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|'teaching always has had an incredible charm to me' - extracurricular activity description
2 - Not trying to be rude, but I'd add more activities that you participated in high school. Tutoring can't...
Undergraduateericaleleyang - Oct 3, 2016 / Nishi7409 - Oct 4, 2016
|'I'm a sophomore in IEM' - a very important introduction
2 - Hello Wilson, .., 4 members in my family including my parents, my elder brother and meMy Elder brother...
UndergraduateWilson_Chen - Oct 3, 2016 / Medunjobi - Oct 4, 2016
|Penn 2016-2017 supplement (Wharton school)
4 - I suggest you to cut the paragraph on Philadelphia as that is not really related to Penn itself. Save...
UndergraduateTVLAERE - Oct 3, 2016 / ericaleleyang - Oct 3, 2016
|Imagine you are in a waiting room for seeing a doctor. Describe the waiting room and people (nurses,
UndergraduateHenrylheng - Oct 2, 2016 / Henrylheng - Oct 3, 2016
|Transfer common app essay. I'm a freshman in community college and looking for transfer to UMass
7 - hi friend i have some suggestions for you Math and Science hashave always been my strength ... ...
Undergraduatepedieuda - Sep 28, 2016 / bismillah - Oct 2, 2016
|Peace Corps Motivation Statement- Reasons for Joining and Dealing with Challenges
NEW - Peace Corps service presents major physical, emotional, and intellectual challenges. In the space below, please provide a few paragraphs...
Undergraduatecollegebound28 - Sep 30, 2016 / — -
|Peace Corps Resume Help with clarity, Spelling/Grammar and proofreading.
Undergraduatecollegebound28 - Sep 30, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Sep 30, 2016
|I dreamed of going to FIT and becoming a fashion designer, since I was ten.
3 - Hello, You provide a great deal of information about your background and why you will be a non-traditional...
Undergraduateasundar86 - Sep 27, 2016 / admission2012 - Sep 29, 2016
|Kelley School of Business - My life experiences, past and current school work, and strong commitment
3 - Hello, There are two main problems with your essay. The first is that you simply glaze over your...
Undergraduateswlw - Sep 28, 2016 / admission2012 - Sep 29, 2016
|I have been learning Physics in advanced level which galvanizes me to find more books myself
2 - Hi mate,,, I have read your writing. however, there are several matter that you need to pay attention,,, ...
Undergraduatehuanbumdev - Sep 28, 2016 / andika_soppeng - Sep 29, 2016
|An Indian living in China; University of Chicago--Help with First question
Undergraduatemohito1999 - Sep 27, 2016 / Fitri12 - Sep 28, 2016
|I have not had a good English teacher since my freshman year of high school
3 - Hi Allison, You've done a good job I think. Your writing has a good flow and amazing stories....
Undergraduateallisond112 - Sep 22, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 28, 2016
|Big City Dreams Flagler College Essay
Undergraduatehannan - Sep 27, 2016 / Alamsyah Ismail - Sep 28, 2016
|UCAS personal statement - Should I remove part of the intro and talk more about my accomplishments?
NEW - This is my UCAS personal statement that I will send in when I am applying to university, each school...
Undergraduateobi1410 - Sep 27, 2016 / — -
|How does a girl at a uniform clad school develop an interest in fashion? FIT - business management
2 - Hi Taytay, I have some suggestions to your writing, hope this can help. Although I attended a rigoroustough college...
Undergraduatetaytay10133 - Sep 25, 2016 / fauzankrn - Sep 27, 2016
|Georgia Tech Essay Prompt: Students are often told what classes they should take.
5 - Thanks a lot for your useful feedback! I'm rethinking about the real values that this class offers. So I...
Undergraduatehnguyen9905 - Sep 24, 2016 / hnguyen9905 - Sep 26, 2016
|QuestBridge Short Essays for the National College Match
UndergraduateNeferbeth - Sep 24, 2016 / taytay10133 - Sep 25, 2016
|QuestBridge biographical essay - "Here's one special skill you won't see on my resume"
Undergraduateangeli6778 - Sep 10, 2016 / aikoashiya - Sep 24, 2016
|'major in Philosophy Pre-Law and law school'; University of Washington Tacoma - Personal Statement
2 - nice essay.. I immediately note the switch in culture, people, and language. I leave the airport, and with my...
Undergraduatetamarafakhoury - Sep 23, 2016 / rofiat - Sep 23, 2016
|Tell us an experience in school or out that taught you something about yourself or the world around
4 - hi,i have some suggestion for you,hope it will be helpful ^^ ... who doesn't believe in myself and...
Undergraduaterofiat - Sep 22, 2016 / hoangduc241096 - Sep 23, 2016
|"How did you first learn about Rice University, and what motivated you to apply?" - Essay Qustions
2 - Hello.. These are my thoughts about your grammar ... colleges I was about 12 YEARS OLD. Obviously I...
Undergraduateredred212 - Sep 23, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 23, 2016
|A girl who is sitting in the farthest corners of the room. Common App Essay -- Interest in Reading
UndergraduateTdesamito - Sep 22, 2016 / dils - Sep 22, 2016
|Questbridge Ethical Dilemna - Finding Unity in the fight to balance God and Life
3 - Hi Hoooni, It's pleasure to help you on your writing. Concerned with that, here my suggestions for you....
Undergraduatehunion - Sep 21, 2016 / dils - Sep 21, 2016
|An obstacle i overcame to improve the live of another, how i reacted to it and what i learnt from it
3 - Hello diamonde, this is some corrections for you : As I was ponderingpondered (it is better in the past...
Undergraduatediamonde - Sep 20, 2016 / FirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 21, 2016
|USC Supplement - My father is a goose
Undergraduatesuomi0610 - Sep 19, 2016 / TJLuschen - Sep 20, 2016
|Environmental issues, water resources. Brief statement about personal goal and academic goal
3 - Thanks @Ssakshijain check this out for me Environmental issues, especially water resources have always fascinated me. Water is...
Undergraduatediamonde - Sep 18, 2016 / diamonde - Sep 18, 2016
|Rich natural resources vs pollution and deforestation; how my study and degree will help my country?
2 - Hello I think you should consider applying some corrections/adjustments to the text so that it sounds little more...
Undergraduatediamonde - Sep 18, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 18, 2016
|Curiosity has always been my besetting sin. UWC application essay.
2 - Hello Your essay is good. However, I would recommend applying a few stylistic adjustments to it. They are...
Undergraduateaxif_asif - Sep 18, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 18, 2016
|Depression riddled teen turn college bound revolutionary! COMMON APP ESSAY
2 - "they stand regalia of the growth of my character" I'm not sure you're using the word 'regalia' correctly, as...
Undergraduatezarmona - Sep 17, 2016 / angeli6778 - Sep 18, 2016
|The Puzzle Piece that is F.I.T. - Fashion Institute of Technology admission essay
3 - Hi pleasehelpessay! I have some advice for you: Based on my experiences, you should not repeating the question...
Undergraduatepleasehelpessay - Sep 15, 2016 / kiki23 - Sep 16, 2016
|Cycle of Leaves: As the leaves began to turn in the fall of 2005, my reality changed with them
Undergraduatefleurdj - Sep 15, 2016 / fadhilmd25 - Sep 16, 2016
|Nomination Essay (Academic Writing on Education in South Korea)
2 - Hi, Lucy. I'm really impressed with the use of varied vocabularies that make your essay profound. Let me...
Undergraduateblueocean7 - Sep 15, 2016 / Yuyahhhh - Sep 15, 2016
|Can you write about a leader or well-known person who has influenced you and why?
Undergraduateshinmuoi - Sep 15, 2016 / mdamanhuri77 - Sep 15, 2016
|There is only one occasion that solidly marked my transition from my childhood. Soccer -- Chemistry
4 - Hi Tungphan, This is good writing, I just have some suggestions for you. 1. There are many things WHICH...
Undergraduatetungphan99 - Sep 14, 2016 / FirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 15, 2016
|"Your perfect Monday morning?" Personal Statement Hospitality College
3 - Hi @sofiamaria, - programme within your faculty correct: programme with in your faculty, you should not...
Undergraduatesofiamaria - Sep 14, 2016 / deanarin - Sep 15, 2016
|250-650 word transfer essay from the common app. Why am I transferring and what are my goals?
4 - Hi, your reasons seem very generic. Apart from maybe the Air National Guard one (although I'm sure many...
Undergraduatequrfy - Sep 13, 2016 / TJLuschen - Sep 14, 2016
|Even until this day, I still remember what some monk said once to me about success
UndergraduateLexusnguyen1995 - Sep 5, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 13, 2016
|My first thought was always UCF when I heard the question about my future plans
3 - Hi! So I honestly really like your essay but besides the minor grammar edits that have already been commented...
Undergraduatecarleyfa - Sep 11, 2016 / lylreaganmac - Sep 13, 2016
|"Don't you see? Syracuse is Syracuse" - impact on my decision for choosing this university
4 - Hello, For my opinion, you should use more academic words in your essay. The jury will appreciate that for...
Undergraduatejuju070799 - Sep 10, 2016 / thphuong1911 - Sep 12, 2016
|Write about an Issue of Importance --- Presidential Election --- UofTexas prompt
2 - Hi Landon, welcome to EssayForum, an online essay writing support. First, I would like to remind you to use...
Undergraduatelandperk - Sep 9, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Sep 10, 2016
|Leadership, progress, and service I have portrayed in last three years.
UndergraduateJaZZyCooL - Sep 8, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 8, 2016
|My profile is interesting - I write about introducing myself
UndergraduatePraewpan38 - Sep 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 7, 2016
|I choose Ritsumeikan University because... Can someone review an application essay?
2 - Hi very good writing understand that from something as simple as ... the drive for=> the motivation for me...
UndergraduateSmansa101 - Sep 7, 2016 / sinahector - Sep 7, 2016
|Unique Qualities / University of Michigan (essay by a conflicted and undecided student)
2 - OK, for one thing, that "it's vast curriculum" is almost causing me physical pain. but I really like your...
Undergraduatedaisyidk - Sep 7, 2016 / TJLuschen - Sep 7, 2016
|'I am a messy perfectionist' - SAIC personal statement / artist statement
2 - Hi, I really liked your essay. Your introduction seemed a little choppy, because the first half had a...
Undergraduatequeeny210 - Sep 5, 2016 / TJLuschen - Sep 6, 2016
|"Me Do" moments - Common App. Essay
Undergraduatemarygram - Sep 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 6, 2016
|There wasn't no one to push me to do my best in the school in Jamaica
Undergraduateshawnakay2017 - Sep 5, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Sep 6, 2016
|Georgia Tech undergraduate application prompt. Apply for chemical engineering
7 - Hi, your content seems better now, but your sentence structure is very repetitive - "I can", "I can", "I...
Undergraduatemaxinemiu - Sep 2, 2016 / TJLuschen - Sep 5, 2016
|"Bump, set, spike" COLLEGE ESSAY ADVICE! Volleyball Struggle Essay!
4 - I personally love the way how you deliver your thoughts in writing. And both the above comments are great...
Undergraduatezdiflo13 - Sep 4, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Sep 5, 2016
|Nursing is not only a deep-rooted passion for me; it is my way of life.
UndergraduateShannon7792 - Sep 4, 2016 / rian31 - Sep 5, 2016
|Common Application - prison rides
2 - ... for high school, but the physical medium security, barbed wire-encased , building. (the word physical threw me off...
Undergraduateelenahapworth - Sep 4, 2016 / mandeute - Sep 5, 2016
|Given funding for a small engineering project UVA essay.
Undergraduatespachelord - Sep 1, 2016 / SV kumar - Sep 2, 2016
|My family environment has influenced who I am today. UCF Admissions Essay
UndergraduateD_Nae - Aug 31, 2016 / TJLuschen - Sep 2, 2016
|Suggestions and reviewing on what I have so far explaining about my circumstances and aspects.
3 - No no I love your idea and it is clear and outlined perfectly for me to concentrate and address...
Undergraduatemia_amare - Sep 1, 2016 / mia_amare - Sep 1, 2016
|Address the admissions committee directly and let us know more about you as an individual
Undergraduatemia_amare - Sep 1, 2016 / TJLuschen - Sep 1, 2016
|Nomination Essay - What motivates you to attend a service academy?
Undergraduateemmarecord - Sep 1, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Sep 1, 2016
|' I am looking for a change of pace' - Why University of Chicago? (Be brutally honest)
3 - Beyond a lot of grammatical errors that you need to clean up, I think your essay really needs a...
Undergraduatealeng - Aug 28, 2016 / aikoashiya - Aug 31, 2016
|Why Uchicago essay - I'm not sure about it. Tear it apart...
Undergraduatemchammer - Aug 28, 2016 / aikoashiya - Aug 31, 2016
|I am more than a two digit number
NEW - Prompt: Optional/additional common application essay. No prompt "In through the nose, out through the mouth," I whisper to...
Undergraduateninamy20 - Aug 31, 2016 / — -
|'to shed off a couple of pounds' - Apply Texas Topic A Transfer U.S. - SOP
NEW - Posted wrong prompt on original. Here is the intended one. I'm currently applying as a transfer at UT...
Undergraduatecanuck19 - Aug 29, 2016 / — -
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