew up in both Little Haiti and Biscayne Blvd. College application essay
3 - Hi :) I have some suggestions for your essay.. I grew up being useaccustomed to the sounds of...
Undergraduatechelcie95 - Sep 24, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 24, 2012
|Essay personal statement for dental school - the ability to help people in need
2 - I think you have done well with your paper. There is one thing that you could omit-- "I'm young...
Undergraduatedenyssev - Sep 23, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 24, 2012
|'After the divorce' - UT Undergraduate Transfer Statement of Purpose
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|I will try to elaborate on why I would make a good roommate; Stanford Supplement
Undergraduateschlotti - Sep 23, 2012 / schlotti - Sep 24, 2012
|University of Florida- My undergraduate essay on CAPD (feedback)
UndergraduateGxfire - Sep 23, 2012 / sgagan - Sep 24, 2012
|My learning evolution ('fountain pen fanatic') - common app
2 - Your essay is fantastic. I love the message you have conveyed and the way in which you accomplished that....
Undergraduatecubanmissile - Sep 10, 2012 / NFont - Sep 23, 2012
|Texas A&M - "Psychological Breakthrough"
3 - Thanks for the feedback! I'll read through yours and provide some as well. If anyone else is reading my...
UndergraduateChrisjoochun - Sep 22, 2012 / Chrisjoochun - Sep 23, 2012
|Common App: "Indicate a person..." The Finest Legacy.
3 - I think it should be "beside me" instead of "besides me." But as krys10x said, you should say maybe...
Undergraduateelton_lou44 - Sep 23, 2012 / blags66 - Sep 23, 2012
|A concept you that intellectually excites you - Asian Boys Like Rice
2 - Hi fellow VN student! First, this essay is about your assiduousness and the importance of your education (correct me...
UndergraduateMrMaro - Sep 23, 2012 / quando04 - Sep 23, 2012
|"Mommy, I'm dying!" - Concept that intellectually excites you. QUESTBRIDGE APP
4 - I love the example that you used. Fantastic essay start that will have the Deans of Admission engaged to...
Undergraduaterussiannuzzy95 - Sep 22, 2012 / quando04 - Sep 23, 2012
|Common App Topic 2 : Discuss an Issue Importance to You- "The Climb"
Undergraduatekrys10x - Sep 23, 2012 / krys10x - Sep 23, 2012
|Questbridge biograph. essay; "Your education is the most important thing to us"
2 - "without any view of the future ahead (of) me except what I would" you forgot the "of". It seems...
UndergraduateSainoob - Sep 22, 2012 / chin2413 - Sep 23, 2012
|'two boxes at Christmas' - A significant event that defined who I am - QB Essay
UndergraduateMrMaro - Sep 23, 2012 / uscuscusc - Sep 23, 2012
|"What is diversity?" - Diversity and How I can Contribute ESSAY
5 - P.S... The attitude of servitude that you display in this essay is great. I think that colleges are really...
Undergraduatecdunk - Sep 23, 2012 / hannahlorelei - Sep 23, 2012
|'Christmas toy drive' - Significant Event & Its Impact On Me Essay
Undergraduatehannahlorelei - Sep 23, 2012 / hannahlorelei - Sep 23, 2012
|Biographical Essay "Don't be pushed by your problems; be led by your dreams"
Undergraduatehannahlorelei - Sep 23, 2012 / MrMaro - Sep 23, 2012
|Steadying the ball; Short Answer on Basketball for the Common Application
UndergraduateDDougall - Sep 23, 2012 / cdunk - Sep 23, 2012
|College essay- my mother's Schizophrenia has impacted my life?
4 - The intro really grabs my attention... because I had no idea where it was going. (: Haha, really can...
UndergraduateGuest - Jun 15, 2012 / hannahlorelei - Sep 23, 2012
|Steve Irwin and his impact- Texas A&M Topic A essay
Undergraduatendiduch - Sep 23, 2012 / ah_zafari - Sep 23, 2012
|Learning through desire - transfer essay from Umass to UTampa.
Undergraduateconnorjeepzj - Sep 23, 2012 / ah_zafari - Sep 23, 2012
|"Say cheese!" The flash of the camera
7 - Danielle, Overall, your grammar is flawless and the content of your essay reflects deep and well depicted thoughts....
UndergraduateDDougall - Sep 21, 2012 / meng1020j - Sep 23, 2012
|'Ocean Rescue Lifeguard'; Common App Work Experience Essay
2 - You sound a little bit like the victim, plainly state the experience and develop what you've learned off of...
Undergraduatewalker54 - Sep 23, 2012 / Guest - Sep 23, 2012
|I choose to be a pharmacist for so many reasons.
2 - There are so many careers in the health field in which a person can choose from. Maybe say this:...
Undergraduatemerna92 - Sep 20, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 23, 2012
|High technology, mental healthcare - Life today is easier and more comfortable
Undergraduateiamviola - Sep 23, 2012 / ah_zafari - Sep 23, 2012
|'countless adults and teens + My Tia Gema' - essay (impact/important person)
2 - ...From her stories, she has molded me into the person she always wanted to be; educated, bilingual, and determined....
Undergraduateceleste_07 - Sep 17, 2012 / sweetbitterrose - Sep 23, 2012
|"We must go where the work is" - QuestBridge Biographical - National Match
3 - Thank you for your comments russiannuzzy95, they are very encouraging. I will work on your suggestion!...
Undergraduatephasetwozero - Sep 20, 2012 / phasetwozero - Sep 23, 2012
|'My longtime love for mathematics is the main reason' - Questbridge application.
2 - "Initially this concept was hard for me to understand, she OFFERED ME credit..." Math is a bridge leading to...
Undergraduatedraxagar - Sep 22, 2012 / Stanfordhopeful - Sep 23, 2012
|General Personal Statement for addmissions and scholarships.
4 - forgive me, but here's an even more updated version Shallow people believe in luck. Strong people believe in...
Undergraduatesweatypi - Sep 22, 2012 / sweatypi - Sep 23, 2012
|'My mom' - my commonapp essay about who had impact on ur life
Undergraduatetopjackie - Sep 17, 2012 / topjackie - Sep 22, 2012
|'going to live with you' - Stanford Letter to Roommate
UndergraduateKhanhZ - Aug 31, 2012 / KhanhZ - Sep 22, 2012
|College App essay - flute playing - critique needed
2 - Katelyn, This is a really well done, well written essay. On a quick read through nothings jumping out...
Undergraduatekaykaykatelyn - Sep 22, 2012 / EF_Susan - Sep 22, 2012
|"Brandon - My true Best Friend" -Texas A&M Topic A
2 - These past three years have been three of the most difficult years of my life.T hree years ago, in...
Undergraduatendiduch - Sep 22, 2012 / DRitrosky - Sep 22, 2012
|Why Major and Why College combined (1000 characters)
2 - you don't have to keep repeating USC...the essay is specialized for that university and the admissons ppl know that,...
Undergraduateericasmily - Sep 22, 2012 / Birdiee - Sep 22, 2012
|"Diligence is the mother of good fortune" - Questbridge Essay
4 - Overall, the idea of the essay is good; especially, how you focus on the American Dream...colleges love stuff like...
Undergraduatemeng1020j - Sep 22, 2012 / DDougall - Sep 22, 2012
|Oh! The Places that Fate Will Take You---Peace Corps Application Essay #1
2 - I want to serve as a Peace Corp volunteer I want to direct my energy towards something that has...
Undergraduatesoystar342 - Sep 21, 2012 / chessman567 - Sep 21, 2012
|'Experiencing success' - University of Florida
2 - I find this intro odd, but it works. btw, it's "tales" not tails. congrats on your success story, but...
UndergraduateJDMONTY - Sep 8, 2012 / srp284cave - Sep 21, 2012
|'Psychology and Economics studies' - My Cornell supplemental essay
6 - Hello, This essay is very juvenile and unfocused. Your are applying to Cornell, one of the nations premier...
UndergraduateShayke_96 - Sep 13, 2012 / admission2012 - Sep 21, 2012
|University or Oregon Admissions essay
2 - You should rephrase this "I want to make a change in others lives by becoming a Pediatrics specialist."...
UndergraduateKNB - Sep 14, 2012 / srp284cave - Sep 21, 2012
|UChicago essay #1, "desire for particular type of learning" - prestige, name?
4 - well!! I think you've got my point more or less.. and u've been emphasising on the "learning" part quite...
Undergraduatemmcnulty25 - Sep 11, 2012 / tanvi3595 - Sep 21, 2012
|'I got my AP score' - UChicago nemesis essay, creative narrative email
4 - Even though there was no confusion as you say, I think you should base your story on something more...
Undergraduatemmcnulty25 - Sep 11, 2012 / KhanhZ - Sep 21, 2012
|'My brother made me stay quiet' - Someone that impacted your life
UndergraduateRamshaI - Sep 20, 2012 / — -
|Is abortion too controversial for the common app essay?
2 - Hi, Cameron) I think this topic is controversial for an application essay, however the problem with the essays about...
Undergraduatehighskoolgrad56 - Sep 19, 2012 / KhanhZ - Sep 20, 2012
|"Third Cultural Kid" - essay for major admission
3 - Jenny, Thank you so much for your help with grammar errors. Do you have any comments or suggestions for...
Undergraduateuniessay - Sep 11, 2012 / uniessay - Sep 20, 2012
|'fired from my fast-food job' - Supplement essay to my application
3 - Thank you ! Would you change anything else ? The structure, content, is the story as a whole appealing...
UndergraduateFreenchy - Sep 19, 2012 / Freenchy - Sep 20, 2012
|My opinion on class ranking, for the ApplyTexas B essay choose an issue of importance
2 - I am just a number in the eyes of a college admissions office. Too negative, maybe you can re-word...
UndergraduateGoodmattenator - Sep 16, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 19, 2012
|1 in 88 children in the world are affected by Autism
2 - When I was about 5, my youngest sister was diagnosed with Aspergers Syndrome, a form of autism that affects...
Undergraduateamcd - Sep 16, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 19, 2012
|'a bundle of energy' - Common App- Extracurricular
2 - At a young age,I dressed up and put on shows for the neighbors.toI performed under the bright lights at...
Undergraduatestephanie8895 - Sep 16, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 19, 2012
|'fingers on a keyboard' - University of Texas English Undergraduate SOP
2 - I really liked your essay but is the introduction necessary ? I think it was good but isn't it...
Undergraduatesomethingawful - Sep 11, 2012 / Freenchy - Sep 19, 2012
|"Capturing Life" - COLLEGE APPLICATION ESSAY
2 - A little clumsy. In general, you'd probably have to organize your thoughts. You focus on too many...
UndergraduateDDougall - Sep 18, 2012 / ace - Sep 18, 2012
|Review and Criticize my College Essay introduction
4 - First off thanks so much for taking the time to read my intro! And I completely agree, I think...
Undergraduatetmr17 - Sep 18, 2012 / tmr17 - Sep 18, 2012
|Temple Transfer Essay; 'received a phone call from Temple University'
4 - You should never start a sentence with the word 'Well.' It's even not an actual word - is it;...
Undergraduatebeelove - Sep 11, 2012 / ace - Sep 18, 2012
|'Two year work experience prior.. law' - Choose an issue of importance to you
NEW - After graduating school I'd like to enter to university to continue my education. But it was impossible because of...
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