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|"geology that involves engineering applications" - statement of purpose
Undergraduateshadow - Feb 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2010
|Students Helping Honduras - William and Mary Re-open Transfer Statement
3 - This is pretty great! Let's get rd of the second comma in this sentence: After taking a semester of...
Undergraduateimjordon - Feb 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2010
|"environment design", Cornell transfer- reasons for transferring and objectives
3 - This makes me wonder what was lacking. It makes me want to know about some realization you had,...
Undergraduatequan - Feb 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2010
|"making video games" - your education at the ai to help you attain career goals
3 - I want to be involved in and surrounded by activities associated with game designing. ----- are you sure? some...
Undergraduatechuck - Feb 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2010
|"want the real college experience" - University of Texas SOP Transfer
3 - This sentence above is a little awkward on the attention, but aside from that, your essay is SO...
Undergraduatemilkiberry - Feb 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2010
|"a better insight into life at BU" - any other ideas?
8 - This is a good place to use one of those powerful, short phrases after a semi-colon: It was 30...
Undergraduaterbu19 - Feb 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2010
|UIUC "doing hard things can make people better" - extracurricular activity
Undergraduateblackbird - Feb 26, 2010 / fznfire - Mar 1, 2010
|The apocalypse, or judgment day - Help For essay sample Northwest University
9 - The concluding sentence in your first paragraph does not tie in to the essay's last concluding sentence: The best...
UndergraduateAngevil91 - Feb 9, 2010 / linmark - Mar 1, 2010
|"the first one in my family to attend a university" - Common App Essay
Undergraduateusmany01 - Feb 21, 2010 / usmany01 - Mar 1, 2010
|Elaborate on one of your activites(extracurricular, personal activities,or work)
3 - Very interesting idea! I hope the admissions person who reads this essay is able to appreciate your contemplative...
Undergraduatelnwhited - Feb 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2010
|Letter of Appeal to University of Florida (I was not approved)
3 - your in a tough spot, appeals almost never work, but i'd get some advice from your counselor or someboy...
Undergraduatehollyn91 - Feb 27, 2010 / srandhawa - Feb 28, 2010
|To bring forth excellence one must seek opportunity and recognize it; Peace Corps volunteer
2 - I think this sentence above should be your first sentence. All the stuff before it surely comes from...
Undergraduatemathewsgr - Feb 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2010
|Oberlin Supplement: Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass...
6 - inquire doesn't seem right - did you mean ACQUIRE the sun? I agree with Naveen that you should...
UndergraduateRandyhl - Feb 19, 2010 / linmark - Feb 28, 2010
|University of Virginia - Dinner with Three People: Who and Why?
Undergraduateurbanoutfitters - Feb 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2010
|Statement of purpose for PhD Philosophy
Undergraduatetubi34 - Feb 26, 2010 / tubi34 - Feb 28, 2010
|"never giving up" - Purdue essay. best advice
Undergraduatepurplespongy22 - Feb 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2010
|Interested in business, University of illinois: your academic interests or goals
6 - Well, my suggestion is not necessarily the best thing to do, but it is good to use paragraphs. I...
Undergraduateblackbird - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2010
|"being a fashion magazine editor" - FIT essay
Undergraduatecrossxhearts - Feb 23, 2010 / crossxhearts - Feb 27, 2010
|"my culture in Kazakhstan" - Dealing with diverse cultures (250 word limit)
4 - We can make this beginning more efficient: When growing up in a certain environment for so long, it is...
UndergraduateJenny_ - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 27, 2010
|Describe a significant choice that you had to make, discuss the consequences...
UndergraduateVexill - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 27, 2010
|Great desire to live abroad; AUBG- Broaden Global Perspecitve
Undergraduatestyflex - Feb 25, 2010 / styflex - Feb 27, 2010
|"Ethiopian child didn't have the most orthodox introduction to American culture"
7 - I know what you mean! That's the same with my writing. Please go help some other people with their...
Undergraduateroadwarrior17 - Feb 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 27, 2010
|Interdisciplinary Humanities, U OF SAN DIEGO Transfer Student Personal Statement
5 - Kevin, Thank you so much for your feedback.My insecurity about my application due on Monday has been alleviated. I...
Undergraduatehellokitty930 - Feb 24, 2010 / hellokitty930 - Feb 27, 2010
|"Something not relevant from academic record" - Adelphi Essay
Undergraduatecrossxhearts - Feb 23, 2010 / crossxhearts - Feb 27, 2010
|"why I want to be a nurse?" - Nursing school admissions essay
2 - Your first sentence is good, but you should add 3 more sentences after it and then do a paragraph...
Undergraduatehollylopez - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|Psychology Undergrad: Work Experience as Laser tech
4 - You have an incomplete sentence here: Like most other kids from the 80's, I had an almost mystical fascination...
Undergraduateklusterfunk - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|interest in interactive media - University Entrance Essay
3 - I have always loved to see photography and visual communication combined with interactive media. It is a lovely...
UndergraduateTrusTfmnp - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|"Having a child made me a better person"- meaningful experience, FAMU admissions
Undergraduatetbrown11190 - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|"the communist reality" - University of Texas: Statement of Purpose
4 - Thanks for the advice Jen. I see I definitely need to work on answering the prompt, like I said...
UndergraduateVeta - Feb 24, 2010 / Veta - Feb 25, 2010
|"ready to return to my learning state of mind" - SCAD STATEMENT OF PURPOSE
5 - I changed most of the mistakes already and already turned in my statement. Thanks guys! This is a...
Undergraduaterichk - Feb 11, 2010 / richk - Feb 25, 2010
|What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT(FASHION MERCHANDISE MANAGEMENT-B.A) ?
2 - During my flight to New York in winter of 2007, I was excitedly dreaming about my future as a...
Undergraduateappleschool - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
|A stepping stone: Transfer Student for the Common Application (Emerson College)
6 - you're welcome! Now, if you have a few minutes, go help a few other people on the "Unanswered" list...
Undergraduategber371 - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
|Marine Biology program, University of NC at Wilmington essay admissions question
2 - When someone is really inspired about something, their ideas have a kind of freshness and a compelling quality...
Undergraduateamk74 - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
|How to write SoP for a Design University
UndergraduateVIVIAN87 - Feb 18, 2010 / VIVIAN87 - Feb 25, 2010
|admission essay on academic interests AND extracurricular activity
2 - Yes! The thing to do is express your ideas differently for each school. Enjoy the process of expressing your...
Undergraduatepmek - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
|Rice Transfer Supplement - What perspective can you contribute?
7 - It's a bold claim you make at the start... that you now understand human emotions. Maybe solution is...
Undergraduatekevinchen00723 - Feb 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
|'Encyclopedia books' - UIUC tranfer (Academic interests/professional goal)
4 - Encyclopedia books account for one type. I spent large amount of time reading them when I was young. The...
Undergraduateduduj - Feb 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
|"the ability to lead" - My statement of purpose for UT
7 - Well, after taking into consideration what you guys have told me along with what the writng center here has...
Undergraduatebradm09 - Feb 21, 2010 / bradm09 - Feb 24, 2010
|What's life without a little challenge? - transfer for challenge
10 - You should say a U.S. college instead of an U.S. college. Usually you use "an" before something that starts...
Undergraduatechasity - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 24, 2010
|Why Rice, excellent pre-med program (Transfer Essay)
12 - i agree with janson. being specific in this type of essays could really make you stand out and let...
Undergraduateqchen - Feb 20, 2010 / kevinchen00723 - Feb 23, 2010
|USC Transfer Essay - What Matters To Me and Why? Environmental Internship Essay
9 - The communicative, analytical and political knowledge available in the study of Political Science will be beneficial when representing...
Undergraduateurbanoutfitters - Jan 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
|'my vocation in communication' - Statement for Nothwestern university, communication
3 - Thank you very much for your help. You've been really helpful as I don't have anyone else than you....
UndergraduateAngevil91 - Feb 22, 2010 / Angevil91 - Feb 23, 2010
|My short reply on activities for the common app - my work as electrician
Undergraduatelittle636 - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
|U of T-Victoria College-successful undergraduate experience
4 - this first sentence should be changed, I think: I was firstly attracted by the high reputation of Vic, since...
Undergraduatehqm - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
|Rice - Why xxx school of study (interested in science)
10 - Jonathan: thanks for the input! Simrath: u really seem to know what you are talking about. i was...
Undergraduatekevinchen00723 - Feb 21, 2010 / kevinchen00723 - Feb 23, 2010
|Computers and technology - Purdue undergrad essay
Undergraduatecmailer91 - Feb 21, 2010 / cmailer91 - Feb 22, 2010
|"the internet mess" - UT Austin Personal Essay
Undergraduatestefoo - Feb 21, 2010 / stefoo - Feb 22, 2010
|"larger and profound education" - Why did i choose to apply to ucf?
2 - I'm applying to the University of Central Florida because I feel that I'm ready for a much larger and...
Undergraduatejohnruiz - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Susan - Feb 22, 2010
|Carnegie Supplement: why major (Electrical and Computer Engineering), goal
Undergraduatestar1space - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|"become an air traffic controller" UT transfer studen/ Statement of purpose
Undergraduatepinnotes - Feb 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|'Changing people's lives' - Community Service- Synthesis Essay
Undergraduatetiger31twin - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|Experiances give valuable lessons-agree or disagree
9 - Remya,here is the answer of your question.I was in doubt like u regarding transactions. Now I read FAQ and...
Undergraduateremya - Feb 19, 2010 / usalma2002 - Feb 21, 2010
|Common App Transfer Essay- The storm is now sunshine
5 - Overall, I think this essay is very strong. I would suggest cutting the metaphor about the weather. I don't...
Undergraduatepeacelovesarah - Feb 19, 2010 / afurgeson - Feb 21, 2010
|U of T Briefly comment on Victoria College's motto:"Studies Pass into Character"
Undergraduateamyibing - Feb 21, 2010 / amyibing - Feb 21, 2010
|Personal Essay for Adult student with sub-par educational background
3 - This is as impressive as these things get. I am pretty blown away by it. As someone who considers...
Undergraduateafurgeson - Feb 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 21, 2010
|Economic field + Volunteering - U of Illinois (Trasfer)
4 - Beyond just enabling me to apply its concepts in real-life situations, it also provides me with provides me with...
Undergraduatecwoosung2 - Feb 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 21, 2010
|"fear for challenge" - Brown University Transfer Essay
Undergraduateveroniquexie - Feb 15, 2010 / veroniquexie - Feb 21, 2010
|A Second Chance - UniChicago supplement essay:why u chicago and why chicago
3 - Agreed w/ Argit! No need to refer to website research either--it detracts from the efficacy of your case. ...
Undergraduategemma2345 - Feb 21, 2010 / ivyeyesediting - Feb 21, 2010
|"Brown University offers so much more than quality education"
6 - The writing is pretty eloquent. I see how you are trying (and why not, even succeeding) to use nice...
Undergraduateazupwah - Feb 14, 2010 / little636 - Feb 21, 2010
|UT Austin Statement of Purpose (bodybuilding and diabetes)
6 - Bignasty36 Hello Hassan, This is a great essay. Just a few things Id like to recommend I began...
UndergraduateBignasty36 - Feb 16, 2010 / pinnotes - Feb 20, 2010
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