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|'Correlation between games and statistics' UIUC Statistics and Computer Science Transfer Essay
2 - Sam, truth be told, your reason for wishing to move from your community college to the university is not...
UndergraduateSam112 - Jan 19, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 19, 2016
|Being independent and making exclusively own decisions. Family impact essay for UCF.
UndergraduateAbneyj - Jan 18, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 18, 2016
|Syracuse - what influenced you to apply ? My uncle
2 - Kiara, while the influence of your uncle is something that should be seen as the spark that lit your...
Undergraduatekiki14 - Dec 26, 2013 / vangiespen - Jan 18, 2016
|"Computer Science in an art" - Cornell CAS Supplement
3 - Zabaan, at first glance, what I notice on your essay is how small the paragraphs are, it actually looks...
Undergraduatezabaan - Jan 1, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 17, 2016
|Cornell A&S Supplement-Psychology and Creative Writing
3 - Cassandra, I know your essay is long submitted at this time but I would like to give you pointers...
Undergraduatecmyork2016 - Jan 2, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 17, 2016
|Harvey Mudd supp, how background influences problems you want to solve: working w/ disabled kids
3 - Benivor, I'd like to share my thoughts on your essay. I think what's making your essay quiet longer than...
Undergraduatebenivor - Dec 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Jan 17, 2016
|University of Georgia Regular decisions application: Check out my college essays! :)
Undergraduatetifflavrisa - Jan 1, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 17, 2016
|Meredith- Discuss your strengths
3 - Thereis123, I'd like to share my thoughts on your essay by sharing corrections that I think will be helpful...
Undergraduatethereis123 - Jan 4, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 17, 2016
|"What is you favourite subject?" "Why are you interested in this program?" - UTSC Supplementary
4 - Amanda, here's the rest of the suggested modifications for your essay. 3. What experiences and skills might you...
Undergraduateamaaaaaaanda - Jan 17, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 17, 2016
|Macalester College application essay; add a value to the Mac community, academically and personally
Undergraduatejon4659 - Jan 11, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 17, 2016
|Describe the world you want to live in 2030 (150 words)
Undergraduatepresariohg - Jan 15, 2016 / EF_Carol - Jan 17, 2016
|My most important accomplishment in terms of past, present, and future self
2 - I can see how your past accomplishments and present self have made strides towards accomplishing accomplishing important acts during...
Undergraduatemaggienowlin - Jan 17, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 17, 2016
|A Berea College Aspirant From India, Still Figuring Out The Steps..........Friends, Can You Help?
5 - As I mentioned before Nil, you should be looking into the international scholarship grants available in your home country,...
UndergraduateAspiringNil - Jan 2, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 17, 2016
|Interests and focus - Essay prompt for Purdue
5 - Thanks a lot for your feedback! It's extremely encouraging :D Glad to know I finally wrote a decent essay...
Undergraduatelramad2 - Jan 8, 2016 / lramad2 - Jan 17, 2016
|'War, crime and society' - RYERSON UNDERGRADUATE JOURNALISM ESSAY
2 - - butand there areis always hidden - truths that does not seem - to be knowledgeknown to the public....
UndergraduateLifeless - Jan 16, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 16, 2016
|At a point in my life, everything was starting to fall apart. Correct flow of this common app essay?
4 - Hello, From my point of view, if you have room to discuss your current state and obstacles by...
UndergraduateNeelness - Jan 16, 2016 / brayan1996 - Jan 16, 2016
|write a paragraph about some actions that should be taken to protect our oceans
3 - Your excitement and energy are actually leaping off the page. There is a sense that you wrote this paragraph...
Undergraduateemmastone0103 - Jan 16, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 16, 2016
|Written introduction to my narrated slideshow - hobbies, why school, key to success, learning style
2 - Hi Catherine. It's lovely to meet you. Your slide show introduction should work very well for you. It is...
Undergraduatecatherine13 - Jan 16, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 16, 2016
|Beatbox Music Making-Common App Main Essay (Background/identity/interest)
UndergraduateWandelstein - Dec 29, 2015 / shealeear8 - Jan 15, 2016
|Carleton: recorder<math<computer science<language acquisition<linguistics/cognitive science<climbing
6 - I didn't take a recorder class from the professor (it was solely a math camp), but we discussed it...
Undergraduatemurfel - Jan 13, 2016 / murfel - Jan 15, 2016
|Science vs art head vs heart---Main essay
UndergraduateDANDAN - Jan 15, 2016 / DANDAN - Jan 15, 2016
|I was assured that it would be one of the best options for me. Lafayette College Supplemental Essay
2 - Angel, your second paragraph is most powerful reason that you have chosen Lafayette University for your future education. So...
UndergraduateAngel532 - Jan 14, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 15, 2016
|Describe a problem, possibly related to your area of study, which you would like to solve.
UndergraduateAmanuelZelealem - Jan 14, 2016 / AmanuelZelealem - Jan 15, 2016
|Billionaire Boys Club - Common App Essay Prompt One HELP
5 - The first thing that stuck out to me was that at the beginning of the essay, three sentences in...
Undergraduatevric - Jan 13, 2016 / Maccdog - Jan 14, 2016
|EVERYONE NEEDS TO TRAVEL THE GLOBE
2 - Kat, let's just say that you were ble to more than deliver on the prompt requirements. The long essay...
Undergraduatekitkat - Jan 13, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 14, 2016
|Virginia Tech has many attributes any student would desire in a school. Reasons to become a Hokie
2 - Kira, your statement and reasons do not stand out in your response. It is a bit difficult to pick...
Undergraduatekswidz - Jan 13, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 13, 2016
|Do we most value the things that are difficult to attain?
2 - Nour, while you present a good thesis statement for the essay, you did not really provide an overview of...
Undergraduatenoureldin55 - Jan 11, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 13, 2016
|Short Franklin and Marshall sups: Why F&M/Who would I want to be in a day?
Undergraduatezoechan132 - Jan 11, 2016 / zoechan132 - Jan 12, 2016
|Demonstrating leadership, teamwork, initiative, and commitment. IVEY application
2 - I LIKE THAT YOU DEMONSTRATED HOW YOU EXPLAINED THE ACTIVITIES BUT YOU SHOULD ALSO EXPLAIN HOW YOU APPLIED THOSE...
Undergraduatejoshuapinto - Jan 12, 2016 / covenant1992 - Jan 12, 2016
|"Film? Why do you want to study that?" How did I changed my interest to liberal art
4 - I think you can best use this essay for the "background" prompt. The problem, is that you did not...
Undergraduateechoo - Jan 12, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 12, 2016
|Trying to transfer to UT Austin and I am starting to work on my SOP essay
4 - Remember the story of your friend that you used at the start of the essay? Edit it for content,...
Undergraduateash12353 - Jan 12, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 12, 2016
|"Gold, Garnet and Gray" - sharing my story for college application
3 - Cameron, the first part of your essay is really informative. I came to find that I got to know...
UndergraduateCamReLind - Jan 11, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 12, 2016
|'I am very cosmopolitan and maximalist person' - Personal statement for Information Technology
3 - Iveta, I'd like to share my thoughts on your essay. - thinking seriously about my future plans ,...
Undergraduateiveeeta - Jan 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 11, 2016
|How to show my leadership and initiative for IVEY application?
2 - Dian, to address your doubt on whether to write the name of the institution or not, I say you...
Undergraduatesgsg9 - Jan 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 11, 2016
|Proud "Hoya Saxa" slogan. Why Georgetown? -----Computer science and more
6 - Jize, I proof read your essay and with the enhancement done, I believe your essay is better now and...
Undergraduateanfernee - Jan 9, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 11, 2016
|Influential Book- honors college essay
2 - Loren, I'd like to share my thoughts on your essay. - The novel has influenced me not because...
UndergraduateLauren56 - Jan 11, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 11, 2016
|WHY I BECAME VEGAN: to be healthy, save lives, and save the planet
2 - Kat, I read and tried to understand your argument in this particular belief and honestly, you did great in...
Undergraduatekitkat - Jan 11, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 11, 2016
|Question about demonstrating leadership, initiative, breadth, achievement, teamwork, and commitment
3 - Hi Josh, below are my final remarks for your essay. -I had the opportunity of touringvisiting Italy, -...
Undergraduatejoshpinto - Jan 10, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 11, 2016
|"Commitment and Breadth" - Question about how to demonstrate your leadership along with commitment
6 - Dian, bringing your essay down to its target word count may seem such a daunting task but it should...
Undergraduatesgsg9 - Jan 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 11, 2016
|How did I changed my interest to a liberal art.
2 - Cindy, you have to provide the main application prompt along with the essay so that we can analyze the...
Undergraduateechhoo - Jan 10, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 10, 2016
|How can I better explain my extenuating circumstances for CommonApp?
2 - Michael, I can understand how confusing it must have been for you in the IB school system. I am...
Undergraduatemivy111 - Jan 10, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 10, 2016
|Weltschmerz: Or, How I Came to cherish reality above the ideal.
UndergraduateAshenEidolon - Jan 10, 2016 / AshenEidolon - Jan 10, 2016
|After scrutinizing abundant number of colleges all over United States, I came up with Virginia Tech
4 - Hi there, let me attempt to comment on your essay. I didn't find any grammatical error on your...
UndergraduateScarecrow - Jan 10, 2016 / fahmisadja - Jan 10, 2016
|My sister is an avid Hokie. Why I believe the Virginia Tech is the school for me too?
Undergraduatejsomegirl - Jan 9, 2016 / jsomegirl - Jan 9, 2016
|'small, exciting, quiet and very family-like environment' - Lafayette college ESSAY.
3 - I think you should rewrite this essay and really seek to show them how Lafayette is a good choice...
Undergraduatekaylieleee - Jan 9, 2016 / johnjr121 - Jan 9, 2016
|Demonstrate TEAMWORK and LEADERSHIP in 500 words. University supplementary due soon
Undergraduatesgsg9 - Jan 8, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 9, 2016
|Lessons of equality and acceptance. A memorable experience in childhood and its effect on my life
2 - Sacheta, after reading your essay, I must say that you have a well written essay. You were able to...
Undergraduatesssanadi - Jan 8, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 9, 2016
|Meeting my grandma for the first time creative short description
2 - Flora, the essay can use a more descriptive opening scene. You need to get into the description of the...
Undergraduateflorab - Jan 9, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 9, 2016
|Edit my Common Application Essay? (Transfer Student) (International)
2 - Hello kna2 :) Founding a game studio and managing members wasWERE not an easy process, I had to...
Undergraduatekna2 - Jan 7, 2016 / pertiwi02 - Jan 7, 2016
|Trying to understand phenomena and some "why's" behind them - admission into Computer Science
Undergraduatecoolmac - Jan 4, 2016 / coolmac - Jan 7, 2016
|Tell us about Spiders. University of Richmond Supplement.
3 - How does this relate to the topic "Tell us about spiders"? Your essay is a little bit off topic....
Undergraduatedakey96 - Jan 5, 2016 / profes - Jan 7, 2016
|This is my compulsory essay for Carey Business school about being a leader and inspiring others
NEW - Compulsory Essay: Please respond to the following question: Business leaders have the ability to create opportunities, build products and...
UndergraduateJeffZheng - Jan 7, 2016 / — -
|Why Yale? The academic resources at Yale far surpass the resources available at Vanderbilt.
6 - Don't fixate your discussion on the weakness of Vanderbilt. Keep in mind that these are both IVY league schools...
Undergraduatedundunyang - Jan 6, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 6, 2016
|Moving from one country to another is a life changing experience
11 - ... to experience many new aspects of life,; however, moving from one country ... Many people immigrate to haveOBTAIN...
Undergraduateehsan2888 - Nov 14, 2015 / andika06 - Jan 6, 2016
|My current college does not meet desired expectations. So why I want attend Virginia Tech?
2 - Ibrahim, I would like to share my remarks and hopefully enhance the grammar of the essay. - I...
Undergraduateheadduty - Jan 6, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 6, 2016
|Are my Waterloo AIF essays all over the place? Any criticism is welcome.
Undergraduatecatmir - Jan 6, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 6, 2016
|UPenn circumscribes a totality of backgrounds and experiences, ideologies, theories and perspectives
5 - Just a quick note, in my campus visit, and other small talks, I learned that University of Pennsylvania prefers...
Undergraduatedakey96 - Dec 31, 2015 / Celoise - Jan 5, 2016
|Transfer Essay; searching for a smile and sharing it around - Smile is important to me
3 - I tooALSO have to search for ... Though once found IN THE PARTICULAR TIME, I hope it breaks through...
UndergraduateKM1113 - Jan 5, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Jan 5, 2016
|Describing an issue related to the college where I will study and stating my own opinion
2 - Ainur, before we can help you improve this essay, you first have to provide us with a copy of...
Undergraduateainuraulia - Jan 5, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 5, 2016
|How did you become interested in Knox and why Knox-supplement essay
2 - Amiicho, I am interested to read the last paragraph that you did not post in the essay. The reason...
Undergraduateamiicho - Jan 5, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 5, 2016
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