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|'person conscious of of people's feelings' - family history, culture or environment
Undergraduatesdavis23 - Feb 10, 2012 / sdavis23 - Mar 8, 2012
|'Critical parts of the nursing role' - College of Nursing Essay
Undergraduatehickske2 - Feb 27, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Mar 8, 2012
|"One day you will have to manage the company" - (COMMON APP) Transfer Essay
2 - A nice structured essay I must say! If this was the type of your application essay and you got...
Undergraduatejvila - Feb 27, 2012 / krishnasapkota - Mar 8, 2012
|'a Broadcast Journalist' - Common App Personal Statement (transfer)
2 - ...and the fact that I was in college in Tallahassee stacked the odds against that I wouldme even being...
Undergraduatenatalieanng - Mar 1, 2012 / EF_Susan - Mar 8, 2012
|'study about the lithium-ion batteries' - Transfer: University of Pennsylvania
NEW - Considering both the specific undergraduate school to which you are applying and the unique aspects of the University of...
Undergraduatemoongtajoo - Mar 8, 2012 / — -
|'Growing up in Oregon' - Semester at Sea
4 - wow that's really good! you did a good job tying your past experiences and future career into what you...
Undergraduatehgrierson - Mar 4, 2012 / loflo - Mar 7, 2012
|'the chance to come and live in the United States' - Essay writing by a French
Undergraduatechameau - Feb 28, 2012 / chameau - Mar 7, 2012
|'necessity is the mother of invention' - Stanford's intellectual vitality
NEW - Let me know what you guys think. The broken clock was a comfort. A totem of progression, it...
Undergraduatedardar91 - Mar 7, 2012 / — -
|'family doctor' - SUNY Plattsburgh and Rutgers University
3 - Thank you for sharing your essay. I hope I haven't overcorrected the essay. I tend to do that. Medicine...
UndergraduateCKC1818 - Feb 27, 2012 / chalumeau - Mar 6, 2012
|Elaborating on an extracirricular activity: Film
2 - I really like the way you wrote this! Every motion picture is a masterpiece, whether it is deemed...
Undergraduatelisasou - Mar 1, 2012 / EF_Susan - Mar 6, 2012
|The numbers tell a story - Waterloo university
NEW - Please tell us about your educational goals, your interest in your chosen program(s), and your reasons for applying to...
Undergraduateamirm - Mar 6, 2012 / — -
|'international business, people and cultures' - Study Abroad Short Essay
2 - First, each country has its own advantages (not their). Also, try to tell the program what you have to...
UndergraduateJohn9041 - Mar 5, 2012 / sjhcc09 - Mar 5, 2012
|'a typical engineering family' - Purdue University
4 - This is a vague essay and doesn't create any high awareness for the readers. Write your essay in the...
UndergraduateLyaG - Jan 10, 2012 / isai - Mar 5, 2012
|'The Seattle University matches my educational goal' - common app essay
2 - College education is an important factor in a person's life. It determines a person's personality and her future. Remove...
Undergraduateemily0938 - Feb 29, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Mar 5, 2012
|entrance essay to F I T ..Why would it be to your advantage to participate in the Pro
2 - I have some ideas to help you with your paper. During high school despite attending classes and understanding...
Undergraduatemikcuff876 - Mar 5, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Mar 5, 2012
|'researches for Mechanics of Solids' - Why Brown appeals to you as a college option?
Undergraduatemoongtajoo - Feb 29, 2012 / moongtajoo - Mar 5, 2012
|'belief in math concepts' - University of Chicago prompt "Find X" - feedback
2 - You did a fantastic job answering the question as well as explaining the rationality behind your answer....
Undergraduatealebliss6 - Mar 4, 2012 / fletcherj003 - Mar 4, 2012
|UCI Supplemental- what DECA has done for me.
NEW - Prompt: In your application you may have mentioned an extraordinary talent/skill or academic achievement. This may include participation in...
Undergraduatenicolejadeyee - Mar 4, 2012 / — -
|My Journey to ABC College
2 - I began attending eleventh grade only a month after landing in the United States (from where?) . It was...
Undergraduategogonhan - Mar 2, 2012 / nicolejadeyee - Mar 4, 2012
|'dislike greedy and stubborn' - About me and myself personal statement
Undergraduatesudeep_mn - Mar 4, 2012 / xanim - Mar 4, 2012
|'Energy is the basis' - M.Sc. Petroleum Engineering
Undergraduateoladapo - Dec 12, 2011 / oladapo - Mar 4, 2012
|'the idea of topping the class' - Autobiographical essay for SUNY - stony brook
2 - Nadeen, I am impressed at this autobiography you have written!!!! When talking about yourself, include your likes about the...
Undergraduateesparanza - Feb 29, 2012 / Timothy - Mar 3, 2012
|Essay on challenges and rewards of living in a boarding school
5 - joining to a boarding school is a great opportunity which will provide me a chance to get a serious...
Undergraduatebellalove123 - Feb 29, 2012 / Dohaakhateeb - Mar 2, 2012
|'This university doesn't have the business major' - transfer ESSAY
Undergraduatemaxumus499 - Feb 29, 2012 / maxumus499 - Mar 2, 2012
|'life may not happen the way we would have desired' - Autobiography essay
4 - Unfortunately, my mother somehow found out about myartistic talentsthat I am seriously interested in art and she forbade me...
Undergraduatelyly223 - Feb 29, 2012 / dumi - Mar 2, 2012
|UCI Supplemental Essay- Separation and Moving Schools
Undergraduatenicolejadeyee - Mar 1, 2012 / dumi - Mar 2, 2012
|'nature of online gaming' - my short answer essay
4 - The competetive nature of online gaming appeals to me. Because the variables are human, there is no golden rule...
UndergraduateLamppost - Mar 1, 2012 / Lamppost - Mar 1, 2012
|"a crew member at Trader Joe's" - extracurricular activities (common app)
2 - As a crew member at Trader Joe's you become a well roundedI became well-rounded in order to answer all...
Undergraduatednlb - Mar 1, 2012 / heartitude - Mar 1, 2012
|Biomedical engineering state of purpose
Undergraduatespyrakos - Feb 24, 2012 / spyrakos - Mar 1, 2012
|'shaping morals' - UT AUSTIN ESSAY
2 - my name is yousuf ibrahim mohamed (sherbi) i live in nothren somalia (somaliland). i want to go the western...
Undergraduatejrodriguez78 - Feb 28, 2012 / yousuf ibrahim - Mar 1, 2012
|'photography for Life-long learning' - statement for degree of Creative Media
Undergraduatenickkan - Feb 28, 2012 / nickkan - Feb 29, 2012
|'learning to official terms' - Common App Transfer Extra Curriculars
6 - There are major errors throughout your essay (the first essay posted on this thread). The beginning of your essay...
Undergraduateawaqar714 - Feb 11, 2012 / partooz - Feb 29, 2012
|U Of I Transfer - 'to start the new chapter of my life'
5 - One thing that stuck out to me is do not use shorten words. Like for example, "Don't, won't, I'll."...
Undergraduategrayj106 - Feb 19, 2012 / ChichoTran - Feb 29, 2012
|'America, science, and mathematics' - Essay for Columbia Science honors program
5 - O Grant thank you for looking over this part of my essay the suggestions you gave to me really...
Undergraduatelenura96 - Feb 21, 2012 / Jodyherr - Feb 29, 2012
|'Savoir-Faire' - Political Science Field - Common APP Transfer
NEW - Well, today is the last day I have to apply to a few schools with strong political science and...
UndergraduateMehdicom - Feb 29, 2012 / — -
|"If it wasn't hard, everyone would do it. The hard is what makes it great". - Determined Brazilian
Undergraduatecortesfelipe - Feb 26, 2012 / cortesfelipe - Feb 29, 2012
|'I enter another world' - miami international art and design admission
2 - Hello, I like your essay. Your passion about fashion is easily shown, but I thought it is too...
Undergraduateniglesias - Feb 29, 2012 / cortesfelipe - Feb 29, 2012
|Desire to obtain a degree in Nursing
Undergraduatealisonbr - Feb 27, 2012 / EF_Susan - Feb 29, 2012
|'maximized any and all opportunities' - Common App Transfer Essay
Undergraduateawaqar714 - Feb 23, 2012 / EF_Susan - Feb 29, 2012
|'Why do you want to study in Norway?' - a motivation essay
Undergraduatefation1 - Feb 25, 2012 / fation1 - Feb 29, 2012
|'quickly growing as biology' - Statement of Purpose Essay for Admission to Biology
3 - Hi! The first line itself seems very limp. Try to think of some experience that you can link to...
Undergraduatestarlathornhill - Feb 8, 2012 / nithyanag - Feb 29, 2012
|scad essay video animation and character design
NEW - The statement should be a 500- to 750-word overview of the applicant's academic and professional accomplishments and should demonstrate...
UndergraduateShadowheart1711 - Feb 28, 2012 / — -
|'major in Communications with the hopes' - Transfer Essay for Texas A&M
2 - i would at least add a second closing paragraph. Focus on structure. Follow a logical pattern....
Undergraduatetwizzlers385 - Feb 28, 2012 / Mwhee018 - Feb 28, 2012
|Educational interest - psychology, future goals and plans (U of Minnesota)
5 - Jennifer, thanks for noticing my errors! I will work on them! Jenna, hey! No problem, thanks for looking...
Undergraduatedreamer - Feb 26, 2012 / dreamer - Feb 28, 2012
|'Special Topics In Life Science' - Rutgers Transfer Essay
Undergraduateangelgirl786 - Sep 24, 2011 / angelgirl786 - Feb 27, 2012
|'to appreciate the unique beauty of things around me' - What intrigues you?
Undergraduatemuse - Feb 26, 2012 / muse - Feb 27, 2012
|'inspiration to live out my dreams' - Temple University Admissions - 10 year reunion
NEW - I really need help proof reading my essay, im really bad a writing and i would really apprieciate if...
Undergraduatecruiz11 - Feb 27, 2012 / — -
|'Football is a dumb game' - Why I am Unique Yale Transfer prompt
4 - I think your points are a bit disperse, making me hard to get the feeling of "unique" rather than...
Undergraduatetransfer2016 - Feb 26, 2012 / carolinecong - Feb 27, 2012
|'a university highly respected worldwide' - College application
Undergraduatedrtr2008 - Feb 26, 2012 / TanvirBD - Feb 27, 2012
|Acceptance Essay for "The Art Institiute Of Charlotte"
UndergraduateDevonet - Feb 26, 2012 / bahamaessay - Feb 26, 2012
|'People/cultures'- Personal statement Liberal Arts major in Texas University in Qatar
2 - Hi :) Great paper! I can suggest a few changes: I was able to witness howinteresting and unique...
UndergraduateAbbyZakozk - Feb 26, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Feb 26, 2012
|'When people's heads collapse' - Statement of Purpose for UT
NEW - Sorry I've procrastinated so I've missed my chance to have my english teacher help me. I'd appreciate any suggestions...
UndergraduateYouth - Feb 26, 2012 / — -
|Like a Pear UTSA topic C
2 - Correct grammar first. Change falling under your mother as just as stubborn as her. How do you feel about...
Undergraduatealexandra2012 - Feb 26, 2012 / Mks57 - Feb 26, 2012
|'heart for humanity' - volunteer experience for common application
4 - It's very concise and I like your choice of words. Awesome work! However I have a little suggestion!...
Undergraduatehikjennifer - Feb 10, 2012 / dreamer - Feb 26, 2012
|Peer2Peer study group/My interests in transfering CommonApp Essays
Undergraduatefida10 - Feb 22, 2012 / dreamer - Feb 26, 2012
|'I share the same character with NU' - Transfer essay-Northwestern supplement
2 - I find myself share the same character with NU you can reword that. You may want to avoid using...
Undergraduatecarolinecong - Feb 25, 2012 / transfer2016 - Feb 26, 2012
|'Born in Russia and growing up in the Czech Rep' Johns Hopkins Carey Business School
NEW - Who am I? Who will I become? Am I headed on the right journey to success? Undoubtedly, one of...
Undergraduatedevilnam - Feb 25, 2012 / — -
|'my lazy educational past' - USF Appeal for reconsideration
2 - Instead of electives, I have four classes that were devoted to performance theater and drama, so being constantly surrounded...
Undergraduateoliviago - Feb 25, 2012 / dje1212 - Feb 25, 2012
|West Point admissions essay asking why I can work well with others
2 - Great essay! Although at times it felt almost as though you were re-iterating the same idea. Otherwise your word...
Undergraduateskmbrdn59 - Feb 25, 2012 / uagwuncha - Feb 25, 2012
|'My son was born' - 100 word nursing entrance essay
2 - I like it! But sometimes do get to the point, like for example "instead of April 2010" just go...
UndergraduateKdugan1 - Feb 24, 2012 / ChichoTran - Feb 25, 2012
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