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|'bioengineering research' - College Sup. Essay: Duke Pratt school of Engineering
5 - Hey, I like it!! It's impressive... Your discussion in the intro is very good. Streamline this to make...
Undergraduatelcy988 - Jul 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|Experiences...Accomplishments...Experiences - College admission essay
6 - It's better to have this just once: Experiences...Accomplishments.. .Experiences...Accomplishments...I don't really... ...aren't they the things that define...
Undergraduateannmichelle7 - Jul 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|I was born into a rich family: UC Personal Statement for Graduates of 2011
Undergraduateschnookumz03 - Jul 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
|Additional information: professional and sports experience
3 - To ISB, I will bring a results oriented person with a dynamic personality, and who is full of energy...
Undergraduatesumitg04 - Jul 21, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jul 26, 2010
|"a story from your life, high school" - University of Washington essay
Undergraduatedj02bothell - Jul 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 22, 2010
|Career Essay (goals / objectives) for MMgt programme
Undergraduatehard_target - Jul 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 22, 2010
|family history, culture, why i apply to ucf. ucf essay - review my essay!
Undergraduatehelp1923 - Jul 21, 2010 / help1923 - Jul 21, 2010
|Short term and long term goals for ISB student
Undergraduatesumitg04 - Jul 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 20, 2010
|Signif. Experience: Braces-UF application-suggestions?
5 - This is very good writing. You are not using this essay to its full potential, though. You can reflect...
UndergraduateShaniwilson72 - Jul 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 20, 2010
|International University of Art and Design, trying to apply
Undergraduatecookie46 - Jul 12, 2010 / cookie46 - Jul 18, 2010
|"Why do I run?" UF admission essay. thoughts/suggestions
NEW - Prompt:In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment...
Undergraduatelanasat1 - Jul 18, 2010 / — -
|SOP in Graphic Design - SCAD, problems with grammar and vocabulary
12 - Thanks Kevin! I will make changes and consider this the final draft. It might be a naive decision but......
Undergraduateletungggggg - Jul 10, 2010 / letungggggg - Jul 17, 2010
|Judy's strong rapport with patients ; Physician Assistant Personal Statement
3 - I thought you were talking about seals too, as in animals, until I realized that Judy drew him a...
Undergraduateartemis30 - Jul 10, 2010 / cjohnson0620 - Jul 15, 2010
|International Dentist needs to write essay to go to nursing school
4 - What is meant by this? I think you might mean "the development of my interest in nursing." This...
Undergraduatenursingdent - Jul 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 15, 2010
|The future of our society and foreign policy: UT Austin, Important Issue
Undergraduatefifteen_symbols - Jul 13, 2010 / fifteen_symbols - Jul 14, 2010
|Any additional things we should know about you? (optional) University of Florida
4 - Twelve years later, I find that today, inside and outside of the classroom, I continue to be the inquisitive...
Undergraduatetford1661 - Jul 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 14, 2010
|Splash 1996! The significance of water.
Undergraduatetford1661 - Jul 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 14, 2010
|My experience in Khayelitsha; Peace Corps - challenge and your success
3 - Prompt 1 Since you have written on a pretty sensitive subject, try to limit your opinion. Although you...
Undergraduateljm9304 - Jul 13, 2010 / ershad193 - Jul 14, 2010
|Mathematics- an intellectual experience or class that has influenced & inspired me
10 - Thanks, Kevin....
Undergraduatekennethkcy - Jul 7, 2010 / kennethkcy - Jul 13, 2010
|"the perfect time in my life to challenge myself" - Peace Corp Essay
Undergraduateaurorlyn - Jul 6, 2010 / aurorlyn - Jul 13, 2010
|admission essay: experiences or achievements that helped define you as a person
Undergraduatepat9507 - Jul 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 12, 2010
|Concerning Transfer Admission to University of Texas: Statement of Purpose Essay
6 - Ha ha, excellent! Okay, here is my idea: What I yearn for is the treasures of knowledge. What I...
Undergraduatefifteen_symbols - Jul 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 12, 2010
|Essay question to enter into a nursing program (Pierce College)
3 - You write very well!! Here is an awkward sentence: This not only enabled me to keep the positive...
Undergraduatechampagne_369 - Jul 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 11, 2010
|"to fit the expectations of others" uc- Being a twin
Undergraduatemayrac92 - Jul 9, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jul 10, 2010
|''journey to be oneself'' - LMU Essay Prompt
2 - God has given every individual a personal calling and it is through this that we are able to obtain...
UndergraduateLily3 - Jul 9, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jul 9, 2010
|"All I can do is be me- significant experiences that helped to define you as a person
6 - Apart from the grammar, I think you should use a different word than "unintelligent." When a college admissions person...
Undergraduatetreexah - Jul 3, 2010 / corndawg - Jul 9, 2010
|Help with writing a career goals essay for Recording and Music Production school
5 - Okay... the music has to create an experience every moment. You can't include any sentences without substance: My...
Undergraduateleavethelighton - Jul 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2010
|"A plane trip we took from Germany to London" - UF admission essay
19 - Hey, this also gave me some important insight into this essayforum we have here... The people who contribute...
Undergraduatepeaceitserin - Jun 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2010
|College teachers are not all the same.
Undergraduateabd85 - Jan 12, 2010 / abd85 - Jul 7, 2010
|'anything like the Rosen campus' - Why did you choose to apply to UCF?
Undergraduatedreifusse - Jul 4, 2010 / Madu410 - Jul 7, 2010
|Programming and designing graphics, seven-sentence paragraph about my career goals
UndergraduateZubaida - Jul 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 6, 2010
|Nursing School Admissions Essay: "to acquire skills"
Undergraduatepeyut - Jul 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 6, 2010
|admissions essay--WHY DO YOU WANT TO ATTEND NYUAD?
Undergraduatesilkesha - Jun 11, 2010 / silkesha - Jul 6, 2010
|Hhigh paying job with the risk of losing it is better - 'risk can change'
6 - I tried to correct your sentences as my little bit English knowledge. You made less grammatically and used good...
Undergraduatekimhyejinia - Jul 5, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Jul 5, 2010
|Do you believe in fate: UF Admission essay!
5 - to be eight-teen to ride. I was seven-teen. it should be eighteen and seventeen. no hyphen in required. ...
Undergraduatesfchawks01 - Jun 4, 2010 / Laddingt - Jul 4, 2010
|One of reasons I want to join the Peace Corps is quite selfish - I want to be changed by the world.
Undergraduatellopezhi - Jul 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 4, 2010
|Math, chemistry - a significant experience, achievement common application essay
3 - Simplify to avoid errors: Until high school, never did I consider math nor or science as my strong...
Undergraduateam80951 - Jul 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 4, 2010
|I am trying to finish a BSN in nursing
Undergraduatececilia - Jul 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 4, 2010
|Transfer essay after a 4 year hiatus to a different program - U Pittsburgh
Undergraduategrinnin - Jul 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 4, 2010
|'flourish in this challenging world' How family, culture influenced who you are?
5 - Neither of my parents ever had any guidance throughout school, and not enough money to go to college. ...
Undergraduatenickydiaz - Jun 30, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jul 2, 2010
|My application essay on Babysitting.
4 - "It is not routine since children can be unpredictable at times." I feel like that could be reworded a...
Undergraduatetrosky2000 - Dec 21, 2009 / am80951 - Jul 1, 2010
|Personal Statement for Application to Undergraduate Bionengineering Program.
7 - Separate the 2 halves of a compound sentence with a comma: Fortunately, WPW Syndrome is one of the few...
Undergraduatespartan128 - Jun 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 1, 2010
|Advice on Personal Statement for Master's of Accounting program requested
8 - Hmmm, I just scanned this -- not even reading -- but it seems mighty more readable. Good job....
Undergraduatescubatim84 - Jun 16, 2010 / Mustafa1991 - Jul 1, 2010
|I observed an ESL class, and wrote down a journal about that.
3 - this is quite good already with ust a few areas for improvement. Oh.. I like Azeri's advice about verb...
Undergraduatesshalghom - Jun 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 29, 2010
|How and Why: understanding scientific findings
7 - I think your essay's beginning is excellent. By telling your dream of your childhood, readers could see how eager...
UndergraduateCharz - Jun 24, 2010 / cathyliu - Jun 27, 2010
|'Because we can' - Activity Short Answer
8 - it kept me interesting and was short and sweet. the sentence about work ending at 4:30 is not a...
Undergraduateraybaz - Oct 23, 2009 / Moni09 - Jun 25, 2010
|"The end depends on the beginning" - short & long term career goals
9 - alright, i like the essay, but i do not feel much emotion. admissions officers want to feela connection with...
Undergraduateimshtark - Jun 22, 2010 / Moni09 - Jun 25, 2010
|A time that I overcome problems: From Pakistan to America
3 - Only when we overcome these problems, are we able to grow up. Tracing back to three months ago,...
UndergraduateLauratwilight - Jun 24, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jun 25, 2010
|I've been shy for as long as I can remember.
4 - But a kid as shy as I was could fade into the background, unnoticed. The story about football...
UndergraduateAirSaints - Jun 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 24, 2010
|Pre-Med: Transfer my study to dentistry and change of major
6 - I had envisioned to become myself becoming a dentist because of the ____________. (add an explanation about why,...
UndergraduateTubman - Jun 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 23, 2010
|Peace Corps essay-"Describe living in a social cultural environment different.."
6 - Wonderful essay, good points made, on-topic. It's not all about the grammar but I noticed this: "As the...
Undergraduateansa0031 - Jun 21, 2010 / brucemcdon - Jun 22, 2010
|"reaching out to others has benefited me" - Peace Corps admission essay help :)
6 - Thanks Kevin! Really appreciate it. I definitely need to come up with a great inspired first sentence! :)...
Undergraduateansa0031 - Jun 16, 2010 / ansa0031 - Jun 21, 2010
|"I love to draw, create shapes and make them into works of art" - college application essay
3 - thanx Kevin,i have always been interested in art...i just want people to look at what i draw and enjoy...
Undergraduatealoemac - Jun 16, 2010 / aloemac - Jun 19, 2010
|Essay on what is important to me (people, places, music)- a concluding paragraph?
Undergraduatelatwood83 - Jun 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 19, 2010
|"Learning in the Classroom" Peace Corps Application (Cross cultural)
UndergraduatePeaceEarth - Jun 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 19, 2010
|APPLICATION FOR STATION POOL/ NC's QUARTER
2 - Respected S ir, Capitalize both words in the opening salutation. With due great respect and humble submission...
Undergraduateamethyst - Jun 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 17, 2010
|"born to and raised to Russian immigrants" - Peace Crops Essay (reasons, expect)
UndergraduatePeaceEarth - Jun 16, 2010 / PeaceEarth - Jun 17, 2010
|Essay for Texas A&M (documentary on North Korea by Lisa Ling)
Undergraduatehendhawks - Jun 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 17, 2010
|'chance to share Russian culture with other people there' - What qualities for UCF?
2 - Surrounded by the comfortable study environment of the University, I'm determined to gain a deeper knowledge both from theoretical...
UndergraduateLynnBrown - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|What are the characteristics of a good leader? (Trying to be a psychologist)
UndergraduateN2F5 - Jun 13, 2010 / N2F5 - Jun 14, 2010
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