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|"Be nice and smile at the customers" - 250 words critique
3 - The eassy shows your hardwork but i feel that you somewhat jumping from sentence to sentence. There is no...
UndergraduateArizonaT - Jan 11, 2012 / aakashneeraj - Jan 12, 2012
|'Judo teacher ' - school or summer activity
UndergraduateBTDTXXDY - Jan 6, 2012 / BTDTXXDY - Jan 12, 2012
|'to play a game of chess without being able to see' - Chess
Undergraduatejinglethetingle - Jan 11, 2012 / collyguy - Jan 11, 2012
|'curiosity about the natural world' - USC Supplement
6 - In my opinion, this is a fantastic response to the prompt. You go into great detail about how passionately...
Undergraduatesaurabh93 - Jan 10, 2012 / collyguy - Jan 11, 2012
|(Global university / Designed to inspire / Wonder) - NYU
Undergraduatecollyguy - Jan 11, 2012 / collyguy - Jan 11, 2012
|(Mexico travel / Unconventional friendship / Florence / Rainbow) - Georgia!
5 - We had the chance to appreciate and to understand the contemporary situations that people from the "old continent" wanted...
Undergraduateapv - Jan 11, 2012 / Huydq - Jan 11, 2012
|My RBL group-- Umich essay: community
2 - The group research-based learning(RBL) group in my school can always get students who share the same interest together. ...
Undergraduatelittlebutterfly - Jan 11, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jan 11, 2012
|'a bridal shop' - Most Significant Experience -LIM College
Undergraduatealleykat327 - Jan 8, 2012 / Nickbound - Jan 11, 2012
|'Beijing Youth Technology Innovation Competition' - research transfer essay for Duke
UndergraduateChirstinaf - Jan 10, 2012 / jinglethetingle - Jan 11, 2012
|'a college booklet about any schools of my interest' - Emory Supplement
2 - Just be more specific about what you intend to pursue at Emory and be more detailed about the aesthetic...
Undergraduatesingh955 - Jan 11, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 11, 2012
|Choose an issue of importance to you (making money and being successful?)
4 - eating breakfast alone, and taking control of my own life as a naive child -the part where you say...
Undergraduatecory5579 - Jan 11, 2012 / xoamanda15 - Jan 11, 2012
|'When we are happy' - What intrigues you?
NEW - What intrigues you? Tell us about one work of art, scientific achievement, piece of literature, method of communication, or...
Undergraduatejinglethetingle - Jan 11, 2012 / — -
|"Taylor girl" - Personal Statement for Arizona University
2 - This is a unique take on explaining why you like to go to a particular college, and you've explained...
UndergraduateSekilahh_RM - Jan 11, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 11, 2012
|'my major weakness is academic' - Howard App Essay
10 - school and extracurricular,activities. An example of a problem posed is I amAs the soccer team's best finisher, so...
Undergraduateunwana11 - Jan 7, 2012 / Prettywings - Jan 11, 2012
|My Struggle with Autism -- Common App
8 - This is amazing! I love the dandelion part. You did a great job at engaging the reader, but I...
Undergraduatesaurabh93 - Dec 15, 2011 / Bleeckerandpine - Jan 11, 2012
|'experiences with various cultures' - Penn State Personal
Undergraduateunwana11 - Jan 8, 2012 / unwana11 - Jan 11, 2012
|'A story about Jesus' - USFCA admission essay
Undergraduatejuswin - Jan 11, 2012 / akari - Jan 11, 2012
|'I am a friendly person' - MY FUTURE ROOMMATE - STANFORD
7 - Well, it certainly is more fun reading your replies after each and every sentence Jawad has written.. I believe...
Undergraduatejkhalifeh93 - Dec 20, 2011 / emanon - Jan 11, 2012
|STANFORDS SUPPLEMENTS- faith in god + grasshopper + reflections
4 - Your roommate essay is so fun to read and also effectively reflects what kind of person you are. And...
Undergraduatejesupai - Dec 20, 2011 / emanon - Jan 11, 2012
|'dynamic and warm community' - Why did you choose to apply to UCF?
2 - UCF seemed to me as a dynamic and warm community. In fact, the endless activities and clubs held within...
Undergraduatexaviermerino - Jan 11, 2012 / littlebutterfly - Jan 11, 2012
|'a product designer and entrepreneur' - USC Essay
4 - I feel like your ideas could be better connected, you mention a lot but dont elaborate on a specific...
Undergraduatekausik1993 - Jan 10, 2012 / greeley - Jan 10, 2012
|'I can become a successdul engineer in the future' - for APIASF
Undergraduate520crystal - Jan 10, 2012 / 520crystal - Jan 10, 2012
|Personal Accountability - UT Undergraduate Admissions
UndergraduateHerrTrigger - Jan 9, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 10, 2012
|Describe your most interesting mistake; 'Invincible' - GWU suggestions
Undergraduateneed_advice - Jan 10, 2012 / need_advice - Jan 10, 2012
|'I love how inspiring you are' - My love letter to Reed.
3 - Farewell until then, my dear. Yours lovingly, I think the last part sounds a bit cliche, but the rest...
Undergraduateaerielm - Jan 10, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 10, 2012
|'a passion for animals and nature' - Bucknell Major Explaination
2 - This is my first year dabbling in Environmental Studies, where I have seen how humans are destroying the planet....
Undergraduateteddyerock - Jan 10, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 10, 2012
|'my passion is trying to find my passion' - Common app essay
2 - Wow! Your essay is very well written- outstanding actually. You make it very clear that you have great passion...
Undergraduatejinglethetingle - Jan 9, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Jan 10, 2012
|'acoustic guitar' - short answer response for Common App
4 - I've gathered some books on application essays over the past few days and I noticed many of them suggest...
Undergraduatewozzcat1990 - Jan 10, 2012 / wozzcat1990 - Jan 10, 2012
|'decided to major in computer science' - Commonapp transfer essay
2 - I decided to settled onfor Kwame Nkrumah University of Science and Technology; It looked like the best option...
Undergraduatezanzy - Jan 10, 2012 / Prettywings - Jan 10, 2012
|"Music was my refuge." - georgetown
2 - Music: (Living on the Gospel) This is an unclear title. Maya Angelou said, "Music was my refuge. I...
Undergraduatecrystal77 - Jan 10, 2012 / kayleighlevitt - Jan 10, 2012
|'Academics, diversity, location' - Columbia Supplement: Why!!
8 - What Appeals To You Most About Columbia? After several campus visits, an overnight vist, and an Engineering Invitational,...
UndergraduateTanici1401 - Jan 7, 2012 / Tanici1401 - Jan 10, 2012
|Gates Essay - Community Involvement Nonviolence
Undergraduaterifatmursalin - Jan 10, 2012 / misskkf - Jan 10, 2012
|'Judgment: without evidence it is prejudice.' - Judgement - speed essay practice
Undergraduatepigboot - Dec 29, 2011 / Coriolis - Jan 10, 2012
|'the cosmopolitanism of UK' - Personal statement, economics university in UK
3 - . My hobbies are chess, because it is a game where you have to predict and anticipate the moves...
Undergraduatehyperione - Jan 8, 2012 / hyperione - Jan 10, 2012
|'learned the wrong language' - GWU short essay
3 - I don't understand what you want to say about your most interesting mistake: your error in learning English or...
Undergraduateneed_advice - Jan 9, 2012 / chocho9 - Jan 10, 2012
|"Finding the Truth" - Georgetown Supplement help?
Undergraduateamespeed - Jan 9, 2012 / tgupta16 - Jan 10, 2012
|(bus ride to Project R.I.S.E. / love-hate relationship with football) Common App
5 - you have some grammar mistakes in this essay, the second sentence of the longer essay is "than the whistle...
Undergraduateblackjack11z - Jan 8, 2012 / ochoa_catherine - Jan 10, 2012
|'Music and Drumming' - LAST SECOND ESSAY FOR UIUC
2 - I really like to introduction. It is very interesting to read and is a perfect opening illustration to the...
Undergraduatejinglethetingle - Jan 9, 2012 / Mango17 - Jan 10, 2012
|'quirky sense of humor and creative pranks' - caltech supplement
Undergraduatem7md - Jan 3, 2012 / m7md - Jan 10, 2012
|'a costume to wear for one year of my life' - Common App
11 - Well I would say it started like a good essay. However, cause you put it "as fun as possible",...
Undergraduatebestcrayons911 - Dec 30, 2011 / phhai - Jan 10, 2012
|'38 year old daughter-in-law' - my extra curricular activity essay
Undergraduatemenukagrg - Jan 9, 2012 / menukagrg - Jan 10, 2012
|'I have only been to another state, city, country' - Seattle University
NEW - I only have 5 days left before i can send in the application, the personal statement has scared me...
Undergraduatefreedom1 - Jan 10, 2012 / — -
|'Staying up late to finish projects' - NORTHEASTERN ARTIST STATEMENT
NEW - PROMPT: The department is looking for applicants who will shape the character and vision of the department. We are...
UndergraduateLisaVuong - Jan 9, 2012 / — -
|'The voice of the jury' - Dancing - Personal Statement
4 - Its cool that you did ballroom dancing in high school. The problem is this essay doesn't really say much...
Undergraduatephantuhoang - Dec 29, 2011 / twizzlestraw - Jan 9, 2012
|Personal Statements: "A new journey" and "My chilhood tree" -> which to choose?
Undergraduatelinhnguyen2112 - Jan 9, 2012 / phantuhoang - Jan 9, 2012
|'to pursue a human undertaking' - Georgetown significant activity essay
Undergraduatebabygurl2012 - Dec 18, 2011 / slythr - Jan 9, 2012
|'emphasis on a balanced curriculum' - GWU Essay
2 - I would restructure the first paragraph a bit. I would start by talking about how GWU is located at...
UndergraduateShaLa28 - Jan 9, 2012 / HerrTrigger - Jan 9, 2012
|'made sacrifices in the past' - How will I enrich there community
UndergraduateConstanceT - Jan 8, 2012 / need_advice - Jan 9, 2012
|College App Essay on how Steve Jobs has influenced me, he loved what he did.
2 - instead of using tech, i would spell out the entire word. Other than that, it is a great essay!...
Undergraduatebennett9319 - Jan 9, 2012 / jinglethetingle - Jan 9, 2012
|'diagnosed with Clear Cell Sarcoma Type II' - USC ACADEMIC INTERESTS
4 - @Mureille could you please look at my two essays... Thanks a lot, I'm trying to round them both up...
Undergraduatelysolfresh - Jan 9, 2012 / unwana11 - Jan 9, 2012
|'pre-established connection with GWU' - Why GWU essay
Undergraduateneed_advice - Jan 9, 2012 / need_advice - Jan 9, 2012
|'curriculum has won me over' USC SHORT ANSWER-ACEDEMIC INTEREST (BUSINESS MARKETING)
Undergraduatefrannnny2 - Jan 7, 2012 / frannnny2 - Jan 9, 2012
|'GOD always comes first in my life' - What Is Faith Exactly Essay
Undergraduatecrystal77 - Jan 9, 2012 / ssm28 - Jan 9, 2012
|'The girls my age went to adult clubs' - skills or knowledge
3 - Thank you !...
UndergraduateNana12 - Jan 8, 2012 / Nana12 - Jan 9, 2012
|"God is great, God is good, Prayer" - Why Brown?
Undergraduatemylo_zyloto - Jan 4, 2012 / mylo_zyloto - Jan 9, 2012
|'ProTrack co-op program' - FIT Application
7 - @Prettywings could you please look at my other two open threads. I am running late on deadlines so i...
Undergraduateunwana11 - Jan 7, 2012 / unwana11 - Jan 9, 2012
|*WHO RUNS THE WORLD?* - TUFTS optional supplement essay
UndergraduateItsokaytoGaga - Jan 3, 2012 / mylo_zyloto - Jan 9, 2012
|'to convince difficult clients to buy a product ' - one of your extracurricular
2 - The essay looks good but the only issue here is that you are not addressing the question completely. Even...
UndergraduateJoeclef - Jan 9, 2012 / Essay_Writer - Jan 9, 2012
|'we can perceive technologies everywhere' - Usage of Computers
Undergraduatealeka - Jan 9, 2012 / Usman Ahamd - Jan 9, 2012
|'a result of the Harmattan' - personal essay
2 - As I look through the window, I see the result of dusty surroundings: dusty winds and the shedding of...
Undergraduatezanzy - Jan 8, 2012 / Prettywings - Jan 9, 2012
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