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|Fear is a problem I never stop trying to solve but never ever solved completely
7 - Michael, the problem is that the essay indicates only 1 type of fear for discussion. That means the essay...
Undergraduatemichaelmiaomiao - Dec 12, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 13, 2015
|My goal to surpass mediocrity and achieving academic excellence - help review Common App essay
4 - In a constructive manner, I think this motif of essay is quite common among the common app. essays, where...
Undergraduateabusayed - Dec 11, 2015 / HoangVNguyen - Dec 13, 2015
|There is a person I treasure more than gold.. Describe your mother (about 100 words)
UndergraduateBtram266 - Dec 12, 2015 / Btram266 - Dec 12, 2015
|Write a brief statement outlining your personal and academic goals
7 - This is a very strong paragraph I like it. A few corrections are as follows: Goals differ with...
UndergraduateFriction - Dec 1, 2015 / abusayed - Dec 12, 2015
|The Fashion business has always been in my plans. Advertising and Marketing Communications - FIT
4 - Looking at my future, the fashion business has been prominent in my plans. As a child, I designed...
UndergraduateECalv001 - Dec 2, 2015 / kerry2654 - Dec 11, 2015
|Instead of chosing IIT - my country's best institute - I want apply to MIT
3 - Though MIT is a dream of yours, you should focus on how your environment influenced your career goals. What...
Undergraduateveenap - Dec 9, 2015 / kerry2654 - Dec 11, 2015
|International Baccalaureate courses Classes -- Why Macalester essay
2 - Sure, International Baccalaureate courses may be challenging, but it' s real benefit is its international intellectuality students gather throughout...
Undergraduatedanber - Dec 10, 2015 / kerry2654 - Dec 11, 2015
|Being the Biggest Brother - Personal Statement - My world
3 - While I was sitting around the table on the first morning of the New Lunar Year with my whole...
Undergraduateeegii0123 - Dec 10, 2015 / kerry2654 - Dec 11, 2015
|Briefly describe how your past activities or work experiences will enhance our community. USD app.
3 - Thank you for the feedback! Its also a 250 or less word count. Any advice on adding in something...
Undergraduatesbc6 - Dec 6, 2015 / sbc6 - Dec 10, 2015
|My ambition to become a storyteller.
2 - This is really great! The description of why you'd like to become a filmmaker is very descriptive, but sometimes...
Undergraduateeegii0123 - Dec 10, 2015 / desi__d - Dec 10, 2015
|The GOAL - how a specific work of journalism had an impact on your desire to study this subject
2 - ... to witness the legendary game-tying match between the Soviet Union and Canada. To beBeing a part of...
UndergraduateElijah Ngoy - Dec 9, 2015 / eegii0123 - Dec 10, 2015
|The bristles of the paintbrush. Painting plays a crucial role in my life. Help with Common App Essay
Undergraduatekabrid8 - Dec 6, 2015 / kabrid8 - Dec 9, 2015
|"Doc! This one's about to die!". Caltech 'Unusual way in which you have fun' Essay. (200 Words)
UndergraduateAhmadShahnawaz - Dec 9, 2015 / dynaranjani - Dec 9, 2015
|Why Swarthmore? International student writing about political liberal
UndergraduateCindyWang98 - Dec 1, 2015 / CindyWang98 - Dec 9, 2015
|LEYSIN AMERICA SCHOOL, SWITZERLAND APPLICATION ESSAY
4 - I really like it. You connect the person with yourself and answer the question very well. In terms of...
Undergraduateoluwatofunmii - Dec 7, 2015 / AhmadShahnawaz - Dec 9, 2015
|Conflict on my experience between why Rice and why major
UndergraduateHaoranWei - Dec 8, 2015 / HaoranWei - Dec 9, 2015
|Nothing confused me more than downloading a file wirelessly -- Cornell Engineering Essay
Undergraduatejonthom24 - Dec 2, 2015 / jonthom24 - Dec 8, 2015
|UT Austin Topic C, "Growing up as the oldest of three brothers"
2 - Juan, as I read your essay, I believe it's well written, straight to the point and answers the prompt...
Undergraduatejdsada98 - Dec 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 8, 2015
|UC Prompt 2 - Moving from Afghanistan to the States, dealing with poverty, culture differences, more
3 - Hi Charlie, I would like to help out with the first and second paragraph enhancement of your essay. ...
Undergraduategello - Nov 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 8, 2015
|Share your interest - Common App Essay - My love of foreign languages
3 - Polina, after reading your essay, I would like to comment first on the way it is written. I suggest...
UndergraduateLinaRus - Dec 2, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 8, 2015
|University of Virginia Supplement Essay on Quirks: motionless moment
Undergraduateblackstar7 - Dec 8, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 8, 2015
|Overcoming personal difficulties; event that transformed me to adulthood
Undergraduateferdquayson - Dec 7, 2015 / ferdquayson - Dec 8, 2015
|Falling head over heel for science. Why have I chosen chemical engineering as a career option?
2 - Aliam as this is a draft, I understand that you didn't capitalize the letters of the words that needs...
Undergraduatejpulkita8 - Dec 8, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 8, 2015
|Motivation letter for bsc Economics. Can someone check it if its good or not?
10 - Gzsofi, I don't worry about you as much because I know that a little practice and you will be...
Undergraduategzsofi - Nov 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 7, 2015
|a 'renaissance woman' - QUALITIES ABOUT MYSELF
UndergraduateiSasha - Dec 7, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 7, 2015
|Reasons on applying and attending Swarthmore - both entail the exciting concept of social science.
4 - Thank you aikoashiya for your feedback it was really helpful!! Thank you for your honestly as well Thank...
UndergraduateFranky17 - Dec 6, 2015 / Franky17 - Dec 7, 2015
|I am really bad at writing and need help on my supplemental essay for my Georgia Tech application.
3 - Hey, I'm quite familiar with GT having been born near there and having quite a few friends who attend,...
Undergraduatecourtdun - Dec 5, 2015 / aikoashiya - Dec 7, 2015
|Advocacy for LGBTQ Individuals in the East - Common App "Why Transfer"
4 - Depending on where you are wanting to transfer to will play a big part in how well your essay...
Undergraduatehop3ful - Dec 2, 2015 / aikoashiya - Dec 7, 2015
|A young lady sitting contentedly facing to the computer - suggestions about my SoP
7 - Junhua, see if this edited closing paragraph is something that you would like to use :-) Upon graduation,...
UndergraduateJuneYan - Dec 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 6, 2015
|Why I want to be an illustrator? MassArt Statement of Purpose Letter! Help !? :3
UndergraduateKatryanaJazmin - Dec 6, 2015 / KatryanaJazmin - Dec 6, 2015
|I am a Slovakian writing a personal essay for a college in the United States.
2 - Lucia, this is a heart warming story that you have written here, it successfully capture the thought of a...
Undergraduateluci_belakova - Dec 6, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 6, 2015
|Students identify Lafayette as an excellent fit for countless reasons. Why Lafayette? (20-200 words)
Undergraduateellaak - Dec 5, 2015 / ellaak - Dec 6, 2015
|I only eat air and I think I'm better than everyone else
3 - Emily, overall, your essay is written good. However, as I go through it, the final paragraph does not...
Undergraduatekpopgirl - Dec 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 5, 2015
|Being the first chair saxophone player in our marching band - Apply Texas Topic C
2 - Emma, as I read through your essay, I must say that you did well on the first few paragraphs,...
Undergraduateemrp - Dec 5, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 5, 2015
|Interests led me into Biomechanical Engineering - Common App Essay
7 - I really loved your essay it was captivating and explained exactly why you were interested in mechanical engineering. However...
UndergraduateJamieB - Nov 20, 2015 / ellaak - Dec 5, 2015
|Share experiences that have shaped you and provide insight as to who you want to be in the future.
Undergraduatepallakgarg7 - Dec 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 5, 2015
|"Diversity is the key to change" - Columbia Supplement
4 - Well Kennedy, structure wise, the essay is fine due to the fact that this type of prompt does not...
Undergraduatekennedelrey - Dec 2, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 5, 2015
|"Ok let's go!" - Yale essay: reflect on personal interests, experience
5 - Jasmine, let's make your last paragraph stronger, kindly find my remarks below. Final paragraph - Long boarding (...
UndergraduateJamieB - Dec 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 5, 2015
|'a jigsaw puzzle' - Common Application - first question choice
3 - dBres, to address your first dilemma on the title of your essay, I believe " A Jigsaw Puzzle "...
Undergraduatedanbrespadkit - Dec 5, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 5, 2015
|"education is the most powerful weapon..." United World Colleges Application Essay
3 - @vangiespen I hope this is better approach to the prompt. To me, attending a United World College is...
Undergraduateoluwatofunmii - Dec 5, 2015 / oluwatofunmii - Dec 5, 2015
|Essay: Communication is Power - it introduces different ideas, educates and informs the masses
UndergraduateElijah Ngoy - Dec 4, 2015 / Elijah Ngoy - Dec 4, 2015
|Seconds become minutes, and then hours, and then days, but I will value every single one.
2 - Hi Catherine, the essay that you developed is not off topic, neither is it dark and depressing. However, I...
UndergraduateShiro - Dec 1, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 4, 2015
|I'm an enlisted sailor - USNA Personal essay question
7 - We need to adjust the content of the following paragraph so that it does not sound like you are...
UndergraduateYNnope - Nov 28, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 4, 2015
|How are you and St. Olaf a good fit for each other? (100 words)
3 - HI Roshan, I'd like to share my views on your supplement essay. - would helpwill assist me to...
Undergraduatenepal1 - Nov 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 3, 2015
|What do you do? Why do you do it? (20-200 words).
6 - I think your answer properly answers the prompt. I think there will be different answers because the prompt gives...
Undergraduateellaak - Nov 27, 2015 / JamieB - Dec 3, 2015
|Not all hardships in life come with warning signs. Common App Essay - Overcoming a hardship
2 - Brooke, as I finish reading your essay, I believe it's written quiet well. You have answered the prompt properly...
Undergraduatebrooke4679 - Dec 2, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 2, 2015
|'lucky to be introduced to computers' - UC Prompt 1 - Transfer Essay and Prompt 2 - Computer Science
8 - I have already finished my application but I need to make this clear and give you an advice about...
Undergraduatenetlev - Nov 25, 2015 / netlev - Dec 1, 2015
|USC application - leadership club as my non-academic pursuit
2 - Hi Abby, I'm pleased to read your essay. While you can explain well your experience in your family,...
Undergraduateskigirl343 - Dec 1, 2015 / fahmisadja - Dec 1, 2015
|Building a bridge from my visions to my reality - Claremont McKenna Short Essay Question
3 - This is some impressive feedback from justivy. I'll share a few thoughts, too. Usually, it is a great practice...
Undergraduatehus4144 - Dec 1, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Dec 1, 2015
|FAMILY HISTORY ESSAY - very wise and ambitious grandmother
3 - Sasha, I'd like to share my thoughts on your essay. - However,I share the same love my grandmother...
UndergraduateiSasha - Dec 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 1, 2015
|How will your Semester at Sea voyage create (or enhance) your personal global perspective?
2 - I liked your essay. "The intercultural exchange between peers on the ship, and local communities off the ship...
Undergraduatelidorf - Nov 30, 2015 / jdsada98 - Dec 1, 2015
|'the smell of arroz con pollo and freshly made lumpia' - Different Experiences Essay
3 - Calvin, as I finish proof reading your essay, I conclude that it's quiet premature to submit your essay at...
Undergraduatecalvincruz - Dec 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 1, 2015
|UT Essay Topic C: Coloring in my Character
6 - That's good to hear that we were able to help, so Alisha, below are my remarks for the conclusive...
Undergraduatekibawa - Nov 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 1, 2015
|Standing Alone/ Common App challenge a belief/idea
3 - Dawson, first things first on your essay. The segmented or small paragraphs on your essay does not work very...
Undergraduatehoreyd - Dec 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 1, 2015
|The Beauty of Equality, my religious pilgrimage to Saudi Arabia (Personal Statement for UW)
Undergraduaterahman786 - Dec 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 1, 2015
|"What if this truck ran me over?" - UC Personal Statement about Overcoming Depression
2 - - I have struggled with depression and anxiety for the majority of my teenage years. Because of, with the...
Undergraduatesarahann98 - Nov 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Nov 30, 2015
|The day I was born, my parents immediately had tremendous aspirations for me - UC Application
5 - Parker, as I finish reading your essay, I conclude that you did a good job in responding to the...
Undergraduateloopywaffle - Nov 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Nov 30, 2015
|My background and how the passing of a parent has shaped me today as a student/person.
Undergraduatekaldenjorkhang - Nov 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Nov 30, 2015
|'overwhelmed with emotion' - Transfer Applicant - George Washington University
11 - Thank you for the help! If ever there's something I'd like to add to the essay, I'll post it...
Undergraduatedaisylad - Nov 25, 2015 / daisylad - Nov 30, 2015
|I am a culprit of identity theft. Personal Statement for UW
2 - Hi, as to me, I think this essay is well-written. And here are some advice (I'm only a rookie...
Undergraduatecaseychong98 - Nov 30, 2015 / LucasLiu - Nov 30, 2015
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