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|Princeton Supplement - Describe someone who has had an influence on you.
4 - You start off with alot of wordiness and things that are irrelavant. Of course everybody has people that have...
Undergraduatefredday - Dec 30, 2011 / chazzmil - Dec 30, 2011
|Princeton Supplement - Quote that changed your values or approach to the world
Undergraduateopipcardenas - Dec 30, 2011 / SeniorMel - Dec 30, 2011
|'the concentration and focus on the major' - hope and learn from the Penn Community
2 - Hey I think that overall it's a good essay. You bring up specific points to link to your goals...
Undergraduatechazzmil - Dec 30, 2011 / Ravenclaw_roar - Dec 30, 2011
|'My Fear of Dragons' - Williams College Supplement (Window Essay)
3 - I wanted to show how I could grow up, conquer a fear... and still keep my imagination. However, I...
Undergraduatepetert3 - Dec 30, 2011 / petert3 - Dec 30, 2011
|The bridge between two immiscible worlds. UChicago Essay!
Undergraduatetehfunkicookie - Dec 30, 2011 / tehfunkicookie - Dec 30, 2011
|'endless activities' - Why NYU? Supplement
UndergraduateSuzhou - Dec 27, 2011 / thes1tuation - Dec 30, 2011
|'AP English Composition and Language' - Columbia applicant -- favorite subject
3 - Thank you!!...
UndergraduateNervousByNature - Dec 30, 2011 / NervousByNature - Dec 30, 2011
|"Crumbs" -- Brown, Rice, Tufts
12 - It was an awesome comparison! I loved the Hansel and Gretel sentence-- it shows how big a seemingly insignificant...
Undergraduatebookbug_xd - Dec 29, 2011 / NervousByNature - Dec 30, 2011
|Common App Essay *Teach me how to rap*
7 - The content is good! But I think you could elaborate more in the body and give more examples of...
UndergraduateBillyIon - Dec 29, 2011 / rahilsavani - Dec 30, 2011
|Using UC personal statement as common app statement? Order.
7 - I believe that this depends on the college. Some might choose to take a look at the supplement first,...
Undergraduatedoug - Nov 28, 2009 / gotpho - Dec 30, 2011
|Coffee or chai tea? Cookies or biscuits? Chicken sandwich or chicken curry?; UVA
4 - Don't say I am amongst the few...a little pretentious...say that you love to work hard not just because you...
Undergraduateneed_advice - Dec 29, 2011 / ujax - Dec 30, 2011
|common app essay - my apprach on being homeless
5 - delete " I realise that" at the last paragraph. No need. Your essay transitions smoothly. decided is repeated used....
Undergraduatewilliamwu123 - Dec 29, 2011 / silentspring - Dec 30, 2011
|'a Mexican in Egypt and New York City' - Roomates? BU Supplement!
UndergraduateCleopatra - Dec 30, 2011 / Musicforleisure - Dec 30, 2011
|Extracurricular essay on volunteering! Any help is appreciated!!
3 - Thanks for the great input! I will definitely make those changes. You bring up a great point Kielbasy, and...
Undergraduateroyalrampage - Dec 30, 2011 / royalrampage - Dec 30, 2011
|"Explain Unicorns" - Help with Ideas for UMICH Honors Program Essay
9 - This essay is really brilliant. Your storytelling really makes it standout. Hardly can find anything to pick out....
Undergraduaterockbiter - Dec 28, 2011 / silentspring - Dec 30, 2011
|My pride and joy in peers - commonapp extracurricular response
4 - Your essay is clear, but I think you should focus on HOW you helped these persons (be as specific...
UndergraduateCleopatra - Dec 20, 2011 / linhnguyen2112 - Dec 30, 2011
|Johns Hopkins - INTERNATIONAL STUDIES
NEW - Hello everyone, help me check this essay. I'm from vietnam Johns Hopkins University Supp -- Intended Major Essay...
Undergraduatehatung94 - Dec 30, 2011 / — -
|Master studies will empower me - my last two paragraphs
3 - actually, it's very hard to make any serious comments based on the two paragraph you provide. If possible, post...
Undergraduateruat - Dec 29, 2011 / hatung94 - Dec 30, 2011
|UPenn optional essay- tell us about you
10 - To be a total conformist, I must agree: Go with number two. The second one is just as descriptive...
Undergraduatepostscript94 - Dec 29, 2011 / Kielbasy - Dec 30, 2011
|NYU Supplements- Why NYU, My Major, and Adolf Hitler
5 - Hrm. Two things. 1. It doesn't tell enough about you. The premise is that "Humans are depraved," but where...
Undergraduatejanerwang - Dec 29, 2011 / TheAphasic - Dec 30, 2011
|'unlike any other university / finance and economics' - NYU supplements
Undergraduatekog - Dec 30, 2011 / amon2006 - Dec 30, 2011
|Pupil, AP biology, Biochemistry - Columbia Supplement
Undergraduatesoshifan - Dec 29, 2011 / soshifan - Dec 30, 2011
|'Intern at Equality California' - Columbia supplement -- Meaningful cultural event
Undergraduatefirefox94 - Dec 30, 2011 / BillyIon - Dec 30, 2011
|'the perfect school to pursue my major' - NYU Supplement
7 - Thank you so much guys!!!! I am very passionate about engineering!! So the dual degree program would look awesome...
Undergraduatexotibxo - Dec 29, 2011 / xotibxo - Dec 30, 2011
|"The Captain" - Harvard Supplement- The prompt is write about anything
32 - regardless of how it comes across as an admission essay, i think you have a very powerful and moving...
Undergraduatesm09 - Dec 27, 2011 / zaman - Dec 30, 2011
|'Classical sentence and Clothing' - Common app Essay
7 - Hi! a few suggestions here: However if we think carefully most of the times life is the outcome...
UndergraduateAnxhela - Dec 28, 2011 / Musicforleisure - Dec 30, 2011
|Personal Statement for Biomedical Science (UK admission)
4 - The beginning was great and the rest of the essay was good as well! One thing though: what was...
Undergraduatezaman - Dec 30, 2011 / bookbug_xd - Dec 30, 2011
|Stanford Essay: Whipped Cream
Undergraduatepinkstarbaby - Dec 30, 2011 / Cleopatra - Dec 30, 2011
|'Where is Albania' - UPenn supplement short answer
7 - This is a good response because you touched on something that a person would typically say in an introduction,...
UndergraduateAnxhela - Dec 29, 2011 / bookbug_xd - Dec 30, 2011
|God and Evil - Common App Essay
5 - Thanks deremifri, pinkstarbaby, ZhoeK!!! I edited a little. Now, please be more harsh? In fiction, angel and devil...
Undergraduatejonjojonjo - Dec 29, 2011 / jonjojonjo - Dec 30, 2011
|What do you hope to learn from and contribute to UPenn
4 - Your definitly putting yourself in the position that your very well educated about Upenn but i feel like someone...
Undergraduatebookbug_xd - Dec 30, 2011 / Davemedsci - Dec 30, 2011
|'A young professional couple's daughter' - William & Mary supplemental essay
UndergraduateTheN3094 - Dec 30, 2011 / Davemedsci - Dec 30, 2011
|I am so tired William & Mary supplement essay
3 - Wow, you're so right I sound awfully arrogant. Thank you so much this was a really good wake-up call!...
UndergraduatePradodiana1 - Dec 30, 2011 / Pradodiana1 - Dec 30, 2011
|Physics and Mathematics:Which department or program in MIT appeals to you and why?
2 - tune up your conclusion a lil bit .it seems you did hurry while ending the response.Also it would be...
Undergraduatesusannesj - Dec 30, 2011 / ahmad999 - Dec 30, 2011
|'It all started in my Physics class' - Common Application
10 - Nope, unless there's some stuff I missed grammatically (nothing too obvious or I would have caught it) all...
UndergraduateThelionN - Dec 28, 2011 / amespeed - Dec 30, 2011
|'Stepping onto the campus' - UPenn supplement essay
4 - I agree with Kevin. You did not answer the prompt at all. You need to actually research about the...
Undergraduatejonnyboy2 - Dec 29, 2011 / lee235717 - Dec 30, 2011
|Extra Curricular essay: Hope / Doubt
2 - How about write some specific thing you did with her, small conversations or something else. I would like to...
Undergraduateglamazing - Dec 30, 2011 / shelia1993 - Dec 30, 2011
|Moving Boxes 18-inch by 24-inch - Common App essay
13 - Your essay is great =) There is really nothing much I could suggest However for all the uncertainties...
UndergraduateJerlynn - Dec 29, 2011 / Musicforleisure - Dec 30, 2011
|Common App Essay: To fly or not to fly
3 - i think it's really good. the only thing im iffy about is the opening statement about flying. a little...
Undergraduateglamazing - Dec 30, 2011 / gris_pereyra - Dec 30, 2011
|Alternate Personalities and Other Things About Me-Stanford Letter to Roommate Essay
8 - Your letter is really good. It's very personal and with lots of details. I like how you keep it...
Undergraduatedasadhikarik - Dec 30, 2011 / Jerlynn - Dec 30, 2011
|'Welcome Center' / 'Keynes' / 'Painting' - NYU Supplementary Essays
2 - He paused, turned to his colleagues and looked at me for a split second "There it is", he replied...
Undergraduatemukhia08 - Dec 30, 2011 / Jerlynn - Dec 30, 2011
|Syracuse supplement + Common app short answer
4 - everything looks solid and it looks like you've answered each question correctly, well done!! good luck :) ...
Undergraduateyoungi - Dec 29, 2011 / mukhia08 - Dec 30, 2011
|"Did you dye it?" - Commonapp main essay
5 - These are what I am truly; along with my differently-colored hair, these facts create a genetic map of who...
Undergraduateomgskl - Dec 28, 2011 / bommy1994 - Dec 30, 2011
|'grandfather's Day of the Dead' - COMMON ESSAY
3 - Thanks a lot!...
Undergraduateneikdbt - Dec 30, 2011 / neikdbt - Dec 30, 2011
|'the masters paid off' - my passion for singing
Undergraduatebommy1994 - Dec 30, 2011 / bommy1994 - Dec 30, 2011
|'Soccer and jealousy' - common app essay! (elaborate on an extra-curricular)
Undergraduatebommy1994 - Dec 30, 2011 / bommy1994 - Dec 30, 2011
|'Endearing, extraordinary, enchanting' - MAIN COMMON APP ESSAY
5 - First of all thank you for your help in my Duke supplement, i will definitely take your advice into...
UndergraduateMazinator - Dec 29, 2011 / muznaa23 - Dec 30, 2011
|What I hope to EXPERIENCE by attending SVU (Southern Virginia University essay)
UndergraduateDani1218 - Dec 29, 2011 / TheN3094 - Dec 30, 2011
|'The Feminist Perspective'- Common App. Main essay
19 - This one's generated so many views over the course of 4 hours that I'm not sure there's all that...
Undergraduatearbrelibre - Dec 28, 2011 / dasadhikarik - Dec 30, 2011
|"Attention Seniors!" - Duke University Supplement: Why Duke?
3 - Muzna, I am also applying to Duke. The prompt asks for a limit of 1-2 paragraphs suggesting they may...
Undergraduatemuznaa23 - Dec 30, 2011 / Mazinator - Dec 30, 2011
|'Tutored English writing' - Admissions Tutors interest essay
Undergraduatepjw7109 - Dec 29, 2011 / williamwu123 - Dec 30, 2011
|Airplane hum - Yale supplement.
UndergraduateAlicegz - Dec 29, 2011 / luvicemocha - Dec 30, 2011
|'The first constitutional amendment is the best law ever' - TUFTS SUPP grammar
NEW - Prompt: Science, math, and society are filled with postulates, laws, and theories like the Ninth Commandment, PV=nRT, Occam's Razor,...
UndergraduateNerd99 - Dec 30, 2011 / — -
|Boston University - Supplemental Short Essay - Transfer Student
UndergraduateVinny_Pooh - Dec 29, 2011 / Vinny_Pooh - Dec 30, 2011
|WPI Supplement Open Response - How did you become interested in WPI? (650 characters)
6 - hmm I decided to just rewrite my supplement. how does this sound? I discovered WPI when Bonnie Hall...
Undergraduategotpho - Dec 29, 2011 / gotpho - Dec 30, 2011
|Pitzer Supplement- YOU alone can determine my future
Undergraduatemm1994 - Dec 30, 2011 / stellastella - Dec 30, 2011
|CommonApp Short Answer: "Best tutor in the world"
4 - to teach a disabled child that she is not disabled, that she can achieve anything she desires to do,...
Undergraduateangelserenite - Dec 30, 2011 / leviator - Dec 30, 2011
|"Get to Know Other Worlds" - Northwestern Supplement
Undergraduateamespeed - Dec 27, 2011 / pjw7109 - Dec 30, 2011
|BU short essay; I have chosen to proceed with our forbidden love
2 - The sentence about law is kind of confusing. "The subject" is a little misleading on what it is...
Undergraduatelittlekitty - Dec 29, 2011 / rockbiter - Dec 30, 2011
|'combining technicalities' - Johns Hopkins supplementary essay (ED)
Undergraduatesunsetblossom - Dec 29, 2011 / pjw7109 - Dec 30, 2011
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