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|Bowling sport - college admission! help correct my grammars / change words to better ones
Undergraduatekriscasso - Mar 6, 2016 / nelarizka79 - Apr 7, 2016
|"Short term," "Five years," "Ten years," and "Thirty years." Undergraduate Transfer Essay
5 - I am so excited about the great feedbacks, acs121, TJLuschen, EF_Carol, and Kimbong93! Thank you! I'm working on fixing...
Undergraduatekev510 - Apr 1, 2016 / kev510 - Apr 4, 2016
|College admissions essay about my most important achievements - competition and community service
4 - Hi Liltheman, I think you had the right idea in trying to help the reader capture an imagery,...
UndergraduateLiltheman - Mar 26, 2016 / kev510 - Apr 1, 2016
|'A4-sized white paper' - transfer - flow of the essay, grammar, word choices, and overall feeling
3 - Hi Kevin, Overall I liked your creativity and your writing was excellent, but it's not fitting for a...
Undergraduatekev510 - Mar 27, 2016 / EzraKoenigsDad5 - Apr 1, 2016
|To get enrolled in school - Personal statement for college admission
2 - Dear writer, I am really happy to read your essay. It is completely clear. But let me to give...
Undergraduateemanri88 - Mar 31, 2016 / Kimbong93 - Mar 31, 2016
|How will your education at the Art institute of Dallas will help you attain your career goals?
UndergraduateRali6 - Mar 29, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 30, 2016
|'the right place for passionate, yet undecided people like me'. This is my Why Tulane essay
Undergraduatejason19955 - Mar 25, 2016 / ainirere - Mar 26, 2016
|Why you decided to apply to the department/area of Sejong University to which you are applying?
7 - It seems okay, but I suggest you that include particular courses in Sejong Univ. I heard that they have...
Undergraduatehazeltrinh - Mar 21, 2016 / Feminist - Mar 24, 2016
|ADMISSION DECISION APPEAL FOR UNIVERSITY OF WASHINGTON.. to take further consideration
Undergraduatemeltinggsoull - Mar 22, 2016 / Yusri31 - Mar 23, 2016
|Physics, engineering and women. Describe your career goals and the level of their implementation
4 - Hi, Sara. Even though your essay is short, I get what you are trying to say. How about changing...
Undergraduatesarakhalaf - Mar 19, 2016 / Feminist - Mar 23, 2016
|COMMON APP TRANSFER SYRACUSE: I Dream of becoming a Unifying Communicator
3 - - Specifically, I specifically desire - becauseas I believe - towards our unification. - without...
Undergraduateqasderwdw - Mar 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|Following Nikola Tesla; Texas A&M Qatar Transfer Essay - Personal Statement - Mechanical Engineering
5 - Hi Waqas, I hope to further your essay, kindly find the corrections below; - induction experiment using a...
Undergraduatewaqametu - Mar 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|Two essays. My main achievement and My best team experience. Need your opinion!
3 - HI ... we all experience failures in our pursuit of goalsin pursuit our goals the second topic is...
Undergraduatelenovo_kz - Mar 15, 2016 / Desty22 - Mar 15, 2016
|ROCHESTER TRANSFER SUPPLEMENT: THE SKY WAS NEVER BLUE
2 - Hi Sol, there's no question that you have a good approach in the essay and in answering the prompt,...
Undergraduateqasderwdw - Mar 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 15, 2016
|NYU Gallatin International Transfer Essays
5 - Hi Dubois, for the second prompt, what I noticed is that the essay is quiet compact, meaning, when essays...
UndergraduateDuboisWoods - Mar 12, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 15, 2016
|Tufts Undergrad Transfer Supplemental Essays (REAL Program for non-traditional students)
Undergraduatekev510 - Mar 13, 2016 / JuanSebastianR - Mar 13, 2016
|COMMON APP TRANSFER: A Little Girl Taught Me How to Communicate
Undergraduateqasderwdw - Mar 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 8, 2016
|Spelman girls. What can I add to my admission essay to make it more interesting original and longer
2 - Hi Natasha, I have read your essay and I would like to share some insights. To address your concern,...
Undergraduatemart8871 - Mar 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 7, 2016
|GT transfer application essay-- what interest you about your field of study
Undergraduatexutong - Feb 26, 2016 / sn98 - Mar 4, 2016
|Description of my interests and background in science and mathematics (Columbia Univ. Sci. Program)
3 - It sounds good... I would elaborate more on why you want to pursue a career in computer engineering. Also,...
Undergraduateonly_gis - Mar 1, 2016 / sn98 - Mar 4, 2016
|Our family business (when you stop trying you'll fail) - incidents in life and their impact
Undergraduateyashj0001 - Mar 3, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 4, 2016
|The hardest of obstacles that bumped my road was starting a new life in a new country
3 - Hi Tran Thi, you need to explain how you overcome this situation, don't just talk about obstacle part, but...
Undergraduatetrth4t - Mar 2, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Mar 4, 2016
|'I, as an individual, could make a difference'; GT-LEADERSHIP, PROGRESS AND SERVICE
4 - Hi Ivy, your both essays lack the same thing, the motivation behind making computers. Here, the prompt asked you...
Undergraduatexutong - Feb 27, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Mar 4, 2016
|An essay for National University of Singapore application to study in psychology
UndergraduateWilsonSun - Mar 4, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 4, 2016
|How I see myself in next 10-years?
3 - Fitree, given the fact that English is not your mother tongue, this is a good essay, it has a...
Undergraduatefox_mx1291 - Mar 3, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 4, 2016
|Why did you choose field of study Rice - Torn Between Two Essays
6 - Yea that is true, but there was also the "why are you transferring" essay, which goes into depth about...
Undergraduatecdan - Mar 3, 2016 / cdan - Mar 3, 2016
|Transfer from UH to UTAustin; Statement of purpose; Comp. Sci. Major
6 - Sorry for late reply. This is going in the right direction. Some points I am looking for here are:...
Undergraduatejpark97 - Feb 28, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Mar 2, 2016
|"A life-changing Education" - How can I benefit from study at AUC?
Undergraduatesn98 - Feb 28, 2016 / Hiddengrace - Mar 2, 2016
|"What effect has design had on you?"-UT Austin Transfer essay
2 - Lol congratulations, I notice that in the prompt the verb affected is spelled wrong by those who wrote it...
Undergraduateemhill - Feb 28, 2016 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2016
|My Commonapp Personal Statement - no stranger to hardship
2 - Hi Kangwoon, Firstly, mention the prompt please always with your essay. Now while reading your essay,it was good but...
UndergraduateBuffBuff - Feb 28, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Mar 1, 2016
|WELLESLEY 100 essay: A Hugely Ambitious Sisterhood
Undergraduateki182 - Mar 1, 2016 / ki182 - Mar 1, 2016
|Think Economics - help me with my personal statement
2 - In the whole essay I liked this part " the logical way of thinking in Economics is not guaranteed...
Undergraduatebenjaminxiao01 - Mar 1, 2016 / Mr pitbull - Mar 1, 2016
|Always something to improve in China. Transfer Commonapp personal essays.
2 - ---Without secure drinking water and other fundamental infrastructures---Without reliable drinking water and other fundamental infrastructures, --- the poor living...
Undergraduatetifflipc - Feb 28, 2016 / Rocky529440 - Mar 1, 2016
|Islamophobia is an important social issue. UT transfer topic E.
5 - Hello zeeshan! I loved the personal stories you shared and I think the middle of your essay is poetic-like....
Undergraduatehirohussain - Feb 27, 2016 / caro5ca - Feb 28, 2016
|Statement of Purpose for transferring to UIUC as an undergraduate student withless than 300 words
7 - I have rewritten my essay, and with another version which is written by a counselor. Would you please take...
UndergraduateJo1nnyJiang - Feb 19, 2016 / Jo1nnyJiang - Feb 28, 2016
|Georgia Tech is leadership, progress and service - successfully demonstrated this motto it my life
2 - Hi, jhayea, I read your paragraph, and here are some suggestions: This one paragraph contains your working...
Undergraduatejhayea - Feb 27, 2016 / Crystal812 - Feb 27, 2016
|A 200 word limit essay on what I have done, am doing, and plan to do in regards to my degree choice.
Undergraduatequrfy - Feb 27, 2016 / qurfy - Feb 27, 2016
|'You are a female, do not bother going to college' SOP essay for transfering to UT
Undergraduatecaro5ca - Feb 22, 2016 / Hiddengrace - Feb 27, 2016
|"A Sea Hawk Route to Success" - College Transfer Essay - Former Military
2 - Hi, Evan It is an impressive and vivid essay because of tow periods you described, experience in Marine...
UndergraduateEScott1313 - Feb 26, 2016 / eric41061 - Feb 26, 2016
|The Importance of Education - UT Prompt; Knowledge is profitable
4 - Dear Christopher, I really liked the topic of your essay. It is very true that our education system...
Undergraduatecb4011 - Feb 25, 2016 / Ethan M - Feb 26, 2016
|Essay for Accelerated Nursing Program: describe your motivation or desire to become a nurse.
3 - hi keriyao I think your essay is quite good, however i did like to make a few suggestions. In...
Undergraduatekeriyao - Feb 25, 2016 / maapokua - Feb 26, 2016
|Self introduction essay for World friends Korea Coodinator
3 - Hi, bamba, Here come some suggestions: 1.background You say "That experience was really helpful to me, though...
Undergraduatebamba - Feb 25, 2016 / Crystal812 - Feb 25, 2016
|Common essay at Purdue Describe a problem you`ve solved or a problem you`d like to solve.
2 - Hi there! Welcome to Essay Forum. After reading your essay, I'm not quite sure that you have followed...
Undergraduateliancheng - Feb 25, 2016 / Hiddengrace - Feb 25, 2016
|Transfer admission essay for Georgia Tech. I need help forming an excellent essay which I lack of.
19 - Juan, while I think you've done a remarkable job over all the iterations of your essay, you still need...
UndergraduateJuanSebastianR - Jan 28, 2016 / aikoashiya - Feb 25, 2016
|Statement of Intent for a Transfer Application - My Interest in Japan
2 - Hi, Grant, From your application, I know that you really want to transfer to major in areas about...
Undergraduateballstowall - Feb 24, 2016 / Crystal812 - Feb 24, 2016
|"As for my fate, I'll accept it whenever Zeus sends it." Main Transfer Essay - the reasons
3 - ... I'd never thought of my future.while I chose history as ... however, I didn't train (...) foreign language...
Undergraduatedongli0524 - Feb 21, 2016 / ADIE08 - Feb 24, 2016
|'KLEX Image Competition' Stanford - "elaborate on extracurricular, 150 words"
UndergraduateBrookyrailfan - Feb 23, 2016 / Brookyrailfan - Feb 24, 2016
|'sensitized to the climate and environment issues' - UIUC Transfer Essay - Motivation
8 - This was my first interaction with the developed world(,) and I soon started observing the difference in infrastructure of...
Undergraduatewaqametu - Feb 20, 2016 / Linda91 - Feb 24, 2016
|Lucky to have stumbled upon the thing that fuels my passion. UT Transfer Essay Statement of Purpose
2 - Dear HIROHUSSAIN, This essay was very impressive. I couldn't stop reading from beginning to end. I feel your...
Undergraduatehirohussain - Feb 23, 2016 / JuanSebastianR - Feb 23, 2016
|Common App general transfer essay review. DDL March 1st really need help
4 - Thank you very much for everyone's help! I edited it a bit. Does it look better? ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- When...
Undergraduatetcdxbg - Feb 21, 2016 / tcdxbg - Feb 23, 2016
|'the Father of Modern Lahore' Transfer essay for Georgia Tech - Program of Study
Undergraduatewaqametu - Feb 17, 2016 / justivy03 - Feb 23, 2016
|How Purdue will support you in terms of your program of study?
3 - It has many learning facultiesfacilities and perfect security measures, especially for students staying up late in the library.I'm not...
UndergraduateSebaser - Feb 23, 2016 / Hiddengrace - Feb 23, 2016
|Descriptive writing : A outdoor festival in winter in a cold climate
UndergraduateSamuelsam123 - Feb 8, 2016 / Samuelsam123 - Feb 23, 2016
|What are the core skills and knowledge you hope to acquire by completing a degree in this major
4 - Well, nice passage. I agree with the message above, that you should make paragraphs more specific. And I...
Undergraduatejuancarlos - Feb 22, 2016 / Crystal812 - Feb 23, 2016
|What would you like to achieve through this program? ASCENT international exchange program
2 - You may wish to use a thesaurus to replace or reduce your usage of the following words and/or phrases...
Undergraduateneufii - Feb 22, 2016 / juancarlos - Feb 22, 2016
|Admissions essay to UW on cultural insensitivity. Is currently 490 words and needs to be 300 or less
2 - Hi Adil, after reading and understanding your essay, I must say, there is nothing wrong with you para phrasing...
Undergraduateadil2000 - Feb 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Feb 22, 2016
|"Fear can be your worst enemy" - help lenghtening/editing essay. 200 more words.
Undergraduateadil2000 - Feb 21, 2016 / adil2000 - Feb 21, 2016
|How to write a short structured, autobiography - AppState Hayes Music School Essay
4 - in my opinion, it's better to introduce yourself first (i.e. My name is .... from ....) and i think...
Undergraduatemynormalface - Feb 10, 2016 / gilbertwidjojo - Feb 21, 2016
|In about 150 words, write about your important person (my mother)
3 - in my opinion, the opening would be better with "The most important person who........ From since I was...
Undergraduatepiece_of_bo - Feb 14, 2016 / gilbertwidjojo - Feb 21, 2016
|TAMU Statement of Purpose Essay, Biochemisty Major. Not sure if prompt is answered correctly.
UndergraduateMansif13 - Feb 8, 2016 / Mansif13 - Feb 20, 2016
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