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|Common Application Short Answer - Penpal relationships
3 - In my opinion, that is a very well written essay. It is grammatically and structurally correct. However, I...
Undergraduatewhfb231 - Sep 12, 2012 / kanielk - Sep 13, 2012
|Accounting formulas and textbooks - academic goals / personal global perspective
NEW - Please advise on my grammar for my essay. Having only learnt English as a second language is especially hard...
Undergraduateyindra - Sep 12, 2012 / — -
|UT Austin SOP - experience of moving from a private school to a public school
3 - mmcnulty25, thank you so much for your feedback! I actually loved your Shaq comment so much that that is...
Undergraduateamcd - Sep 11, 2012 / amcd - Sep 12, 2012
|'Stick Man' - Topic B UT Undergrad
2 - "Hey Stick Man! What inventions did you make today? A UFO perhaps?" a kid from the other side of...
UndergraduateEdCao123 - Sep 6, 2012 / DRitrosky - Sep 12, 2012
|Observational essay about a teacher. Gravely in need of revision.
2 - The students walked back and forth across the polished concrete floor, covered with clay particles. The fluorescent lights were...
UndergraduateKaceykat - Sep 12, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 12, 2012
|Common Application Short Answer: Therepeutic Horseback Riding Volunteering
2 - I think the sentence "But this is no ordinary stable" is too informal. Maybe say something like, "It is...
Undergraduatepurplesloth - Sep 7, 2012 / hpanther13 - Sep 12, 2012
|Applicataion for private HS any tips ...thanks
2 - Hi, thanks for the critique...thanks also for reminding us of the unsung heroes ...but there are really some corrections...
Undergraduateabe - Sep 11, 2012 / Shayke_96 - Sep 12, 2012
|A sibling born - Questbridge- Significant experience, risk, or ethical dilemma
Undergraduateemy13 - Sep 4, 2012 / emy13 - Sep 11, 2012
|'Poor Papaw' - Common App essay. Important Person topic
4 - All in all, I found this to be a great essay. It demonstrates your own work experience, answers the...
Undergraduatebrkirk51 - Sep 8, 2012 / mmcnulty25 - Sep 11, 2012
|UCF Essay - Advice? - Obstacle, Family History, Choose to Apply, Qualities
4 - One more thing, try to look at someone else's essay, for college, this might help brainstorming for number 3....
UndergraduateVcP19 - Sep 10, 2012 / chess1921 - Sep 11, 2012
|family is what most important. Stanford essay.
3 - thank you so much, I'll try to re-organize the whole essay.but could you like show an example...
UndergraduateShayke_96 - Sep 11, 2012 / Shayke_96 - Sep 11, 2012
|I'm Ruger; Biographical Essay - Just a couple tips?
NEW - Hey there everybody. Just looking for a couple tips/advice on this biographical essay. It would be helpful if any...
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|'Some groups come naturally'; university of michigan supplement essay
4 - Okay, so please how exactly would you phrase the third sentence you mentioned so that it would be smooth....
UndergraduateShayke_96 - Sep 11, 2012 / Shayke_96 - Sep 11, 2012
|'I wanted to go BIG' - UT admission essay
Undergraduatemariamalmasri - Sep 4, 2012 / Shayke_96 - Sep 11, 2012
|'Japan culture woke me up' - Bioenvironment APPLICATION FORM
Undergraduatehuongnguyen3107 - Sep 10, 2012 / huongnguyen3107 - Sep 11, 2012
|"Aviation"- the word in which I found male domination; Chasing High Altitudes
UndergraduateShayke_96 - Sep 10, 2012 / JaydeGrace - Sep 10, 2012
|'work interview with M&M' -Commonapp - Activity experience write-up
3 - After being shortlisted, I was called by M&M. Although the first interview of my life, it went smooth. I...
Undergraduatesashreeksth - Sep 10, 2012 / livehope - Sep 10, 2012
|"Strenght lies in differences, not in similarities" - International Student
26 - Thank you a lot !...
UndergraduateFreenchy - Jul 31, 2012 / Freenchy - Sep 10, 2012
|Although my main passion is engineering, I also have a strong affinity for history
Undergraduateazrahman - Sep 7, 2012 / esarcosmos - Sep 10, 2012
|What personal experiences have changed the way I think about myself?
2 - The personal experience that changed the way you think about yourself was not having your father 'in your life'....
UndergraduateFrankieCline - Sep 6, 2012 / Rajiv - Sep 10, 2012
|Application Essay for a College Entrepreneurship Program
UndergraduateZach10za - Sep 9, 2012 / Aengj - Sep 9, 2012
|Com.App. Essay- weak ending for a such a topic? experience impact prompt
UndergraduateSam617 - Sep 9, 2012 / Sam617 - Sep 9, 2012
|'Offered many opportunities' - University of Central Florida application
4 - It doesn't make sense, I have always a hardworking person and I can overcome any and all obstacles in...
Undergraduatecking - Sep 8, 2012 / chess1921 - Sep 9, 2012
|'Lessons from my friend' - 12TH GRADE COLLEGE ESSAY CHECK
7 - Nice work, you have improved upon this essay since the last draft I read. I think you have great...
Undergraduatelizziemando - Sep 5, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 9, 2012
|'Autistic kids' vs. 'Sports injuries' - common app essay
3 - Thank you so much! yeah that part sounded a little awkward to me too, but thanks for the suggestions!(:...
Undergraduatejelly7 - Sep 9, 2012 / jelly7 - Sep 9, 2012
|Radiography Admission essay - important piece in the healthcare system
Undergraduatem2kla - Sep 9, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 9, 2012
|'Bangor airport and handshakes' - College Admission Essay
2 - You have a great essay! Nice work, very descriptive. You may want to explore ways to make the introduction...
UndergraduateDanamal - Sep 9, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 9, 2012
|Personal Reflection - "WHO AM I" (grade 12 philosophy class)
2 - Grammatically and expression wise, the essay is well written. It is extremely truthful and openly presented without and pretense....
Undergraduateneuroticartiste - Sep 6, 2012 / srikanthpetro - Sep 9, 2012
|Semester at Sea - Seeing Through Other's Eyes
NEW - Below is my essay for admission for Semester at Sea. Having learnt English as a second language, I am...
Undergraduateyindra - Sep 9, 2012 / — -
|'I was dumped with suggestions and views' - significant challenge questions
3 - Thanx mariam almasri that was really helpful. Please can anyone answer me the three points I have...
Undergraduateesarcosmos - Sep 8, 2012 / esarcosmos - Sep 8, 2012
|'keep on learning' - Common App Transfer Essay Prompt
5 - Thanks for everyone's input. Felix, about your comments on reasons why I decided to do those things, I...
Undergraduatejksai - Aug 30, 2012 / jksai - Sep 8, 2012
|'searching for my dream' - U Michigan Supp
3 - And The LSA Plan is just there to provide me with those opportunities. You may want to omit the...
Undergraduateellecc - Aug 24, 2012 / emy13 - Sep 8, 2012
|My older brother made a behemoth impact on my life/ Common App/Significant Influence
3 - Its good you should just emphasis on chronology otherwise that's all good and yup well written ......
Undergraduatebisonbabebri95 - Sep 8, 2012 / esarcosmos - Sep 8, 2012
|The Fried Chicken Inspiration- UNDERGRADUATE ADMISSION SUPPLEMENTAL ESSAY
3 - I totally agree with you about most families making such poor dietary choices. I have to say that I...
Undergraduatebackenziemrown - Sep 6, 2012 / tau - Sep 7, 2012
|'I couldn't read or speak' - My inspiration that helped me overcome obstacles
UndergraduateMacrusa - Sep 5, 2012 / tau - Sep 7, 2012
|Someone who influenced me University of Texas @ Austin; The art of communication
4 - great essay it makes alot of sense and the background info seems abt right i have a bestfriend from...
Undergraduatepsav - Sep 3, 2012 / mariamalmasri - Sep 7, 2012
|Personal Essay: VISIT FROM MADAMOISELLE ALOPECIA
3 - my head could not have being a hairstyle....i think you mean or should put been a hairstyle instead of...
Undergraduateveyronalexander - Sep 4, 2012 / mariamalmasri - Sep 7, 2012
|MIT places great value in freedom, daring and creativity! Which department /program ?
Undergraduateadwuga - Sep 6, 2012 / adwuga - Sep 6, 2012
|College Essay - "A Battle Fought Together"
3 - Anki145, Thanks so much for taking your time out to edit my essay ! It truly means alot.I will...
Undergraduatesummerk56 - Sep 5, 2012 / summerk56 - Sep 6, 2012
|having hard time picking between two college app essays...
Undergraduatepcvrz34g - Sep 6, 2012 / SweetFaith - Sep 6, 2012
|About me essay (competitive swimming) - making it more formal, and smoother transititions
NEW - Sometimes, Mrs. Roberston, I really desire to punch you in the face. I learn a lot of life lessons...
Undergraduatephysics - Sep 6, 2012 / — -
|Certainty is what matters. stanford essay.
7 - I don't like the Once upon a time but the quote is certainly beautiful. It really shows your character...
UndergraduateKhanhZ - Sep 4, 2012 / Macrusa - Sep 5, 2012
|My family's conflict and how I was influenced (determination and fairness)
11 - Thanks...
UndergraduateMacrusa - Aug 13, 2012 / Macrusa - Sep 5, 2012
|'With my older brother' - Texas State Admissions
3 - The overall message of this essay is great. It grasps the readers attention when you talk about how your...
Undergraduatehcos711 - Sep 5, 2012 / lizziemando - Sep 5, 2012
|BFA Graphic Design; I received my Associates Degree in Music and Video Business
Undergraduatetbone0813 - Sep 4, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 5, 2012
|'I was shy.' - University of MIchigan supplement
Undergraduateellecc - Aug 22, 2012 / ellecc - Sep 5, 2012
|UNC Supplement - "The Vaccine"
Undergraduatehesterfm - Sep 4, 2012 / dumi - Sep 5, 2012
|How did you hear about "competitive school"?
7 - Well, if it is 300 chars instead of 300 words, you can't afford to waste any letters. Jump to...
UndergraduateRicky927 - Sep 3, 2012 / Dactylic126 - Sep 5, 2012
|'a passion of studying Economics' -my personal essay one on a significant experience.
5 - I like how you explained why economics really relates to you and your history with it, but I feel...
Undergraduateshidooh - Aug 25, 2012 / emy13 - Sep 4, 2012
|'Operation on human heart' - Meaningful event - affect your college experience?
UndergraduateDRitrosky - Sep 3, 2012 / DRitrosky - Sep 4, 2012
|WHY YALE SHORT ANSWER; 'Fred Plaut Recording Studio and The Shubert Centre'
4 - Your revision is better than the original--less name-dropping is a plus. Names are cheap to get and require less...
UndergraduateRechy - Sep 3, 2012 / calvin46689 - Sep 4, 2012
|'my non curricular stuff' - 300 words for UIUC's essay#2
NEW - UIUC's ESSAY #2: In an essay of 300 words or less, tell us something about yourself that isn't covered...
Undergraduatebaneblades - Sep 4, 2012 / — -
|Rutgers Essay-Religious Diversity
Undergraduatejh2013 - Sep 2, 2012 / thaonguyen1901 - Sep 4, 2012
|UVA Supplement Essay - The Word; "Festive"
2 - I love this short essay. I don't have any comments about your idea because it's enough special. I just...
Undergraduatenathancbritt - Sep 3, 2012 / thaonguyen1901 - Sep 4, 2012
|Engineering is where my passion lies; MECHANICAL ENGINEERING
4 - i think you should add a little more elaboration on your every point trying to be made then your...
Undergraduategaowenai - Sep 3, 2012 / mariamalmasri - Sep 4, 2012
|'Dark Materials Trilogy' - NYU: What Intrigues You - Parallel Universes
2 - Hello, vicepres18 First of all indicate your real name, so nobody dares to copy your work. Second, i think...
Undergraduatevicepres18 - Sep 3, 2012 / KhanhZ - Sep 4, 2012
|'Our values match' - Colorado College - supplemental essay - why CC?
2 - Your sup essay is good and shows that you find out many information before applying. It displays your full...
Undergraduatenatpete - Sep 2, 2012 / thaonguyen1901 - Sep 4, 2012
|Babson Roommate essay: tip of the iceberg
Undergraduatesh90210 - Sep 4, 2012 / dumi - Sep 4, 2012
|'direction for the future' - Common app number 1, peer leaderhship!
2 - Overall, this is a good essay, but there's something abstract: "many new experience" "significant experience" You should make them...
Undergraduateashleymanoff - Sep 3, 2012 / nnrn55 - Sep 4, 2012
|Summer of Medical and Dental Educational Program at Yale University Medical School
3 - Thank you for your feedback! These are my top five schools (out of 12) Amherst, Johns Hopkins, Wesleyan, The...
Undergraduatefefe176 - Sep 3, 2012 / fefe176 - Sep 3, 2012
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