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|I want to pursue Mathematics. The reasons for my inclination are many more than what I can express..
3 - @abdon786 Hi there, I think you should consider these things -The reasons for my interest and inclination are many...
Undergraduateabdon786 - Dec 14, 2016 / Hoaidepchi - Dec 14, 2016
|From a plagiarized song to the song of the year - from a failure to the success
3 - Rohit, the essay asks about your failure so the slant of your presentation is wrong. The failure presented in...
Undergraduaterohittiwari - Dec 14, 2016 / Holt - Dec 14, 2016
|My great singing performance in the Talent Show of Harvard AUSCR Summit for Young Leaders in China
UndergraduateJessica Xie - Dec 12, 2016 / rohittiwari - Dec 14, 2016
|Describing an Activity for University Admissions - Opinions Come Hither
5 - Normally, the 50 word statement is too short for you to include anyone else in the description. So, yes,...
UndergraduateCDuke93 - Dec 14, 2016 / Holt - Dec 14, 2016
|In your opinion, what are the five characteristics of a successful person? Supplementary essay.
8 - @Holt Don't worry, Mary. They are different schools. I just wanted to have your opinion on this. Thanks, anyways....
Undergraduatesus_007 - Dec 10, 2016 / sus_007 - Dec 14, 2016
|There is only one thing that makes a dream impossible to achieve. It is the fear of failure.
2 - Rohit, kindly provide the full prompt requirement as a reference for the editing of your essay. It is too...
Undergraduaterohittiwari - Dec 14, 2016 / Holt - Dec 14, 2016
|"Sorry son I can't afford your higher education" - Common App Essay on transition to adulthood
2 - Rudra, you are supposed to be discussing an event that marked your transition from childhood to adulthood. That is...
Undergraduateksingh155 - Dec 14, 2016 / Holt - Dec 14, 2016
|7 Prime ministers changed after the end of monarchy on 23rd December 2007.
13 - I spotted a few capitalization errors that you should watch out for. Specifically, change the C in Country to...
Undergraduatemaruko42 - Dec 13, 2016 / Holt - Dec 14, 2016
|I gradually felt a big part missing from me.
9 - @Holt I agree with what you are saying. I'll redo the essay keeping in mind your suggestions. Thank you...
Undergraduatefall2017 - Dec 14, 2016 / fall2017 - Dec 14, 2016
|Admission Essay - 250 Words, Describe More About An Activity You Do
6 - In all honesty, I did not see the objective of your explanation within your statement. I reviewed the prompt...
UndergraduateCDuke93 - Dec 13, 2016 / Holt - Dec 14, 2016
|What do you and XYZ university have in common?(250-350 words)
7 - @Holt Sure thing,Mary. Would you please comment more on my"Help with mine"article below !!! Thanks :)...
Undergraduatesus_007 - Dec 13, 2016 / sus_007 - Dec 14, 2016
|Since a very young age, I have learned to be independent and make decisions on my own
UndergraduatePri901 - Dec 14, 2016 / Pri901 - Dec 14, 2016
|'the program uniqueness and location of UBC'. Your Opinion on my UBC Admissions Question Response
6 - @Holt @mualla Thank you to both of you for reading and evaluating my writing. I have made corrections...
UndergraduateCDuke93 - Dec 12, 2016 / CDuke93 - Dec 14, 2016
|Living in Dubai, I wasn't a part of a tight-knit community like I was when living in Los Angeles
2 - Hashem, is there a chance that you can provide us with the complete prompt that you were given? I...
Undergraduatehashemmm - Nov 30, 2015 / Holt - Dec 14, 2016
|UMich short response, describe a community. "I am the boat."
2 - Quin, you can actually delete more than 8 words by better presenting your second paragraph. There are many redundancies...
Undergraduateiloveyogurt - Jan 3, 2014 / Holt - Dec 14, 2016
|My desire for a liberal arts education with a perfect academic and social environment balance.
3 - Hello Maruko42, Since I have always longed (...) everyone studies what they love. **I'm not too sure what...
Undergraduatemaruko42 - Dec 13, 2016 / CDuke93 - Dec 13, 2016
|Transition to Childhood: Encouraging Pat: "That was a really excellent presentation"
3 - Tara, you are writing a transition to adulthood essay. What you wrote doesn't really qualify for this essay prompt...
UndergraduateTechRinser - Dec 13, 2016 / Holt - Dec 13, 2016
|Columbia supplement question- Do I answer the question or is it too vague?
2 - You are asking us to determine if your response to the prompt question is appropriate or vague. I would...
Undergraduategarmin610 - Jan 6, 2014 / Holt - Dec 13, 2016
|Duke, Pratt College of Engineering Essay: "Why do you want to study at Duke"
3 - Noah, reverse the paragraphs in your essay. The second paragraph immediately offers information as to why you are opting...
Undergraduatethugzook - Dec 13, 2016 / Holt - Dec 13, 2016
|Supportive Family - SOP; undergraduate exchange program (USEFP)
2 - Roonham, this essay is too lighthearted to be an effective statement of purpose. In fact, your purpose for wishing...
Undergraduateroonham - Nov 16, 2013 / Holt - Dec 13, 2016
|Becoming independent - challenge you have faced and the steps you have taken to overcome this
3 - Hello,Brianalevett.I'm an undergraduate and major in English.I also want to be helped via this website.So at first,I must answer...
Undergraduatebrianalevett - Nov 28, 2016 / Doomsdayrefugee - Dec 12, 2016
|The Haunted House Next Door
2 - Nilbert, when you are writing a descriptive horror story, you have to pay attention to the words that you...
Undergraduatennilbertgati - Nov 13, 2016 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|'academic challenges' International Transfer Student Essay to UMCP
2 - Catherine, since you already have 2 years college experience, you should be reflecting upon that experience in your essay...
Undergraduateazureskyline - Jan 5, 2014 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|Trying to reach the stars one year into my Journey in the US...should I not?
9 - Giulio, this is a very literary look at your background. It speaks volumes of where you came from, what...
Undergraduategiuzu98 - Dec 11, 2016 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|This university has dedicated itself to "nurturing honest, eager, and critical minds" I can offer it
5 - I really think this essay is well written. I think if you're sure of your capabilities then why not...
Undergraduatenerdella - Dec 10, 2016 / nazzia30 - Dec 11, 2016
|The sole intention of the education is to equip the students with as much knowledge as possible
5 - Knowledge is one thing, but don't forget about critical thinking - without it knowledge is useless (you won't be...
Undergraduatezemo1993 - Dec 9, 2016 / Rich Monte - Dec 11, 2016
|Aptly described by a friend as "tenacious", my determination and dogged devotion to any task
3 - Lyndsay, I have to say that you have written a very humorous essay here. Your depiction of yourself as...
Undergraduatenerdella - Dec 10, 2016 / Holt - Dec 11, 2016
|Describe a religious, cultural, or family tradition you can share with the Colgate community.
Undergraduatesus_007 - Dec 8, 2016 / sus_007 - Dec 10, 2016
|Extracurricular essay- can someone help me correct or improve it
8 - Vinesh, your statement is too broad in concept and does not fully focus on one aspect of the extra...
Undergraduatekervina - Dec 9, 2016 / Holt - Dec 10, 2016
|My girlfriend. This girl changed me as a person. Penn State Personal Statement
7 - Hai, you have written the wrong response for the prompt. This essay is not about other people and their...
Undergraduatehle2000 - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 10, 2016
|Application answer with fun. Need some help and advice to improve and make it funnier
3 - Excellent work Kerwin! I was really drawn into the events that unfolded in the locker room that day. I...
Undergraduatekervina - Dec 8, 2016 / Holt - Dec 8, 2016
|A Bird in the hand is worth two in a bush
2 - Mohamoud, did you accidentally post the wrong response for this prompt? There is nothing in the essay that you...
Undergraduateproud - Dec 8, 2016 / Holt - Dec 8, 2016
|My exchange year in Orange, MA was overwhelmingly full of things for me to learn from
2 - Arhum, don't tell the reviewer that this experience made you transition from childhood to adulthood. Show him that the...
UndergraduateArhum - Dec 8, 2016 / Holt - Dec 8, 2016
|Intra-university transfer statement detailing why you want to join School of Information Studies
5 - You should definitely change the path of your presentation. While there is only a single major offered be university,...
UndergraduateMehzah - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 8, 2016
|Finally stepping out of my comfort zone- help with my motivational statement for Peace corps!
3 - Marilu, your essay has the beginnings of a strong discussion as to why you were motivated to join the...
Undergraduatemsb08010 - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 8, 2016
|Recount a time when something really made you laugh. Smith and Colgate University supplemental
3 - Nice essays AmbigaY!!For the first essay, I think it is not simple to tell that story in only 200...
UndergraduateAmbigaY - Dec 7, 2016 / Amatis250 - Dec 7, 2016
|Boston University supplement essay: tell us why BU is a good fit for you, why you apply?
11 - @Holt This version is awesome!!!! As I read this version, I feel it really smooth and it seems...
UndergraduateJessica Xie - Dec 5, 2016 / Jessica Xie - Dec 7, 2016
|I come from a family of chefs- MIT essay
8 - Ambigay, you are concentrating the essay on yourself. That is not what the essay wants you to present. This...
UndergraduateAlvinos - Dec 4, 2016 / Holt - Dec 6, 2016
|I have a dual personality. What would it mean to you to call yourself an AU Eagle?
5 - @Holt Thank you for helping me out. Since the word limit is only 100 words, I am struggling to...
Undergraduatefall2017 - Dec 6, 2016 / fall2017 - Dec 6, 2016
|Why Information and Decision Science essay
3 - @zuzzaa02 Hi, Zuzanna! I agree with @Holt. I think you might miss the point here. According to...
Undergraduatezuzzaa02 - Dec 5, 2016 / Jessica Xie - Dec 6, 2016
|Ever since I was small, I have been intrigued by discussions (SUA Essay Prompt)
Undergraduatefall2017 - Nov 28, 2016 / fall2017 - Dec 6, 2016
|How my inability to speak has affected me in negative ways
6 - See if this conclusion works for you. My religious belief caused me to be bullied by so-called "friends"...
UndergraduateUnBound - Dec 4, 2016 / Holt - Dec 6, 2016
|I'm writing about my interest, talent in mathematics. 'Some students have a background...'
2 - Antonio, in my opinion, the essay will work best if you remove the reference to the way that you...
UndergraduateLOGA92116 - Dec 6, 2016 / Holt - Dec 6, 2016
|Frog. Deefrog. Froggy. UVA Essay: Favorite Word (Odd but unique essay) (250 words)
UndergraduateDeepakG - Nov 30, 2016 / DeepakG - Dec 5, 2016
|I was excited to learn about the Liberal Studies Core Program at NYU. "Why NYU" Writing Supplement
5 - The essay question states: WHY NYU but from your response you are responding to THIS IS NYU. I guess...
Undergraduatelillianasss - Nov 30, 2016 / chizy7 - Dec 4, 2016
|I have never thought I would give a torn apart birthday card.
2 - David, I would appreciate it a lot if you can present us with the full prompt requirement as soon...
UndergraduateBluePillow - Dec 2, 2016 / Holt - Dec 2, 2016
|Family is the most valuable thing in my heart - UT Austin topic A
UndergraduateLope55816 - Dec 2, 2016 / Lope55816 - Dec 2, 2016
|An accident at school. My role model has always been my mother.
2 - Unibileg, this is one essay that should not be focused on you are the topic of the essay. Your...
Undergraduateenkhtuvshinun - Dec 1, 2016 / Holt - Dec 2, 2016
|I am a manifest renaissance man. The long term scholastic and professional ambitions
2 - Numi, since this program concentrates on engineering (bio-engineering?) it would be best if you limit your long term academic...
Undergraduaterurus - Dec 1, 2016 / Holt - Dec 1, 2016
|Both my parents separated just when I was about 3 months. Surroundings in which you were raised.
3 - Hello Elena.. I will give you suggestion of your writing. ... CPS and reported my mother boyfriend[my mother's...
Undergraduateelenamarie99 - Dec 1, 2016 / l1h4h - Dec 1, 2016
|Rice University - cultural perspective essay
2 - Allana, why are you discussing only food when you should be discussing how you have a unique cultural identity...
Undergraduatesleepycorndogs - Dec 1, 2016 / Holt - Dec 1, 2016
|Anecdote for Essay: ( Which one are you Again?) Memoirs of an Identical Twin
3 - The participants, unbeknownst to them, included our classmates and teachers.Our participants in this devious study were our unwitting students...
UndergraduateJasmen156 - Nov 30, 2016 / sleepycorndogs - Dec 1, 2016
|It only took about 10 years of public schooling for me to finally appreciate science.
4 - It only took about ten years of public schooling for me to finally appreciate science as not just...
Undergraduatesleepycorndogs - Nov 29, 2016 / sleepycorndogs - Dec 1, 2016
|"Table No. 4: 1 Langoustine Ceviche & 2 medium-rare veal filets" extracurricular activities essay
6 - @Holt Thank you very much holt, I really loved your version. If there's anything I could do for u,...
Undergraduatekervin - Nov 30, 2016 / kervin - Nov 30, 2016
|Hopes and Dreams... The fate of my father and countless others in Kathmandu
3 - Thank you for your suggestion. I have submitted this essay to one college.Is it leaning more towards breaking...
Undergraduategyanas - Nov 30, 2016 / gyanas - Nov 30, 2016
|I am quirky myself. Why Tufts? Which aspects prompt your application
UndergraduateKutluasiye - Nov 30, 2016 / Holt - Nov 30, 2016
|"My brother to my left, My brother my right. Together we stand, Together we fight."
UndergraduatePickleM1 - Nov 29, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 30, 2016
|Today experience matters much more than credentials in the labor market. ProTrack Engineering Co-op
UndergraduateNgwane - Nov 28, 2016 / Ngwane - Nov 30, 2016
|Essay pertaining to a life expeirience that influenced character
2 - Andreas, there seems to be an exaggeration on your part regarding the accident. You describe the minivan as having...
Undergraduatealovemarvel - Nov 30, 2016 / Holt - Nov 30, 2016
|Personal Profile for application (applied sciences)
3 - Eric, rather than simply telling the reviewer that you were an introvert, you should have shown instances when other...
Undergraduatebontol - Nov 30, 2016 / Holt - Nov 30, 2016
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