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|'my parents are Danish' - essay
Undergraduateekreal - Dec 20, 2011 / ekreal - Dec 31, 2011
|'a gateway to my future; what could I ask for more?' - Northwestern university
2 - Ranked number 13 in the nation, Northwestern University, to me, is more than just a number. It is a...
Undergraduatestars93 - Dec 31, 2011 / ilovemax112105 - Dec 31, 2011
|Asked what I want to accomplish in life, my answer has unchangingly remained "to help those in pain"
UndergraduateRubyRed - Dec 31, 2011 / foreverarianaaa - Dec 31, 2011
|'the wrestling season' - Princeton supplement
Undergraduatepancake5 - Dec 31, 2011 / ahmad999 - Dec 31, 2011
|'most alarm clocks would stop' - Common App Essay
4 - This essay will undoubtedly emphasize you uniqueness. Lovely details to grab people's attention. I definitely like how you approach...
Undergraduatexxxthor - Dec 31, 2011 / stars93 - Dec 31, 2011
|'Hey buddy! Amigo! Tomodachi! ' - Stanford Supplement Roommate essay
Undergraduatetenki - Dec 31, 2011 / tenki - Dec 31, 2011
|'I hope to major in Biology' - UPenn
12 - Don't be monotonous mentioning Benjamin Franklin because a lot of people do it. I think the first paragraph is...
UndergraduateStrawberry78 - Dec 29, 2011 / Anxhela - Dec 31, 2011
|'curious as to why people do certain things and act certain ways' - NYU
10 - To be able to pursue an education and career answering various questions that I have had and observing the...
Undergraduateruthyj - Dec 28, 2011 / xxxthor - Dec 31, 2011
|'The psychological effects' Common App Main Essay & Lehigh Supplement
Undergraduatevelvetblossom - Dec 31, 2011 / pjy9394 - Dec 31, 2011
|'Envy and Diligence' - Common App Essay (Influential Person)
3 - I think "realized success" is correct. And any ideas on how to make the transition to the last...
Undergraduatepjy9394 - Dec 31, 2011 / pjy9394 - Dec 31, 2011
|Robotics Club and Learning to Plan: Rochester Supplement for edit
4 - Thanks for the advice guys! I really didn't like my second essay, so I completely rewrote it. Any edits...
Undergraduateehrohrer - Dec 31, 2011 / ehrohrer - Dec 31, 2011
|Natural Born World Shakers - Common App Essay
3 - I agree with lethalityKD's comment about being thesaurus-driven. Even if you didn't use a thesaurus, the vocab is a...
Undergraduatequarterer - Dec 27, 2011 / mlayton - Dec 31, 2011
|'middle-class Asian Bengali American of Long-Island' - Rice essay
6 - Your essay looks great! You definitely have an interesting background. That will make you stand out!...
Undergraduatesusmi007 - Dec 31, 2011 / Keontri23 - Dec 31, 2011
|'newly independent driver' or 'Nigeria trip' - Notre Dames
Undergraduatetravelgirl - Dec 31, 2011 / travelgirl - Dec 31, 2011
|'my problems are microscopic compared to others' Carnegie Mellon University supp
4 - So here's the thing If you want to make it interesting you should use stronger words. Do not say:...
Undergraduateeunsol - Dec 31, 2011 / deremifri - Dec 31, 2011
|Creation of my daily reading material - Tufts #3
5 - is this ending better?? Their creators' distinct passions fill me with exuberance; to know that there are normal...
Undergraduatehanshea12 - Dec 30, 2011 / hanshea12 - Dec 31, 2011
|'Running my first 400 meter race' - bard college supplement
5 - sorry...here is the prompt B) The Roman philosopher Seneca, writing in the first century, wrote a set of letters...
Undergraduateruthyj - Dec 28, 2011 / ruthyj - Dec 31, 2011
|'Lacking life' - What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT?
3 - I just modified it, but I still need help! Please? All my life, I have been somehow "lacking"....
Undergraduatealv2812 - Dec 31, 2011 / alv2812 - Dec 31, 2011
|Common App Extracurricular Essay - MIST
Undergraduateyusra12 - Dec 31, 2011 / yusra12 - Dec 31, 2011
|Winter break essay for school on GOALS
Undergraduaterosemarimalu - Dec 30, 2011 / rosemarimalu - Dec 31, 2011
|"the key to the future you seek?" - Georgetown
2 - it's really very creative.. i like your essay. Best of luck. (Can you help me with my essay?.....
UndergraduateKeontri23 - Dec 31, 2011 / susmi007 - Dec 31, 2011
|"I shop!" - MIT -Tell us something you do for the pleasure of it.
5 - Maybe the application of your nerdy language are not that necessary, since they are not what you do for...
Undergraduateleviator - Dec 30, 2011 / deremifri - Dec 31, 2011
|'to refine my computer science skill' - Cornell arts and sciences- comp sci major
3 - Wow!!! I really like your essay... it's really good. it's organized, well-written. :D I will really appretiate if you...
UndergraduateInfinity - Dec 31, 2011 / susmi007 - Dec 31, 2011
|UVa Supplement - World I come from "Neighbors"
3 - The problem with your essay is that you do not tell specific enough how the influence has shaped you....
Undergraduatedaniel44992 - Dec 30, 2011 / deremifri - Dec 31, 2011
|'serve on the FUHSD school board' - Common App: Extracurricular - too boring?
UndergraduateInfinityQ - Dec 31, 2011 / InfinityQ - Dec 31, 2011
|"Homeless guy " Common app essay
7 - I agree with the first person abt the intro... I dont think its necessay. The essay is really interesting...
Undergraduatederemifri - Dec 30, 2011 / need_advice - Dec 31, 2011
|Brown- theater on and off stage
Undergraduatesparkle225 - Dec 31, 2011 / daniel44992 - Dec 31, 2011
|'Chemistry' - Columbia supplement -- Chosen Major
2 - I think its great! Its very descriptive and I can easily see why you're interested in science. My one...
Undergraduatefirefox94 - Dec 31, 2011 / daniel44992 - Dec 31, 2011
|'an orchestral tour to Spain, Morocco' - Common App
Undergraduatesungmink94 - Dec 31, 2011 / nkprasad12 - Dec 31, 2011
|'Drawing an ocean' - Bates College essay
4 - When my 5th grade art teacher asked our class to draw an ocean, for some reason, I decided to...
Undergraduatepjw7109 - Dec 31, 2011 / kayleighlevitt - Dec 31, 2011
|'my main interest of study is in psychology' - Wisconsin-Madison
UndergraduateGman24 - Dec 29, 2011 / Gman24 - Dec 31, 2011
|MIT Admission - Baking, Bioengineering, and Personality
3 - I agree with Ace on the first one, add some more pizzazz. Suggestion: BAM! I cackled hysterically while...
Undergraduatelmialtyh7 - Dec 31, 2011 / ZhoeK - Dec 31, 2011
|'three dimensional problems' - BROWN Supp
Undergraduateabck300 - Dec 31, 2011 / pfrench - Dec 31, 2011
|NYU Supplement numero dos. Public Health program. (1485/1500)
NEW - Regardless of whether or not you have an intended major or concentration, please elaborate on an academic area of...
Undergraduateoliviab - Dec 31, 2011 / — -
|Carnegie Mellon Supplement: Architects of Change
NEW - Hi guys! I am applying to Carnegie Mellon for their computer science program. This is the most selective department...
Undergraduategotpho - Dec 31, 2011 / — -
|'Hyperlinks ruin me' - NYU Supplement Essay - What Intrigues You?
4 - This is so unique and wonderful. I love it. To make it more about you though, elaborate more (or...
Undergraduatericka123 - Dec 31, 2011 / oliviab - Dec 31, 2011
|Princeton Summers- Theater and Politics
2 - Im sorry i dont have enough time to grammaticly check your essay but i really enjoyed reading it :)...
Undergraduatesparkle225 - Dec 31, 2011 / Davemedsci - Dec 31, 2011
|'electronic devices' + 'survival training' university of illinois(urbana-champaign)
2 - first essay: -First sentence: curious -new things that I learned about -I could accomplish anything I set my mind...
Undergraduateenodebe - Dec 31, 2011 / asdf7878 - Dec 31, 2011
|'I had a dream: get into NYU' - NYU Supplement
UndergraduateJerlynn - Dec 30, 2011 / foreverarianaaa - Dec 31, 2011
|'intelligent, driven, and helpful' - Babson Supplement (Dear Roomate)
UndergraduateMikeMrtno - Dec 31, 2011 / MikeMrtno - Dec 31, 2011
|Potato Salad and Chitlins - how spent summers Princeton
UndergraduateSeniorMel - Dec 30, 2011 / foreverarianaaa - Dec 31, 2011
|'Happy college' + 'Stealing' + 'Cape Verde' + 'Harry P' + 'Try it' -Brown supplement
Undergraduatevanipinto2005 - Dec 31, 2011 / ChihiroLavi - Dec 31, 2011
|"Battling for Passion" - Evaluate an experience (Common app)
Undergraduatedivina - Dec 30, 2011 / abck300 - Dec 31, 2011
|BABSON SUPPLEMENT: together we can grow
5 - Instead of ignorance, do you mean arrogance? This would make alot more sense to me. I think it should...
Undergraduatethevix - Dec 13, 2011 / MikeMrtno - Dec 31, 2011
|'this madness our world is displaying' - Common App Main Essay
2 - I think it's great overall and the only change you maybe could make is that talking more about the...
Undergraduateangaduday - Dec 31, 2011 / ChihiroLavi - Dec 31, 2011
|'the term military brat' - University of South Florida Application
2 - Nice job! The essay has a strong meaning and you defended and proved your viewpoint of being a "military...
Undergraduatedontev22 - Dec 31, 2011 / ChavCool93 - Dec 31, 2011
|"True learning" - Why UPenn essay
6 - I think the first one is great!Especially the part of your imagination,it's amazing! About the second one, I...
UndergraduateAnxhela - Dec 29, 2011 / ChihiroLavi - Dec 31, 2011
|'love of classical music' - Common App Topic of your choice
2 - The moment was all too perfect. Avery Fisher Hall was filled with men in their tuxedos and women in...
Undergraduatewahmed - Dec 31, 2011 / susmi007 - Dec 31, 2011
|'I look at my watch' - Yale Supplement
5 - I have to agree with all the above-mentioned. It's very engaging and interesting. I felt like I was standing...
Undergraduateabck300 - Dec 31, 2011 / divina - Dec 31, 2011
|'On televisions, I had only seen the end' Giving back to your country essay
7 - please help me revise it =) I'd love to return the favor give me suggestions/ comments anything......
UndergraduateMusicforleisure - Dec 30, 2011 / Musicforleisure - Dec 31, 2011
|'Piano and music beneficial' - Common App Essay
Undergraduatemegamega - Dec 31, 2011 / ZhoeK - Dec 31, 2011
|wanted to be successful - Why Swarthmore? No word limit.
UndergraduateBlazinazn253 - Dec 31, 2011 / CheesyCake - Dec 31, 2011
|I have developed a fascination for language and culture; Northwestern Supplement
Undergraduatealb4eva - Dec 31, 2011 / Davemedsci - Dec 31, 2011
|'Behind that software' - NJIT Essay
Undergraduateoreilly15 - Dec 31, 2011 / susmi007 - Dec 31, 2011
|"The Gentle Giant" college personal essay (topic of my choice)
2 - Hi there, I was touched by this essay, its quite..nice (in a good way, because nice often doesnt describe...
Undergraduatechazzmil - Dec 31, 2011 / alb4eva - Dec 31, 2011
|'No life discrimination' - princeton supplement
21 - Hate to be redundant, but yes, too much about your principal. If you are concerned about word count and...
Undergraduatesarahbee - Dec 30, 2011 / goalgir4 - Dec 31, 2011
|"Crack!" - my personal essay
Undergraduateyyhh94 - Dec 31, 2011 / wahmed - Dec 31, 2011
|'a semester on Biomedical Ethics' - Hopkins Supplement-Why I Enjoy Moral Philosophy
Undergraduatewahmed - Dec 27, 2011 / wahmed - Dec 31, 2011
|'I hadn't made friends since being there' - Short Introduce yourself
4 - In addition to the essay you're asked to write as part of the Common Application, Amherst requires a second...
UndergraduateAnxhela - Dec 31, 2011 / Anxhela - Dec 31, 2011
|Rice University supplement -- the perspective of a dust cloud person
2 - 1. In the second line change "her" to "here." **Were you brought "here" by the dust cloud? 2. In...
Undergraduatechellyfish - Dec 31, 2011 / CVP1993 - Dec 31, 2011
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