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|Peace Corps Admissions Essay, reasons for wanting to serve
Undergraduatebsquared - May 19, 2010 / bsquared - May 20, 2010
|Course about which i had expectation which may not have been met
3 - steel steal It is quoted by A famous quotation of Theodore Roosevelt reads, "Those who have... ...
Undergraduateshalini singh - May 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 19, 2010
|Texas App. Essay About Family
Undergraduatepinkpoodle - May 17, 2010 / pinkpoodle - May 18, 2010
|"I will be myself" - Describe the enviroment in which you were brought up.
3 - This has to be all one sentence: I am six foot seven inches tall, two hundred and twenty pounds,...
UndergraduateRShemanski - May 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 17, 2010
|"to save people's life" - what are your goals
8 - Awesome, yes! I'm glad it helped. Now you can use your advanced understanding to help other people here, if...
Undergraduatenatacha - May 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
|"My oldest, deepest, most entrenched memories" UC Prompt #1 response
3 - ...and I cannot fathom, not even for a moment, from then on, turning my head away from this aspect...
UndergraduateLostAllways - May 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2010
|School - the place where I like to visit again and again and still has influence on me
6 - Yes, excellent! I think it is even better, and the action of "influence" is intensified. Good call. I...
Undergraduateshalini singh - May 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2010
|Reflect on a challenge you overcame through persistence (two ideas, one to pick)
6 - I totally agree with you.That's what i was thinking when they assigned it but i think it's to...
UndergraduateMeron243 - Apr 28, 2010 / Meron243 - May 12, 2010
|Qualities which were inspirational for me of a person .
Undergraduateshalini singh - May 10, 2010 / shalini singh - May 12, 2010
|Appeal for admission to SMU as a polytechnic student
5 - I wish to thank you for taking the time to... hmmm... actually, I was going to suggest cutting out...
Undergraduatehellstrider - May 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 12, 2010
|Application Essay (Journalism)
4 - AUC - The American University in Cairo I appreciate your reply, I'll be sure to edit this again...
UndergraduateAreebAlSh - May 10, 2010 / AreebAlSh - May 11, 2010
|About me in 10 years... | Temple University Transfer | Admission Essay
9 - LOL, Kevin! Love the Mr. Miyagi image, and I find it very apropos. Loku--I believe the biggest challenge...
Undergraduateloku - May 5, 2010 / ivyeyesediting - May 10, 2010
|What are your career goals? (to obtain a bachelors degree)
3 - That is a great idea! I also was thinking about this: ...believe that the ABC scholarship is the opportunity...
UndergraduateIzuchukwu - May 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 10, 2010
|Building a Team - Personal Statement
Undergraduatemisterkevinsun - May 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 10, 2010
|Radiography: MCPHS Transfer Admission Essay
Undergraduateaaysha789 - May 4, 2010 / aaysha789 - May 9, 2010
|to do a "Service" that would be beneficial for the society, Personal Essay Help
UndergraduateSS10 - May 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 8, 2010
|Disappointments in Life; 'never lose infinite hope'
Undergraduateshalini singh - May 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 8, 2010
|Transfer Essay to Fordham University
3 - Not very impressive! I have read this far, and I am thinking, "Hmmmmm.... then she probably does not...
UndergraduateKEM1217 - May 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 8, 2010
|Cbest Essay on US becoming spectators.
7 - For a nice style, use another dash like this: U.S. is becoming a nation of spectators--people who prefer to...
Undergraduateshalini singh - Apr 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 4, 2010
|"I learned to face the challenge" - Transfer common app. essay
8 - Well, yes, this would sound stiff and boring because it is so plain and obvious and.. like.. general....
Undergraduatesjs_gem - Apr 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 3, 2010
|Why do I want to become a nurse? essay- school admission.
5 - My dream on becoming a nurse was highly influenced by my mother. Her The compassionate, warmth, and determination to...
Undergraduatevibe - Apr 29, 2010 / alswn95 - May 1, 2010
|"I have no health insurance" - Transfer Essay E- Important Issue
12 - Making a reference to the United Kingdom's National Health Service would make for a good comparison. I know Obama...
UndergraduateGeorge Smith - Apr 21, 2010 / Gooner - May 1, 2010
|Attempt the impossible in order to improve your work" - my motivation essay
UndergraduateMarikosan - Apr 26, 2010 / Marikosan - Apr 30, 2010
|"love and passion for learning" - Wait-list letter...
4 - Some small suggestions for you to consider if they work as improvements: (IMHO): Joined your second...
Undergraduate2010trans - Apr 27, 2010 / linmark - Apr 30, 2010
|Peace Corps motivational essay (why you are interested in joining the Peace Corp
Undergraduateklena225 - Apr 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 28, 2010
|Becoming a Cardiovascular Surgeon - VCU Personal Statement Help
3 - Great, great advice here from Faisal. I would do something like this to get rid of that "extra" stuff...
Undergraduatejojo_robby21210 - Apr 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 28, 2010
|"I liked constructions of every kind"; Civil Engineering Academic objectives
5 - When I say you should express yourself in fewer words, I don't mean you should make the essay shorter....
Undergraduatejazzmeen - Apr 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 27, 2010
|Assistance with: Common App Influential Figure Essay
5 - Aww, thanks! I really appreciate it! You're amazzingggggg! Thank you so much for all your incredible input!...
UndergraduateAndreuphoria - Apr 9, 2010 / Andreuphoria - Apr 26, 2010
|Essay MSc management (developing the economy of my country)
UndergraduatePolly888 - Apr 23, 2010 / Polly888 - Apr 25, 2010
|Admission Essay to U of M for Computer Science. Any suggestions?
2 - Take away th boring sentences, and start with the interesting ones: I took my first programming course in high...
Undergraduateelusivex - Apr 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2010
|ADMISSION ESSAY TO PSYCHOLOGY PROGRAM (in a university in HK)
2 - Change is an inevitable stumbling block that every successful being would stumble must cross at some point during his/her...
Undergraduatejoannayl - Apr 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 23, 2010
|Ut Austin Essay B (Poverty and Education)
UndergraduateBignasty36 - Feb 23, 2010 / Notoman - Apr 23, 2010
|Interest in transferring - What I felt I was always missing
3 - ...includes the aforementioned university experience and the future graduate opportunities. Recently, I visited my ... To my surprise,...
Undergraduatermarin - Apr 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 22, 2010
|an undergraduate dance course - personal statement
3 - commas: I love to dance for an audience, giving them everything I have, and in return I wait for...
Undergraduatestacey - Apr 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 22, 2010
|University of Illinois, Psychology undergrad: Academic Interests and Prof. Goals
Undergraduateklusterfunk - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 22, 2010
|I hated writing with a passion - UF Admissions Essay
Undergraduateregistered99 - Oct 26, 2008 / registered99 - Apr 21, 2010
|Waitlist letter to washington university st.louis
3 - you definitely want to introduce yourself here, also washu is big on interest, EFkevin nailed this, show something specific...
Undergraduateheyyy - Apr 15, 2010 / srandhawa - Apr 21, 2010
|Page 87 of your autobiography - VCU Essay ('Remember me')
2 - What a great essay! You're a very good writer! The feeling of holding that camera for the first...
UndergraduateSabotagedSubjec - Apr 20, 2010 / EF_Susan - Apr 21, 2010
|Help with Essay on the movie L.A. Confidential.
Undergraduategambia5000 - Apr 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 21, 2010
|Convincing admissions essay for Cleveland Institute of Art: He
4 - Be strategic. I don't think this has a good function: At the age of eighteen, I couldn't exactly tell...
Undergraduatemattthew - Apr 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2010
|LOSING A FRIEND TRANSFER UNDERGRADUATE ADMISSION ESSAY
3 - The start is rather weak. The feeling of losing a dear one is painful.To lose your best friend is...
Undergraduateunique01 - Apr 15, 2010 / Vakax - Apr 20, 2010
|Career goals: see the side of things you never expected to see
4 - This was like the film adaptation of "The DaVinci Code" - Completely pointless. You are about to embark...
Undergraduateasdflskdfjalskj - Apr 18, 2010 / Vakax - Apr 20, 2010
|Tell us something about yourself - your present and future goals
6 - Tell us something about yourself-your present & future goals and how PBAU fits * Tell us something about...
Undergraduatesellysel - Apr 8, 2010 / Jasel - Apr 18, 2010
|Engineering: Outlining reasons about why I've decided to apply for college
3 - The world of engineering has always fascinated me (Replace this sentence wth a sentence you might say to your...
Undergraduatetheband4life - Apr 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 18, 2010
|How will IIT prepare you to be a positive contributor to the world?
5 - I don't understand the part about asking God to create you. Do you mean "recreate you" or "create you...
Undergraduatemontes999 - Apr 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 18, 2010
|My Vision Of Pakistan, essay to a college. Constructive criticism.
2 - no comma necessary here: realized that activity ... This is such an impressive sentence!! These university-going, lower middle...
UndergraduateSafiullah - Apr 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 17, 2010
|Trying to get accepted into an ACT Academy
12 - Hey TinaMarie! You are great!!! Don't be so formal. Don't afraid of BIG GUYS. We are people. Feel free....
UndergraduateTinaMarie - Apr 12, 2010 / montes999 - Apr 17, 2010
|"what makes you a unique individual" - Transfer Essay to UCONN
NEW - Afternoon, I plan on transferring to the University of Connecticut Storrs; this transfer essay means more then I...
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|National Honors Society Long Essay, commited to qualities, for review
3 - Visiting and ----> organizing: Examples include visiting nursing homes and organizing food drives. Hi Amanda, you obviously write...
Undergraduateisabella246 - Apr 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 16, 2010
|"an artist's mind" - SCAD Statement of Purpose
2 - Tim did such a thorough job, I can hardly find anything to correct... Here is something I can...
Undergraduatemariagaston - Apr 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2010
|SOP - The reasons to choose the university: employment upon graduation
UndergraduateBeena - Apr 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2010
|bump in the road personal life/why did you choose ucf
3 - Cool, LibraryLover, thanks for all the time you spent with this! Use apostrophes: just because he wasn't here...
Undergraduatejvan - Apr 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 11, 2010
|An essay for Harvard Leadership Conference for Taiwanese students
3 - As I heard the lepers vividly share their tragic stories with tears, a burden was placed in my heart,...
Undergraduates61001234 - Apr 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2010
|'Why I want to go the university essay' (Yale)
UndergraduateUPennHopeful - Apr 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2010
|(Leadership experiences) University of Washington Undergraduate Business school
4 - this is good however I highly suggest changing the syntax and style of this. it is very basic and...
Undergraduatehmoon55 - Apr 4, 2010 / blueskies - Apr 9, 2010
|what are the threats technology has imposed on modern life?
2 - You can add Technology can isolate people For example, though facebook facilitates us to communicate with our friends...
Undergraduateyuvly - Apr 8, 2010 / s61001234 - Apr 8, 2010
|"My Mother" - she will always be by my side.
9 - Your essay has the meaning. I really think that the essay needs to be a little more captivating and...
Undergraduateyahyabluecat - Mar 20, 2010 / UPennHopeful - Apr 8, 2010
|Writing about my passion for computer science
5 - you wrote a very nice, mind-boggling personal statement that I believe it will strengthen your application much ! I...
Undergraduategeorgexu316 - Mar 28, 2010 / getitlow - Apr 6, 2010
|"support and guidance" family history, culture or environment influenced who you are?
4 - My mother and father both have there masters degrees and want nothing more than for their children to succeed...
Undergraduatexojlc442xo - Apr 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2010
|the game art and design degree - Need a little help with an Entry essay
5 - How long is this essay supposed to be? I think each of your sentences should be the topic sentence...
UndergraduateWolfy2449 - Apr 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2010
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