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|Marist Supplement- why is marist 4 u?
Undergraduatenkhattri - Dec 22, 2009 / linmark - Jan 27, 2010
|Johns Hopkins University-Why I Chose Math and Public Health
Undergraduatecmg12 - Dec 29, 2009 / linmark - Jan 27, 2010
|U of Michigan - Respect for Diversity - Cultural Diff. (Chinese and Americans)
6 - yeah, I didnt really put too much time on this essay. I must admit greater good does sound corny...
UndergraduateEsaias - Jan 21, 2010 / Esaias - Jan 27, 2010
|JHU Supplementary Essay - Sick Sister - Need HELP fast!
13 - yes, I am sure. I know what you mean, I like most parts of Biology, but especially metabolism and...
UndergraduateEsaias - Dec 24, 2009 / Esaias - Jan 27, 2010
|Additional Information for undergraduate admission
3 - I did not do as well academically in high school as I could have. During the first two years,...
UndergraduateRachach6 - Jan 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 26, 2010
|2 UofWA essays! About drawing, crows, Mao Zhe Dong & nose picking...
5 - Thank you so much for reading AND correcting my essays T__T !!!! I'm really happy you like them! (:...
Undergraduatefalalasunshine - Jan 15, 2010 / falalasunshine - Jan 26, 2010
|STUCK - World View Essay - how I can alter this?
3 - Okay, it is written beautifully, but I think the first few lines should be written in the first person...
Undergraduateimported616 - Jan 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 26, 2010
|Essay for Rice University one what perspective I will contribute
4 - All peopleEveryone , myself included, starts life without perspective or much individuality, and each person's landscape is sculpted differently....
Undergraduatewmm88 - Jan 1, 2010 / Somayeh - Jan 26, 2010
|a strict Asian household: How has your family history influence who you are?
5 - Don't mean to be blunt but maybe you could extend that essay a little? Delve deeper on your examples,...
Undergraduatebblueblob - Jan 24, 2010 / icemaster2340 - Jan 26, 2010
|fashion management program, What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT?
Undergraduatesylee - Jan 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 26, 2010
|how did u hear about Mahindra and why mahindra
3 - Wow, that is what we ask when we want to improve our business marketing strategies. It doesn't seem...
Undergraduatemonarch12 - Jan 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 26, 2010
|'Pre-law studies' - How did you hear about Franklin and Marshall and why did apply?
2 - brilliant attempt!! but do a few corrections: 1)Franklin and Marshall offersthe programs that broaden and develop .....
Undergraduatethamusipuma - Jan 26, 2010 / umulbaneen - Jan 26, 2010
|"I wanted to be a boy" - U of Wisconsin statement
12 - oh WOW thanks, i realised I really missed that out TOTALLY. Is it okay if i kinda just insert...
Undergraduatewasabipeaz - Jan 24, 2010 / wasabipeaz - Jan 26, 2010
|"never started learning Chinese until I entered high school" - common app
12 - Thanks for the suggestion! I admit I am not exactly bilingual, though pretty close, I guess, as thinking...
UndergraduateEsaias - Dec 8, 2009 / Esaias - Jan 26, 2010
|"Social Science Department (Economics) - academic or intellectual curiosities?
Undergraduatemarpals - Jan 9, 2010 / marpals - Jan 25, 2010
|Mythology: I'm curious, is this a good essay for a HS senior?
3 - This essay is good for a college senior. You a obviously very insightful and show complex reasoning skills. Kevin...
UndergraduatePunpunpun - Jan 21, 2010 / bigspilv - Jan 25, 2010
|"to achieve my goals" - FSU Application Essay - "Vires, Artes, Mores"
4 - You might have looked at this fast and typed the wrong word... it has to be My mother's courage...
UndergraduateKayla - Jan 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 25, 2010
|Growing up in Art, and Grade Stress ~ UCF prompts
3 - My family bonds are comprised of interaction rather than blood. Adopted as a baby from Lima, Peru (they know...
UndergraduateJulieB - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 25, 2010
|a piece of architecture- Sydney Opera House
9 - When I follow the link, I see that a weak attempt at paraphrasing was usually made. For example, in...
Undergraduatebee2010 - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 25, 2010
|Smith College supps - I want to mature into a whole person
6 - You can make it clearer with the rule called :number agreement": Smithies will head back to their roots ......
Undergraduaterablinh - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 25, 2010
|"Be All That You Can Be" University of Washington Transfer Personal Statement
NEW - Hello, I am trying to apply to Uof Washington for fall/10. This is the first draft for my personal...
UndergraduateWushu_wong - Jan 25, 2010 / — -
|Difficulties, challenges and adversities - Personal Statement for USC
2 - Here is an idea: ...with elation that suddenly turned into astonishment. and let's use a semi-colon to fix...
Undergraduateechoxie - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 24, 2010
|(top 25 law schools) Why did you choose to apply to Franklin and Marshall?
Undergraduatemarpals - Jan 24, 2010 / marpals - Jan 24, 2010
|liberal arts education admissions essay
Undergraduategbee - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 24, 2010
|Unfinish Spelman essay. Rough draft: "My first encounter with Psychology"
NEW - Writing prompt: Seeking knowledge and commitment to service are integral parts of the Spelman experience. Discuss and illustrate ways...
Undergraduatesweetharmony09 - Jan 24, 2010 / — -
|McIntire School of Commerce admission essay
Undergraduaterayout - Jan 23, 2010 / rayout - Jan 24, 2010
|Born scientifically inclined, I was, and still am, fascinated by the world around me - USC essay
13 - It's great to have compounded interests. There is no reason an engineer cannot delve into aeronautics, and the kind...
Undergraduategunbladerq - Jan 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 24, 2010
|Grandma: a situation where you had to work or closely associate with someone
6 - If you have it due in 24hrs, then give it in after last minute edits. It's pretty relevant and...
Undergraduatedonod - Jan 22, 2010 / Esaias - Jan 24, 2010
|'memorabilia items' - Why is the University of Chicago a good match for me?
Undergraduategrocks6 - Jan 9, 2010 / yang - Jan 24, 2010
|Princeton Supp: An Essay About Life
2 - It started raining last night. What began as a howling storm had diminished to a lazy drizzle. I curiously...
UndergraduateGiantSalamander - Jan 22, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 23, 2010
|An event that has impacted your life. (NCF)
Undergraduateanyafloris - Jan 20, 2010 / anyafloris - Jan 23, 2010
|How has your heritage affected you?
4 - As a daughter of immigrants from China, I endured many harrowing experiences as a minority that I wish I...
Undergraduateky2010 - Jan 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2010
|Is it not in my best interest to write "why this college" as a topic of choice?
6 - The trick is to come up with a theme to write about, but SECRETLY have as your ulterior motive...
Undergraduategbee - Jan 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2010
|Fashion Buying: Personal Statement
2 - Hi Charlotte, it is hard to help if you have not written anything. If you write something, we may...
UndergraduateCharlotte2010 - Jan 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2010
|Cmn. app: international issue and its importance to me: Bangladesh Poverty
UndergraduateRay92 - Jan 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2010
|St Lawrence University Supp - how you spent your vacations/holidays?
Undergraduatehbrad8002 - Jan 22, 2010 / rablinh - Jan 23, 2010
|What led me to choose psychology - UMich Academic Interest
Undergraduatermultaputri - Jan 21, 2010 / rmultaputri - Jan 23, 2010
|Iowa State University First Year Honors Program Essay: 5 year Space Mission
2 - O really? not to disprove you, but it was newly discovered by the Europeans, namely the English. The...
Undergraduateturk555 - Jan 20, 2010 / meisj0n - Jan 22, 2010
|Having a dinner with three people (dead,fictional, alive) UVA essay
UndergraduateNasir2009 - Jan 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 22, 2010
|The Difficult of Art (you tried something for which you had no talent)
3 - I agree about the cliche. Actually, tat whole first sentence is too common and ordinary and uninteresting! A much...
UndergraduateAltgirl - Jan 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 22, 2010
|FSU undergraduate admission essay, "My father once..." (vires, artes, mores)
Undergraduatevick01 - Jan 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 22, 2010
|"success as a Peace Corps Volunteer" - Peace Corp Appliation Essay #2
2 - I just saw some excellent help you gave somebody at essayforum.com/scholarship-22/first-asian-house-representative-united-sates-mcdonald-15107/. I notice this, too: Playing leadership...
Undergraduateubr001 - Jan 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 22, 2010
|UNC Essay The Team That Drives Fantasy Football
7 - merriam-webster.com/netdict/inopportune I guess I think inopportune misfortune is redundant. I thought for a long time, because I'm not...
Undergraduatesrandhawa - Jan 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 22, 2010
|fascinated in art, ( goals & future plans )
UndergraduateStarbucksxo - Jan 21, 2010 / Starbucksxo - Jan 22, 2010
|'I had one opponent, I lost!' - person who has impacted you
3 - During sophomore year, I was running for vice president of community outreach for my schools student council. I only...
Undergraduatesunshine123 - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 21, 2010
|University of Florida essay-- my experience in Slovakia
Undergraduatetorioreo - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 21, 2010
|Eugene Lang- Tell us a time you were the minority
Undergraduatepekingduck - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 21, 2010
|I attended a school in Bahrain; Educational Path essay, UM
6 - Right after this, you can improve the credibility of the whole essay with a bit of explanation: Unfortunately,...
Undergraduateklusterfunk - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 21, 2010
|'Lessons from my Latino heritage' - Cultural Difference-University of Washington
4 - Cut the first sentence, I find no relation to your essay. I attend a dominantly white school, so there...
UndergraduateJanelle - Jan 16, 2010 / Esaias - Jan 21, 2010
|UChicago "In chinese, crisis is composed of two characters, danger/opportunity"
Undergraduatepoleandreel - Jan 16, 2010 / poleandreel - Jan 21, 2010
|'women's basketball' - what most influenced you to apply to Ohio State
2 - Princeton Review ever showed me that OSU's motto... This motto attracts compels me to search for more...
Undergraduatephhusm2000 - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 20, 2010
|How to write a personal essay for Ryerson's Radio and Television Program
3 - Write a one-sentence answer for each of these, and see what COMMON THEME runs through all of them....
UndergraduateChikoyam - Jan 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 20, 2010
|Why engineering at Ryerson admission essay; 'fascinated with mathematics'
9 - EF_Kevin I cannot thank you enough...buddy I should include you in my essay for making an enormous contribution to...
UndergraduateArwen - Oct 23, 2009 / Arwen - Jan 20, 2010
|'the Asian Supermarket' - Georgetown essay about YOU
5 - I love your writing style, but I think that you should integrate more vivid verbs. That will help illustrate...
Undergraduatejoosunggrace - Jan 11, 2010 / aridnepenthe - Jan 20, 2010
|"My professional experiences vary a lot" - Peace Corps Acceptance Essay #1
Undergraduateubr001 - Jan 14, 2010 / ubr001 - Jan 20, 2010
|I want to be a Biologist and Spanish student - CU Boulder Essay
2 - Let's get rid of some unnecessary words: My two older brothers Teddy and Thomas, who are seven and four...
Undergraduatekatiecahoon - Jan 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 20, 2010
|Personal Statement for Radiological Technology Program
2 - ...because it combines human compassion with knowledge and technology to assist us at our weakest moments. ... because it...
Undergraduateboussi112 - Jan 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 20, 2010
|"my work ethics" - Babson Undergraduate Admission-150 word or less essay
4 - You have a run on sentence here: My work ethic was getting stronger than that of compared to the...
Undergraduateamaa2010 - Jan 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 20, 2010
|World Cultures class - An issue that is important to me
3 - Although this video was about AIDS, another topic was mentioned that also really captivated me: The lack of clean...
UndergraduateJRob105 - Jan 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 20, 2010
|"What Swimming Has Taught Me"-Texas A&M Essay Topic C
5 - Since this is part of your application as the topic suggests, you may be facing some stiff competition in...
UndergraduateJRob105 - Jan 15, 2010 / klusterfunk - Jan 20, 2010
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