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|Why Northwestern? My first impression
6 - taman121 I liked how you gave a detailed narration in the beginning of your essay. I also had...
Undergraduatetaman121 - Dec 29, 2011 / mm1994 - Dec 31, 2011
|Boarding School Applicant Essay - The Life And Death Of My Father
3 - It is a strong essay. The story is engaging and your writing is clear and concise. There are only...
Undergraduatepillowface - Dec 30, 2011 / Notoman - Dec 31, 2011
|'Renaissance' + 'Supernova' - MIT Essays
Undergraduatenkprasad12 - Dec 31, 2011 / sungmink94 - Dec 31, 2011
|I attended a high school that was in the middle of several gangs
2 - Overall, I think it's a very great essay. It sounds very personal because of your own thoughts and your...
UndergraduatePyroDog - Dec 31, 2011 / tehfunkicookie - Dec 31, 2011
|I had the opportunity to live in Germany for a year; intellectual vitality essay
2 - After numerous years learning German, I had the opportunity to live in Germany for a year because I was...
Undergraduateestandiaa - Dec 30, 2011 / ashatan - Dec 31, 2011
|Why NYU? "New York is dynamic melting pot full of inspiration"
6 - Thank you! :D...
Undergraduaterrolle - Dec 30, 2011 / rrolle - Dec 31, 2011
|'the fear take control of me' - uber short supplement essay
Undergraduatepjw7109 - Dec 31, 2011 / pjw7109 - Dec 31, 2011
|'No such thing as the Postal Service' - NYU Supplement- What intrigues you?
Undergraduateibeckki - Dec 29, 2011 / edwkoc - Dec 31, 2011
|A Bold but Quick Move - Stanford Intellectual Vitality Supplement Essay
Undergraduateinsanesoul81994 - Dec 30, 2011 / insanesoul81994 - Dec 31, 2011
|improvement through research / guardianship - Why Rochester?
UndergraduateBlazinazn253 - Dec 31, 2011 / kathyxtrieu - Dec 31, 2011
|'valuable individual identity' - COMMON AP ESSAY
2 - This essay has potential, but your anecdote and analysis of yourself is negative in the beginning to the middle....
Undergraduatewilliamwu123 - Dec 31, 2011 / Strawberry78 - Dec 31, 2011
|"Child of two cultures" Rice University admissions essay
2 - I'm applying to Rice also~ Over all prespectives are good, and having two cultures in one is a very...
Undergraduatemiketheaddict - Dec 23, 2011 / 4151yhh - Dec 31, 2011
|My Personal Essay - I realize how much I have changed
Undergraduateand_shi - Dec 30, 2011 / AMANDANIELLE - Dec 31, 2011
|'A Korean minority in boarding school' - common app
Undergraduatepjw7109 - Dec 29, 2011 / SeniorMel - Dec 31, 2011
|'the best undergraduate biology programs' - Cornell Supplement
Undergraduatesoshifan - Dec 30, 2011 / pringles - Dec 31, 2011
|'still the teacher assistant' - college essay
Undergraduatecupcakes12 - Dec 30, 2011 / cupcakes12 - Dec 31, 2011
|SAIC SOP -- Found; 'excellent teachers and intense artistic atmosphere'
NEW - instructions: Writing is a very important component of being an artist. We will be looking closely at your ability...
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|'Hispanic culture / Medicine / Jewish Men' - NYU Supplement
5 - I shall change the beginning of the second one! i thought it would be bold, guess it just comes...
Undergraduatekhajee - Dec 30, 2011 / khajee - Dec 31, 2011
|'Slam and pointer finger' - Stanford Univ. - What matters to you and Why
4 - I think I can understand why you state that "My pointer finger matters to me" However, as the question...
Undergraduatefishie21 - Dec 30, 2011 / 4151yhh - Dec 31, 2011
|BU Supplement (Roomie) - It's so nice to finally meet you!
Undergraduatervonitter - Dec 31, 2011 / SeniorMel - Dec 31, 2011
|'A country like Bangladesh' - evaluate my comon app essay
2 - This essay is very well written and it develops very nicely into a thoughtful, meaningful essay. When I...
Undergraduatemalika - Dec 30, 2011 / Mango17 - Dec 31, 2011
|Recommended / Inspirational / Teacher assistant /Walls Syracuse University Supplement
Undergraduatein0va3 - Dec 30, 2011 / dmjackson - Dec 31, 2011
|'assumptions rather than knowledge' - intellectual vitality- stanford supp
9 - I just dont' think it's a good topic to begin with. Doesn't really show intellectual vitality and this essay...
Undergraduategris_pereyra - Dec 30, 2011 / Buffomatic - Dec 30, 2011
|Cornell A&S Supplement: Economics & Management Passion
Undergraduatethes1tuation - Dec 30, 2011 / zmj7706 - Dec 30, 2011
|'Cycling Club / Even Better' - University of Rochester Supplements
3 - I think that these two paragraphs need to mention something about U Rochester No where in the first...
Undergraduatein0va3 - Dec 30, 2011 / soshifan - Dec 30, 2011
|Tufts Supplement - "consider the world within yourself"
UndergraduateNerd99 - Dec 30, 2011 / Nerd99 - Dec 30, 2011
|Evaluate a signific. experience and it's affect on you - Bullies to Best Friends
UndergraduateMauru23 - Dec 29, 2011 / Mauru23 - Dec 30, 2011
|'The common good is relative' - interests and aspirations - BOWDOIN'S SUPPLEMENT
NEW - BE HARSH In an effort to understand your interests and aspirations for college, we ask you to select...
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|'Your institution gives me access to both of my passions' - Common Application
Undergraduatervonitter - Dec 30, 2011 / rvonitter - Dec 30, 2011
|Stanford Intellectual Vitality Essay - Combat Robotics
2 - The whole thing is really really good... until the last paragraph. You were so descriptive throughout that I almost...
UndergraduateJasu - Dec 30, 2011 / daniel44992 - Dec 30, 2011
|'like the bridge in the guitar' - Why Conncoll?
4 - I think you should expand on the small school thing. some of the diction gets repetitive, though. Please check...
Undergraduaterahilsavani - Dec 30, 2011 / karissa_a16 - Dec 30, 2011
|Why Michigan? An insight into my life and future.
Undergraduatealbo23 - Dec 30, 2011 / rockbiter - Dec 30, 2011
|UVa supplement - Engineering Essay "Glass Bridge"
2 - you have a cool idea with the glass floor thing. I don't really know anything about engineering, but I...
Undergraduatedaniel44992 - Dec 30, 2011 / karissa_a16 - Dec 30, 2011
|'Chris McCandless, an unsettling character' - UVA supplement essay
Undergraduatejleep23 - Dec 30, 2011 / sarahbee - Dec 30, 2011
|Notre-Dame Supp: "The Unexplored"/"Moral Radiance"
7 - I like the second one. I think you should focus a little more on notre dame specifically, but don't...
UndergraduateGraceTaylorWei - Dec 29, 2011 / karissa_a16 - Dec 30, 2011
|Notre-Dame: "What would you do with a $5000 Grant?" (I'll Edit Back!)
5 - I really like your essay. A lot of detail and personal experience that you brought into it. You provide...
UndergraduateGraceTaylorWei - Dec 30, 2011 / matthewmuliadi - Dec 30, 2011
|Big zhou, my chemistry teacher
Undergraduatekarissa_a16 - Dec 27, 2011 / cupnoodle123 - Dec 30, 2011
|Common Application Personal Statement Essay - Small Talk
2 - First off, I believe that the essay was well crafted with a fine choice of words. The one thing,...
Undergraduatepuhahajk - Dec 30, 2011 / rvonitter - Dec 30, 2011
|Significant Challenge and Its Impact (SVU essay) - I use the power of words
UndergraduateDani1218 - Dec 30, 2011 / Dani1218 - Dec 30, 2011
|(new methods of thinking / journalism / Bohemian Rhapsody) - NYU
Undergraduatehanakml - Dec 29, 2011 / hanakml - Dec 30, 2011
|'Unlike many others, I truly enjoy volunteering' - EXTRACURRICULAR SHORT ESSAY
3 - The first 4 sentences seem risky to me. It can either make you stand out among other applicant or...
UndergraduateCheesyCake - Dec 30, 2011 / makman09 - Dec 30, 2011
|I can't spell accidentally - princeton and harvard supplement
7 - I love your essay, Nia! And thank you for providing useful feedback. I have to agree with Max,...
UndergraduateSeniorMel - Dec 26, 2011 / GraceTaylorWei - Dec 30, 2011
|"Black man from the hood"; Common app- Diversity from Tutoring
3 - The essay is definitely a better rewrite than your last one. You effectively showed who you are and how...
UndergraduateBillyIon - Dec 30, 2011 / makman09 - Dec 30, 2011
|Common App Extracurricular Essay - Korea experience
Undergraduatekimisizer - Dec 30, 2011 / CheesyCake - Dec 30, 2011
|'something about musical theatre' - Expand on one of your extracurriculars.
Undergraduatenodumblonde1616 - Dec 28, 2011 / CheesyCake - Dec 30, 2011
|NYU Supplement - Major Response
3 - Would it be better if I switch the first paragraph with the last one? The major is Media, Culture,...
Undergraduaterrolle - Dec 30, 2011 / rrolle - Dec 30, 2011
|'A small tiny ant' - Princeton Voice essay
Undergraduateujax - Dec 30, 2011 / ujax - Dec 30, 2011
|Why Columbia Essay. Only 200 words. "My dream"
UndergraduateLitttlemissct1 - Dec 30, 2011 / Litttlemissct1 - Dec 30, 2011
|Common App Essay - People Watching
2 - First off, I'm not going to make any remarks with regards to grammar since everything seems pretty good, and...
Undergraduatedanigreenhouse - Dec 30, 2011 / puhahajk - Dec 30, 2011
|'Footsteps' - Common app essay
9 - Thank you so much! I really like your suggestions. I would love to look at your NYU supplement. :]...
Undergraduategotpho - Dec 30, 2011 / gotpho - Dec 30, 2011
|'Drawn to Math Olympics' - Brown Supplement Essay?
4 - Thank you for revising HEast22! I changed it a little is it better this way? My participation on...
Undergraduatemonique45 - Dec 30, 2011 / monique45 - Dec 30, 2011
|'the last patient walked out' - Common App short answer
Undergraduatekhoiphan - Dec 24, 2011 / khoiphan - Dec 30, 2011
|Short extracurricular essay. 'Model UN is the activity I enjoy the most'
UndergraduateJIII - Dec 29, 2011 / altang1 - Dec 30, 2011
|WHY DUKE?? Management and Market Program + Civic Engagement
7 - Great essay! Maybe a little bit less in the beginning about your story and more about why you like...
Undergraduatelzhd1028 - Dec 29, 2011 / HEast22 - Dec 30, 2011
|'Cell phone beep' - Stanford Intellectual Vitality
Undergraduatepringles - Dec 30, 2011 / fishie21 - Dec 30, 2011
|'The Perks of Being Literate and Self-Honesty' - PERSONAL ESSAY
Undergraduatehanakml - Dec 29, 2011 / hanakml - Dec 30, 2011
|'A student, not an athlete' - Stanford Intellectual Vitality Essay
10 - very passionate and well-written. it clearly shows your fall in enjoyment level. best of luck!! :)...
UndergraduateappliCAN - Dec 30, 2011 / fishie21 - Dec 30, 2011
|'the dumbest of my parents' children' Common App personal Statement essay
8 - a possibility would be to say something about how this influence has shaped you today, seeing that present tense...
UndergraduateCheesyCake - Dec 30, 2011 / deremifri - Dec 30, 2011
|'Student and citizen' - (why Mac)Admission Essay
2 - I would recommend implementing the reasons why you would be a good student for mac into the descriptions of...
UndergraduateSammyikua - Dec 30, 2011 / deremifri - Dec 30, 2011
|'Being in a separate country' - stanford what matters to you and why
4 - This is a really good essay. Try to include any activities you have been in with this quality or...
Undergraduatearicar17 - Dec 30, 2011 / pong - Dec 30, 2011
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