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|Brown Supplement- What don't I know?
Undergraduatekennethkcy - Jun 9, 2010 / kennethkcy - Jun 13, 2010
|"the Redbud Literature Honors Society" - common app short answer
3 - Thank you for your critiques.This a correction:150 words or fewer. As for the end point,Kevin's suggestions seem good.I think...
Undergraduatesezrenei - Jun 12, 2010 / sezrenei - Jun 13, 2010
|SOP for undergrad mechanical engineering "How Things Work"
4 - Here is a way to establish your main idea and then end the first paragraph. Ever since childhood...
Undergraduatehrishikesh - Jun 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 13, 2010
|"the joys of being an architect" - My Essay for Columbia University
Undergraduatejalisa1211 - May 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2010
|"the present-day world is an open world" - UCF bump in the road essay
2 - Add one sentence after this sentence to show that you moved BECAUSE of "a desire to participate in...
UndergraduateLynnBrown - Jun 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2010
|Obstacle + unique quality (dentist) - UCF Essay, give me any suggestions!
Undergraduatekicker20 - Dec 9, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|Growing up who was my childhood Hero (My Uncle)
6 - It definitely makes sense, and you have a nice way of expressing yourself. The transitions between paragraphs are nonexistent,...
Undergraduatejaneypooh - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|My Story So Far + Life's Surprise - Essay for transfer student
3 - I was constantly being mentored by older family members and friends of family. My choices were always pre-determined,...
UndergraduateDaimyo21 - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 9, 2010
|"To Be Continued" - personal info considered as part of admission application
Undergraduateticktock - Jun 6, 2010 / ticktock - Jun 9, 2010
|My academic performance when I was a sophomore.(Not more than 500 words)
8 - Thank you, I need not to review my English books anymore but recharge my mobile phone and log in...
UndergraduateCharz - Jun 5, 2010 / Charz - Jun 7, 2010
|'bike race' - U of Chicago - How did you get caught?
UndergraduateCruud - May 31, 2010 / srandhawa - Jun 7, 2010
|"If honored to count myself among a future Peace Corps members" -Peace Corp Essay
2 - You write very well! We are lucky to have people like you who are wicked smart and also committed...
Undergraduatemcooks1 - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|What can you contribute to SPP? "Helping others"
6 - Umm, how can shoes be made FROM Malayasia? First point. Global community is putting YOUR spin on the...
Undergraduateenou9044 - May 31, 2010 / Vakax - Jun 5, 2010
|"Msc. Economic History", I am starting from scratch
9 - Keep that verb tense consistent: "At the root of my desire to study economic history lie the controversies and...
Undergraduateindconservative - May 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 4, 2010
|UConn Transfer Admission Essay- regarding academic goals and reasons for leaving
2 - Since taking an AP Environmental Science in my senior year of high school, I realized through my uncertainty of...
Undergraduatemkem100 - Jun 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 4, 2010
|Engineering: Essay about my favorite subject
4 - Of all my classes and clubs, engineering is my favorite part of the day. One reason I like it...
Undergraduatechupacabravd - Jun 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 3, 2010
|"My mathematics teacher" - A person who has a significant influence in my life.
4 - Everyone is affected by certain events or individuals that greatly change their life. Many people have influenced me in...
Undergraduateesayas_edu - May 30, 2010 / esayas_edu - Jun 3, 2010
|'I lost confidence in myself'; Difficulty making an important decision
5 - Thanks Kevin, Will chop up my first paragraph and will see if it achieves what is expected for...
Undergraduateshalini singh - Jun 1, 2010 / shalini singh - Jun 2, 2010
|My Essay For Admissions [ THE ART INSTITUTE OF CHARLOTTE ]
UndergraduateCouture - May 29, 2010 / Couture - Jun 2, 2010
|"a love for science" - Statement of Purpose
Undergraduatetep186 - May 31, 2010 / Charz - Jun 2, 2010
|Advertising major: Finally decided what to be when I grow up
4 - Haha good advice Mackenzie, That depends on whether or not you stay inspired, whether or not you...
Undergraduatebostonbaab - May 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|Appeal essay for pharm (NUS)
4 - Thanks Mackenzie, you are awesome. Here is one more improvement to make: Ever since I was introduced to...
Undergraduatepharmgal - May 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|"I work harder for me and only me" - Michigan State University
19 - I like this essay, it is well written but could be improved. The second part of the question isn't...
UndergraduateEssays1010 - Apr 20, 2010 / Cruud - May 31, 2010
|What skills do you expect to gain from studying at INSEAD
Undergraduatebecnil - May 30, 2010 / becnil - May 31, 2010
|Describe a situation taken from school, business, civil or military life.
Undergraduatebecnil - May 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 31, 2010
|appeal into faculty of arts and social science
Undergraduatepeonykiss - May 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 31, 2010
|Multinational student body / national diversification - personal statement
5 - "Another reason to seek admission is the university's multinational student body. That is very important to me, because I...
Undergraduatekleek - May 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
|How to write an appeal for Science course NUS?
5 - The important thing to do is follow their instructions. If they provide guidelines for writing the appeal, follow them....
Undergraduatealdokevin - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
|Appeal Essay for Science Course
5 - Since u explained about chemistry in past tense,i guess the following should also b in past tense. This...
Undergraduatebumbledebee - May 26, 2010 / jensy - May 30, 2010
|Education: Essay regarding "Issue of personal importance to you"
2 - Here is a run on sentence: My fear of studies grew with each passing day; I distinctly remember the...
Undergraduatehellstrider - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 28, 2010
|"Being immersed in a different culture" - Essay for Admission to UF
4 - Many kids have to move from state to state, school to school, or even just to a new neighborhood,...
UndergraduateSalib - May 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 27, 2010
|I need help with my essay. I am trying to apply for the Art Institute of NY
3 - I wonder if college can even keep up with the changes in technology. You can probably learn even...
UndergraduateKca171 - May 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 27, 2010
|Entrance of Pharmacy School Essay (need to make briefer)
Undergraduateladylao - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|Admission Appeal - NUS for Information System course
4 - Don't forget that college is a business, and they have other considerations besides whether or not you deserve to...
Undergraduatelittlegirl88 - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|Only by undergoing the trials and challenges of human affairs.
4 - XXXXX XXXXXX said, "Only by undergoing the trials and challenges of human affairs do we become strong and resilient."...
Undergraduateakifang - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|"The Perfect Girl is no dream, no illusion" - Common Application
8 - The most common trap that everyone falls for is the use of "...that brings out your individuality" in an...
UndergraduateShadow93 - May 12, 2010 / Vakax - May 24, 2010
|Memories of a teacher from elementary school.
5 - Well, if wanting it to be specifically stated like that, you must attempt to rewrite your conclusion. For what...
Undergraduateshalini singh - May 22, 2010 / triplesmickey - May 23, 2010
|'Writing that haiku' - Pomona Supplement - Fun activity
6 - At 2:00 a.m., four friends and I packed our bags and set out toward [name of school] high school....
Undergraduategumdrop41 - Dec 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2010
|Texas App. Essay About Open Mindedness
Undergraduatepinkpoodle - May 17, 2010 / pinkpoodle - May 21, 2010
|Peace Corps Admissions Essay, reasons for wanting to serve
Undergraduatebsquared - May 19, 2010 / bsquared - May 20, 2010
|Course about which i had expectation which may not have been met
3 - steel steal It is quoted by A famous quotation of Theodore Roosevelt reads, "Those who have... ...
Undergraduateshalini singh - May 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 19, 2010
|Texas App. Essay About Family
Undergraduatepinkpoodle - May 17, 2010 / pinkpoodle - May 18, 2010
|"I will be myself" - Describe the enviroment in which you were brought up.
3 - This has to be all one sentence: I am six foot seven inches tall, two hundred and twenty pounds,...
UndergraduateRShemanski - May 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 17, 2010
|"to save people's life" - what are your goals
8 - Awesome, yes! I'm glad it helped. Now you can use your advanced understanding to help other people here, if...
Undergraduatenatacha - May 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
|"My oldest, deepest, most entrenched memories" UC Prompt #1 response
3 - ...and I cannot fathom, not even for a moment, from then on, turning my head away from this aspect...
UndergraduateLostAllways - May 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2010
|School - the place where I like to visit again and again and still has influence on me
6 - Yes, excellent! I think it is even better, and the action of "influence" is intensified. Good call. I...
Undergraduateshalini singh - May 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2010
|Reflect on a challenge you overcame through persistence (two ideas, one to pick)
6 - I totally agree with you.That's what i was thinking when they assigned it but i think it's to...
UndergraduateMeron243 - Apr 28, 2010 / Meron243 - May 12, 2010
|Qualities which were inspirational for me of a person .
Undergraduateshalini singh - May 10, 2010 / shalini singh - May 12, 2010
|Appeal for admission to SMU as a polytechnic student
5 - I wish to thank you for taking the time to... hmmm... actually, I was going to suggest cutting out...
Undergraduatehellstrider - May 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 12, 2010
|Application Essay (Journalism)
4 - AUC - The American University in Cairo I appreciate your reply, I'll be sure to edit this again...
UndergraduateAreebAlSh - May 10, 2010 / AreebAlSh - May 11, 2010
|About me in 10 years... | Temple University Transfer | Admission Essay
9 - LOL, Kevin! Love the Mr. Miyagi image, and I find it very apropos. Loku--I believe the biggest challenge...
Undergraduateloku - May 5, 2010 / ivyeyesediting - May 10, 2010
|What are your career goals? (to obtain a bachelors degree)
3 - That is a great idea! I also was thinking about this: ...believe that the ABC scholarship is the opportunity...
UndergraduateIzuchukwu - May 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 10, 2010
|Building a Team - Personal Statement
Undergraduatemisterkevinsun - May 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 10, 2010
|Radiography: MCPHS Transfer Admission Essay
Undergraduateaaysha789 - May 4, 2010 / aaysha789 - May 9, 2010
|to do a "Service" that would be beneficial for the society, Personal Essay Help
UndergraduateSS10 - May 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 8, 2010
|Disappointments in Life; 'never lose infinite hope'
Undergraduateshalini singh - May 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 8, 2010
|Transfer Essay to Fordham University
3 - Not very impressive! I have read this far, and I am thinking, "Hmmmmm.... then she probably does not...
UndergraduateKEM1217 - May 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 8, 2010
|Cbest Essay on US becoming spectators.
7 - For a nice style, use another dash like this: U.S. is becoming a nation of spectators--people who prefer to...
Undergraduateshalini singh - Apr 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 4, 2010
|"I learned to face the challenge" - Transfer common app. essay
8 - Well, yes, this would sound stiff and boring because it is so plain and obvious and.. like.. general....
Undergraduatesjs_gem - Apr 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 3, 2010
|Why do I want to become a nurse? essay- school admission.
5 - My dream on becoming a nurse was highly influenced by my mother. Her The compassionate, warmth, and determination to...
Undergraduatevibe - Apr 29, 2010 / alswn95 - May 1, 2010
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