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|'an influx of officials' + 'regime in Ghana' - Macalester essays
Undergraduatedestinychild - Dec 24, 2011 / cordyceps - Dec 26, 2011
|"I just don't like you," she scoffed and turned back to face the board.
13 - dude you are one clearly clever beast. you managed to answer what the supplement wa asking but you'd put...
Undergraduatemaroon5 - Dec 8, 2011 / athai45 - Dec 26, 2011
|Physics thinker - Stanford Supplement Intellectual Vitality
6 - I like the essay overall but because you used so much of the space up with technical terms you...
Undergraduatelch920619x - Dec 22, 2011 / Walden - Dec 26, 2011
|'Time spent in towers' Short Answer for the Common APP (UNDERGRAD Arch)
4 - Having taken... ... an internship that put me well out of my comfort zone, I have benefited in...
UndergraduateTsoufan - Dec 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2011
|'Home across the Atlantic Ocean' -Your Roommate, a TCK ( Stanford Letter to Roommate)
2 - I like the essay overall but it seems that you demonstrate who you are more by saying than by...
UndergraduatePhilia10 - Nov 20, 2011 / Walden - Dec 26, 2011
|'I am an open person' - Stanford- Letter to Roommate
6 - I think it helps the roommate essay for you to relate your hobbies and what they reveal about your...
Undergraduategooseman94 - Dec 26, 2011 / cupnoodle123 - Dec 26, 2011
|'the pro at relaxing' - the world within-Tufts supplement
Undergraduatecherrybomb94 - Dec 26, 2011 / cherrybomb94 - Dec 26, 2011
|Rice (Why do you want to study history, What perspective do you bring)
3 - History has, since childhood, filled my dreams with escapades of Marco Polo and heated discussions with leaders like Jefferson,...
UndergraduateVvarsha - Dec 26, 2011 / nr554 - Dec 26, 2011
|'how important my father is in my life' - Personal Statement
Undergraduateluadatio - Dec 26, 2011 / luadatio - Dec 26, 2011
|'Leaving the Marine Corps' - Statement of Purpose, Electrical Engineering Major
4 - When I started school again in 2011 I did so with some small trepidation, because my grades thus far...
UndergraduateHerrTrigger - Dec 26, 2011 / Vvarsha - Dec 26, 2011
|'leave one's comfort zone of friends, home' -Transfer (Cornell, UNC, Vanderbilt, NYU)
Undergraduatedhaber1 - Dec 26, 2011 / jebhogiaye - Dec 26, 2011
|"What the....?" - Stanford roomate essay
Undergraduateecieee - Dec 23, 2011 / saints13 - Dec 26, 2011
|a memorable moment -- UIUC essay: some interest or experience of you
3 - "Hey, look at your post-it note; it fell off the wall again!" "I like the smiles that appear on...
Undergraduatelittlebutterfly - Dec 26, 2011 / jebhogiaye - Dec 26, 2011
|Common App - Significant experience. "Lost in Translation"
4 - Ah, I see. That's good then! Even something as simple as "Over the years, I've learned to appreciate...
Undergraduatekikula - Dec 26, 2011 / summerteeth - Dec 26, 2011
|'Chinese calligraphy' - Rice- Unique Life Experiences and Perspective
Undergraduateparker - Dec 15, 2011 / silentspring - Dec 26, 2011
|'a science student with a great appreciation for the arts' - Common App short
5 - Yes. The prompt is to elaborate an extracurricular. Guess I should have included that :-) I was not...
Undergraduatecordyceps - Dec 26, 2011 / cordyceps - Dec 26, 2011
|'a letter from the Posse Foundation' - how and why you learn about Vassar?
Undergraduatesilentspring - Dec 26, 2011 / silentspring - Dec 26, 2011
|Columbia Supp., one notable book, favorite academic class, why Columbia, why major
UndergraduateNaverist - Nov 27, 2011 / Vvarsha - Dec 26, 2011
|Rice/Columbia career essay -- why I enjoy airports
2 - I like your intro, but i didn't know you were talking about sociology until the end. I would definitely...
Undergraduatejayelectrolosis - Dec 26, 2011 / Vvarsha - Dec 26, 2011
|Brown supplement essay -- you don't know what you have till you have it
Undergraduatejayelectrolosis - Dec 26, 2011 / jayelectrolosis - Dec 26, 2011
|Stanford Letter to Roommate "Teamplayer"
8 - Thanks for the comments all of you! They were all really helpful to help me improve some areas and...
Undergraduatecupnoodle123 - Dec 21, 2011 / cupnoodle123 - Dec 26, 2011
|'the only junior flutist' - MIT- Biggest Challenge question
4 - Thanks, I'll take those suggestions into consideration. This is just my attempt at condensing a longer essay I had...
Undergraduateflutenerd - Dec 26, 2011 / flutenerd - Dec 26, 2011
|'the sense of contentment I enjoyed' - Common App - Personal (Significant Experience)
2 - I love the second paragraph! I don't think you need the first one there though. The imagery of the...
Undergraduatedychung7 - Dec 26, 2011 / flutenerd - Dec 26, 2011
|'The desire to be free' - German needs help with MIT essay
Undergraduatederemifri - Dec 25, 2011 / admission2012 - Dec 26, 2011
|Why I Love Physics- Common App Essay
2 - I loved your essay but remember colleges are looking for an essay that reflects who you are, why you...
Undergraduateraslacrosse - Dec 26, 2011 / Hilianas94 - Dec 26, 2011
|'in the middle of a war zone' - Common App extra curricular essay
5 - If you apply for a really competitive school you should not use this. For an average school the approach...
Undergraduateglamazing - Dec 26, 2011 / deremifri - Dec 26, 2011
|'The office workers' - Common App EC essay about debate
11 - Thank you very much guys! @ zhaoyihao, thanks for pointing that out. It's fixed. @kwikandrew, thank you :) @cherrybomb94,...
Undergraduatedesm2012 - Dec 25, 2011 / desm2012 - Dec 26, 2011
|'good stories in my head' - NYU Supplement essays
2 - Hi Dylan, I really like the end of this essay because it comes across confidently. However, the rest...
UndergraduateSilverbrush - Dec 26, 2011 / tcohen - Dec 26, 2011
|"I did not see the point in art" - Common App
2 - "instead, while rather plain and simple, yet it is one of the most inspiring paintings I have ever seen...
Undergraduatemsaenz - Dec 26, 2011 / articuno - Dec 26, 2011
|'we live in a very unpredictable world' - the world u come from-MIT essay 250 words
5 - It at times sounds like you are just listing adjectives that make you look like a good and intelligent...
Undergraduatearceus - Dec 26, 2011 / deremifri - Dec 26, 2011
|'intellectual and fun place' - Why Tufts?
4 - Tufts seem to be a place which is intellectual and at the same time fun, even Tuft's traditions,...
Undergraduaterasim99 - Dec 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2011
|'Life is the most important thing' - Why Major Essay
3 - Thanks for the feedback. I implied that I thought salmonella is fatal, and that is how I knew so...
UndergraduateRiceAllTheWhey - Dec 26, 2011 / RiceAllTheWhey - Dec 26, 2011
|The ugly princess. Common App Essay
10 - Really great writing, it really shows your personality. You should not use masterpiece two times. do not remember a...
Undergraduatesuper57 - Dec 18, 2011 / deremifri - Dec 26, 2011
|'No Buzz Lightning' - Common App Personal Statement
6 - Thank you so much everyone for your critique, but I have actually decided this essay does not do a...
Undergraduateglamazing - Dec 26, 2011 / glamazing - Dec 26, 2011
|'aerospace engineer' - commonapp personal-umich application
2 - Do you tell a woman that she is your second choice? Well, you should avoid this in applications. Do...
Undergraduateemrebond007 - Dec 26, 2011 / deremifri - Dec 26, 2011
|'the weird little things that define me' - Tufts Supplement Question 3
7 - The last phrase, while grammatically correct, makes the sentence kind of awkward. I'm not sure you even need...
Undergraduatektbillings2 - Dec 26, 2011 / Rennir - Dec 26, 2011
|'family has nine houses' - about how I change my perception
6 - Thank alot guys, I'll improve my essay and post the revised version soon! Again, thank you so so much!!...
Undergraduatelinhnguyen2112 - Dec 26, 2011 / linhnguyen2112 - Dec 26, 2011
|'a country known only for its war' - CommonApp - Significant Event (Sri Lanka)
5 - Thank you very much for all the feedback. Really appreciate it! :) @Hussein: Yes that is exactly what...
Undergraduateclaude - Dec 26, 2011 / claude - Dec 26, 2011
|Common App Essay: Running my Own Business
2 - I think that the fact that you started your own business at fifteen will impress any admissions officer no...
Undergraduatethes1tuation - Dec 26, 2011 / Alikap - Dec 26, 2011
|'My brother breathes life into our home' - UMBC ESSAY
Undergraduatemorecelery - Dec 10, 2011 / agronr - Dec 26, 2011
|"Dad won't be happy" Lehigh University: WHY US?
UndergraduateNoobzilla - Dec 26, 2011 / Noobzilla - Dec 26, 2011
|'Time is what matters' - What matters to you - stanford supp
Undergraduateagronr - Dec 26, 2011 / agronr - Dec 26, 2011
|Stanford Roommate Essay--Blank Slate
4 - 'My name is'..you forgot the is! I like the essay, but I would advice you not to oversell yourself...
UndergraduateXavier19 - Dec 24, 2011 / glamazing - Dec 26, 2011
|Common App- a creative work (The Road Not Taken by Robert Frost)
7 - I would advise to make the language in the first paragraph more colorful. However, don't change it to the...
Undergraduatekruthimohan - Dec 24, 2011 / dychung7 - Dec 26, 2011
|'the Courrpution Perception Index' - Claremont Mckenna Supplement essay
UndergraduateAlikap - Dec 21, 2011 / Alikap - Dec 26, 2011
|'lifelong relationships' - Brown supplement- Something you created
6 - I think that your ideas are good. Add a personal touch to it, your flair. maybe a short phrase...
Undergraduatezkachmer - Dec 23, 2011 / boom - Dec 26, 2011
|'Nobody can go back' - Personal essay on a significant experience
8 - Typically speaking, admission committees are more concerned with sentence structure, grammar, etc. than with vocabulary acrobatics. Oftentimes, less...
Undergraduateagronr - Dec 24, 2011 / Prettywings - Dec 26, 2011
|NYC, Ms. Clark, High-Five, HEOP Scholars - Barnard replies
7 - i agree with the comment before. i applied to Barnard as well. more than talking about being helpful and...
Undergraduatemaryp630 - Dec 23, 2011 / boom - Dec 26, 2011
|'Economics - my big passion' - NUS admission process
4 - Economics is my big passion. Please allow me to show because You will never think it is just ordinary...
Undergraduateibejunpyu - Dec 26, 2011 / ibejunpyu - Dec 26, 2011
|'constructing skyscrapers, bridges, large dams' - NUS Essay
3 - I agree with the above comment, i think it's a boring essay, you should give the intrigues or something...
Undergraduateaha123 - Dec 17, 2011 / ibejunpyu - Dec 26, 2011
|roommate / intellectual / what matters - Stanford supplement essays
7 - Good Luck!...
Undergraduatearbrelibre - Dec 19, 2011 / RGarvey - Dec 26, 2011
|"SET" - COMMON APP - 498 words.
6 - First, "As an Indian student, adventure ran in my veins; So I decided to move to a more credible...
Undergraduatedevansh1411 - Dec 26, 2011 / kakari - Dec 26, 2011
|'I came to this world without anything' - Brown Supplement Essay
4 - I agree with domi that maybe you should write more specific things, show an alive "you" to the admission...
Undergraduatesh1ta - Dec 19, 2011 / ChihiroLavi - Dec 26, 2011
|'religion and history' Lafayette - Why are you interested in Lafayette College?
9 - Lishan Yes that makes a whole lot of sense. Lafayette's emphasis on research will also, prepare me...
UndergraduateRavenclaw_roar - Dec 23, 2011 / ZhoeK - Dec 26, 2011
|'anatomy and physiology' - Columbia favorite class
3 - Hey! Thanks for reading my essay. For yours, I think that the beginning conversation between you and your sister...
Undergraduatesilentspring - Dec 25, 2011 / cherrybomb94 - Dec 26, 2011
|'A Proud Accomplishment' - experience common app
4 - Loved your essay, the writing is truly brilliant, although I did spot two awkward phrases -"Normally at my age...
Undergraduateoreoreal - Dec 26, 2011 / glamazing - Dec 26, 2011
|(Buddhist stories) Stanford Supp Essay---intellectual development"ancient arts"
6 - I have nothing to add after cupnoodle123's corrections. as she said, you could mention how the stories relate to...
UndergraduateChihiroLavi - Dec 25, 2011 / agronr - Dec 26, 2011
|'game designer and game director' Art Institute Essay
2 - AGAIN IT MAY BE JUST ME...the content is ok but essay is kinda boring...too dry for my taste...i always...
Undergraduatepatpatpat - Dec 26, 2011 / Noobzilla - Dec 26, 2011
|'I love sports' - Boston few things you should like to share about yourself?
Undergraduatekwikandrew - Dec 26, 2011 / ChihiroLavi - Dec 26, 2011
|'only who I am' - common app essay "WHO I AM"
UndergraduateChihiroLavi - Dec 18, 2011 / kwikandrew - Dec 26, 2011
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