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|'I felt free of expectations and condemnations' - Saint Mary's Supplement
4 - All I could feel in a sermon was a powerful guilt gnawing at my conscious ---Should this say 'conscience'?....
Undergraduatehotblondenerd - Feb 1, 2012 / EF_Susan - Feb 9, 2012
|'I believe that stem cells..' - University of Miami, Florida
2 - Obama's actions ended a long, miserable period in which the moral complaints of religious activists were no longer accepted...
UndergraduateEthan1221 - Feb 9, 2012 / EF_Susan - Feb 9, 2012
|"Time" - McMaster Health Science: a Four Letter Word that should be Preserved
3 - Hi, I really liked your topic, however, id suggest u follow a different approach, for example, you can talk...
Undergraduateiliketofu - Jan 31, 2012 / mbanani - Feb 8, 2012
|'I am not challenging myself enough' - Transfer application, Sophomore
4 - Hi, I really liked your essays, you have very sound reasons and you explain them properly with some examples...
Undergraduatefida10 - Feb 6, 2012 / mbanani - Feb 8, 2012
|'Living in Nigeria' -Contributions might you bring to help create a diverse community
5 - Here is your whole piece, edited. Living in Nigeria, a west African country, for 17 years and coming...
Undergraduateblaze321 - Feb 7, 2012 / sonya15 - Feb 8, 2012
|Transfer Essay-"How many bullets does it take to kill a human being?"
3 - Thank you SO much!!! I appreciate your suggestions and I'll work on the tone and correct the mistakes you...
UndergraduateoptimisticJ - Feb 8, 2012 / optimisticJ - Feb 8, 2012
|'refined job placement and career assistance' Statement of Purpose for the U of TX
3 - Thank you so much :) Now that you mention it I definitely should expand it more. I was worrying...
Undergraduatetrina_ch93 - Feb 6, 2012 / trina_ch93 - Feb 8, 2012
|'dedication, persistence, and involvement' - Personal Statement
2 - Very good paper! A couple of things, you writing, especially "My mom opened my package and called to let...
Undergraduateloflo - Feb 7, 2012 / scoreas21 - Feb 8, 2012
|'Riding a New York City train' - Tufts University Transfer, Short Answer
2 - ...perplexed facial expression throughout the entire train ride, and if the passenger listens quite attentively the passengerhe will hear...
UndergraduateVinny_Pooh - Feb 4, 2012 / EF_Susan - Feb 7, 2012
|'unsure of my future route' - Why you want to transfer & what you hope to achieve
4 - Perhaps you can use a personal anecdote or experience which relates to your outgoing personality. Also, always try...
Undergraduatekawsneffect - Feb 2, 2012 / Spinosaursus - Feb 7, 2012
|'personal attention from my professors' - Lynn University Admissions
6 - Nice para, but focus onWHY LYNN? is it the academics? the campus? you could also mention the part that...
UndergraduateXavierChamp012 - Feb 1, 2012 / Athena - Feb 7, 2012
|(liberal arts / television broadcasting / fantasy world) - Brown
3 - Thank you for your compliment and critique! Do you think there is anything I should change, or parts...
UndergraduateSpinosaursus - Feb 6, 2012 / Spinosaursus - Feb 7, 2012
|'unbalancing the world politics' - Marquette Honors program essay
2 - In the future, technology will change in a plethora of ways, and some of the most significant changes will...
Undergraduatedanielcoley93 - Feb 6, 2012 / EF_Susan - Feb 6, 2012
|'put away the cell phones' - University of Texas Transfer Essay
2 - I think it was good, however, you might want to make it more about why the issue is important...
Undergraduatebribucha - Feb 6, 2012 / danielcoley93 - Feb 6, 2012
|'you would make a really good salary' - Why I want to be a nurse essay
UndergraduateDiablo8785 - Feb 6, 2012 / — -
|Association with every aspect of life; Objective of pursing Civil Engineering
Undergraduatemsilvy - Feb 5, 2012 / ibraheemo - Feb 6, 2012
|Is English my own? (why I love English better then my own language - Portuguese)
4 - Hello, I'm Portuguese, I really enjoyed your PS, I think you will be successful in your application ;)...
UndergraduateLomstein - Feb 3, 2012 / joanah - Feb 6, 2012
|'The power of education' - Common Application Transfer Response
3 - Thanks for the feedback. The reason that it sounded so generic was because I withheld some of my...
Undergraduatemankaneneestam - Feb 3, 2012 / mankaneneestam - Feb 5, 2012
|'my way to the Philippine' - my U of R Supplement?
Undergraduatekkiimmiikkoo - Feb 5, 2012 / — -
|'As soon as I arrived in France' - Life is a challenge personal statement essay
3 - The first paragraph, which revolves around your father as your source of inspiration, woudl be a good start in...
Undergraduateleboss1234567 - Feb 5, 2012 / leviator - Feb 5, 2012
|'my passion for the psychological studies' - SOP for UT undergrad Transfer
3 - I couldn't bring myself to accept that there are kids out there who simply possibly Re-word to: I couldn't...
Undergraduatetrina_ch93 - Feb 4, 2012 / Vinny_Pooh - Feb 4, 2012
|'to commmit a hundred percent of my focus' - The Art Institute essay
UndergraduateJustinSane717 - Feb 3, 2012 / paul1911 - Feb 4, 2012
|'I didn't fall behind in my school work' - cultural difference essay
2 - **** I really enjoyed the poetry of your essay. I organized the paragraphs to reflect what you felt during...
Undergraduateomo5031 - Feb 3, 2012 / fastact - Feb 4, 2012
|'the liberty to write a novel' - Oberlin Supplement
5 - Hi :) Nice job with your essay, your essay shows your personality well, and it is obvious how passionate...
Undergraduatemaroon5 - Jan 17, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Feb 2, 2012
|An inspiration that led me to rethink me path-UIUC essay
UndergraduateGsilent007 - Feb 2, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Feb 2, 2012
|'Basketball and feeling of regret' - Common App Essay
Undergraduateericaj09 - Jan 22, 2012 / mishal alzaid - Feb 2, 2012
|'an innocent man is in prison' - Why you're applying to *blank* school - Rice
Undergraduategaia777 - Feb 2, 2012 / Athena - Feb 2, 2012
|'My Mom' - TX University Admissions Essay - Most Impactful Person
Undergraduatejmutina - Feb 1, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Feb 1, 2012
|Admissions Essay for Art School: Confident and Eager to Learn More
3 - I made some changes; what do you think? NSCADU is short for Nova Scotia College of Art and Design...
Undergraduatesmoshr - Jan 31, 2012 / smoshr - Feb 1, 2012
|'As an introvert' - a person essay is past boyfriend appropriate?
3 - Hey Madison, I really like your essay. It's so well-written and expressed, at the same time conveys the...
Undergraduatemadison_mattox - Jan 31, 2012 / Athena - Feb 1, 2012
|'selfless, giving, and caring' - Dominican University- Nursing Supplement Prompt
4 - Hi! A well-written essay! You are answering the question, while also explaining what inspired you. Maybe u could...
Undergraduateheyhihello - Jan 31, 2012 / Athena - Feb 1, 2012
|'I got my first internship in my life' - UM unique essay
2 - Hi Markwu overall, you have drawn well. nonetheless, the first sentence must be "eye-catching", and powerful one. such...
Undergraduatemarkwu - Jan 31, 2012 / apidjakfar - Feb 1, 2012
|(well-known pharmacy school) - this paragraph to improve
Undergraduateunjh4545 - Jan 31, 2012 / — -
|"too compassionate" - McMaster Health Science: What defines you as you?
Undergraduateiliketofu - Jan 30, 2012 / iliketofu - Jan 31, 2012
|'my Armenian and Italian neighbors' - USC Academic Interests
Undergraduateaisl09 - Jan 9, 2012 / markwu - Jan 31, 2012
|'Neurodegenerative diseases' - Personal statement for SURF program in US
2 - As my mother tongue isn't english, so I am worried about every single things. Form proper word or grammar...
Undergraduatewhiungter - Jan 30, 2012 / ranger_85 - Jan 31, 2012
|'I researched registered nurse' - career project
6 - I like keeping things neat and being organized is important to me. AdditionallyFurther , I learnedfeel I am not...
Undergraduatedhamain87 - Jan 29, 2012 / dumi - Jan 31, 2012
|'rid ourselves of rationalizations' - parsons challenge
2 - I'm not really good at writing myself but I can help you with some grammar mistakes. Put a comma...
UndergraduateMikemikemike - Jan 30, 2012 / iliketofu - Jan 31, 2012
|'more analytical approach towards my life' - how you became interested in art
13 - these two disciplines has formed an integral part of my daily life. Chile and New York has given...
UndergraduateMikemikemike - Dec 21, 2011 / cypress - Jan 30, 2012
|'Supplementing my sociological studies' - USC transfer
3 - I really like this essay. I feel like it really grasps the reader because of how it is written....
Undergraduatecallonme - Jan 29, 2012 / aisl09 - Jan 30, 2012
|USC (The Experience of Geeks in the Future / Geeks and Nerds)
2 - Since this school is dedicated to nurturing its students into becomin g successful, the education that this school gives...
UndergraduateMEM4FP - Jan 28, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jan 30, 2012
|'I live in a big city' - UM [Identity of your community]
NEW - Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine,...
Undergraduatemarkwu - Jan 30, 2012 / — -
|(delete "During my years in the *** lab? - how to make it shorter and effective
3 - Hi josexirizarryx7, Thank you so much for your help! and I am pleased that you liked my essay...
Undergraduateunjh4545 - Jan 29, 2012 / unjh4545 - Jan 29, 2012
|'From Sri Lanka' + 'The Church of Jesus' - A setback I have encountered in my life
3 - A setback encountered in my life essay x3. thank you in advance! Can someone edit my university essays...
Undergraduatedianneraja - Dec 22, 2011 / rajadianne - Jan 29, 2012
|'sent to live with relatives' - u mich supplement
NEW - Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School (including preferred admission and dual...
Undergraduateanpan - Jan 29, 2012 / — -
|'in one fateful day, my life changed forever' - Penn State UPark statement
5 - Instead of focusing so much on how you've development philosophically. talk about how you want to pursue your major...
Undergraduateapv - Jan 27, 2012 / anpan - Jan 29, 2012
|'The mobile care community' - undergrad admission
2 - Hi, Rohit1994 I would say that you have invaluable experience in helping people especially the survivors of Tsunami....
UndergraduateRohit1994 - Jan 28, 2012 / apidjakfar - Jan 29, 2012
|'enjoyed studying the human mind' - Help with Common App Essay
2 - You used 'missionary' a lot in this essay. Well, redundancy is not good in college essay... you need to...
Undergraduatemonjinho - Jan 29, 2012 / unjh4545 - Jan 29, 2012
|Research essay for Ryerson's Radio and Television Arts - confused about format
2 - If you are writing a research essay, don't start from the intro. Since you chose Spiderman from 1967,...
UndergraduateMikeCola - Jan 28, 2012 / unjh4545 - Jan 29, 2012
|'passion for computers, video games, and media' - USC Supplemental 2
2 - It will be an honor being part of the modernist vanguard for technology and calling them my friendscolleagues? apart...
UndergraduateMEM4FP - Jan 28, 2012 / A1C PD - Jan 29, 2012
|'very high expectations for me' - SUPERMAN
UndergraduateSpellWing - Jan 28, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 28, 2012
|UW: It goes to show that earning good grades isn't the ONLY way to define success
NEW - UW Prompt: Tell us a story from your life, describing an experience that either demonstrates your character or helped...
Undergraduatedje1212 - Jan 28, 2012 / — -
|'reason I have is really low GPA' - Chemical Engineering Major Transfer Essay
2 - When I went to Manchester Community College, I took more chemistry and I found out that I loved chemistry...
Undergraduatenirajpatel - Jan 28, 2012 / qadirv - Jan 28, 2012
|UC Berkeley Questionnaire on Disability
11 - Dear Saurabh, This is truly inspirational.. Well written and well answered... I feel that I have got into...
Undergraduatesaurabh93 - Jan 22, 2012 / Rohit1994 - Jan 28, 2012
|"transcend through cultural ghettos" - UMICH SUPPLEMENT
2 - On the outside, most people see me as a private school student, attending the most prestigious college prep high...
Undergraduateanpan - Jan 28, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 28, 2012
|'to understand how human grow up and the consist' - Pittsburg University
NEW - THANK YOU VERY MUCH!!!!!!!!!! Everybody mayhave a unique adjective to summarize his personality and briefly mine is "perseverant". To...
Undergraduatedonghan9 - Jan 28, 2012 / — -
|Learning From My Dissapontments (saint marys supplement)
UndergraduateSarahrenee - Jan 22, 2012 / JuliaRose - Jan 27, 2012
|'Decisions, Decisions' by Julia Snowdon - FIT essay
NEW - I'm a senior applying to the Fashion Institute of Technology and I have to write an essay answering this...
UndergraduateJuliaRose - Jan 27, 2012 / — -
|Ryerson University - Radio and Television Arts research-based essay
Undergraduateowusuh001 - Jan 27, 2012 / apv - Jan 27, 2012
|'unfulfilled promise in my life' - autobiographical essay for admission to Smith
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