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|Two different houses - What was the environment you were raised?
2 - Hi Jocelyn, first of all, as this letter is for your admission to college, it would greatly help if...
Undergraduatejocymariah - Aug 1, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 2, 2016
|Soliloquy-2016-17 Common Application Personal Statement Essay prompt from an International Student-
3 - Hi Sambhab, first of all, WELCOME to the English world, as much as EF would like to teach every...
Undergraduatetyjoke - Jul 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 2, 2016
|"Blessed is the influence of one true, loving human soul on another" - my father influence on me
3 - Hi Danielle, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, you have come to the right platform to...
UndergraduateMochachii - Jul 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 27, 2016
|Technology has always been a passion to me since my childhood; Penn State University statement
2 - Personally,I feel like your essay has a potential but it has a dull sense in the vocabulary.It would be...
UndergraduateWazyr - Jul 26, 2016 / tyjoke - Jul 27, 2016
|Why you would like to come and study at Far East University as an exchange student?
7 - Hi Nrakad, the revised essay is definitely better than the original one, however, I still find a few notes...
Undergraduatenrakad - Jul 18, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|'very impressed with what I saw' - advice on my Naval Academy Personal Statement Admissions Essay
Undergraduateafnavy - Jul 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 19, 2016
|Studying abroad to pursue an accounting degree of global standards;Study Plan for studying in Canada
2 - HI Hasib, as I was going through your essay, what I notice is the lack of smooth transition in...
UndergraduateHasib Shakil - Jul 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 19, 2016
|From tracking Heme to studying properties of atoms at absolute zero; Georgia Tech Suppl. - Why TECH
Undergraduateharshhpatel98 - Jul 12, 2016 / harshhpatel98 - Jul 12, 2016
|I was not awarded the scholarship - I began to view myself as a failure...
UndergraduateDennis65 - Jun 17, 2016 / Dennis65 - Jul 11, 2016
|Autobiography - Simple Introduce myself
6 - Hi Derek, below are additional help for your essay; - atwith the comic book called "SLAMDUNK " -...
UndergraduateDerek Student - Jul 9, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 11, 2016
|Georgetown University essay - discuss extracurricular activity that you are most involved in
Undergraduateadamzwang - Jul 1, 2016 / mandy51425 - Jul 8, 2016
|Transfer Application to University of Michigan: What unique qualities attract you to this school?
2 - Hi Jess, welcome to EssayForum :) Before moving on to my feedback, I would like to remind you that...
Undergraduatejessaw - Jul 6, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 8, 2016
|'all drugs come with side effects' - Issue of importance; feel free to critique any mistakes.
8 - Prescribed drugs have certain effects and side effects. Their benefits are uncountable but no one seemed to be ever...
Undergraduatemahamansoor - Jul 3, 2016 / mahamansoor - Jul 5, 2016
|I would like to revise my essay for ACCD - The three major artists and designers
UndergraduateJudgeDredd - Jun 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2016
|How to better word this excerpt from my application essay?
4 - Hi Reagan! "I began to focus and build (...)" Whoa, that's one really long sentence! It's kind...
Undergraduatelylreaganmac - Jun 26, 2016 / Hiddengrace - Jun 27, 2016
|College application personal essay for vet tech. Just a rough draft, needs a lot of work
3 - Hi Marissa, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, we strive to provide you with the most accurate and objective...
Undergraduatempg - Jun 24, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 27, 2016
|Windows On Williams - My Community
3 - HI Harvey, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family. I hope you find this website to be helpful and credible...
UndergraduateAreinn - Jun 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 27, 2016
|Pursuing a Diploma of Leadership and Management course in Canterbury Technical Institute, Australia
UndergraduateChyme96 - Jun 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 24, 2016
|A short essay about me for three or four days
Undergraduatesouhail123 - Jun 19, 2016 / Atchane - Jun 23, 2016
|My Study Plan for Australia Student Visa
9 - Hey Lauren, no problem. You can write point to point but you should be able to relate your goals...
UndergraduateLaurenppppp - Jun 20, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Jun 21, 2016
|Orient Career, The essay describe the orient career in short-term an in the long-term.
Undergraduateminhchanh - Jun 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 20, 2016
|Simple Life - Aeronautics and Astronautics Department UW COE Personal Statement
5 - Hi Josh, thank you for the appreciation. There's definitely nothing more valuable than logging in and reading words of...
Undergraduatejkreutz5798 - Jun 11, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 16, 2016
|Photography and art - wrong grammar of statement of intent for SVA
3 - Hi Zhi, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family. I hope you find this website helpful as...
Undergraduatezmli - Jun 8, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 9, 2016
|My service - critique my Peace Corps Motivational Statement?
Undergraduatevsfpc2016 - Jun 7, 2016 / vsfpc2016 - Jun 9, 2016
|Help an aspiring engineer get to Georgia Tech - Crowdfunding Essay
UndergraduateJuanSebastianR - Jun 6, 2016 / — -
|"My expirience with the fashion industry" Teen Vogue U Application Essay
2 - Hello Reagan. I can say that this is a convincing essay for college admission purpose. You address the prompt...
Undergraduatelylreaganmac - Jun 6, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - Jun 6, 2016
|Write a description about a person who has made a strong impression on you.
3 - Thanks for the feedback akbartaufiq25, I'll make sure to include your points into the essay and I'll definitely be...
UndergraduateDanny22 - Jun 5, 2016 / Danny22 - Jun 6, 2016
|Identity - rock climbing + what it brought to myself - how it affected me
UndergraduateArachnid - Dec 30, 2014 / Arachnid - Jun 6, 2016
|"Being from a small town" FIT Admissions Essay
5 - Thank you Rodolfo! This is really helpful! Also thank you for the comment about the last sentence! That is...
Undergraduatelylreaganmac - Jun 3, 2016 / lylreaganmac - Jun 4, 2016
|NYU Tisch Film and Television Personal Story Essay - grammar / good storytelling?
8 - Hello there, please be advised that you are supposed to follow the standard essay structure that is Introduction, main...
Undergraduatejrayeveryday - May 31, 2016 / Jeremy Newcastl - Jun 3, 2016
|Transfer Essay: Meaningful interest to complete the application.
UndergraduateJo1nnyJiang - May 3, 2016 / Arachnid - May 30, 2016
|Am I happy where I am in life? Am I the person I want to be? Transition from childhood to Adulthood
UndergraduateDavidTheHomie - May 25, 2016 / justivy03 - May 26, 2016
|Nepal is a lovely place to live in but can't provide a proper study environment - Canada Embassy SOP
7 - Rachana, I think there is no serious problem with the content of your essay. The flow of the ideas...
Undergraduateshova - May 11, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 25, 2016
|What are your career goals and how do you expect your education at The Art Institute of Pittsburgh..
5 - I strongly believe that pursing my education at [...] create a portfolio to show that I got what it...
Undergraduaterachaelspelic - May 25, 2016 / 13williamsm - May 25, 2016
|Semester at Sea Essay - A Voyage of a Lifetime
3 - Hi Courtney, I would like to WELCOME you to the Essay Forum Family, this website is aimed at providing...
Undergraduatecscardecchio - May 25, 2016 / justivy03 - May 25, 2016
|'Pursuing a degree in Physical Therapy was never my first choice' SOP for Applying to PT school
3 - Hi Kaitlyn, indeed, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family! Now, when it comes to your SOP, I must...
Undergraduatekaitlyng24 - May 19, 2016 / justivy03 - May 23, 2016
|YSEALI is an opportunity to learn, experience and bring value to all others.
2 - Hi Tran, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, may this website bring you answers to your...
Undergraduatetranthanhnga - May 18, 2016 / justivy03 - May 18, 2016
|"I deserve to be here" - Appeal/Waitlist Personal Statement for UCs
3 - Appeal/Waitlist Personal Statement for UCs How should I make this better and shorten it to 500 words? Thanks!...
Undergraduatephbelu - May 14, 2016 / pahoehoe - May 15, 2016
|My mother is my model - she has had the greatest influence on my life
3 - Hi Trin, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, may you find this website helpful as well as useful to...
Undergraduatenhocthienbinh - May 13, 2016 / justivy03 - May 14, 2016
|UCSD CSE Transfer Waitlist // New unique facilities, attracted by growth and change.
3 - Hi Jonathan, I would to share my thoughts on your letter. - student,that's interested - in augmentedaugmenting reality...
Undergraduatejkiger - May 11, 2016 / justivy03 - May 11, 2016
|"Exploring my abilities" Transfer Waitlist Personal Statement for UC Davis
UndergraduateCawaLimon - Apr 24, 2016 / jkiger - May 11, 2016
|Temple transfer essay from a biology major
4 - You need to remember that there is no wrong or right in making a personal statement as long as...
UndergraduateAcritton - May 9, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 10, 2016
|Assistance Writing a vice-presidential Nomination Essay for West Point?
5 - Dear Jeremy, It is such a pleasure to be working with you today. Reading your essay was moving....
Undergraduatejeremylumbab - May 5, 2016 / JuanSebastianR - May 8, 2016
|What Do You Want to Be When You Grow Up? - Personal Statement College Essay
6 - Hi Jeffrey, first of all, thank you for appreciating our work here on EF, we definitely appreciate your feedback...
UndergraduateJeffreyGuy - Apr 28, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 30, 2016
|Help me to check my gramatically essays for AAS
NEW - 1. How did you choose your proposed course and institution?* I was chose course that related with my...
Undergraduateazalea13 - Apr 28, 2016 / — -
|I realize that my dream of becoming an astronaut is turning into a reality
2 - This is a beautifully constructed phrase; I think maybe you are a better writer than you think!! I...
UndergraduateJuanSebastianR - Apr 25, 2016 / chenghao - Apr 27, 2016
|"Overcoming Adversities" - My College Readmission Essay
Undergraduategreyfidelity - Apr 22, 2016 / JuanSebastianR - Apr 25, 2016
|This is my final essay for my Introduction to Religion class. 'My spiritual journey with religion'
3 - I love the introduction in the essay. You begin by using the present tense. A great way to let...
UndergraduateJuanSebastianR - Apr 22, 2016 / wongda - Apr 25, 2016
|How will the proposed to your career?
Undergraduateluseveiogo - Apr 23, 2016 / luseveiogo - Apr 24, 2016
|'fascinated by medical science' - University of Sydney will uplift my standards
2 - Hi luseveiogo, your writing seems good, but here there are some passages that didn't convince me: As I...
Undergraduateluseveiogo - Apr 15, 2016 / mormontre - Apr 16, 2016
|LEADERSHIP APPLICATION; tutoring/classroom assistance and noon-time/spirit activities
2 - Connie, I have a question for you. Is this "What are some realistic projects that will make your school...
UndergraduateConnie31124 - Apr 9, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 9, 2016
|Biochemistry - UC Davis Waitlist; I have been instantly adapted to its community
4 - Tito, first impression of the first sentence is essential. Perhaps you can take a look from an opening sentence...
Undergraduatettitogo - Apr 7, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 9, 2016
|Bowling sport - college admission! help correct my grammars / change words to better ones
Undergraduatekriscasso - Mar 6, 2016 / nelarizka79 - Apr 7, 2016
|"Short term," "Five years," "Ten years," and "Thirty years." Undergraduate Transfer Essay
4 - I am so excited about the great feedbacks, acs121, TJLuschen, EF_Carol, and Kimbong93! Thank you! I'm working on fixing...
Undergraduatekev510 - Apr 1, 2016 / kev510 - Apr 4, 2016
|College admissions essay about my most important achievements - competition and community service
4 - Hi Liltheman, I think you had the right idea in trying to help the reader capture an imagery,...
UndergraduateLiltheman - Mar 26, 2016 / kev510 - Apr 1, 2016
|'A4-sized white paper' - transfer - flow of the essay, grammar, word choices, and overall feeling
3 - Hi Kevin, Overall I liked your creativity and your writing was excellent, but it's not fitting for a...
Undergraduatekev510 - Mar 27, 2016 / EzraKoenigsDad5 - Apr 1, 2016
|To get enrolled in school - Personal statement for college admission
2 - Dear writer, I am really happy to read your essay. It is completely clear. But let me to give...
Undergraduateemanri88 - Mar 31, 2016 / Kimbong93 - Mar 31, 2016
|How will your education at the Art institute of Dallas will help you attain your career goals?
UndergraduateRali6 - Mar 29, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 30, 2016
|'the right place for passionate, yet undecided people like me'. This is my Why Tulane essay
Undergraduatejason19955 - Mar 25, 2016 / ainirere - Mar 26, 2016
|Why you decided to apply to the department/area of Sejong University to which you are applying?
7 - It seems okay, but I suggest you that include particular courses in Sejong Univ. I heard that they have...
Undergraduatehazeltrinh - Mar 21, 2016 / Feminist - Mar 24, 2016
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