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|How my background has had an impact on my educational goals
10 - Don't you think the first paragraph is a little too long? I think you'd better focus on the experience...
Undergraduateniina - Aug 3, 2010 / himaya - Aug 6, 2010
|'Aspirations Never Die' - Statement of Purpose for PhD in computer Networking
10 - Hi Kevin, I just wanted to say that I can't thank you enough for your support throughout my SOP...
Undergraduatemdtariqaziz - Jul 19, 2010 / mdtariqaziz - Aug 6, 2010
|My "granddaddy" - Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you
3 - Oh! Sorry about that - I was looking for a better conclusions, but somehow, it slipped out of...
Undergraduatederby581 - Aug 5, 2010 / freezard7734 - Aug 6, 2010
|What are the achievements and experience that defined you as a person? (family)
5 - thank you for the help :) i appreciate it. i don't hold anything against you. its your opinion and...
Undergraduatemin_026 - Aug 4, 2010 / min_026 - Aug 6, 2010
|major in Special Education - University of Illinois Essay-Freshmen Admissions
3 - ...because I know how it feels not knowing being to be lost in class while everyone else is steadily...
Undergraduatebearsfan85 - Aug 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 5, 2010
|Question about length of common application personal essay
5 - Alright. A lot of my friends are talking about writing 5-page essays, which I though was excessive. But now...
Undergraduatefreezard7734 - Aug 4, 2010 / freezard7734 - Aug 5, 2010
|Common App: Sibling Class, Activity Short Answer
4 - thanks kevin! i didn't even realize that until you pointed it out, but it totally makes sense. thanks again!!...
Undergraduatefdsa54321 - Aug 3, 2010 / fdsa54321 - Aug 5, 2010
|"help me bring a unique and distinctive perspective" Law School Personal Statement
Undergraduatekkhanb - Jul 16, 2010 / meisj0n - Aug 5, 2010
|UC Essay 1 - A library full of children
6 - The children in the library have fueled my passion for humanitarian services in general. I have acquired a much...
Undergraduatenerkygerdy - Jul 15, 2010 / OmarovM - Aug 5, 2010
|"Confessions of a poor student"
20 - This is my humble feedback on your essay. My advice is that maybe you can try writing your essay...
Undergraduateroygbiv - Jun 4, 2010 / OmarovM - Aug 5, 2010
|"The Metamorphosis," "Antidisestablishmentarianism"-Unsettling novel-Favorite Word
12 - Yeah, I think my Abnormal Psychology class made me feel that way too...I nearly gave up my ambition...
UndergraduateYayz - Aug 1, 2010 / Yayz - Aug 4, 2010
|'Preaching my first sermon' - An attempt to jumpstart NCSSM essays
5 - It is, when you name the final product, i.e. salt. Whereas in your case, you are talking about...
UndergraduateClynnSams - Aug 2, 2010 / ershad193 - Aug 4, 2010
|statement of purpose for Master's programme in electronics and communication eng.
3 - I think this is your short term goal rather than your ultimate goal: ...will help me to realize my...
UndergraduateBahramcreep - Aug 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 4, 2010
|"Being myself & Try to help my community" --UC prompt #1
Undergraduatesunzml - Aug 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 4, 2010
|Texas Tech Admission: My father, Someone who has made an impact on your life.
3 - Keep those verb tenses consistent: He has always shown me unconditional love, no matter how badly I screwed up....
Undergraduatest_hastings - Aug 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 4, 2010
|"My aspiration to be a registered nurse" - Nursing Personal Statement
4 - I like the poetry at the beginning. I think any inspired person will appreciate it. My family stepped...
Undergraduatevietfun2k - Aug 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 4, 2010
|To pursue a career in nursing, UT Austin transfer essay-STATEMENT OF PURPOSE
Undergraduateplb - Aug 2, 2010 / plb - Aug 4, 2010
|'The compass pointing at the happiness' commonapp main essay
UndergraduateBrown - Jul 21, 2010 / Shadow93 - Aug 4, 2010
|Essay: Randy Pausch, Someone Important to You
Undergraduaterayban11 - Jul 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 2, 2010
|"My mother has made an impact in your life" TAMU Admission Essay
Undergraduatetobixasaurx - Jul 30, 2010 / tobixasaurx - Aug 2, 2010
|As my roommate, I think I should warn you; Stanford Supplement
Undergraduatetitanswim - Aug 1, 2010 / MarleyWH - Aug 2, 2010
|"a career that challenges and sharpens my skill set" - The Ohio State University
5 - It's not banal, just inefficient. Something that honors one's mother or father will never be banal. However, I blieve...
UndergraduateMcPressler - Jul 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 1, 2010
|"Argentinian parents" - FSU admission essay "VIRES, ARTES, MORES"
6 - This is one of those sentences that do not actually mean anything. I am not criticizing you, just...
UndergraduateMari - Jul 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 1, 2010
|"Be a best friend, tell the truth..." - favorite quote
2 - Hi Lauren, I changed your thread title so that it would be unique and meaningful. Please use descriptive, meaningful...
Undergraduatelauren_leann - Jul 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 1, 2010
|Mosaic: UC Application Essay #1
10 - Don't worry, just focus on finding those excellent words and phrases. I'll keep the threads cleaned up. Thanks...
UndergraduateAntebellum - Jul 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 1, 2010
|"do not ever give up and be strong in the new world", UF admission essay, help
NEW - In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment...
Undergraduatedeep5166 - Aug 1, 2010 / — -
|I am not exclusively Caucasian or Black ; My diverse lifestyle and culture
7 - Excellent stuff right here. I like all of your writing, but I almost think you should scrap paragraph...
Undergraduatetitanswim - Jul 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 31, 2010
|Brother, the most influential and important person -Texas Freshmen Admissions
2 - Okay, you need to have a separate paragraph after you do the introduction. Make this paragraph 2: However, as...
Undergraduatelaw92 - Jul 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 31, 2010
|Why I Want to Study Abroad in Argentina Essay
Undergraduatejudas - Jul 29, 2010 / judas - Jul 30, 2010
|"ketchup's popularity" - uc prompt-tell us about your community
5 - Mark and Stephen are wicked cool. Thanks, you guys. Welcome to essayforum. This essay is terrific. I don't think...
Undergraduatewinstonli - Jul 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 30, 2010
|"The truly important things in life" - experiences that can define you as a person
Undergraduateannmichelle7 - Jul 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 30, 2010
|"Choices for the better" UC Prompt #1 2010
Undergraduatejoonie - Jul 28, 2010 / joonie - Jul 30, 2010
|Admission of Guilt or Liability in an Essay
4 - This is a good point, for sure! I hope I have not written anything too incriminating here... ;-)...
UndergraduateAnnette6241 - Jul 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 30, 2010
|Music that has developed you... rate and give advice
2 - ...an entirely new entity, but usually they had so many similarities and could easily be written off as boring....
Undergraduatemrkay66 - Jul 29, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jul 29, 2010
|"Unforgettable Golf Game" - UF Prompt
8 - I think you did answer the prompt well, and your point is distinct... interesting. However, it just seems...
UndergraduateShoKhun - Jul 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 28, 2010
|UCF Admission Essay...[What qualities do I possess...]
Undergraduateshin521 - Jul 13, 2010 / shin521 - Jul 28, 2010
|Transfer admission essay, why do i want to attend this school of management?
UndergraduateMadu410 - Jul 6, 2010 / Madu410 - Jul 28, 2010
|'living in residence halls' WHY BINGHAMTON WHY DO I WANT TO BE ADMITTED?
UndergraduateMadu410 - Jul 7, 2010 / Madu410 - Jul 28, 2010
|"A diverse place" - Rutgers Essay
4 - thanks, but i thought i was answering the prompt with the boring stuff. like how i woul benefit &...
Undergraduateraafia93 - Jul 25, 2010 / raafia93 - Jul 27, 2010
|Marching band section leader: a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment
6 - What if I couldn't be a good leader? What if I failed? Well, failure just isn't an option for...
UndergraduateFalcon13 - Jul 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|"Parliamentary inspection of the administration" - Commonapp 150word essay
3 - Scratch some out to make some room: Representing forty-eight million people and a thousand monitors, only three were allowed...
Undergraduatepenn2015 - Jul 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|Outline reasons for choosing the Fashion Institute for Design and Merchandising
3 - I see that Yayz corrected that run on sentence at the beginning. Also, ershad makes a good point!!...
UndergraduateKiea - Jul 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|My experience as a lifeguard: Saving Jeffrey.
7 - This is great! You must know it is great, because when we write something with real energy we know...
Undergraduatetpropper - Jul 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|'bioengineering research' - College Sup. Essay: Duke Pratt school of Engineering
5 - Hey, I like it!! It's impressive... Your discussion in the intro is very good. Streamline this to make...
Undergraduatelcy988 - Jul 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|Experiences...Accomplishments...Experiences - College admission essay
6 - It's better to have this just once: Experiences...Accomplishments.. .Experiences...Accomplishments...I don't really... ...aren't they the things that define...
Undergraduateannmichelle7 - Jul 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|I was born into a rich family: UC Personal Statement for Graduates of 2011
Undergraduateschnookumz03 - Jul 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|Additional information: professional and sports experience
3 - To ISB, I will bring a results oriented person with a dynamic personality, and who is full of energy...
Undergraduatesumitg04 - Jul 21, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jul 26, 2010
|"a story from your life, high school" - University of Washington essay
Undergraduatedj02bothell - Jul 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 22, 2010
|Career Essay (goals / objectives) for MMgt programme
Undergraduatehard_target - Jul 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 22, 2010
|family history, culture, why i apply to ucf. ucf essay - review my essay!
Undergraduatehelp1923 - Jul 21, 2010 / help1923 - Jul 21, 2010
|Short term and long term goals for ISB student
Undergraduatesumitg04 - Jul 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 20, 2010
|Signif. Experience: Braces-UF application-suggestions?
5 - This is very good writing. You are not using this essay to its full potential, though. You can reflect...
UndergraduateShaniwilson72 - Jul 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 20, 2010
|International University of Art and Design, trying to apply
Undergraduatecookie46 - Jul 12, 2010 / cookie46 - Jul 18, 2010
|"Why do I run?" UF admission essay. thoughts/suggestions
NEW - Prompt:In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment...
Undergraduatelanasat1 - Jul 18, 2010 / — -
|SOP in Graphic Design - SCAD, problems with grammar and vocabulary
12 - Thanks Kevin! I will make changes and consider this the final draft. It might be a naive decision but......
Undergraduateletungggggg - Jul 10, 2010 / letungggggg - Jul 17, 2010
|Judy's strong rapport with patients ; Physician Assistant Personal Statement
3 - I thought you were talking about seals too, as in animals, until I realized that Judy drew him a...
Undergraduateartemis30 - Jul 10, 2010 / cjohnson0620 - Jul 15, 2010
|International Dentist needs to write essay to go to nursing school
4 - What is meant by this? I think you might mean "the development of my interest in nursing." This...
Undergraduatenursingdent - Jul 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 15, 2010
|The future of our society and foreign policy: UT Austin, Important Issue
Undergraduatefifteen_symbols - Jul 13, 2010 / fifteen_symbols - Jul 14, 2010
|Any additional things we should know about you? (optional) University of Florida
4 - Twelve years later, I find that today, inside and outside of the classroom, I continue to be the inquisitive...
Undergraduatetford1661 - Jul 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 14, 2010
|Splash 1996! The significance of water.
Undergraduatetford1661 - Jul 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 14, 2010
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