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|"to advance my efforts and acquire my law degree" -Law School Personal Statement
Undergraduatetdcampbe - Feb 15, 2010 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2010
|Academic Elements, Personal Elements - UW Personal statement.
2 - ...have just finished my military service so I have not studied for a while -- and I also have...
Undergraduateleidris - Feb 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 15, 2010
|APPAREL INDUSTRIAL ENGINEER
3 - AS AN INDUSTRIAL ENGINEER , I HAVE START PRACTICING FROM BASIC WORK STUDY TO LEAN MANUFACTURING SYSTEMS IN MY...
UndergraduateAPPAREL ENGR - Feb 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 15, 2010
|"An entrepreneur at heart" - economics, reasons for transferring, objectives
Undergraduatemarcee34 - Feb 7, 2010 / marcee34 - Feb 15, 2010
|the Student Senate - Short Answers -USC Application Questions
UndergraduateEurosavk7 - Jan 31, 2010 / Eurosavk7 - Feb 15, 2010
|My journey towards success - This is for my common application
7 - good luck!...
UndergraduateNaj - Feb 6, 2010 / swtdavid - Feb 14, 2010
|'Going through surgery' - EXPERIENCE THAT HAS AFFECTED YOUR GOALS---SU
5 - Yes, good call, A. Smith! I agree that the sentence was a little awkward. "Any and everything" does...
UndergraduateNene101 - Feb 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2010
|University of Toronto, Commerce Supplementary Essay
7 - You are applying to the Rotman commerce school, so some business relevance would be appropriate. Specify what positive change,...
Undergraduate_fantasy - Feb 9, 2010 / linmark - Feb 14, 2010
|How do you think Fitchburg Sate will help you succeed? (computer studies)
3 - thanks...
Undergraduatemasterj1200 - Feb 13, 2010 / masterj1200 - Feb 14, 2010
|First Day at Maybeck High School: Personal Statement for College.
UndergraduateKJ92 - Feb 11, 2010 / KJ92 - Feb 13, 2010
|Whitman College Supplement: Diversity Through Experience.
Undergraduateleekyle123 - Jan 10, 2010 / sestreat - Feb 13, 2010
|Why I love psychology -Cornell supp
7 - What's wrong with a reference to the Hitchhiker's Guide? It's great. This whole thing is great. I'm glad I...
Undergraduatekeilinger - Dec 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2010
|Tips on writing to/ contacting an admissions officer at my ED school?
UndergraduateNKBaseballbum18 - Feb 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2010
|"to become an extraordinary teacher",common application-extracurricular activity
9 - It is more inspiring/convincing that being an extraordinary teacher ...etc. is your dream/aspiration than your realization (at the...
Undergraduatesheila - Feb 7, 2010 / linmark - Feb 13, 2010
|Purpose of studying Korean and future plans?
2 - Yes, it's because you don't have an idea for the essay yet. When essays are assigned in school, and...
Undergraduateorlandame - Feb 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2010
|a psychology major, passion for learning: Common App transfer essay
4 - EF_Kevin: Thanks for the advice, I am working on a good thesis statement to add! "I reread this...
Undergraduate2010trans - Feb 12, 2010 / 2010trans - Feb 13, 2010
|Helen Miers: Someone who had made an impact on my life essay
Undergraduateaaguilar181 - Feb 11, 2010 / pixie4545 - Feb 13, 2010
|University of Washington Undergraduate Transfer (Business School)
Undergraduatehmoon55 - Feb 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 12, 2010
|"father's illness" - Any challenges or obstacles you have faced in your life
4 - That is great! And he must have enormous wisdom after the reflection that must have been caused by that...
Undergraduatebud444 - Feb 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 12, 2010
|Teaching, advising, and mentoring - Smith Supplement to meet my academic goals
6 - Yes, change that first sentence. That sentence could be written about almost any school. You should write a sentence...
Undergraduatesmith2010 - Feb 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 12, 2010
|Narrative on GOALS (financial obligations and special circumstances)
2 - You forgot an apostrophe: I became fascinated by how our forefathers' experiment, a republican democracy, evolved... Do you...
Undergraduatenkhattri - Feb 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 12, 2010
|"liberal arts education and a tight-knit community" - Reason For TRANSFERRING.
7 - the creativity seems forced. I was gripped by thr first para but then my eyes started skimming your elaborate...
UndergraduateRandyhl - Feb 10, 2010 / chris0089 - Feb 12, 2010
|My art works or my through the musically inclined voice, FSU Vires Artes Mores.
Undergraduatedanniee - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Feb 12, 2010
|applying undergraduate UK, Electronics and Electric engineering
2 - ... came to realize that the study of Electronics was compelling me to become an electronic engineer. Since...
UndergraduateMinty - Feb 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 12, 2010
|Personal Statement- Why having Asperger's has inspired me to join Peace Corps
6 - Thank you...
UndergraduateSHABAIL - Feb 9, 2010 / SHABAIL - Feb 12, 2010
|English, my favorite subject; University of Toronto SAF
4 - wow... i really say "i believe" too often... thanks!! *Describe in more detail the responsibilities and skills you...
Undergraduatesangeetacharya - Feb 5, 2010 / sangeetacharya - Feb 12, 2010
|Why I want to study engineering- Poly NYU Personal Statement
4 - 1. I really like your reason for choosing time square (notice "time" not plural), that you can witness how...
UndergraduateJRob105 - Feb 7, 2010 / essayvision - Feb 12, 2010
|Eliot's "Prufrock"; College essay on literature that changed me
5 - Yeah, I thought punctuated equilibrium sounded familiar. It's a great term; I'm jealous of whoever came up with it....
Undergraduatedpi2010 - Feb 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 11, 2010
|"My two educations" - College essay
4 - This quote seems like it might be wrong: "There are two types of education... The kind that teaches you...
Undergraduatemariah - Feb 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 11, 2010
|'Art Corporation' - University of Washington Art School Transfer
2 - Not much room for improvement here! It's great... I would use a comma to manage this sentence: Shortly...
Undergraduateinkstand - Feb 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 11, 2010
|diligence and determination:What qualities or unique characteristics you possess
Undergraduatetmw143 - Feb 10, 2010 / tmw143 - Feb 11, 2010
|Lehigh University Admissions Officer letter ("I anxiously wait for my decision")
6 - Is there something specifically that you did since submitting your application (end 2009) that is worth communicating as...
UndergraduateNKBaseballbum18 - Jan 31, 2010 / linmark - Feb 11, 2010
|'New ways / The Getaway' -Tufts University - Why Tufts? & Short Story
13 - Thank you so much Essay Forum and dear moderators!! I was accepted in ED2. I really appreciate your help...
Undergraduatezealzou - Nov 25, 2009 / zealzou - Feb 11, 2010
|Essay On Remembering Events as FRESHMEN in Oakland University, Home Sweet Home
Undergraduatealina967 - Feb 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 10, 2010
|Columbia Transfer: How and why is your present school not meeting your needs?
5 - When I nervously peeked into my first class at a community college, I was confused if about whether...
Undergraduatemjk249 - Feb 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 10, 2010
|CCAD personal, artistic, career goals
3 - I don't think you say enough about "why CCAD was selected as the place" ... you mention abstract things...
Undergraduategreteljuice91 - Feb 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 10, 2010
|"a family meeting" - obstacle essay
5 - Hey, let's not be dissociating ourselves from our grandmother just because of an illness: I will never forget the...
UndergraduateHowieD9 - Feb 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 10, 2010
|Common App - Topic of Your Own Choice (How I Face Challenges)
3 - I am a quiet, seemingly innocuous (no comma necessary here) man who does not lurk in the shadows -...
Undergraduateemjay1264jr - Feb 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 10, 2010
|"Magical Fluids": college admission essay.
7 - Well, a wave of something can strike you. But I don't know if you can be stricken with emotion....
UndergraduateTolo - Feb 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 10, 2010
|making large amounts of money or being satisfied to earn a comfortable living
Undergraduateburcugrk - Feb 5, 2010 / burcugrk - Feb 9, 2010
|"to become acquainted with you as a person and student" - Personal Essay
5 - This is an important observation. It's a little presumptuous to say that you know how most students are,...
Undergraduatemiranda - Feb 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 9, 2010
|IUPUI: Personal letter about goals and values- Feedback
3 - Run on sentence: In most of my childhood I was spoiled and wasn't exposed to many children my age;...
Undergraduatelgerron - Feb 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 9, 2010
|Once The 'Me' Fought Its Way Out, Story of your life(Emerson Transfer Statement)
2 - The transformation you describe reminds me of something Eckhart Tolle wrote in the intro to the Power of Now...
Undergraduatejaimarec - Feb 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 9, 2010
|Becoming a doctor - personal Letter about my future plans (Mount Ida College)
Undergraduatetiya90 - Feb 7, 2010 / tiya90 - Feb 8, 2010
|"A past not repeated" - Texas A&M transfer student essay
Undergraduateeford09 - Feb 7, 2010 / eford09 - Feb 8, 2010
|"education" is little more than an expensive isolation - essays for Stanford.
5 - Put that comma inside the quotes. also, why capitalize economist and not writer! We writers might take offense! :-)...
Undergraduatephoenix20 - Feb 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 8, 2010
|Brown supplemental essay, that "perfect" one.
4 - I'm applying as a transfer student, so I don't know if that's why there is a difference in characters...
Undergraduatepeacelovesarah - Feb 7, 2010 / peacelovesarah - Feb 8, 2010
|Hospitality Administration - Cornell Transfer Admissions Essay
10 - Awesome, this and your other reflections amount to sme great advice for everyone reading this. Focusing on your...
Undergraduatekcmcvay8584 - Jan 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 8, 2010
|"to improve my relationship with my father" - Help with Practice personal essay
3 - This is such a strange and cool writing style! Revise to get rid of unnecessary words, trimming them away:...
UndergraduateUPennHopeful - Feb 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 8, 2010
|My writing, my music, my self-expression - Transfer Statement! (Emerson College)
Undergraduatejaimarec - Feb 6, 2010 / jaimarec - Feb 8, 2010
|"more about you in your own words" - Georgetown University Essay
8 - one of the reasons you might want to transfer to another college should be first and foremost academic. Emphasize...
Undergraduatemayrafelixc - Feb 7, 2010 / marcee34 - Feb 7, 2010
|The importance of education - personal essay (TOPIC E) for UT transfer
3 - Excellent, the high quality of this sentence reflects the high quality of your education. You write very well!...
Undergraduatehope - Feb 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 7, 2010
|writing an essay on a topic of my choice for uni application
5 - I definitely like this one a lot more! It is elegant, serious, inspiring, and very thoughtful. It shows real...
Undergraduatenishh - Feb 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 7, 2010
|Transfer essay: Describing my need to go onto a four year university to study
4 - This kind of sentence can be better with no unnecessary words: "Why do I need to go to school?"...
Undergraduatemjk249 - Feb 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 7, 2010
|Personal Statement Admission Essay: Leadership, Creativity, teamwork, Communitiy
5 - I think this whole sentence should be taken out: Success comes from the sweat and tears of hard work,...
UndergraduateGaryJiang - Feb 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 7, 2010
|"wait for my new test scores" - My letter of appeal to USF
2 - yea, before you send this out, definitely get a teacher to review grammar. It's deferred, not differed. ...
Undergraduatematt_eliassen - Feb 7, 2010 / yang - Feb 7, 2010
|UM undergraduate PS essay--educational interests-economics
12 - Perhaps because my delay in growth of my naivety , I came up with a question, which now seem...
Undergraduatekittyg713 - Jan 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 7, 2010
|UM setback essay- my failed experiment.
7 - good writing....
Undergraduatekiwi90 - Feb 1, 2010 / blonde10032002 - Feb 7, 2010
|Clark Atlanta University: Preparing yourself for future leadership.
4 - Great ideas. Thanks. It's difficult for me to write my own paper, easier to critque someone elses....
Undergraduatelashay - Feb 1, 2010 / lashay - Feb 6, 2010
|'Like a stab in the heart' - UniversityOf richmond: comfort zone
Undergraduatelola09 - Feb 4, 2010 / Jd87rh - Feb 5, 2010
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