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|'When I ran into the arms of my mother' - U Richmond - leaving the comfort zone
Undergraduateemanon - Nov 17, 2011 / emanon - Nov 23, 2011
|'Cross country, to make the best out of it' - University of California prompt 2
UndergraduateElitelee - Nov 22, 2011 / ktzluke10 - Nov 23, 2011
|'education, health and economy of the Dominican Rep' statement public administration
2 - ...a lot in the past ...and corrupted government that had by that time had no concern for the...
Undergraduatehandernu - Nov 20, 2011 / kxoh - Nov 23, 2011
|'the unfamiliar land of America' - UC Essay Prompt #1
2 - economic hardships naturally followed by exposure to proper medical... each rejection was welcomed by my mother's pleasant smiles...
UndergraduateKsideHb - Nov 21, 2011 / kxoh - Nov 23, 2011
|UC Transfer Prompt: Intended Major Is Anthropology
Undergraduateamatsui19 - Nov 20, 2011 / amatsui19 - Nov 23, 2011
|UC Prompt#1: The Power of Art and Additional Comments
Undergraduateamatsui19 - Nov 19, 2011 / amatsui19 - Nov 23, 2011
|'I'm bilingual in both Vietnamese and English' UC determination and dedication
NEW - "Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this...
Undergraduateohhitsnhi - Nov 23, 2011 / — -
|'A virtuoso in teaching' - Commonapp "short answer" essay
Undergraduateshadglore - Nov 21, 2011 / shadglore - Nov 23, 2011
|My weekends are filled with complaints, compliments, spills, and new releases
2 - Learning from all these experiences will definitely help me achieve my goals I think this is quite vague...you...
Undergraduatekholmes - Nov 21, 2011 / shadglore - Nov 23, 2011
|'We were the only South Asian Muslim family' - statement for University of California
Undergraduateshirajgotaphd - Nov 22, 2011 / shirajgotaphd - Nov 22, 2011
|'no longer being the baby' - UC prompt #1
Undergraduateemicha25 - Nov 22, 2011 / _alan25 - Nov 22, 2011
|About "One Child Policy" for common app
NEW - Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you. Be careful to...
Undergraduateamymao - Nov 22, 2011 / — -
|'The language barrier is the biggest challenge of my life' - UT Essay
Undergraduatexchriswangx - Nov 22, 2011 / dreamsarereal - Nov 22, 2011
|Reasons for pursuing the visual art. SVA essay.
2 - Delete were in the following sentence: As children we were all came across the question "what do you want...
Undergraduateflowersinthesky - Nov 22, 2011 / AU0594 - Nov 22, 2011
|'Service - characteristic that appeals to me the most' - FSU
3 - It might be beneficial to avoid stating "The one characteristic that appeals the most to me is community service."...
UndergraduatebreakingRenee - Nov 20, 2011 / mmay - Nov 22, 2011
|"late night playlist" - Stanford Essay - Roommate
2 - Overall, I think you've written a great essay. I like that you aren't afraid to point out your own...
Undergraduatecarlyhines4 - Nov 22, 2011 / mmay - Nov 22, 2011
|JHU - describe choices in major - Neuroscience/Autism Research
2 - That simple conversation remains, eight years later, the backbone of my goals for the future.---This is great! I have...
Undergraduatedenofthieves - Nov 20, 2011 / EF_Susan - Nov 22, 2011
|'A college campus = a melting pot' - common app essay on diversity
Undergraduatekenyaboyfresh - Nov 17, 2011 / kenyaboyfresh - Nov 22, 2011
|'Coming from a modern city in India' - UC ESSAY ( MY WORLD )
5 - I think you should move up the second paragraph to be the intro because they want to know about...
Undergraduatepratyush427 - Nov 20, 2011 / safiyyah1 - Nov 22, 2011
|'Family of doctors and engineering' Drexel Application-why interested in your major
2 - I think you shouldn't say that you weren't sure cause towards the end you stated that you wanted to...
UndergraduateNate417 - Nov 22, 2011 / safiyyah1 - Nov 22, 2011
|'having chosen physics as a career' - UC PROMPT #2 ESSAY
5 - thanks for your time reading my essay i have edited the first paragraph Please review it again ...
Undergraduatedarknite94 - Nov 19, 2011 / darknite94 - Nov 22, 2011
|'The Power of Music' - UC 1
2 - Wow this is great, very personal and intimate, and you portray both your internal struggles and big turn-around very...
Undergraduatedmatano360 - Nov 22, 2011 / Kenny H - Nov 22, 2011
|'Ghanaian smiles' - cultural experience supplemental essay
Undergraduateshadglore - Nov 22, 2011 / shadglore - Nov 22, 2011
|Letter to my room mate about my gaming hobby
6 - Do not forget to write in a letter format (according to me). It may be of great importance. For...
Undergraduateketalthedon - Nov 17, 2011 / watermark - Nov 22, 2011
|'all things are subject to change' - Prompt #2
3 - As a young immigrant, changes in my surroundings linguistically and culturally almost seemed natural to me, as well as...
UndergraduateKsideHb - Nov 21, 2011 / ank2jpr - Nov 22, 2011
|'Why so serious?' - Common App favorite quotation
4 - I think your essay is O.k but you've got few things to work on.Remember,adcoms like essays that "show" instead...
UndergraduateTheophania - Oct 30, 2011 / shadglore - Nov 22, 2011
|Revision: North/South Korea Family Reunion
2 - A bunch of grammar mistakes. Reread it but with a silent voice so that you can catch the mistakes....
Undergraduatedd9679 - Nov 22, 2011 / Elitelee - Nov 22, 2011
|'February 1998, San Francisco' - University of California prompt 1
NEW - Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how...
UndergraduateElitelee - Nov 22, 2011 / — -
|What i learned from my grandmothers death-UC prompt 2
Undergraduateemicha25 - Nov 20, 2011 / emicha25 - Nov 22, 2011
|UC APP: "Openness, my best quality"
2 - I really dislike the word "Openness"- maybe you can substitute it for better words like "Liberal," or even "Flexible."...
UndergraduateMucker31 - Nov 20, 2011 / KsideHb - Nov 21, 2011
|My Experience with Diabetes - UC Prompt 2
3 - Its a solid essay except i think you should elaborate more on what u have learned from this expierence...
Undergraduatesolid penguin - Nov 21, 2011 / bunnythind13 - Nov 21, 2011
|'we are blinded from the future' - UC Personal Statement
Undergraduatelakendoll - Nov 20, 2011 / lakendoll - Nov 21, 2011
|Common Application- Nicaragua Experience
5 - Awesome! overall really great! The intro was both catchy and interesting. In response to your question, i would just...
Undergraduatedumdeedumdeedoo - Oct 29, 2011 / dmatano360 - Nov 21, 2011
|'what oppresses people' + 'roommate, my clammy handshake' - Stanford
4 - thank you!...
Undergraduatejoho104 - Nov 20, 2011 / joho104 - Nov 21, 2011
|Swimming.. I wouldn't have dreamed - Common App short
2 - Take out the second comma: When I walked into the locker room before the first practice my freshman year...
Undergraduate12SMiller - Nov 19, 2011 / AU0594 - Nov 21, 2011
|Northwestern Essay (the Weinberg College of Arts and Sciences)
2 - Split the following sentences in to two sentences: Since I came to the United States six years ago, I've...
UndergraduateSelina78 - Nov 19, 2011 / AU0594 - Nov 21, 2011
|"Have a great first practice" - University of Washington Meaningful Experience
2 - Cautiously, I unfold my own clearance forms and hand them to a captain instead, crossing my fingers there are...
Undergraduatettger37lie - Nov 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Nov 21, 2011
|Common app- working at the family store
Undergraduatelambo1013 - Nov 21, 2011 / solid penguin - Nov 21, 2011
|UC Essay: Architecture, immigration and God.
Undergraduatepolk540 - Nov 20, 2011 / polk540 - Nov 21, 2011
|"The Birth of an Afterthought" - common applicaiton
5 - Using a fantasy battle is a great approach to your essay! But i have one little suggestion: i find...
UndergraduateSammyFearless - Nov 21, 2011 / HappyBerry - Nov 21, 2011
|'thinking was all I could do' - UC - PERSONAL QUALITY, TALENT
4 - I certainly think that is a great little story for the UC admissions to get to know you. However,...
Undergraduateskyleyle - Nov 21, 2011 / HappyBerry - Nov 21, 2011
|'The piece that would not FIT' - FIT Fashion Merchandising Essay
2 - Nice Essay, and good writing, maybe you should take out some negative things you say about yourself like not...
Undergraduateladynik - Nov 21, 2011 / Cecile - Nov 21, 2011
|'parents that care about my education' Someone that has made an impact on your life
Undergraduateleosanchez16 - Nov 21, 2011 / Nnennej - Nov 21, 2011
|"Kak tvoy den prashol?" - U.C. Prompt II- The World you Come From
UndergraduateCecile - Nov 21, 2011 / — -
|'I volunteered at nursing homes' - personal essay for UW-Milwaukee
2 - This sound great so far! A few suggestions: the feeling of making someone's day easier can not be...
Undergraduatelowlow - Nov 19, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 21, 2011
|'size popcorn' - working at the theater (work experience)
2 - You have a good start to your essay. It does not need too much grammar changes. I noticed that...
Undergraduatecollegebound15 - Nov 19, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 21, 2011
|'run while chasing a dream' - University of Cincinnati
Undergraduatekk570xoxo - Nov 21, 2011 / deepa21 - Nov 21, 2011
|'Family, Years ago, in China' - UW Personal Essay
2 - First of all, I'm really sorry that you had to go through such treatment at the hands of family....
UndergraduateMikiMouse - Nov 21, 2011 / feelthesun012 - Nov 21, 2011
|'Artwork and my personal beliefs about current social issues' SAIC Written Statement
2 - In the present time,My artwork could best be said to represent my personal beliefs about current social issues.---I cut...
UndergraduateZRK - Nov 16, 2011 / EF_Susan - Nov 21, 2011
|'Volunteering at out-patient orthopedic setting' - review for PTCAS
2 - In the spring of 2010, I signed up for an athletic training course, called Musculoskeletal Rehabilitation. On the...
Undergraduatejlh1045 - Nov 15, 2011 / EF_Susan - Nov 21, 2011
|'Both my parents and I are immigrants' - uc prompt 1
2 - The idea of the essay is good. I think you can indicate which country you migrate from can better...
Undergraduatejuanr4252 - Nov 21, 2011 / Lesliema713 - Nov 21, 2011
|'I was able to accomplish great personal qualities' -UC essay to the personal quality
2 - I like how you described your personal quality and how you related it to your growth not only as...
Undergraduatejinisnumber1 - Nov 20, 2011 / juanr4252 - Nov 21, 2011
|'sketching and materials' - intended major + 'happy to go to school' UC prompt1/2
Undergraduatejenny1989 - Nov 21, 2011 / Klabberghasted - Nov 21, 2011
|'the expansion of my ability to help others' - Washington Personal Essay
UndergraduateMikiMouse - Nov 18, 2011 / hanna4292 - Nov 20, 2011
|'paint and draw' + 'the legacy of Martin Luther King' - UC final
2 - Your second essay is really great. It seems little bragging, so you may want to drop out few detail...
Undergraduatepokiworms - Nov 20, 2011 / polk540 - Nov 20, 2011
|"A World of Constant Change" University of Washington Personal Statement
2 - explain phase and what u mean. torrid son of Kern County, but having to completely restart and meet new...
UndergraduateCaptainasian167 - Nov 17, 2011 / Addow - Nov 20, 2011
|UC PROMPT # 2 - Story of a Couch Surfer
2 - You did a great job describing the "experience that is important to you." However, I think you should focus...
Undergraduatenightingowl - Nov 20, 2011 / jnbadj - Nov 20, 2011
|'moved every year of my life': My world , how it has shaped my dreams and aspirations
4 - REVISED PLEASE HELP :):):):):):):) As a little girl living through fairytale dreams, I viewed the world around me...
Undergraduateloveyou2 - Nov 13, 2011 / loveyou2 - Nov 20, 2011
|"Death of my Father" (University of Washington Prompt 1.B)
Undergraduatebunnythind13 - Nov 20, 2011 / madilla - Nov 20, 2011
|'never stopping and never having to settle' - What attracts me to Umich
3 - This is well written ... I think you should kinda focus more on what the school offers .. and...
UndergraduateStrappingyl - Nov 17, 2011 / madilla - Nov 20, 2011
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