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|My application essay on Babysitting.
4 - "It is not routine since children can be unpredictable at times." I feel like that could be reworded a...
Undergraduatetrosky2000 - Dec 21, 2009 / am80951 - Jul 1, 2010
|Personal Statement for Application to Undergraduate Bionengineering Program.
7 - Separate the 2 halves of a compound sentence with a comma: Fortunately, WPW Syndrome is one of the few...
Undergraduatespartan128 - Jun 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 1, 2010
|Advice on Personal Statement for Master's of Accounting program requested
8 - Hmmm, I just scanned this -- not even reading -- but it seems mighty more readable. Good job....
Undergraduatescubatim84 - Jun 16, 2010 / Mustafa1991 - Jul 1, 2010
|I observed an ESL class, and wrote down a journal about that.
3 - this is quite good already with ust a few areas for improvement. Oh.. I like Azeri's advice about verb...
Undergraduatesshalghom - Jun 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 29, 2010
|How and Why: understanding scientific findings
7 - I think your essay's beginning is excellent. By telling your dream of your childhood, readers could see how eager...
UndergraduateCharz - Jun 24, 2010 / cathyliu - Jun 27, 2010
|'Because we can' - Activity Short Answer
8 - it kept me interesting and was short and sweet. the sentence about work ending at 4:30 is not a...
Undergraduateraybaz - Oct 23, 2009 / Moni09 - Jun 25, 2010
|"The end depends on the beginning" - short & long term career goals
9 - alright, i like the essay, but i do not feel much emotion. admissions officers want to feela connection with...
Undergraduateimshtark - Jun 22, 2010 / Moni09 - Jun 25, 2010
|A time that I overcome problems: From Pakistan to America
3 - Only when we overcome these problems, are we able to grow up. Tracing back to three months ago,...
UndergraduateLauratwilight - Jun 24, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jun 25, 2010
|I've been shy for as long as I can remember.
4 - But a kid as shy as I was could fade into the background, unnoticed. The story about football...
UndergraduateAirSaints - Jun 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 24, 2010
|Pre-Med: Transfer my study to dentistry and change of major
6 - I had envisioned to become myself becoming a dentist because of the ____________. (add an explanation about why,...
UndergraduateTubman - Jun 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 23, 2010
|Peace Corps essay-"Describe living in a social cultural environment different.."
6 - Wonderful essay, good points made, on-topic. It's not all about the grammar but I noticed this: "As the...
Undergraduateansa0031 - Jun 21, 2010 / brucemcdon - Jun 22, 2010
|"reaching out to others has benefited me" - Peace Corps admission essay help :)
6 - Thanks Kevin! Really appreciate it. I definitely need to come up with a great inspired first sentence! :)...
Undergraduateansa0031 - Jun 16, 2010 / ansa0031 - Jun 21, 2010
|"I love to draw, create shapes and make them into works of art" - college application essay
3 - thanx Kevin,i have always been interested in art...i just want people to look at what i draw and enjoy...
Undergraduatealoemac - Jun 16, 2010 / aloemac - Jun 19, 2010
|Essay on what is important to me (people, places, music)- a concluding paragraph?
Undergraduatelatwood83 - Jun 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 19, 2010
|"Learning in the Classroom" Peace Corps Application (Cross cultural)
UndergraduatePeaceEarth - Jun 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 19, 2010
|Relate your interest in studying at Georgetown to your goals -my Georgetown Essay!
Undergraduatealexla - Jun 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 19, 2010
|APPLICATION FOR STATION POOL/ NC's QUARTER
2 - Respected S ir, Capitalize both words in the opening salutation. With due great respect and humble submission...
Undergraduateamethyst - Jun 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 17, 2010
|"born to and raised to Russian immigrants" - Peace Crops Essay (reasons, expect)
UndergraduatePeaceEarth - Jun 16, 2010 / PeaceEarth - Jun 17, 2010
|Essay for Texas A&M (documentary on North Korea by Lisa Ling)
Undergraduatehendhawks - Jun 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 17, 2010
|'chance to share Russian culture with other people there' - What qualities for UCF?
2 - Surrounded by the comfortable study environment of the University, I'm determined to gain a deeper knowledge both from theoretical...
UndergraduateLynnBrown - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|What are the characteristics of a good leader? (Trying to be a psychologist)
UndergraduateN2F5 - Jun 13, 2010 / N2F5 - Jun 14, 2010
|Brown Supplement- What don't I know?
Undergraduatekennethkcy - Jun 9, 2010 / kennethkcy - Jun 13, 2010
|"the Redbud Literature Honors Society" - common app short answer
3 - Thank you for your critiques.This a correction:150 words or fewer. As for the end point,Kevin's suggestions seem good.I think...
Undergraduatesezrenei - Jun 12, 2010 / sezrenei - Jun 13, 2010
|SOP for undergrad mechanical engineering "How Things Work"
4 - Here is a way to establish your main idea and then end the first paragraph. Ever since childhood...
Undergraduatehrishikesh - Jun 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 13, 2010
|"the joys of being an architect" - My Essay for Columbia University
Undergraduatejalisa1211 - May 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2010
|"the present-day world is an open world" - UCF bump in the road essay
2 - Add one sentence after this sentence to show that you moved BECAUSE of "a desire to participate in...
UndergraduateLynnBrown - Jun 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2010
|Obstacle + unique quality (dentist) - UCF Essay, give me any suggestions!
Undergraduatekicker20 - Dec 9, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|Growing up who was my childhood Hero (My Uncle)
6 - It definitely makes sense, and you have a nice way of expressing yourself. The transitions between paragraphs are nonexistent,...
Undergraduatejaneypooh - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|My Story So Far + Life's Surprise - Essay for transfer student
3 - I was constantly being mentored by older family members and friends of family. My choices were always pre-determined,...
UndergraduateDaimyo21 - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 9, 2010
|"To Be Continued" - personal info considered as part of admission application
Undergraduateticktock - Jun 6, 2010 / ticktock - Jun 9, 2010
|My academic performance when I was a sophomore.(Not more than 500 words)
8 - Thank you, I need not to review my English books anymore but recharge my mobile phone and log in...
UndergraduateCharz - Jun 5, 2010 / Charz - Jun 7, 2010
|'bike race' - U of Chicago - How did you get caught?
UndergraduateCruud - May 31, 2010 / srandhawa - Jun 7, 2010
|"If honored to count myself among a future Peace Corps members" -Peace Corp Essay
2 - You write very well! We are lucky to have people like you who are wicked smart and also committed...
Undergraduatemcooks1 - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|What can you contribute to SPP? "Helping others"
6 - Umm, how can shoes be made FROM Malayasia? First point. Global community is putting YOUR spin on the...
Undergraduateenou9044 - May 31, 2010 / Vakax - Jun 5, 2010
|"Msc. Economic History", I am starting from scratch
9 - Keep that verb tense consistent: "At the root of my desire to study economic history lie the controversies and...
Undergraduateindconservative - May 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 4, 2010
|UConn Transfer Admission Essay- regarding academic goals and reasons for leaving
2 - Since taking an AP Environmental Science in my senior year of high school, I realized through my uncertainty of...
Undergraduatemkem100 - Jun 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 4, 2010
|Engineering: Essay about my favorite subject
4 - Of all my classes and clubs, engineering is my favorite part of the day. One reason I like it...
Undergraduatechupacabravd - Jun 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 3, 2010
|"My mathematics teacher" - A person who has a significant influence in my life.
4 - Everyone is affected by certain events or individuals that greatly change their life. Many people have influenced me in...
Undergraduateesayas_edu - May 30, 2010 / esayas_edu - Jun 3, 2010
|My Essay For Admissions [ THE ART INSTITUTE OF CHARLOTTE ]
UndergraduateCouture - May 29, 2010 / Couture - Jun 2, 2010
|"a love for science" - Statement of Purpose
Undergraduatetep186 - May 31, 2010 / Charz - Jun 2, 2010
|'I lost confidence in myself'; Difficulty making an important decision
2 - Hi Shalini, I'd like to give you specific, granular feedback on this essay, but my biggest issue is...
Undergraduateshalini singh - Jun 1, 2010 / ivyeyesediting - Jun 2, 2010
|Advertising major: Finally decided what to be when I grow up
4 - Haha good advice Mackenzie, That depends on whether or not you stay inspired, whether or not you...
Undergraduatebostonbaab - May 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|Appeal essay for pharm (NUS)
4 - Thanks Mackenzie, you are awesome. Here is one more improvement to make: Ever since I was introduced to...
Undergraduatepharmgal - May 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|"I work harder for me and only me" - Michigan State University
19 - I like this essay, it is well written but could be improved. The second part of the question isn't...
UndergraduateEssays1010 - Apr 20, 2010 / Cruud - May 31, 2010
|What skills do you expect to gain from studying at INSEAD
Undergraduatebecnil - May 30, 2010 / becnil - May 31, 2010
|Describe a situation taken from school, business, civil or military life.
Undergraduatebecnil - May 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 31, 2010
|appeal into faculty of arts and social science
Undergraduatepeonykiss - May 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 31, 2010
|Multinational student body / national diversification - personal statement
5 - "Another reason to seek admission is the university's multinational student body. That is very important to me, because I...
Undergraduatekleek - May 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
|How to write an appeal for Science course NUS?
5 - The important thing to do is follow their instructions. If they provide guidelines for writing the appeal, follow them....
Undergraduatealdokevin - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
|Appeal Essay for Science Course
5 - Since u explained about chemistry in past tense,i guess the following should also b in past tense. This...
Undergraduatebumbledebee - May 26, 2010 / jensy - May 30, 2010
|Education: Essay regarding "Issue of personal importance to you"
2 - Here is a run on sentence: My fear of studies grew with each passing day; I distinctly remember the...
Undergraduatehellstrider - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 28, 2010
|"Being immersed in a different culture" - Essay for Admission to UF
4 - Many kids have to move from state to state, school to school, or even just to a new neighborhood,...
UndergraduateSalib - May 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 27, 2010
|I need help with my essay. I am trying to apply for the Art Institute of NY
3 - I wonder if college can even keep up with the changes in technology. You can probably learn even...
UndergraduateKca171 - May 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 27, 2010
|Entrance of Pharmacy School Essay (need to make briefer)
Undergraduateladylao - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|Admission Appeal - NUS for Information System course
4 - Don't forget that college is a business, and they have other considerations besides whether or not you deserve to...
Undergraduatelittlegirl88 - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|Only by undergoing the trials and challenges of human affairs.
4 - XXXXX XXXXXX said, "Only by undergoing the trials and challenges of human affairs do we become strong and resilient."...
Undergraduateakifang - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|"The Perfect Girl is no dream, no illusion" - Common Application
8 - The most common trap that everyone falls for is the use of "...that brings out your individuality" in an...
UndergraduateShadow93 - May 12, 2010 / Vakax - May 24, 2010
|Memories of a teacher from elementary school.
2 - Hi Comments: Try to have less about the general statements about teachers in the beginning unless you...
Undergraduateshalini singh - May 22, 2010 / meisj0n - May 22, 2010
|'Writing that haiku' - Pomona Supplement - Fun activity
6 - At 2:00 a.m., four friends and I packed our bags and set out toward [name of school] high school....
Undergraduategumdrop41 - Dec 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2010
|Texas App. Essay About Open Mindedness
Undergraduatepinkpoodle - May 17, 2010 / pinkpoodle - May 21, 2010
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