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|The national quiz show "Kantipur Quiz Whiz." - significant experience or achievement.
Undergraduateupretisr - May 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2011
|What should be invented?-An essay for HSYLC forum held by Havard university
3 - Thank you so much! Your words have made me confident in my writing again. I'll submit the revised work....
Undergraduateitenet - May 27, 2011 / itenet - May 30, 2011
|"anger issues" - UC Personal Statement (personal quality, talent, experience)
2 - As a child I always had anger issues, and my... family would nickname me bilioso, which is Spanish...
Undergraduatejchachachavez - May 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 29, 2011
|Business Transfer Essay (Finance major) - Professional Statement
3 - The first sentence of the essay is... lackluster. (Did I even use that word correctly? I don't think I...
UndergraduateVstampede1 - May 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 29, 2011
|"the source to take my dream to the next level: Computer Software Engineer" - NJIT
4 - I heard about the New Jersey Institute of Technology from my uncle, a NJIT graduate (List the degree and...
Undergraduatewaquarali - May 28, 2011 / EricJ - May 28, 2011
|"I used to think life was different" - Harvard supplemental essay for fall admissions
11 - I would have to agree with notoman. Your essays sounds more like a biography. It should be a personal...
Undergraduateeduardo8 - May 22, 2011 / mountainman - May 28, 2011
|every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end
4 - If you were to ask when my life had its turning point, its climax, its pinnacle, and perhaps its...
Undergraduatepcvrz34g - May 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2011
|A Chinese proverb / Favorite place - admission essay to boarding school
Undergraduateaboveblues - May 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2011
|My mother had a big influence on my life since I was born - an important person!
3 - Hello, Mouley, You are supposed to go help another essayist by commenting on her/his thread. Here's one you...
Undergraduatecicete - May 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2011
|Why I Would be a Good Business Leader - Business Transfer Essay
UndergraduateGatling - May 25, 2011 / EF_Susan - May 25, 2011
|"nervous about starting college" - the biggest challenge as a freshman? Overcome it?
3 - I don't want to be the socially-awkward girl that's always in the library with a book in front of...
Undergraduatedevihari17 - May 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 24, 2011
|An achievement: the best students in the class during all my school years
Undergraduatesikiran - May 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 24, 2011
|"My talent in art; UTSA Roadrunner" - Essay C - Talents and Achievements
Undergraduatecmarb629 - May 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 24, 2011
|Physical Therapy Education: PT - Statement of Purpose
Undergraduateptstudenthope - May 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 24, 2011
|Temple-essay 2: personal development, about myself.
UndergraduateAscendtoashes - May 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 24, 2011
|Theme for the Day for my college Nite.
7 - @Kevin- Ninja Dance Party. Are you out of your mind. Sounds like a kid's birthday party to me...hahahaha...
Undergraduateisai - May 20, 2011 / Neeta - May 23, 2011
|"not to roam around with people from other countries" - an intercultural event/issue
10 - Bad habit! :-) You create more work for yourself if you do that. Plus, your typing fingers will...
Undergraduatelivrpl4evr - May 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2011
|"My major is to Teach Chinese as a Foreign Language" - Personal Statement
Undergraduatewhitney - May 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2011
|Nursing: Admissions essay for prompt: why did you choose healthcare?
8 - Capitalize the whole job title: Chief of Police Here's an idea: To follow my own interests simply...
UndergraduateAngelaK - May 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2011
|"harmonic sound chills of excitement" - a meaningful experience in your life
Undergraduatetye654 - May 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2011
|'Relief after landing' - dartmouth experience that changed my life
3 - I'll make some corrections, too: That morning I had woken up with an eerie feeling. I begged my...
Undergraduatechigirl - May 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2011
|"the most versatile artist" - Personal Statement for Graphics Design Program
Undergraduatebaley - May 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2011
|"Tunisia and Ben Ali" - essay B :an issue of importance to you
NEW - I'm from Tunisia. Tunisia is a North Africa country with half population less than 25 years old. It's comparatively...
Undergraduateskander9 - May 21, 2011 / — -
|Technology and computers educational goals - my college transfer paper
Undergraduatekev123456 - May 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2011
|Essay on the importance of volunteering
3 - You have a great writing style, and the only real criticism I have is that the essay does not...
Undergraduatejamileigh - May 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2011
|Passion of Fashion - I need an essay to be accepted at the Illinois Institute of ART
6 - Perfect! Now go back and search for that gem, that precious gem: My name is Fatoumata Diallo. I...
Undergraduatebintasagale - May 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 19, 2011
|How have your past experiences influenced your academic record?
2 - Hi Askal, Where to start? Start with your theme. Every time you communicate with someone about something, have...
Undergraduateselam19 - May 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 18, 2011
|Work or travel for a year between high school and university? 'wise descision'
5 - I believe the introduction is vague.Nothing hasn`t mentioned as pros and cons & the body doesn`t have deciplined structure...
Undergraduatemithsal - May 16, 2011 / yas rose - May 17, 2011
|a significant choice that you had to make (deciding my major) - U of Massachusetts
3 - Okay, I'll show how to correct the grammar, and you should practice typing each sentence several times to get...
Undergraduatefarahbachtiar - May 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 17, 2011
|Transfer Essay to Wentworth Institute of Technology
3 - It says: This essay or personal statement (250 to 500 words) is your chance to tell us what you...
Undergraduatemattrb2 - May 16, 2011 / mattrb2 - May 16, 2011
|Soccer: I put on my gloves and race to the playground to help my team - something pleasant to me
18 - Thank you EF_Kevin. Now I declare this thread officially closed. And I am thankful to the following persons:...
UndergraduateShahriar - Apr 28, 2011 / Shahriar - May 16, 2011
|"Why I feel ready to return"- A college readmission essay
11 - What?! I have never heard of a semi-colon having a secret meaning like that, ha ha... that is...
Undergraduateahwalker1985 - Apr 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 15, 2011
|What can you offer and accept through this program? - Asian students difficulties.
3 - Isai, where does your username come from? What does it mean? I am intrigued... Steph, in this situation,...
Undergraduatestephaniealfl - May 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 15, 2011
|(knowledge and a commitment to service; my family) - Spelman College
3 - Not only is knowledge the key to success, it is the key to breaking down barriers that may prevent...
UndergraduateKendiaMarie - May 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2011
|going to the Research Science Institute - significant experience/achievement, impact
3 - Do not write "transcended beyond," because transcend = "go beyond" This sentence is not complete. To...
Undergraduateteddynuts - May 10, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 11, 2011
|"outstanding psychology department" - UC Davis Waitlist Essay Help
3 - Yes! Great correction here. This comes from Strunk and White. Use a comma before the conjunction in a...
Undergraduateboxedwater - May 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 11, 2011
|Why I want to become a oncology Nurse admission
4 - I love it! That's what I had in mind... it really shows your seriousness and makes your application more...
Undergraduatedrey - May 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 10, 2011
|My student's essay. "Teaching is my inner desire"
Undergraduateisai - May 7, 2011 / isai - May 9, 2011
|"left military service" - Northward Bound- Common Application Transfer
3 - Thanks for your input. After those changes are made I'm sure I'll have no problems. Thanks again...
UndergraduateTertious - May 4, 2011 / Tertious - May 8, 2011
|Find X. Many perspectives and different routes -Essay topic for university of chicago
4 - This is a kind of run on sentence called a comma splice: The Unknown is everything we think about...
UndergraduateJRandle - May 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 7, 2011
|Need your help to edit and comment for my Endeavour Postgraduate Award- Australia
Undergraduatesiworo - May 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 7, 2011
|In the past, sporting champions used to be motivated primarily by the desire to win
5 - Use "a" here: Currently, however, a huge amount of... wage and limelight issues have become key factors which...
UndergraduateReal Fog - May 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 6, 2011
|"a five-day long training" - The Biggest Challenge I Have Overcome
4 - The essay is looking good, but this is still not very powerful. It seems like a general, vague...
Undergraduatenatural12345 - Apr 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 5, 2011
|"What experiences have led you to consider medicine" - PLME ESSAY
10 - THANKS a lot @ EF_Kevin! you've given me great advice! I've sent my essay.... with my fingers crossed!...
Undergraduatescatty2610 - Dec 25, 2010 / scatty2610 - May 5, 2011
|"Koffee Klatch"-personal quality essay
Undergraduatemorganday123 - May 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 4, 2011
|Application Essay about how i messed up in high school (my record)
12 - Thank you for all your help everyone, I have used all your pointers and got some help from my...
Undergraduatevandergraff127 - Apr 21, 2011 / vandergraff127 - May 3, 2011
|"Without the sign of prejudice" - past criminal record issue
4 - Let's do it this way: Criminal offenses are usually portrayed as serious issues in most parts of the...
Undergraduatefish - Apr 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 2, 2011
|"the pleasure of teaching Qinran" -Penn reference written by my AP chem teacher
3 - Yes, for sure! Very impressive. Why do you hesitate to use it? It sounds like you really earned a...
Undergraduatetobywashere - Apr 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 2, 2011
|"Reaching the Interplanetary Level" - Statement of purpose.
UndergraduateTshanky - Apr 28, 2011 / Tshanky - May 2, 2011
|"it's only a matter of will to overcome our obstacles" - admissions, college apps
12 - Thanks for your suggestions! :) I already got accepted, but I will definitely use your advice for future...
Undergraduatelfdz - Apr 2, 2011 / lfdz - May 1, 2011
|Journalism: "born in an open minded family" - Education paves the way to go ahead
UndergraduateMatiullah - Apr 27, 2011 / Matiullah - Apr 30, 2011
|"My school years in Bangladesh; becoming a businessman" - Rutgers Admission Essay
3 - Great ideas, Linh! I'll give a few more: ... I was forced to closely examine my own intentions. and...
Undergraduatesakib_rc - Apr 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 30, 2011
|"to help others was an expectation" - OB/GYN SPELMAN COLLEGE
Undergraduateashley0606 - Apr 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 29, 2011
|"I enlisted in the United States Air Force" - Admission personal information
3 - Let's put this in italics or quotation marks: Have you ever had a moment where you sit and ask...
Undergraduatefvillela13 - Apr 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 29, 2011
|Marching Band Leadership (past involvement/experience in marching band)
Undergraduategoldenmachine12 - Apr 28, 2011 / lfdz - Apr 29, 2011
|"An Environmental Architect" - Motivation essay
4 - No need to capitalize graduation: My graduation project spoke of... I think by studying Human Rights I could...
Undergraduatenouraphilip - Apr 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 28, 2011
|"dreamt of becoming a nurse" - School Program Admission
Undergraduatesbeauhar - Apr 25, 2011 / sbeauhar - Apr 28, 2011
|An Honor Society Program, very controversial but light toned essay with mixed reviews
2 - Oh, no! That's terrible! I'm sorry to hear that. In this world of ours, there exist extremely...
Undergraduatemattwashere27 - Apr 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 28, 2011
|"The maid" - significant person common app essay
2 - Wow... alright, right here I really sat forward in my chair and took notice. I'm in the presence...
UndergraduateMichelleLu - Apr 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 28, 2011
|"to Open my own practice in Gainesville" - significant event
2 - Nothing is more terrifying than receiving what you think is going to be the normal call from your mom;...
UndergraduateCourtneyTy - Apr 24, 2011 / EF_Susan - Apr 26, 2011
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