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|'I boldly stood up for my brother' - pepperdine essay
2 - Grammar mistakes I noticed/Things I would change: -should be "became an atheist" instead of "turned to an atheist."...
Undergraduatepjw7109 - Jan 5, 2012 / mylo_zyloto - Jan 5, 2012
|'becoming an Au Pair in America' - UNC essay
5 - I like your essay. I didn't really see anything to correct that wasn't already addressed. Good luck and hope...
Undergraduateekreal - Jan 5, 2012 / omo5031 - Jan 5, 2012
|'struggled heavily with depression' - Pepperdine essay
2 - Wow this is truly a great story although I feel like your narrative takes away from the response. You...
Undergraduategreeley - Jan 5, 2012 / jadore_lamode68 - Jan 5, 2012
|(Submit button) Emerson 'Title of Your Life Essay' 200 words
3 - The Significance of Insignificance is your title right i think that should be the very first line of the...
Undergraduateinkraven - Jan 5, 2012 / greeley - Jan 5, 2012
|Emory Essay (favorite amusement park ride)
4 - This is a good response (I like the prompt as well). I would personally include more about the outlook...
Undergraduatehellokillyhello - Jan 2, 2012 / inkraven - Jan 5, 2012
|'hands are still holding the margin of the pool' significant experience, its impact
2 - Hi, I can help with a few things: "Relax! Folks, don't be afraid. Your hands are still holding...
Undergraduatediaking804 - Jan 4, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Jan 5, 2012
|'My parent first got me interested in math' - Honors College Essay #2
2 - Try wording some of these sentences differently such as: I know why I enjoy it instead try something like:......
UndergraduateSabahm5456 - Jan 5, 2012 / Vinny_Pooh - Jan 5, 2012
|'Failure is common' - UNC supplement
3 - Thanks, and I guess you may be right about those words. I learned all these words for my SATs,...
Undergraduatecollegessay1 - Jan 5, 2012 / collegessay1 - Jan 5, 2012
|'getting bad grades in math again?' - Cornell - College of Arts and Sciences Essay
2 - I realized: it was due to his indirect influence seems a little awkward there^ I would say: I realized...
UndergraduateGrimRippah - Jan 4, 2012 / lakerfanj - Jan 5, 2012
|'work ethic principle' - Transfer Application
Undergraduatearoj93 - Jan 5, 2012 / dylanpreston123 - Jan 5, 2012
|'fear and paranoia had closed my lips' - USC, personal statement
UndergraduateStevenWong206 - Jan 4, 2012 / StevenWong206 - Jan 5, 2012
|'The perfectionist' - the unique qualities that attract you to the specific College
UndergraduateDilara1010 - Jan 5, 2012 / ajtred - Jan 5, 2012
|'humorous and brainless discussion' - UNC essay
Undergraduateekreal - Jan 5, 2012 / ekreal - Jan 5, 2012
|Minutes Of Fame--UNC Supplement
3 - I agree with Uchenna! Great essay, but the conclusion/what you've learned from this experience and what you want to...
UndergraduateDinoSawyer - Jan 5, 2012 / ekreal - Jan 5, 2012
|The Turkish Community ("Deeee - lah - rah") - Common Application
UndergraduateDilara1010 - Dec 20, 2011 / Dilara1010 - Jan 5, 2012
|'Education cannot be taken from you' - HOWARD PERSONAL STATEMENT
4 - Very good essay, can't really find anything wrong, but maybe you could elaborate more on a few activities instead...
Undergraduateangiepie - Jan 4, 2012 / DinoSawyer - Jan 5, 2012
|'My mother is a vivid example' - CommonApp: Significant person
5 - Nick_VT, I think you have a very strong, inspirational story written here. I don't think your intro was...
Undergraduatenick_vt - Jan 5, 2012 / aroj93 - Jan 5, 2012
|'the last United Way meeting' - Georgetown General
Undergraduatedylanpreston123 - Jan 4, 2012 / aroj93 - Jan 5, 2012
|THE BUSINESS BOOT CAMP -COMMONAPP EXPERIENCE THAT HAS SHAPED MY LIFE
Undergraduatejaneth - Jan 3, 2012 / soufianelaouad - Jan 5, 2012
|'Angie's optimism' - Pepperdine essay: Community service experience
NEW - Hi guys, I'm submitting this today!!! I really need help on this essay, any constructive criticism or advice on...
Undergraduateklipper46 - Jan 5, 2012 / — -
|Community of scholars whose goal is to enrich the educational experience
UndergraduateSabahm5456 - Jan 3, 2012 / Sabahm5456 - Jan 5, 2012
|'my question asking habit' - Boston University Roommate
Undergraduateklipper46 - Jan 1, 2012 / klipper46 - Jan 5, 2012
|'Exuberance' -- Common App Essay #6 Free Choice
6 - Hi Erica, Yeah that's the common app #6 and I could write on whatever I'd like to as individual...
Undergraduatehwei1994 - Nov 29, 2011 / hwei1994 - Jan 5, 2012
|'Math teamwork' - Short Common App EC Paragraph (Math)
2 - It sounds very intelligent however you contradict yourself. At first you say you didn't believe in teamwork but at...
Undergraduatemichaelmas - Jan 5, 2012 / Cleopatra - Jan 5, 2012
|Research and Peace Corps - Lewis and Clark/Carleton supplements
2 - I think the first two are great but in the second one you should mention what youre interested in...
Undergraduatederamirez - Jan 5, 2012 / Cleopatra - Jan 5, 2012
|A question on texas' college topic *an issue of importance* (what to write about?)
3 - I wrote something similar for one of my essays. It's great! The idea is solid, include some real life...
Undergraduatecrystal_castles - Jan 3, 2012 / delljonathan - Jan 5, 2012
|Colgate -VENE VIDI VICCI- DESTINATION TURKEY
Undergraduatejaneth - Jan 4, 2012 / ericao2010 - Jan 5, 2012
|RA essay--Purpose of RA position and responsibilites
Undergraduateericao2010 - Jan 4, 2012 / hwei1994 - Jan 5, 2012
|'Inspiraducation' - Emory Supplement
2 - intoduction essay two;more than as if on aircrash you could say a better fast drop decription and add unforeseeable...
Undergraduatehwei1994 - Jan 5, 2012 / janeth - Jan 5, 2012
|"Life is beautiful. Really, it is." - Rider - a significant person in your life?
UndergraduateLizzycello - Jan 3, 2012 / chowkiepowder - Jan 4, 2012
|My position in DECA is the Vice President of Communications - extracurricular activities
4 - Yup this definitely over 1000 characters so i think you should cut out the stuff about how to move...
Undergraduatecwsfan974 - Jan 4, 2012 / DaeDae - Jan 4, 2012
|'I will not follow the same path every other woman in my family' personal statement
NEW - The biggest obstacle I have had has been to convince my family I will not follow the same path...
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|'I love to travel' - Georgetown's essay
5 - @trgcook. Thanks. What about saying that I want introduce the foods and fruit in my country to the world,...
UndergraduateBTDTXXDY - Jan 3, 2012 / BTDTXXDY - Jan 4, 2012
|'No hun, but Aria' - Eugene Lang New School: a time when you were in the minority
7 - Ok, well, just try what I suggested? And we'll proceed from there. I'll be helping you as much as...
Undergraduateariawashere - Jan 1, 2012 / DaeDae - Jan 4, 2012
|"I found my name!" - my common app essay?
3 - I like the concept and idea of this essay but you should really consider adding to it. Go deeper...
Undergraduatemyjeselle - Jan 4, 2012 / trgcook - Jan 4, 2012
|'help of great faculty members' - why franklin and marshall
Undergraduatepetcause - Jan 2, 2012 / petcause - Jan 4, 2012
|'to kill another man?' - University of Illinois essay
5 - It has great potential! its very touching! the beginning makes it almost sound like thats the kind of major...
Undergraduatefizz - Jan 2, 2012 / 22kcox - Jan 4, 2012
|'The strength of the Egyptian people' - Why journalism? Emerson supplement
2 - The strength of the Egyptian people and the opportunity of experiencing the victory and pride they have gained through...
UndergraduateCleopatra - Jan 4, 2012 / janeth - Jan 4, 2012
|McMaster Health Science program supplemental -- "Zero"
Undergraduateashu8d - Jan 2, 2012 / EF_Kevin - Jan 4, 2012
|The final battle; with the winner coming out with her life - Stanford Supplement
UndergraduateCVP1993 - Jan 1, 2012 / lenaincanada - Jan 4, 2012
|'been on both sides of the fence' - Personal Statement
Undergraduatejadore_lamode68 - Jan 4, 2012 / jadore_lamode68 - Jan 4, 2012
|'the audience was in shock' - extracurricular activity or work experiences
3 - I agree with rvonitter, although in a few sentences you've summed up your accomplishments and achievements through music very...
UndergraduateDuchess123 - Jan 4, 2012 / jadore_lamode68 - Jan 4, 2012
|'my strong conviction of helping people' - George Washington Univ.
NEW - I remembered that day well. I was sent to deliver a letter while volunteering at the Howard University Hospital....
Undergraduatecrystal77 - Jan 4, 2012 / — -
|(Nerdy myself / Bicycle together) - Tufts
4 - first essay is perfect I really like the way you wrote it. second essay is great too, it shows...
Undergraduatedoctorgirl222 - Jan 3, 2012 / johnfwilliam - Jan 4, 2012
|'The Egyptian educational system' - MIT admission
UndergraduateAmrTawfik - Dec 8, 2011 / johnfwilliam - Jan 4, 2012
|Story competition - (significant event in their eraly childhood)
Undergraduatemartabenvinda - Jan 3, 2012 / martabenvinda - Jan 4, 2012
|(great libraries / engaging classes) - Santa Clara
2 - Essay #1: I think the last sentence of this essay is pretty weak. The end of the essay should...
Undergraduatechowkiepowder - Jan 4, 2012 / doctorgirl222 - Jan 4, 2012
|Live a life of integrity - Stanford Supplement Essay
UndergraduateCVP1993 - Jan 1, 2012 / Dilara1010 - Jan 4, 2012
|We are so small but yet so powerful. Common App essay!
UndergraduateAlicegz - Dec 17, 2011 / Dilara1010 - Jan 4, 2012
|'the most exciting experience' - Colgate Supplement: Egypt!
Undergraduatesuper57 - Dec 28, 2011 / flafi120 - Jan 4, 2012
|'quirky sense of humor and creative pranks' - caltech supplement
Undergraduatem7md - Jan 3, 2012 / flafi120 - Jan 4, 2012
|'human-focused care'- Cornell College of Human Ecology Essay
2 - I love how the essay is structured! I think it is perfectly fine, apart from some minor grammatical...
Undergraduatemaximo3994 - Jan 2, 2012 / GrimRippah - Jan 4, 2012
|Supplement Essay-How I Developed Interest in Cancer
19 - I agree with the preceding remarks. As touching as your story seems, there is a very vague linkage, if...
Undergraduateworried26 - Dec 29, 2011 / saurabh93 - Jan 4, 2012
|(learning about science / engineering / city, campus / bands) - COLUMBIA
2 - Essay 1 -- The two topics were different in that biology consisted solely of memorization, as opposed to chemistry...
Undergraduategreeley - Jan 4, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 4, 2012
|'Choosing our friends' -Caltech Short answer (Ethical Dilemma)
Undergraduatebanjofood - Jan 4, 2012 / timurmukhtarov - Jan 4, 2012
|(power outage / the supplier / liberal education) - University of Southern Cali
4 - Thanks guys for all the input. I wanted to be funny, so I put literal events that happened for...
UndergraduateGraceTaylorWei - Jan 3, 2012 / GraceTaylorWei - Jan 4, 2012
|'celebrate another year on this planet ' - (Creative prank) Caltech supplement
Undergraduatebanjofood - Jan 3, 2012 / banjofood - Jan 3, 2012
|'natural flair and love for art and fashion design' - GeorgetownU essay
3 - Sorry for the late response! Anyway I think this essay is pretty good. I understand you worry for...
UndergraduateRoluwa - Jan 3, 2012 / ericao2010 - Jan 3, 2012
|An Issue of Importnace- The American Flag
Undergraduatexxaskmexx - Jan 3, 2012 / elevit2 - Jan 3, 2012
|'no boyfriend or a relationship until college' - Tufts #5
7 - egpctim As I was reflecting on this question while writing this essay , I think applying to colleges...
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