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|Mesmerizing world of Chemistry - Personal Statement on my activities and plans for next years
Undergraduatepamveerapen - Feb 17, 2017 / Holt - Feb 18, 2017
|Something went out not like I expected
4 - It is not something that irrelevant mate, it is just you add more information that is unnecessary. Also, you...
UndergraduateAABMOSALAM1998 - Feb 15, 2017 / ichanpants89 - Feb 16, 2017
|Queen's Commerce: Describe the most important constructive criticism you have received
2 - @jlee99 Hi, jessica. I rewrite your essay. Of course, I am not good at writing a essay, I just...
Undergraduatejlee99 - Feb 15, 2017 / ilskyilsky - Feb 16, 2017
|Personal insight questions for applying schools.
4 - Please find few grammatical errors. Every students here have sad stories punish them probably because she feels her...
Undergraduatejohnny165234 - Feb 14, 2017 / sinchana2017 - Feb 15, 2017
|How helping others helps you? MIT essay
5 - I would not have finished it earlier than I did in my previous essays without your help, thank you...
UndergraduateAABMOSALAM1998 - Feb 15, 2017 / AABMOSALAM1998 - Feb 15, 2017
|Tell us about your experience learning English. How often do you use English in your daily life?
4 - Valeria, at the point where the essay asks you "How often do you use English in your daily life?",...
Undergraduatevcerpasalas - Feb 15, 2017 / Holt - Feb 15, 2017
|Queen's University Commerce Application Essay
2 - Jessica, try to expand a bit more on the athletic sponsorship aspect as something that you hope to enter...
Undergraduatejlee99 - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|My dream school. The spirits of MIT's community is unlike anywhere else
5 - Atia, your response really shows that you did not understand the prompt and, of course, it is impossible to...
UndergraduateAABMOSALAM1998 - Feb 14, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Feb 14, 2017
|Alzheimer's unit. Guidance needed in editing peace corps motivation statement
6 - The only part of this essay that needs more development is the first paragraph. In my opinion, you need...
Undergraduatemimi009p - Feb 11, 2017 / Holt - Feb 12, 2017
|Describe an exceptional achievement and lesson learned in your academic experience.
4 - Hi @atrix, I am studying currently in a Singapore university (NUS). I feel what the university looks for...
Undergraduateatrix - Feb 11, 2017 / Malavika Venu - Feb 12, 2017
|Personal Statement - A requirement to get a Letter of Acceptance from University
4 - Bagu, I apologize if I did not make myself clear enough for you. The dash sign signifies a continued...
Undergraduatebagusetyawan - Feb 11, 2017 / Holt - Feb 12, 2017
|"One Last Chance"- Transfer essay for MIT
3 - Hi Abdoelmoniem, I have read your writing. I am gonna review based on your content. Actually, your writing...
UndergraduateAABMOSALAM1998 - Feb 9, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 9, 2017
|My high school courses of Chemistry, Physics and Biology intrigued my desire to pursue Pharmacy
Undergraduatemickeyyyy - Feb 6, 2017 / mickeyyyy - Feb 6, 2017
|Soak up knowledge - University of Washington Personal Statement 2017
4 - Lin, there is a discrepancy in your opening statement. You claim that you enrolled at Seattle Central College to...
Undergraduatetzuwen - Feb 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 5, 2017
|My most memorable experience: 21st November, just after my birthday; Colony Cricket League
6 - Hi Jnanam, it certainly feels good on our part to know that you are confident enough to say that...
UndergraduateJnanam Shah - Feb 24, 2014 / Holt - Feb 5, 2017
|Why are you interested in The College of Wooster? College Application Essay
Undergraduatemarkja - Jan 29, 2017 / markja - Feb 2, 2017
|"Youth connectors of future" Program by Swedish Institute.
5 - @Shamsher sing The line from the second paragraph "Predominantly ... poverty" is quiet wordy. Try to break it into...
UndergraduateShamsher sing - Feb 1, 2017 / aravee - Feb 2, 2017
|Young entrepreneur experiences - FIT entrance essay
Undergraduateheliza - Feb 1, 2017 / maitouyen1 - Feb 2, 2017
|I Was Bullied as a Kid - Essay Question: Tell us more about yourself.
3 - @TGorsi Hi! Your work is really good but it has some problems.Firstly, grammatical problem.For example, Eventually, I was tired...
UndergraduateTGorsi - Feb 2, 2017 / maitouyen1 - Feb 2, 2017
|Desi. Common Application Essay - "Underrepresented"
2 - Hi Izzy, you wrote a very interesting personal essay that can best be used as a background story, not...
UndergraduateIzzyRen - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 2, 2017
|Me, as a part of the strategic planning board of one of the multinational corporations
14 - @Holt May thanks for your continuous support during preparation of those essays. I'd like to come back to you...
UndergraduateAhmed_Sanad - Jan 29, 2017 / Ahmed_Sanad - Feb 1, 2017
|Essay for Yale Young Global Scholars summer program
6 - Good work Marianne! This is the concluding paragraph that you should definitely use in the essay. It provides the...
UndergraduateMarianneB - Jan 30, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|Minority in a diversity -------UW Mad------- Something unnoticed, importance to me.
3 - Merged: 'What is life, but a constant struggle to live?' Consider something unnoticed. My Past. UW Madison ...
UndergraduateNaty - Jan 19, 2017 / NataliaSotelo - Feb 1, 2017
|I belong to the community of honor guard members
5 - Cheng, before you launch into the discussion of the way the honor guard functions as a team and as...
UndergraduateMWC - Jan 31, 2017 / Holt - Jan 31, 2017
|From a homebody to the active body. UW Madison Essay -- Something important but unnoticed
Undergraduatebarney - Jan 18, 2017 / barney - Jan 30, 2017
|A letter on the reasons why I need a scholarship
Undergraduatediamante - Jan 22, 2017 / diamante - Jan 30, 2017
|UIUC Transfer | Passionate about Aerospace; Applying to Mechanical instead
2 - Bassel, try to impress the reviewer with your final paragraph by portraying a definite research idea that you can...
UndergraduateBAJ1997 - Jan 29, 2017 / Holt - Jan 30, 2017
|Stopping the spread of invasive species
3 - Jonathan, before you launch into the discussion of how to stop the spread of illegal fish in the Northern...
UndergraduateJohnnyk5432 - Jan 29, 2017 / Holt - Jan 30, 2017
|Personal User Manual: Introducing Yourself to Your Instructor
2 - Vaidehi, I am sure that the term "joint family" makes perfect sense in your vernacular language. However, it is...
Undergraduatevaidu_2000 - Jan 29, 2017 / Holt - Jan 29, 2017
|I really want to earn this chance; Exchange student program - self-introduction
Undergraduatemuggy - Jan 24, 2017 / maitouyen1 - Jan 27, 2017
|I've been told that I'll never make it... Fashion Institute of Technology admissions essay
2 - Imani, the personal statement for FIT always has one pivotal requirement that your essay currently underrepresents, that of your...
UndergraduateImanijo - Jan 27, 2017 / Holt - Jan 27, 2017
|Applying in Turkish Universities, expectation from studying in Turkey and express the future plans
2 - Alinda, your response is good. However, it requires editing. Remember that you cannot start an academic response with the...
UndergraduateAlindaputri - Jan 26, 2017 / Holt - Jan 26, 2017
|Exchanging ideas and sharing experiences. Applying in scholarship, Essay about my interests.
12 - @Alindaputri Meet with new people is fun for me. I do believe that this sentence is irrelevant. And I...
UndergraduateAlindaputri - Jan 9, 2017 / Ahmed_Sanad - Jan 26, 2017
|Medical Dietetics Undergraduate Application Personal Statement - 300 words of my life
4 - Hi Danielle, it is my honor to have you use my revision in your paragraph. I believe that your...
Undergraduateroberts1641 - Jan 25, 2017 / Holt - Jan 26, 2017
|Describe the factors that have most influenced you and your hopes and dreams.
9 - Charlotte, I can tell that you did your best to deliver a totally new essay that would best suit...
Undergraduatecharzbk - Jan 15, 2017 / Holt - Jan 23, 2017
|1. How'd you like to learn about by attending this conference?
4 - Van, based upon the instructions / expectations of the conference hosts, it seems that there is a particular set...
Undergraduatebawimang - Jan 23, 2017 / Holt - Jan 23, 2017
|'the biggest leap of my life' - Fashion Institute of Technology / Fashion Business Management essay
4 - Maya, the only relevant portion of your essay in terms of the prompt requirement does not start until paragraph...
Undergraduatemayakay - Dec 11, 2016 / Holt - Jan 23, 2017
|7 billion individuals. What goes Unnoticed in My Life and Why It's Important to Me
3 - Tara, the topic that you chose to discuss is interesting, but turned out to be too broad in scope...
Undergraduateleafury - Jan 22, 2017 / Holt - Jan 23, 2017
|MIT UPDATES- working as a chemical engineer
6 - Diva, I am confused by the declaration that you made in the first paragraph. Who has the BSC from...
Undergraduatedivalo - Jan 21, 2017 / Holt - Jan 23, 2017
|NUS Asean Scholarship Personal Statement-Key qualities.
4 - Lim, there are still some major points of correction in your essay that require an increased word count on...
Undergraduatedesinlim - Jan 20, 2017 / Holt - Jan 22, 2017
|Transfer essay: "I want an intellectually stimulating education at a research-oriented school"
3 - In this case, The approach should be mentioning your career goals with concrete points and how University of Illinois...
Undergraduateskazo - Jan 21, 2017 / Hjamil - Jan 21, 2017
|My Penn Supplement Essay: How is it?
UndergraduateNeppenn - Jan 20, 2017 / Neppenn - Jan 20, 2017
|Young Hands - my childish enthusiasm at my very fingertips. Common App Personal Statement
3 - Anthea, I am not sure why you are discussing your musical inclination in this essay. How does this relate...
Undergraduatetchaikovsky - Jan 18, 2017 / Holt - Jan 18, 2017
|How I overcame my fear of public speaking - UBC Business Tech Management Personal Profile
4 - @anxjos. Is quite okay. But my little addition is that yiu should say you have always looked for an...
Undergraduateanxjso - Jan 14, 2017 / Knockout - Jan 17, 2017
|'the choice to change the world' Spelman College Transfer Essay
Undergraduatemayline87 - Jan 8, 2017 / mayline87 - Jan 17, 2017
|Loyola Marymount Supplement - The primary purpose of education
3 - Selin, like Ichan said, you have to get your essays into the Urgent thread if you have a short...
Undergraduatesweetsenior - Jan 16, 2017 / Holt - Jan 17, 2017
|Virginia tech - Our motto is UT Promise. How is service to others important for you?
2 - Nathan, Ut Prosim which is the Latin motto of Virginia Tech literally means "That I may serve". The prompt...
UndergraduatenathanL - Jan 16, 2017 / Holt - Jan 17, 2017
|A talk with an ex-homeless person - UBC personal profile
6 - I think your essay could get much stronger if you emphasized how you felt when you heard that man's...
UndergraduateDluusional - Jan 14, 2017 / sweetsenior - Jan 16, 2017
|Investing in human development through education and research for national energy defense
5 - Zaki, since this is a very specific application prompt, I believe that you should focus on the possible hypothesis...
Undergraduatemasktaz - Jan 8, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|Project with Syrian Kids - critical thinking story / Why LMU? (LMU Supplements)
3 - Selin, due to the one essay per thread policy of the forum, you will only receive a review for...
Undergraduatesweetsenior - Jan 15, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|USC supplement:describe a time where I have to collaborate to accomplish more than I could by myself
3 - Jiang, what is the purpose of your organization or online magazine? Aside from the name of the organization, you...
UndergraduateBennyoooo - Jan 15, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|My experience of selling samosa taught me to be optimistic... UBC Pharmacy
3 - Alsa, the first thing that you have to change in this essay is the reference to "we". The essay...
Undergraduatetaroto - Jan 14, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|Mini-essay for my UBC application's personal profile. Problem and/or an unfamiliar situation.
6 - The new 2nd paragraph is better focused, even though it is not as lengthy as we hoped it could...
Undergraduatedavkang - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|FASHION INSTITUTE OF TECHNOLOGY - Creative Photography Essay
5 - Olivia, your narrative focuses too much on the photography journey that you are taking. Now, depending upon whether or...
Undergraduatelgates12 - Jan 14, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|Application Essay - Describing Experience which taught me about myself and/or those around me
6 - Christopher, it is alright for you to use the same response for different essays in different university and college...
UndergraduateCDuke93 - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|UBC Business Tech Management Personal Profile, Unfamiliar Situation
5 - Karin, The situation and solution to the problem that you discussed both times is too elementary and does not...
Undergraduateanxjso - Jan 14, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|Providence College Supplemental essay: Finding the ultimate truth
Undergraduatengokhoa99 - Jan 14, 2017 / Holt - Jan 14, 2017
|USC supplement: when I'm exposed to a new perspective
2 - Jiang, what you wrote is a personal introspection essay. While I applaud your ability for self-analysis and your desire...
UndergraduateBennyoooo - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 13, 2017
|Aspects of Colorado College which attracted my attention. Why this College?
2 - Batjin, the essay that you developed is well thought out and really displays admirable reasons for wishing to attend...
Undergraduatel3atjin - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 13, 2017
|My university essay which delivers more info about me, my life, struggles and achievements
5 - Try to find something really special and unique about your background, that way it won't sound like ordinary essays....
UndergraduateAbdulZ1997 - Jan 12, 2017 / l3atjin - Jan 13, 2017
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